Derpy`s full potential

by pvtread

the lesson in friendship, and the 2 princesses

After the show Princesses Luna, and Celestia who already knew all about this and were watching from a ways away both gave their applause and took off for Canterlot Castle.

Luna looked at her sister with tears in her eyes ''sister'' “Yes Luna” Celestia asked. “I am sad at what just happened is this a good thing” Celestia looked at her sister with tears in her eyes as well, and they had to land in order to embrace each other. “Yes Luna it is normal we have witnessed the true meaning of friendship and loyalty today dear sister. Now we have to get back to the castle we both should be expecting some mail” Luna looked at her sister inquisitively and asked “what do you mean we” “That’s right Luna part of my deal with Dash with me not showing up or making an appearance was that the pony folk would send both of us letters explaining what they had learned. I figured it would be a good idea for you to start having a bit more of a role in the castle and not just have you locked in your room all the time. I know you’re not used to things right now what with having been on the moon for 1,000 years and I want to start making up for that” Luna simply hugged her sister and said “thank you sister” With that they both took off headed for Canterlot and the expected mail.

Later that night as the ponies in Ponyville were all getting ready for bed 7 ponies were busy writing letters to Princesses Celestia, and Luna.

THE LESSON IN FRIENDSHIP, TWILIGHT'S LETTER

Dear Princess Celestia today I learned a valuable lesson in friendship. Not just friendship but life in general. It doesn’t matter whether or not your different from every pony in Equestria, what matters is that as long as you have friends who will always stick by your side you will never really ever be alone in this life. I saw this today when Rainbow Dash took Derpy Hooves flying with her. I got to see true loyalty at its finest. I also got to witness a rare and wonderful sight a pony that already had her cutie mark get something far more valuable. I saw a Bubble Blast today; it came from none other than Derpy Hooves our well known and loved mail mare, cross eyed and all. A strange thing happened after the Bubble Blast though, her eyes went straight, and it wasn’t getting her cutie mark that made her realize her true place in life, but having her eyes straighten out. She was a bit shocked at first but as soon as she got used to it she went around hugging every pony. Anyways I digress as I sometimes do. The lesson was that even though different and cross eyed, derpy was able to still be who she was, loved and cared about by quite a few. Those that didn’t like her were the ones who learned the lesson today. Never judge a pony for her looks or the way she is on the outside, even though one may have a cutie mark it doesn’t mean they have reached their full potential in life. Sometimes it takes the love of close friends and a bit of persuasion to leave ones comfort zone to actually reach your full potential in life. When you do you may find you gain more than just a cutie mark, You may learn the reason you were given the life and experiences you have been through was so you could one day overcome them all.

YOUR FAITHFUL STUDENT, TWILIGHT SPARKLE.

The rest of the main 6 and Derpy wrote the 2 princesses their own letters as well. Even Dinky wrote one which she shared with her class the next day.

The Bubble Blast would go down in history as the day Derpy Hooves finally got everything she had always wanted. Yes she was made fun of for different things here and there, but with everything Dash had taught her she would just let it roll off her back. She and Dash spent days together often times. When Dash had nothing to do she would just simply fly, enjoying each other’s company and the air flowing through their manes.

It wasn’t a few days later that the bolts came back to Ponyville to check in on their newest members and see how they were doing, and of course the ponies of Ponyville got another free show. What could they say they enjoyed seeing every pony happy, and it made them all feel great inside knowing that they could do it.

The 2 princesses also had learned something that day as well. They had learned that yes even though they were different and had basically nothing in common they were still sisters and that would never change. As time went on Luna would get used to having more of a role in the castle and she enjoyed it. She would often come to Ponyville to visit all the ponies and they actually weren’t afraid of her. In fact she would often times sneak off with Dash and Derpy for some alone time and to simply enjoy the freedom of carefree flight. They would race, barrel roll, and they would loop all for the pure enjoyment of being free, Rainbow Dash doing her Sonic Rain Boom and, Derpy doing the Bubble Blast. They would also occasionally go on tour with the bolts as guests both of the princesses, and of the bolts, they would travel all throughout Equestria putting on shows for all.

As it turned out Pinkie was actually quite good at handling the twins along with Dinky. She thought at first that she wouldn’t be able to do so, but she learned how to set aside time for all she had to do.

