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Ponys and the humans

Zecora ends up stuck in a hut with a human. Confused, hurt, and scared; zecora has to suriveiv from these "Things."

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Sun Chaser

Sun Chaser #1 · Mar 1st, 2012 · · ·

"...suriveiv..."

This does not give me much confidence in your writing abilities...

Dostoron

Dostoron #2 · Mar 1st, 2012 · · ·

Do yourself and your view count a favor, proofread.
I don´t mean to offend (and i am one to talk) but the errors just make my half-americanised brain beg for mercy.
Don´t let this get you down but you need a proofreader.

Fragile Wings

Fragile Wings #3 · Mar 1st, 2012 · · ·

Yup, I would definitely agree, proofreading helps a lot! 'crake' 'suriveiv', saying this in the nicest way possible of course! Imma carry on reading... If you want to message me I'd love to go over it for you if you don't have anyone else to!

Fragile Wings

Fragile Wings #4 · Mar 1st, 2012 · · ·

Right reread it It does have a good storyline but this could have been stretched over at least two chapters and i think this would give a better feeling to it. My offer still stands because i think this story could be excellent!