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For The First And The Last

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All goes well for Rainbow Dash. Her life ifs going according to her, and everything is perfect, and she meets a letter.

NOTE: Written in 1st Person, criticism is appreciated. :)

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rarerarity

rarerarity #1 · Oct 17th, 2013 · · ·

More. Now.

Please

Deactivated27683799

Deactivated27683799 #2 · Oct 17th, 2013 · · ·

Woah woah whoa! Slow wayyyyy down. So lightning dust commit suicicr because she didn't get into the wonderbolts? It was a good short story but also you might want to work on where you put hyphens. And I don't get this. You said she went to the funeral that afternoon then said she wished she had gone to the funeral? Other then that good job!

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Deactivated27683799 #3 · Oct 17th, 2013 · · ·

Sorry about that past comment it sounded like I was being a jerk. What I meant by that is that some parts just didn't make any sence and that last part sounded sarcastic I actually enjoyed that

Yatagrasu

Yatagrasu #4 · Oct 18th, 2013 · · ·

3360651 First comment I ever had. Thank you. By the way, I'm working on about 3 comedy stories now. Than I have to jump on some LONG stories. But thanks for commenting. Bye.

3361204 I didn't really see that. My bad. Actually, Rainbow Dash was regretting about what she had done. She didn't think that going to the funeral would be okay for her since it was her fault for her death, but later she wished so that she could at-least meet her parents or see her for the last time. Al-tough, I really appreciate your comment. Thanks for your small review. Bye.