So Much For my Happy Ending

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Dr_Strangelust

Dr_Strangelust #1 · Jan 21st, 2014 · · ·

The worked up physician could feel the heat radiating from her [come up with pet name],

May want to revise that, as well as the "X" and "Y" placeholders for names later on. Other than that, good job

Mr Pones

Mr Pones #2 · Jan 21st, 2014 · · ·

and give her one hay of a blue waffle.

i.imgur.com/ELsnwFn.jpg
Other than that it was pretty ok. Your writing is a bit different than most clopfics, as you tend to go into great deal about things and assess anatomy more than most people. Definitely slow and not to the point, but that can be either good or bad depending.

Satch

Satch #3 · Jan 21st, 2014 · · ·

3819381 Do'h! Now I feel derp for missing those. Should've done a more thorough search when I skimmed it before posting. Thanks for pointing it out.

3819537 It was meant as a counterpart term for "blue balls" xP
And yeah, I've been told I got a very, "unique" per se writing style. I trail off often, and avoid generic norms and cardboard chars as much as I can, along with try and even things out, and put effort into stuff. But yeah, it's really a flavor thing. Either like it, meh it or dislike it.

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