Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon extort Scootaloo into becoming their slave for a day. It gets bad, but then gets a lot better for Scootaloo when her big sister arrives to mete out justice to naughty bullies.
This really is great. Unlike most foalcon fics, you're focusing on the emotions, the realization of desire, and never letting the foal become just an object. This is disturbingly romantic, and part of me thinks this could be a ScootaDash ship.
However, something tells me—and very large part of me is hoping—that we end up with Silver Spoon as the romantic interest, with Dash as a guide.
So... Yeah, great job building from a fetish fic base into an engaging narrative with real emotions and realistic character actions. Can't wait for more.
This Christmas just keeps on giving, doesn't it? Definitely worth the wait.
So many wonderful little feels and emotions this pulled forth. Nervous anticipation earlier in the fic, complete trepidation as Scootaloo was tortured, I felt so cold and disgusted, I could barely eat my food. But man, it was worth getting through those dark waters to the warm pool that was pure vindictive pleasure as Dashie springs to the rescue. And the feels, oh GOD, the feels! And finally winding down with that shower and the time spent on the bed.
Just, so good. Funny in all the right spots with your narrative. All those 'cock-block' moments where Scoots aaalmost got touched, while Dash meanwhile was already well aware that she had stroked herself before. So good. So very wonderful. I loved this, so much. Thank you, Isseus.
I'm sorry I had to delete a comment from this section. I welcome criticism, but outright personal attacks and namecalling aren't of use to anyone. I'm sure Telaros just wanted to vent, but this just isn't the place for it. He clearly had differing headcanons about the character of Diamond Tiara than I did, so let us leave it at that, please.
One word kind sir:MORE! We need more writers like you who are able to seamlessly mix foalcon AND romance together to make awesome fics like this. Please continue!
Bah, don't listen to him. Haters gonna... Well, you know. His points were all kinda bunk. Dash appearing at the clubhouse wasn't contrived; it was reasonably and adequately explained in narrative. DT taking Scoots to the clubhouse makes sense with your portrayal of her as a cruel, sadistic bitch. The Silver Spoon angle makes perfect sense based on what little we know about her, and paints her as a more sympathetic character due to her loyalty to DT being not the usual rote, "but I lurves her!!1!" Nonsense.
Yeah, I saw a few spelling derps, but not enough to hurt the story as a whole.
I've read a lot of these stories over the years, and this one is easily the best story involving scootaloo that I've read yet. if you ever do get back to writing it I will eagerly continue reading it.
I don't know what to think of this to be honest. I really like how well done this is, I like the characters *except Diamond but I doubt anyone reading this did* and Silver Spoon in particular sticks out in my head. I'm not sure about the random kiss she gave Scootaloo, seems a little quick to like like someone, but maybe it'll make sense later. Foalcon is not my thing, for general reasons why most people don't approve of it and I am one of them. I honestly dunno if I can consider this foalcon in my mind though, unless Dash becomes the love interest anyways. This is such an interesting story and I want to see more of it, I do like the sister relationship between Scoots and Dash, and yeah I pretty much just skimmed the sex scene since I'm not interested in this story for that, but some of what they talked about during that and Scoot's impressions like her comparisons between her parts and an adults were really nice touches. I can understand RD's point of view and why she did what she did, this story reminds me that almost anything is acceptable if under the right circumstances. I am looking forward to seeing more of this and where it goes and hoping this doesn't go to a RD x Scoots shipping.
Well, I can't really hide the fact I'm disappointed on how this fic was received. I understand that it's a taboo subject, but on my other fics dealing with the subject, Dominant Ideal and Lead. Care. Inspire. I have at least gotten pretty reasonable commentary and discussion, most of which has been pretty interesting. This time I spent over forty hours writing this fic, and CarcinoGeneticist spent countless hours editing it, and here we are. Didn't even make feature, which I fully expected I would. Hell, it's not even that! It's that from the moment I posted this fic, I got five downvotes in minutes, meaning that people came in just to stroke their moral organs and to downvote a fic they found objectionable. It didn't have anything to do with how the subject was treated or if the writing was good, it was just that they saw foals and the sex tag, spent 10 seconds opening the fic and clicking the thumb down and going on their merry way.
Let me put this in a nice way: Fuck you.
I wrote a blog about prejudice and people being afraid of their own thoughts a long time ago when Dominant Ideal came out. I suggest people give it a read... not that I'd expect any of the haters to even know how to read at all to begin with. Let them be happy reading their awesome Naruto-Halo-Fallout-Crossover-HiE-2nd person- gorefics starring YOU as Alucard fighting starships or whatever.
This fic was written as a gift to a friend and he liked it a lot. I'm really happy for that. I'm just pissed off at the FIMFic system.
Hi. This is a friendly neighborhood reminder that making comments regarding a story's content is cool 'n' all, but if you've got something to say regarding the author, try to keep off the personal attacks. Telling an author to "Go fuck yourself with a cactus" --especially when you're commenting on the story while admitting that you haven't read the story in question--is rather over the line, so please try to keep things civil.
