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Salnalus


Just your friendly neighborhood Salnalus. Writing stories and pointless blog posts. Feel free to check them out, and stuff.

Comments ( 82 )

:twilightsmile: Nice. I shall read this when I have the time, but it sounds interesting. Keep up the stories, Sal.

Big Mac- Ah should really learn not to go to Ponyville when its estrus time. Last thing Ah wanna do is knocking up a bunch of poor mares drugged up on their own hormones..... Again.

Hah, more antics from them.

Not bad.

~Skeeter The Lurker

I love this pron. Make more please.

3859601
What else did you expect? :raritywink:

3859617
I shall in the future. :yay:

Nice!:heart:

What an interesting clop/shipping

But you made it work so good job

5 out of 5 mustaches to you

:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

3859880
Thanks. I try. :twilightsmile:

Comment posted by flame5768 deleted Jan 28th, 2014

:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:
I dont normally like straight shipping, but this is good.

3860051
Well, the last two stories in the series are both F/F shippings if you're into that. :raritywink:

3859508
Now we know that there's so many members of Apple family... :eeyup:

Big Mac is one lucky stallion. Too bad he doesn't really appreciate the attention he receives from such beautiful mares. If I was him, I would do all the hot mares:rainbowwild:. That was a little too extreme...sorry:twilightblush:.

Great clopfic:yay:

3860774
To be honest, so do I.
Though if it was just a regular thing, only reason I would be happy is if they all did my bidding.
Or if Big Mac was a pimp. :eeyup:

3860882
Can't go wrong with the ladies, know what I'm saying? :raritywink:

3860994 Believe me I know exactly what your saying. In truth through I'm not really an outgoing guy either, and I'm kind of self conscious as well. At least Mac has the right idea not to abuse his looks to get laid; also not wishing to take advantage of a heated mare. He just goes with the flow.:ajsmug:

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I'm a pretty introverted individual myself irl. But on the interwebz, I'm pretty social. Such is the life of a socially awkward brony. :twilightsheepish:

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I should add that one mare I would like to do is Applejack because she's very athletic like her brother, and I find her southern drawl to be really sexy; her eyes as well.

Shit..now I'm starting to sound like a person who would actually fuck ponies:twilightoops:

3861247
Who wouldn't? :raritywink:
My mare of choice is Princess Luna, but if you don't count her or Celestia (or even Cadence), then either Pinkie Pie or Rarity for me.

3861318 I would choose Luna as well because she is the princess of the night if you get my drift?:raritywink:. I also fancy Fluttershy but I would take it easy on her until she gets all ":flutterrage:" if she doesn't feel like she's getting enough pleasure. Things may quickly escalate from there.:rainbowwild:

I love the story and concept, it needs some grammatical work though.

3861380
Oh yeah. :moustache:

3861640
Grammatical work?

I have to agree with Shrapmo. I think with another edit and maybe a revision of some of the dialogue to be more natural this could be good. As it is I think it's just very unpolished, at least that's how it reads to me.

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I, well... I wrote this with a friend of mine, and I edited it all myself. I didn't have anyone else to proofread/edit, but I honestly don't see anything wrong with the dialogue myself. But hey, different minds have different opinions.

Nope, Nope, NOPE, SO MUCH NOPE! :eeyup:
Well that was...Steamy:trollestia:
YEEAAAHHHH!!! :rainbowwild:

3863198
Aww yeah, was steamy alright. :raritywink:

Thanks for the story.:pinkiehappy: It's really hot. I hope you will write more.:eeyup: And with Big Macintosh.:twilightsmile:

3863347
I shall always write more. :raritywink:

I do have another story in mind...

Hoo boy. This is very rough-cut.

No offense.

The premise is rather unique, or at least rarely utilized. The plot seems to have good pacing, and the flow is generally well managed. It's just... The dialogue is so unnatural. Especially Big Mac.

He's a stallion of few words. He really shouldn't be talking this much.

You could make him shy, that's what Applebloom thinks of him. Or, you could make him the silent thoughtful type. Either direction could make for an interesting set up.

Maybe Aloe is getting frustrated at his unresponsiveness. Maybe his shyness could play into the sex part. Maybe he's a virgin?

C'mon, play with this some more! As it is, it's just generic, sub-standard, shameless clop. Just like thousands of other stories on this site.

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Can't really say I agree... but that;s just me.

I appreciate the feedback, honestly, but I feel I did a pretty great job here, and I couldn't be more proud of my work. Now I can agree, Big Mac's not much of a talker, but there are few times where he can get much of his words out. Besides, Big Mac as too much of the shy type... doesn't really sit right with me. He may not say that much, but doesn't mean he's too silent all the time.

My two cents right there. :eeyup:

This isn't shameless clop, btw. I could write shameless clop if I wanted to, though.

>> Midsummer Ocean
Lol, yeah...i'd have to honestly say I'm with you. :$ I'd be doing all the pretty mares.

>> Salnalus
I'm reading this story today.

Also, yeah, i'm like you in a few ways with the shyness. :)

Jesus Motherbucking Black Sabbath Christ!

Big Mac went to a spa?

Oh, and he got laid too, I guess...

3864194
Applejack got Big Mac laid... without even knowing it. :ajsmug:

3864388 Wow. What a good sister. Wish my sister did that for me.

Also wish I had a sister.

3864469
I don't have a sister either. *shrugs*

It'd be nice to have one, methinks.

3864497 Oh well. I have four good brothers, as I am one of five, so I'm good i suppose. XD

3864535
I am one of 3 brothers. :twilightsheepish:

Funnily enough, they both also like ponies.

3864497 I have a sister; unfortunately she acts like a stuck up bitch:trixieshiftleft:

3864570 then you need not worry about being bullied for it then at least. XD

I like you, mate. You're alright. Have a video from my channel, and have a Follower as well!

3864626
Aww... sorry to hear that.

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Nice vid. :rainbowdetermined2:

And thanks. It is greatly appreciated! :pinkiehappy:

3864679 I have many more on my YouTube channel. If you ever need a pick-me-up, please do think of my channel. I may not be the best animator Brony, but I certainly put my best effort and dedication into giving my viewers the most decent content I can give.

3864679 Well not all the time. Plus I'm older then her. She's 17 and I'm 20.:pinkiehappy:

3864694
I'll keep that in mind. :twilightsmile:


3864703
Oh, so you have a younger sister.
She could probably get you laid too. :rainbowlaugh:

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