Something is going on in Ponyville. Mares has been attacked and violated by an unknown rapist. Disturbing reports states that the assailant is a foal. Can the Mane Six stop the rapist before it is too late?
Was pretty good. The image of Babs having a penis too large for her body was too comical to really enjoy, but an easy imagining of it being smaller fixed that. The bit with RD and Scoots was kinda cute, but felt out of place so early in the story, especially after the sex-a-thon that RD and AJ just went through. Overall, it did well enough.
Scootaloo smiled, somewhat reassured by Rainbow Dash’s words, and prepared to jump off the edge. Rainbow Dash dove down, leaving a rainbow-trail after her, and made a U-turn just as she was about to hit the ground
I can see a large number of lil fillies and maybe some mares getting their minds or at least their spirits broken by the end of this, I am reading this more for the mind fucking than body fucking
Hmm... filly/mare, filly/filly, fillydom, mindrape, tribadism, and "La Blue Girl" style clit dicks complete with cum somehow...? Ain't nothin' wrong with any of that... I'll be sticking around to see if this can meet or exceed the awesomeness of its inspiration, but either way, it's pretty damn awesome.
Well, I've had IRL stuff to do and I've also taken the christmas off. But once I get back to my collage (the 7th) I'll start writing again. I have already begun on the second chapter and is done with the first scene.
3836471 You took what I was gonna say and reworded it.
Just kidding. Nah, I'm actually gonna wait to read this. Two reasons, however. 1. Slipmat just bought me Mary the Anthro Mare in Nightfall Purple. I want to wait until I have it. 2. I've read too much clop. So much to the point I no longer have enough to read for a single orgasm. I have to wait until my stock replenishes.
Okay, you really need to fix your possessive pronouns and nouns. Babs hoof, Babs flanks, etc etc. If a character's name ends with a "s" you just add an apostrophe 's', but if there are multiple characters involved, then you just append an apostrophe.
but in a peaceful town like Ponyville nothing bad could happen, right?
This is chapter 1.
This time she felt a different feeling rising within her.
Good. Good.
“I won’t,” answered the voice calmly. “But you will. Just as you will hurt this pony in front of you.”
Poor Babs. Poor Applebloom. The rape scene is Awesome Sauce!
“You can call me…” The blue pony turned, walked out the open door before she stared back at the exhausted filly with a menacing grin on her lips. “… Trixie.”
Did not see that coming.
Here she was, alone with Apple Bloom in her room, and all she had to do was to walk up to Apple Bloom, pin her to the floor and part those wonderful nethers with her huge member.
This is going to be so good...
“I’vealwayslikedyouandIwannahavesexwithyou!"
Not gonna be that easy Scoots.
Upon hearing that Rainbow Dash’s arousal skyrocketed and her heart almost skipped a beat.
Okay, it will be. Hot damn,I am quite pleased so far. I await more.
I wonder if Twi will catch then Rape the hell out of trixie by the end of this, also add dark take with the scene of Babs raping Zecora.
Was pretty good. The image of Babs having a penis too large for her body was too comical to really enjoy, but an easy imagining of it being smaller fixed that. The bit with RD and Scoots was kinda cute, but felt out of place so early in the story, especially after the sex-a-thon that RD and AJ just went through. Overall, it did well enough.
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Thanks.
I might change a bit of it once I am done with the story, I still got so many ideas to fit in!
What does it say about me that I was ok with the first half but not with the Scootaloo/Rainbow part...
3501644 It says that you should get your body ready for some sweet Scootalube.
WOW. Just....WOW.
This is sick, pervert, mindfucking, has pedophilia, futa, rape and dark-induced rape powers!?
This is beautiful.
I see what you possibly did there and i like it.
I can see a large number of lil fillies and maybe some mares getting their minds or at least their spirits broken by the end of this, I am reading this more for the mind fucking than body fucking
Hmm... filly/mare, filly/filly, fillydom, mindrape, tribadism, and "La Blue Girl" style clit dicks complete with cum somehow...? Ain't nothin' wrong with any of that... I'll be sticking around to see if this can meet or exceed the awesomeness of its inspiration, but either way, it's pretty damn awesome.
LOVE the scootadash. LOVE the plot so far. One word: MORE.
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Well I guess Dashie and Scoots were on...
*puts on shades*
Cloud 9
YYYYYEEEEEAAAAAAHHHHHH!!!!!
Juust like midnight violations slow updates
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Well, I've had IRL stuff to do and I've also taken the christmas off. But once I get back to my collage (the 7th) I'll start writing again. I have already begun on the second chapter and is done with the first scene.
This...
I shall read tonight..
And judge it upon how the glorious corruption has graced it..
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You took what I was gonna say and reworded it.
Just kidding. Nah, I'm actually gonna wait to read this. Two reasons, however.
1. Slipmat just bought me Mary the Anthro Mare in Nightfall Purple. I want to wait until I have it.
2. I've read too much clop. So much to the point I no longer have enough to read for a single orgasm. I have to wait until my stock replenishes.
So... is this still alive?
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Very much indeed. I've been pretty busy with IRL shit but I'll try to finish chapter two as soon as I can.
I hope this ends with Babs ræping Trixie...
Okay, you really need to fix your possessive pronouns and nouns. Babs hoof, Babs flanks, etc etc. If a character's name ends with a "s" you just add an apostrophe 's', but if there are multiple characters involved, then you just append an apostrophe.
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Trixie mind raping Babs and twisting her sexual desires to be a rape machine. That wasn't cool. Dashie and Scoots snuggle sex. Pure fluffy goodness.
This is chapter 1.
Good. Good.
Poor Babs. Poor Applebloom.
The rape scene is Awesome Sauce!
Did not see that coming.
This is going to be so good...
Not gonna be that easy Scoots.
Okay, it will be.
Hot damn,I am quite pleased so far. I await more.