First of all: Why on earth do you think you expect a story of you to get featured just because you put a lot of work in it and deserve it just because of that? Hard work doesn't equal high reward.
Truer words were never spoken. I've seen some fantastically half-assed crap on the feature box thrown out by writers with thousands of followers with poor editing and plot holes. That doesn't make it a good thing, btw. An author who devotes time and energy to something deserves to at least have it visible to more people, regardless of the subject matter. Look at Fallout Equestria, that's something that has precious little to do with the general aesthetic of MLP, but the quality is top and it deserves attention. Now, what if you were a fan of FoE and it never got as popular as it did. Would you be pissed?
Second: You said yourself that this fic is of questionable and very specific content that most people don't like. Therefore, it is bound receive less upvotes than a fic that meets the taste of the majority. If someone dislikes the topic, why shouldn't he be allowed to dislike? If not for this, then for what reason does a downvote button exist?
It's fine for someone to read something and then dislike it for their time, but outright punishing fics they have zero intention to read without so much as a second glance is disgusting. Every downvote stuff gets lowers the overall rating which pushes it back when browsing fics sorted by rating. Yes, this is a necessary evil because people should be privileged to downvote what they want, but each one takes the privilege of being read by more people away from a fic. I've had it happen to me, I've had people go through and down vote everything I wrote (and every comment), and it's a feeling that sucks. It's why I try to at least give MYSELF a good reason to down something.
If I see this right, you accuse everyone that disliked the story because of it's content to be illiterate, not reading the description(maybe becasue of the former point?), being haters and liking violence-glorifying crossover-gore-fics. I see how this is totally no prejudice and based on proven facts.
He was questioning the five or so people who downvoted this fic to oblivion the MOMENT HE POSTED IT. I was linked straight away, I watched this shit happen. Goes back to the downvote-without-even-looking-at-it thing.
This website is mostly viewed by guys between 16 and 30 without any shared preferences except the innocent family show and reading. Having a fetish that this story is appealing to is not mandatory. Yet, you complain that the story doesn't get the positive attention and ~"Didn't even make feature, which I fully expected I would." Tell me again, why do you expect so many people to enjoy this fetishes?
Fics of similar nature, foalcon and all, have gotten there. Why not something he spent a lot of time and energy on, eh? Yeah, he's disappointed, but I also think you're stretching the level of 'complaining' he's doing.
My conclusion is that you are simply an extremely arrogant person and have lost any grasp of decency.
Based on what? An author being disappointed with the hateful reception a fic he put a huge effort to portray a difficult subject sensibly received?
The moment you published it, you exposed it to the public. What you obviously don't understand is that the public is not something you can expect to do what you want or even like what you do, even less since this story aims at an incredible small group of people
Haha, what? Welcome to the internet, kid.
As for the fic: I haven't downvoted it before but now I did
Sorry, this I highly doubt.
I really dislike abuse like the kind you wrote. The foalcon alone would have been more of a 'not relevant to my interest' but the slaveplay/humiliation/SM was pretty much what made me downvote it for its content.
See? It's not hard to justify a downvote.
At this point I'd like to ask you to think of any insult that comes to your mind and apply it to yourself, since I feel obligated not to use any.
Weren't you just yelled at for personal attacks by a mod like an hour ago? Is that why you're trying to artfully dodge the blame by having him self-hate?
Anyways, my point in all of this is the fact that I don't think you're looking at this from Isseus' perspective, is all.
MESSAGE TO ALL FLAMERS AND HATERS OF THIS AWESOME FIC: PISS OFF There ARE other people besides you that actually LIKE the story. Oh, and Isseus, PLEASE do continue when you get the chance. Don't let haters keep ya down
4041197 I didn't do research as such. All I had to do was go back to Elementary School and remember all the shit that was done there and after school. All the little things that the teachers didn't notice, all the little jabs, pushes, and insults.
Then I took the limitations off. I told myself: How horrible can kids become if they don't have to fear any repercussions for their actions? Then I remembered a horrid event that happened here over 20 years ago when I was just a kid. Three kids borrowed their parents' videocamera and filmed themselves torturing and killing a schoolmate. They even forgot the tape in the recorder and were caught. To this day I'm not sure if it was just an urban legend or a real thing. It's a psychological fact that kids don't have an actual moral system of their own until around ten years old. That means that most kids are only kept in check by fear of repercussions, one way or another.
In this story, Silver Spoon understood that what she and DT were doing was wrong and had never expected things to escalate into physical violence. Like she said, she thought it was only about making fun of Scoots, putting on makeup and stuff like that. Wrong, sure, but not evil as such. The problem came with Diamond Tiara, who in my mind has not been given limits as she's been growing up. She went crazy when she noticed that there was nothing she couldn't do to Scoots. Hell, it might have been that she's more immature than SS and didn't have a proper morality yet either. She might look back at the events a few years down the line and retch on how awful she was and hate herself for it. That's not what the story is about, though the idea is interesting.