Derpy stayed with the mail service of Ponyville, and due to her not being cross eyed anymore was now able to fly making it easier to deliver mail to the ponies of Equestria. She always told her daughter at the end of every day that she could be anything she set her heart and mind to, and was capable of doing anything as long as she had faith and a dream. This drove Dinky to strive hard and become just like her mother.

THE END.

Comments

[GlitchyProductions]

There is... A LOT! of Grammatical errors and spelling mistakes, it wouldn't be worth it to list some of them.

Try and get a pre-reader or something, or even re-read what you made before you publish it to check if there is any errors of the kind.

[Draco Dei]

What he said...

[SeaLight]

I know your story has a good plot, but I would suggest rereading it and fixing any grammatical/spelling mistakes and errors.

[Dreammare]

I wanna pre-read and make the story fixed!

[RainbowDashian]

Hm. I enjoyed this story quite a bit. Found it off of Dreammare's page. Imma give you an upvote, pvtread.

[pvtread]

299971- i try to do what corrections i can, however my internet is often spotty and i also am working on my series as well. if you are up to it il allow you to do what you asked.

[All of the Above]

1246689

Its got potential

Get it... because... the story title is Derpy's Full Potential... Get it?

[MythrilMoth]

You need to unpublish this until you can get a skilled pre-reader or editor to show you everything that's wrong with it, because there is so MUCH wrong with it that a lot of people aren't going to bother reading past the first paragraph.

[Proper Noun]

4032527
Be an asshole, that'll get 'em to listen!

[MythrilMoth]

4038228 An asshole?

By pointing out that the story has many errors and needs editing?

This story's been on the site 2 years and has 10 (now 11) comments, less than 25 total votes, and an almost 50/50 like/dislike balance.

When a story with 1500 views has stats like that, there's a problem. I'm just pointing out that there is a problem. Not that it matters. The author clearly doesn't care.

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4038470
You named literally none of the errors. Instead, you bashed. Good job helping.

Also, I screencapped the PM you sent me, because that made my morning.

[MythrilMoth]

Uhh...no, I didn't bash. I advised the author to get a prereader, and to unpublish the story until it can be fixed.

That isn't bashing. Bashing would be "this sucks and you suck and your mother sucks".If I were BASHING the story, I would have downvoted it. I didn't. I'm not one of those 10 thumbs-down votes. Because I'd be willing to read this story if it were properly proofread and edited.

But you don't seem to be intelligent enough to understand the difference between advice and bashing.

The fact that I didn't point out any specific errors doesn't automatically make my comment bashing on the story. If I were going to sit and point out the errors, I might as well offer to preread. But I'm not interested in doing that. Hence my advice to find a prereader.

The next time you feel the need to "defend" someone from a "hater", please do the following:

1. Stop and consider whether or not the "hater" is actually a hater.
2. Consider the possibility that the author is perfectly capable of defending himself/herself, and doesn't really need your assistance.
3. Keep your trap shut.

(To the author: I'm dreadfully sorry about this. My advice was well-intentioned, and it's unfortunate that some pitiful little tosser decided to misinterpret it as an attack.)

[Happy]

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4038535
This is pretty incredible. Please enlighten me.

You need to unpublish this

there is so MUCH wrong with it that a lot of people aren't going to bother reading past the first paragraph.

You're such a helpful and constructive critic.

Also, you're cute when you're mad.

[pvtread]

Look; I have an editor, but she is very busy at this time. I know about the errors; and they will be fixd, in time. As of now however; I am focoused on my FOE stories and this is kind of on the back burner for now, seeing as the next story my editor is going to work on is in fact one of my FOE shorts. If you like this story; that`s awesome, if you don`t you can at least take in to concideration that this was my very first ever story on here. I have greatly improved upon my typing skills; and if you read my FOE stuff I`m quite sure you`ll be able to see just how far I`ve come in my typing. P.S. I also do all my work via Xbox360; and believe you me, it is a mirical that my FOE stuff is as good as it is. Same goes for this story; I have tried reviseing this, trust me; but I only have an office computer with word 2010 to do so, and that is only when I can use it. To all who like this story; THANK YOU, to all who don`t; that is you`re perogitive.

[Happy]

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P.S. I also do all my work via Xbox360

What.

[hansyolo19]

so beautiful

[Crimson Sketch]

Do you have an editor? Because if you didn't, I'd be glad to do so.

[LaBirdie]

Awww little sis is making the wonderbolts.