Thanks for the feedback, I'm officially continuing this project!
In the ruins of the old stonefarm, long abandoned, a journal is discovered. This is the journal of Ponyville’s famed joker, Pinkie Pie (Pinkamena Diane Pie). It covers Pinkie’s life on the stonefarm, and how her life was back then. It also covers the sightings of a mysterious mare pegasi flying around near the farm. Who could that be? And why is the old mayor of Ponyville so corrupt? The story of Pinkie is discovered.. Pinkie’s past.
Chapters (2)
I like the concept. And your writing style isn't bad at all, reminds me a little bit of J.D. Salinger if he wrote more about younger kids. Probably could use a little bit of proofreading, but nothing serious. I'm interested to see where you're going to take this.
Well, I can certainly see why she was so happy to get off the farm.
Your grammar and spelling are good, even writing from the perspective of a little filly.
That was pretty interesting.
Looking forward to more
I like it.
Yeah, holding your story hostage is a real good way to make people feel like reading your story, let alone giving you feedback.
What banjo2E said.
It doesn't matter how much talent you have. You should be writing for the joy of writing. Sure, feedback is a great way to encourage the writer to keep writing, but if the only reason the writer writes at all is because he or she wants feedback, that's a problem. If you can't look back at your writing and be glad you wrote it, if you would rather see it deleted than ignored, if you aren't proud of your work, then you won't make it far.
Think of it this way: If you can't ride a bike without someone pushing you, you're never going to arrive at your destination.
Sad pinkie pie?
338635 @Banjo2E;I am not holding it hostage, nor anything near that. I just typed that in as this chapter (or days) as a pilot for the story. A lot of people does that. And I do not want good feedback, I want constructive.338726 @uberPhoenix; I do approve of the most you have written, but it's still no fun writing something you spend days on and when you complete it, you get a lot of flame and hate. But yes, I do approve of writing for fun. But I need constructive feedback to improve or know how the community feels about my story in general (creator of Cupcakes should have done this, then I'd stop having nightmares).338473 @Pinkieisepic; Thank you, I appreciate your support. It means a lot to a newbie.338524 @Savior_of_man32;Thanks, more will come!338472@Capriccio; Really?! Thanks, it means a lot! Actually, about the concept, it just popped up to me. I don't know how, as it was in the middle of a music class.
338967 Yes, sad Pinkie Pie.
I'll continue this project! :D Thanks all.
Thumbs Up.
Nice work. I'm really digging the writing style you've employed. It's so simple, but it still captures the young Pinkie Pie.
I'm becoming sick (both physically and mentally) so I won't be able to write for a maximum of a week. Albeit, I do have the current chapter soon done.
Not so fun fact; my physical sickness is both a really high fever and my right eye stays behind after I look away (the name's Hooves/Doo, Derpy/Ditzy Hooves/Doo
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345802 I know what that feels like, hope you get better soon