The fact is, it's REALLY hard to say no to a friend. Especially if she's your ONLY friend. In this story there is a very bleak abusive relationship between DT and SS. Diamond Tiara comes off as a sociopath, yes. I don't think she is one in the show, but this story needed the dynamic to establish that there can be more to both the bullies than are shown in the actual show. It also allowed me to make those cute scenes with Scoots and SS. Eventually, that might actually lead to SS and Scoots becoming good friends and SS being able to break out of the abusive existence with DT. Maybe DT would realize how much of a shit she's been to even her alleged best friend. Or not. Again, it's not in the scope of this story.
4042279 I had some suspicions about background and motive that they may have been more experience related than research based. I empathize with you from my own childhood experiences.
I must say that now having finished this piece I'm not going to down vote it, I'm not going to up vote it either. I can see why this story has the ratings it does. The overly sexual elements of the latter chapters actually are a bit of a turn off from a very good psychological observation piece. You still have my eye and attention as a credit to your writing skill and I will be browsing your portfolio in the near future to see what else I may come across. You have a talent for a very perceptive and emotionally evocative style of storytelling and I genuinely encourage you to continue to explore this talent.
The whole cool-big-sister role that Dash has in this story is really great to see. I've read a lot of stories that have tried this very thing, but you really seemed to have nailed it here. It'd be awesome to see this continue.
4066878 Well I'm pretty sure you pushed the thumb up. I don't give a damn about the haters, but having people whose opinion I actually care about like my stuff really makes me want to continue. This fic wouldn't exist if I didn't get it inside my head to write it as a gift to a friend... just like my previous foalcon. RD/Scoots is his favourite pairing (as it is pretty much mine), at least it was when I started, so there we go.
I also think that the relationship between RD and Scoots is far more interesting than that of the other sister pairs in the show, mostly because they aren't real sisters, so I can get away with some seriously weird stuff. I should maybe have mentioned that in the fic RD is only around 19-21 years old, so she's still pretty immature and barely out of her teens. More about that later in the story!
Wow this is an adorable clop fic so far. I hope that you finish it, so far it's good and I can't wait to see Rainbow Dash and Scoots become special someponies.
This was amazing. I really would love to see this continued at some point, but even if you decide to move on all I'd ask is that you toss in some more stories with foals involved.
I read and enjoy clopfics and such, but I find myself enjoying many for reasons other than the sexual side and this was definitely one of them.
After reading Dominant Ideal, and this story I have to say, as far as capturing a child's innocence, no one I've seen has done it better than you. I would love to see more of it, and I don't know if you tend to post mostly clopfics or not but I would greatly appreciate any type of story that just displays that childhood innocence and growing up aspects you've done so well in your stories again.
Thanks for the amazing reads, I'll definitely be keeping an eye out for your future works as well as checking out your previous ones as soon as I finish up with a few of my back logged stories. Cheers.
4228764 I can assure you that thanks to comments just like yours that I've been getting, I will be continuing this story. Unfortunately, it will not be anytime soon, because I'm kinda stuck with my main fic and should just man up and finish it, but I hate endings.
That reminds me of something that I said (and probably heard before as I'm never very insightful) before.
Every good story has a sad ending simply because it has to end.
Anyway I'm very glad to hear you're continuing. I am very interested to see what you might have in mind, and I'm quite patient. Its good to see an author who doesn't rush.
I really liked the story. Sorry about the drama you got in the comments and the vote box over it though.
I'll be frank and honest. I came initially to see the saucy stuff. I just hit the mood to read something dirty so I did.
A little ways into reading though I realized it felt more real than things I'd read for sauciness. Nothing was forced or felt fake to me. Nothing was contrived to simply make things be sexual. It reminded me there was more to expect from fics of this nature and it might have reset my standards of quality. It made me get involved with it for more than only base desires.
I'm so glad you decided to continue this work of art! /)(\
Very nice story so far. I think that you did some good work laying the groundwork for more with Scootaloo and Silver Spoon, and in particular in making Silver Spoon sympathetic despite her role in the bullying. In addition to her apologies to Scootaloo suggesting the potential for a friendship, the part about taking the cart back from the clubhouse makes me think that maybe there could be some real change in how she acts with respect to Tiara as well.
I think that Scootaloo's reaction to the new feeling in her body came off as very true to life, particularly the unlearned impulse to hide. Without that, I don't think that everything between her and Rainbow would have felt the same, rather more unsettling at least and less endearing. Rainbow's reactions, explanation of her own experiences, and yielding and escalating only in steps played an important role there, too.
I was a little surprised that Scootaloo's fear with respect to all Dash said and did at the clubhouse didn't come back in a larger way later on, as there was at least one instance where I felt it would have worked and the gap was so short between both that and her own beating and the time at Dash's house that it'd still be at the top of her mind.
