As the last Big Daddy left in all of Rapture, loneliness had become a constant companion of mine. No memories, no voice, not even a face that I could call my own. I thought it would be like this for my entire existence in Rapture... At least, until
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Please sir, may I have another?
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No you will get an appropriate amount that Mr. author demes suitable
PLEASE EVERYONE MAKE OMEGA CHOOSE GOOD OR WE WILL NEVER GET THE GOOD ENDING I WANT TO SE HIM WIN PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEASE
Excellent, I can recall the area quite nicely as well, let us hope that Jack didn't leave any recordings behind...I am not quite sure the girls could handle the truth behind that area.
It would be quite interesting if the further they go down into Lower Rapture to find the Sub (Which I know the Rarer Splicers will become more common) but the possibility of encountering some new kinds or really unique kinds (In that they have further mutated into some horribly extreme way).
Here is one that came to mind Slug Splicers in that Adam came from a unique Sea Slug then what if the extreme overuse actually at some limit with the user forced em into large humanoid like slug (environmental conditions for such life would have to be there for such a mutation) it would be quite the fear inducer (some of the idea came somewhat by watching game-play of The Forest).
Awwww dangit Rarity! Stop being afraid of Spiders and mess things up!!
Well done, I'm loving every bit. I really wish to see Omega get a happy ending, but it seems to mostly be pointing to a tragic end for him.
But does it really?
I'm glad that you're structuring your sentences better, but there's one problem that stands out to me now, and that's your incorrect usage of the em dash.
"Regardless of this tempting-and I mean really tempting-thought,"
"-partly so I could figure out where Winston had gone as well-"
"we caught sight-though we also tried to ignore it-of the remnants of the
survivors"
Those are not em dashes (—), those are hyphens (-). Hyphens are used to connect words such as 'two-thirds', or 'tie-breaker'. Em dashes are used to break away from a sentence to add in another piece of information—as I have done just now. They are not parentheses, and you do not have to use two at a time—just one is fine.
The problem with using a hyphen instead of an em dash is mostly that since the hyphen is so short, it does not convey the break in flow that an em dash would better represent, and thus confuses readers because it is hard to spot.
Other than that, good chapter. I'm glad you decided to cut down on the commas and try a new form of punctuation.
Well this was exciting. Since they are in the part of Rapture where Little Sister's and Big Daddies were made, maybe Omega can find something to add to his inventory such as more ammo, more weapons, and maybe a new suit for protection.
He used a proximity mine on a lone spider splicer that was already knocked down? What a waste.
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In my opinion, yes. In omega's? Well, he does have a special, hate-filled place in his heart for spider splicers. (Same goes for me)
I hope Winston makes it out of Rapture too or at least help them escape
not bad at all
I can probably take a pretty good guess as to why Winston was trying to get him to listen to a message about the 'other living weapon'.
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wait..... Is omega the other living weapon?!
4857918 Its a possibility... huh, Constants and Variables
The perfectionist in me will not stay quiet. The while point of the Little Sisters was to turn them into ADAM factories. This meant not killing them, but implanting the slugs and inducing vomiting. Thus getting five to six times more usable ADAM than the slug could produce on its own. Gutting the creepy cuties was what the splicers did to get a nice big ADAM fix.