For a final note on the story, that was one hell of a kissing sequence.
On the voting and comments drama, I'll just say that I don't understand downvoting for content, even if you've read the story, unless 1) you really didn't expect the content or something very like it to be there and 2) that expectation was due to it not being suggested in the preview materiel, ideally augmented by at least a basic knowledge of the genres the author has worked in before.
I think everything has already been said. I really liked this fic, even if I'm not really into spanking and stuff. But the development with silver spoon is interesting, and it is one of the points I liked the most, I really was hoping there would be a change with her since the beginning of scootaloo spanking.
Another point I really appreciated was the details you give for each action and development with characters and feelings.
I just hope when you continue this fic that you will be able to avoid clichés like the discovery of the forbidden relation followed by a big scandal. I can understand that when DT will discover the relationship she will try to use it against scoot and RD, but until now, all seems to be about keeping secret and 'blackmailing'. Or SP getting jealous, but please, no furious fathers and angry mob, please.
Sorry but I couldn't find bad point to critic, I really like this fic.
Sometimes it makes me wonder if foalcon should be condemned for its impurity. I can say its morally wrong (in my perspectives) to have sex with a real minor (whether it be consent or platonic), but should we also say the same thing to equines? I mean, fillies/colts in the show have more intellectual fluency than most kids in real life (Compare how a small child communicates with a filly/colt, the fillies/colts act more adult than real life children since they stutter and don't know how to use sentences so fluently), so I will say we don't need to scold foalcon... except if it's brutal rape. I'm not a pedophile, but I do love foalcon shippings mainly because of the similar desires of GIVING love rather than RECEIVING love, because the fillies/colts in this show/fics are more mature and tolerable than real life children. Fillies/colts who are willing and/or maybe begging to be explored more by the pony they trust most without feeling scared or forced, and mares/stallions who are cautious and willing to do anything in their power to make them happy is what I only like about foalcon shipping. It's because the mutual understanding that both want to please each other's bodies mainly due to express how much they care for each other and the desire to please one another, not to just achieve their own goals without any solicitude before/during/after sex. This was a nice and heartwarming fic, and the way you painted foalcon into the story is very acceptable in my part. I know there are others out there who have the opposite opinions of mine, and I don't really blame them. I just want to express how tolerable my point of view on Foalcon is rather stating it as 'absolutely nothing wrong about it'. If you think otherwise, I will be happy to listen to your perspective side, but only in a calm and understanding manner.
In short, this kind of foalcon is acceptable in my book and its great to see such a warm ending. Scootadash is my absolute favorite shipping next to Rarity x Coco. Great job!
4635472 As long as it's FICTION, you can do pretty much whatever. There's no connection between thinking/imagining/reading/writing about something that would be very perverse and wrong in RL and actually doing it.
Foalcon makes me excited. Writing about it to people who enjoy it even more so. There's something very titilating in someone finding out new things about themselves and learning to enjoy them. If you want to read a fic that gets very close to rape, I recommend checking out Lead. Care. Inspire. It's sex with very little story and about an adult who works with kids breaking under just the right circumstances and making a horrid mistakes. This story isn't a lovestory between RD and Scoots. Sure, RD goes way too far with Scoots, but that's because how close they are and how much RD cares about Scoots. Heck, even thinking of them as actual sisters makes it feel a lot more natural. There's one thing that's not even touched in this fic that's going to be a big deal in the future chapters in that RD in this fic is still a teenager (19) in this fic. Not saying more because, you know, spoilers.
People, and by extension, equified people such as the MLP:FIM cast, are sexual beings (Hi, Freud!). Kids masturbate. Kids read porn mags. Kids surf on forbidden sites. Kids watch porn. Kids experiment. With it comes a load (A LOAD) of new feelings, sensations, emotions, and it's an awesome font for drama. I've never been one to write "just" for sex. Just like with RL sex, I want it to be emotional and meaningful. Even if it's between
4635620 Indeed. I love equality love rather than being the dominate or submissive one alone. Sure maybe one can be the submissive one and then later the other can have a turn. It's about fairness and equal desires that makes my heart aflutter. One-night stands, rape, and teaching how sex works isn't my style, I want both (or multiple like polygamy) to have their equal share of expressing their love and desires to one another. I'm a bisexual guy, and I'm leaning towards females. Yet at the same time, I have more respect and likings for homosexuals than heterosexuals. And being a bisexual, I understand the two sides of the homosexual debate, being why it is unnatural and why it is natural. But it is because of this unnecessary hate and disdain towards homosexuals I feel more content to defend them and taking a liking for gays and lesbians rather than straight women/men. I've seen happy homosexual couples in my life, and I absolutely love gays/lesbian fanfics on here simply because they're more meaningful, lovable, relatable, and god damn sexy. Seeing straight fics on the other hand... ehh, I've seen it way too many times, and I feel bitter about an unpopular and edgy stallion OC having sex with canon characters mainly for reasons I'm having difficulty of expressing it through words, but at least I don't hate/despise them.
This really is great. Unlike most foalcon fics, you're focusing on the emotions, the realization of desire, and never letting the foal become just an object. This is disturbingly romantic, and part of me thinks this could be a ScootaDash ship.
However, something tells me—and very large part of me is hoping—that we end up with Silver Spoon as the romantic interest, with Dash as a guide.
So... Yeah, great job building from a fetish fic base into an engaging narrative with real emotions and realistic character actions. Can't wait for more.
Man. Oh man.
This Christmas just keeps on giving, doesn't it? Definitely worth the wait.
So many wonderful little feels and emotions this pulled forth. Nervous anticipation earlier in the fic, complete trepidation as Scootaloo was tortured, I felt so cold and disgusted, I could barely eat my food. But man, it was worth getting through those dark waters to the warm pool that was pure vindictive pleasure as Dashie springs to the rescue. And the feels, oh GOD, the feels! And finally winding down with that shower and the time spent on the bed.
Just, so good. Funny in all the right spots with your narrative. All those 'cock-block' moments where Scoots aaalmost got touched, while Dash meanwhile was already well aware that she had stroked herself before. So good. So very wonderful. I loved this, so much. Thank you, Isseus.
I'm sorry I had to delete a comment from this section. I welcome criticism, but outright personal attacks and namecalling aren't of use to anyone. I'm sure Telaros just wanted to vent, but this just isn't the place for it. He clearly had differing headcanons about the character of Diamond Tiara than I did, so let us leave it at that, please.
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He mentioned me, replying to my comment. Should I weep in terror of his scathing words?
One word kind sir:MORE! We need more writers like you who are able to seamlessly mix foalcon AND romance together to make awesome fics like this. Please continue!
4030109 I wouldn't want to come between you two loverbirds. Maybe he might give you the cliff notes version if you PM'd him?
4030354 I totally understand. You can be sure that I don't do things like that.
Scootaloo and Silver Spoon! That's new, at least to me. But I can't say I don't find it appealing.
And that mosquito. Playing it off to make it sound like some sort of prowling predator made me laugh quite a bit.
i really really really liked this! tender, heartwarming, and hot! awesome combination, and i totally want more!
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Bah, don't listen to him. Haters gonna... Well, you know. His points were all kinda bunk. Dash appearing at the clubhouse wasn't contrived; it was reasonably and adequately explained in narrative. DT taking Scoots to the clubhouse makes sense with your portrayal of her as a cruel, sadistic bitch. The Silver Spoon angle makes perfect sense based on what little we know about her, and paints her as a more sympathetic character due to her loyalty to DT being not the usual rote, "but I lurves her!!1!" Nonsense.
Yeah, I saw a few spelling derps, but not enough to hurt the story as a whole.
I've read a lot of these stories over the years, and this one is easily the best story involving scootaloo that I've read yet. if you ever do get back to writing it I will eagerly continue reading it.
...That moment when you realize that the 2 clop fics that almost break your no clopping rule were both foalcon...
I don't know what to think of this to be honest. I really like how well done this is, I like the characters *except Diamond but I doubt anyone reading this did* and Silver Spoon in particular sticks out in my head. I'm not sure about the random kiss she gave Scootaloo, seems a little quick to like like someone, but maybe it'll make sense later. Foalcon is not my thing, for general reasons why most people don't approve of it and I am one of them. I honestly dunno if I can consider this foalcon in my mind though, unless Dash becomes the love interest anyways. This is such an interesting story and I want to see more of it, I do like the sister relationship between Scoots and Dash, and yeah I pretty much just skimmed the sex scene since I'm not interested in this story for that, but some of what they talked about during that and Scoot's impressions like her comparisons between her parts and an adults were really nice touches. I can understand RD's point of view and why she did what she did, this story reminds me that almost anything is acceptable if under the right circumstances. I am looking forward to seeing more of this and where it goes and hoping this doesn't go to a RD x Scoots shipping.
Well, I can't really hide the fact I'm disappointed on how this fic was received. I understand that it's a taboo subject, but on my other fics dealing with the subject, Dominant Ideal and Lead. Care. Inspire. I have at least gotten pretty reasonable commentary and discussion, most of which has been pretty interesting. This time I spent over forty hours writing this fic, and CarcinoGeneticist spent countless hours editing it, and here we are. Didn't even make feature, which I fully expected I would. Hell, it's not even that! It's that from the moment I posted this fic, I got five downvotes in minutes, meaning that people came in just to stroke their moral organs and to downvote a fic they found objectionable. It didn't have anything to do with how the subject was treated or if the writing was good, it was just that they saw foals and the sex tag, spent 10 seconds opening the fic and clicking the thumb down and going on their merry way.
Let me put this in a nice way: Fuck you.
I wrote a blog about prejudice and people being afraid of their own thoughts a long time ago when Dominant Ideal came out. I suggest people give it a read... not that I'd expect any of the haters to even know how to read at all to begin with. Let them be happy reading their awesome Naruto-Halo-Fallout-Crossover-HiE-2nd person- gorefics starring YOU as Alucard fighting starships or whatever.
This fic was written as a gift to a friend and he liked it a lot. I'm really happy for that. I'm just pissed off at the FIMFic system.
Forgot to say this: More Scootadash!!!
4039838 Blocked and reported for personal attack.
Leaving your message here for a while for the mods to see, but will soon delete it.
There we go. Bye!
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Hi. This is a friendly neighborhood reminder that making comments regarding a story's content is cool 'n' all, but if you've got something to say regarding the author, try to keep off the personal attacks. Telling an author to "Go fuck yourself with a cactus" --especially when you're commenting on the story while admitting that you haven't read the story in question--is rather over the line, so please try to keep things civil.
Have a nice day.
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Truer words were never spoken. I've seen some fantastically half-assed crap on the feature box thrown out by writers with thousands of followers with poor editing and plot holes. That doesn't make it a good thing, btw. An author who devotes time and energy to something deserves to at least have it visible to more people, regardless of the subject matter. Look at Fallout Equestria, that's something that has precious little to do with the general aesthetic of MLP, but the quality is top and it deserves attention. Now, what if you were a fan of FoE and it never got as popular as it did. Would you be pissed?
It's fine for someone to read something and then dislike it for their time, but outright punishing fics they have zero intention to read without so much as a second glance is disgusting. Every downvote stuff gets lowers the overall rating which pushes it back when browsing fics sorted by rating. Yes, this is a necessary evil because people should be privileged to downvote what they want, but each one takes the privilege of being read by more people away from a fic. I've had it happen to me, I've had people go through and down vote everything I wrote (and every comment), and it's a feeling that sucks. It's why I try to at least give MYSELF a good reason to down something.
He was questioning the five or so people who downvoted this fic to oblivion the MOMENT HE POSTED IT. I was linked straight away, I watched this shit happen. Goes back to the downvote-without-even-looking-at-it thing.
Fics of similar nature, foalcon and all, have gotten there. Why not something he spent a lot of time and energy on, eh? Yeah, he's disappointed, but I also think you're stretching the level of 'complaining' he's doing.
Based on what? An author being disappointed with the hateful reception a fic he put a huge effort to portray a difficult subject sensibly received?
Haha, what? Welcome to the internet, kid.
Sorry, this I highly doubt.
See? It's not hard to justify a downvote.
Weren't you just yelled at for personal attacks by a mod like an hour ago? Is that why you're trying to artfully dodge the blame by having him self-hate?
Anyways, my point in all of this is the fact that I don't think you're looking at this from Isseus' perspective, is all.
MESSAGE TO ALL FLAMERS AND HATERS OF THIS AWESOME FIC: PISS OFF There ARE other people besides you that actually LIKE the story. Oh, and Isseus, PLEASE do continue when you get the chance. Don't let haters keep ya down
4041197 I didn't do research as such. All I had to do was go back to Elementary School and remember all the shit that was done there and after school. All the little things that the teachers didn't notice, all the little jabs, pushes, and insults.
Then I took the limitations off. I told myself: How horrible can kids become if they don't have to fear any repercussions for their actions? Then I remembered a horrid event that happened here over 20 years ago when I was just a kid. Three kids borrowed their parents' videocamera and filmed themselves torturing and killing a schoolmate. They even forgot the tape in the recorder and were caught. To this day I'm not sure if it was just an urban legend or a real thing. It's a psychological fact that kids don't have an actual moral system of their own until around ten years old. That means that most kids are only kept in check by fear of repercussions, one way or another.
In this story, Silver Spoon understood that what she and DT were doing was wrong and had never expected things to escalate into physical violence. Like she said, she thought it was only about making fun of Scoots, putting on makeup and stuff like that. Wrong, sure, but not evil as such. The problem came with Diamond Tiara, who in my mind has not been given limits as she's been growing up. She went crazy when she noticed that there was nothing she couldn't do to Scoots. Hell, it might have been that she's more immature than SS and didn't have a proper morality yet either. She might look back at the events a few years down the line and retch on how awful she was and hate herself for it. That's not what the story is about, though the idea is interesting.
The fact is, it's REALLY hard to say no to a friend. Especially if she's your ONLY friend. In this story there is a very bleak abusive relationship between DT and SS. Diamond Tiara comes off as a sociopath, yes. I don't think she is one in the show, but this story needed the dynamic to establish that there can be more to both the bullies than are shown in the actual show. It also allowed me to make those cute scenes with Scoots and SS. Eventually, that might actually lead to SS and Scoots becoming good friends and SS being able to break out of the abusive existence with DT. Maybe DT would realize how much of a shit she's been to even her alleged best friend. Or not. Again, it's not in the scope of this story.
4042279 I had some suspicions about background and motive that they may have been more experience related than research based. I empathize with you from my own childhood experiences.
I must say that now having finished this piece I'm not going to down vote it, I'm not going to up vote it either. I can see why this story has the ratings it does. The overly sexual elements of the latter chapters actually are a bit of a turn off from a very good psychological observation piece. You still have my eye and attention as a credit to your writing skill and I will be browsing your portfolio in the near future to see what else I may come across. You have a talent for a very perceptive and emotionally evocative style of storytelling and I genuinely encourage you to continue to explore this talent.
I'll keep it short and simple. I liked it ^^
Please make more it's an awesome fic.
The whole cool-big-sister role that Dash has in this story is really great to see. I've read a lot of stories that have tried this very thing, but you really seemed to have nailed it here. It'd be awesome to see this continue.
Commence read.
All those troubles in the comments.
If you decide to continue, then alright.
4066878 Well I'm pretty sure you pushed the thumb up. I don't give a damn about the haters, but having people whose opinion I actually care about like my stuff really makes me want to continue. This fic wouldn't exist if I didn't get it inside my head to write it as a gift to a friend... just like my previous foalcon. RD/Scoots is his favourite pairing (as it is pretty much mine), at least it was when I started, so there we go.
I also think that the relationship between RD and Scoots is far more interesting than that of the other sister pairs in the show, mostly because they aren't real sisters, so I can get away with some seriously weird stuff. I should maybe have mentioned that in the fic RD is only around 19-21 years old, so she's still pretty immature and barely out of her teens. More about that later in the story!
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Alright then.
More things to look forward to and story to build on.
If foalcon is the definition of pedophilia, I should have avoided this literature. Urp!
Wow this is an adorable clop fic so far. I hope that you finish it, so far it's good and I can't wait to see Rainbow Dash and Scoots become special someponies.
This was amazing. I really would love to see this continued at some point, but even if you decide to move on all I'd ask is that you toss in some more stories with foals involved.
I read and enjoy clopfics and such, but I find myself enjoying many for reasons other than the sexual side and this was definitely one of them.
After reading Dominant Ideal, and this story I have to say, as far as capturing a child's innocence, no one I've seen has done it better than you. I would love to see more of it, and I don't know if you tend to post mostly clopfics or not but I would greatly appreciate any type of story that just displays that childhood innocence and growing up aspects you've done so well in your stories again.
Thanks for the amazing reads, I'll definitely be keeping an eye out for your future works as well as checking out your previous ones as soon as I finish up with a few of my back logged stories. Cheers.
4228764 I can assure you that thanks to comments just like yours that I've been getting, I will be continuing this story. Unfortunately, it will not be anytime soon, because I'm kinda stuck with my main fic and should just man up and finish it, but I hate endings.
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That reminds me of something that I said (and probably heard before as I'm never very insightful) before.
Every good story has a sad ending simply because it has to end.
Anyway I'm very glad to hear you're continuing. I am very interested to see what you might have in mind, and I'm quite patient. Its good to see an author who doesn't rush.
i .....love......you. I mean your fanfic
This was extremely well written and I hope you continue with it. I'm also going to check out your other fics.
4315428 Tell me what you think of them as well.
this story get's the luneth spark seal of approval
4366337 How much can I get for it on eBay?
4366642 one ps4
4366953 I think I'll keep the seal then. It has sentimental value for me.
I really liked the story. Sorry about the drama you got in the comments and the vote box over it though.
I'll be frank and honest. I came initially to see the saucy stuff. I just hit the mood to read something dirty so I did.
A little ways into reading though I realized it felt more real than things I'd read for sauciness. Nothing was forced or felt fake to me. Nothing was contrived to simply make things be sexual. It reminded me there was more to expect from fics of this nature and it might have reset my standards of quality. It made me get involved with it for more than only base desires.
I'm so glad you decided to continue this work of art! /)(\
Very nice story so far. I think that you did some good work laying the groundwork for more with Scootaloo and Silver Spoon, and in particular in making Silver Spoon sympathetic despite her role in the bullying. In addition to her apologies to Scootaloo suggesting the potential for a friendship, the part about taking the cart back from the clubhouse makes me think that maybe there could be some real change in how she acts with respect to Tiara as well.
I think that Scootaloo's reaction to the new feeling in her body came off as very true to life, particularly the unlearned impulse to hide. Without that, I don't think that everything between her and Rainbow would have felt the same, rather more unsettling at least and less endearing. Rainbow's reactions, explanation of her own experiences, and yielding and escalating only in steps played an important role there, too.
I was a little surprised that Scootaloo's fear with respect to all Dash said and did at the clubhouse didn't come back in a larger way later on, as there was at least one instance where I felt it would have worked and the gap was so short between both that and her own beating and the time at Dash's house that it'd still be at the top of her mind.
For a final note on the story, that was one hell of a kissing sequence.
On the voting and comments drama, I'll just say that I don't understand downvoting for content, even if you've read the story, unless 1) you really didn't expect the content or something very like it to be there and 2) that expectation was due to it not being suggested in the preview materiel, ideally augmented by at least a basic knowledge of the genres the author has worked in before.
I think everything has already been said.
I really liked this fic, even if I'm not really into spanking and stuff. But the development with silver spoon is interesting, and it is one of the points I liked the most, I really was hoping there would be a change with her since the beginning of scootaloo spanking.
Another point I really appreciated was the details you give for each action and development with characters and feelings.
I just hope when you continue this fic that you will be able to avoid clichés like the discovery of the forbidden relation followed by a big scandal.
I can understand that when DT will discover the relationship she will try to use it against scoot and RD, but until now, all seems to be about keeping secret and 'blackmailing'.
Or SP getting jealous, but please, no furious fathers and angry mob, please.
Sorry but I couldn't find bad point to critic, I really like this fic.
4523898 Depends. Are you the teacher and the kids around you around the age of ten?
Sometimes it makes me wonder if foalcon should be condemned for its impurity. I can say its morally wrong (in my perspectives) to have sex with a real minor (whether it be consent or platonic), but should we also say the same thing to equines? I mean, fillies/colts in the show have more intellectual fluency than most kids in real life (Compare how a small child communicates with a filly/colt, the fillies/colts act more adult than real life children since they stutter and don't know how to use sentences so fluently), so I will say we don't need to scold foalcon... except if it's brutal rape. I'm not a pedophile, but I do love foalcon shippings mainly because of the similar desires of GIVING love rather than RECEIVING love, because the fillies/colts in this show/fics are more mature and tolerable than real life children. Fillies/colts who are willing and/or maybe begging to be explored more by the pony they trust most without feeling scared or forced, and mares/stallions who are cautious and willing to do anything in their power to make them happy is what I only like about foalcon shipping. It's because the mutual understanding that both want to please each other's bodies mainly due to express how much they care for each other and the desire to please one another, not to just achieve their own goals without any solicitude before/during/after sex. This was a nice and heartwarming fic, and the way you painted foalcon into the story is very acceptable in my part. I know there are others out there who have the opposite opinions of mine, and I don't really blame them. I just want to express how tolerable my point of view on Foalcon is rather stating it as 'absolutely nothing wrong about it'. If you think otherwise, I will be happy to listen to your perspective side, but only in a calm and understanding manner.
In short, this kind of foalcon is acceptable in my book and its great to see such a warm ending. Scootadash is my absolute favorite shipping next to Rarity x Coco. Great job!
4635472 As long as it's FICTION, you can do pretty much whatever. There's no connection between thinking/imagining/reading/writing about something that would be very perverse and wrong in RL and actually doing it.
Foalcon makes me excited. Writing about it to people who enjoy it even more so. There's something very titilating in someone finding out new things about themselves and learning to enjoy them. If you want to read a fic that gets very close to rape, I recommend checking out Lead. Care. Inspire. It's sex with very little story and about an adult who works with kids breaking under just the right circumstances and making a horrid mistakes. This story isn't a lovestory between RD and Scoots. Sure, RD goes way too far with Scoots, but that's because how close they are and how much RD cares about Scoots. Heck, even thinking of them as actual sisters makes it feel a lot more natural. There's one thing that's not even touched in this fic that's going to be a big deal in the future chapters in that RD in this fic is still a teenager (19) in this fic. Not saying more because, you know, spoilers.
People, and by extension, equified people such as the MLP:FIM cast, are sexual beings (Hi, Freud!). Kids masturbate. Kids read porn mags. Kids surf on forbidden sites. Kids watch porn. Kids experiment. With it comes a load (A LOAD) of new feelings, sensations, emotions, and it's an awesome font for drama. I've never been one to write "just" for sex. Just like with RL sex, I want it to be emotional and meaningful. Even if it's between
4635620 Indeed. I love equality love rather than being the dominate or submissive one alone. Sure maybe one can be the submissive one and then later the other can have a turn. It's about fairness and equal desires that makes my heart aflutter. One-night stands, rape, and teaching how sex works isn't my style, I want both (or multiple like polygamy) to have their equal share of expressing their love and desires to one another. I'm a bisexual guy, and I'm leaning towards females. Yet at the same time, I have more respect and likings for homosexuals than heterosexuals. And being a bisexual, I understand the two sides of the homosexual debate, being why it is unnatural and why it is natural. But it is because of this unnecessary hate and disdain towards homosexuals I feel more content to defend them and taking a liking for gays and lesbians rather than straight women/men. I've seen happy homosexual couples in my life, and I absolutely love gays/lesbian fanfics on here simply because they're more meaningful, lovable, relatable, and god damn sexy. Seeing straight fics on the other hand... ehh, I've seen it way too many times, and I feel bitter about an unpopular and edgy stallion OC having sex with canon characters mainly for reasons I'm having difficulty of expressing it through words, but at least I don't hate/despise them.
4635620 yes