Nice ending! All in all, very well done.

Honestly, as it went on I got more interested in the relationship dynamic than the clop. You're pretty good at making the characters feel alive with their interactions.

Not to say that the clop wasn't amazing, oh no.

Button gets all the mares.
Will there be a sequel?

What a ! I thought that you were gonna drop a drama bomb on us, like some hentais do to try and sound more mature than they are, but in the process you showed that this story does have heart beyond sex, while still retaining what it is meant to be.

This is probably one of the best clopfics I've ever read.

this really really really needs a multichapter sequel too
so good

I liked it. Kinda wish the spell had failed though...

...And I wanted to see his mother's reaction when he told her about what happened.

You have done quite well man.

Hm....A sequel?

Now it needs a sequel of them a few years down the track.

Alright! Alright Darnnit! You forced me into it ! ***Favored***

That ended happily didn't it? He'll have to hold off for Cheerilee but you got Derpy on tap buddy!

in 4 moar plz.

I wanna see a ButtonXDerpy fic.

SEQUEL PLEASE!!!!!

Very nicely done.

Herrhips spasmed and shook

I think there's a "r" too much and a space missing.

The ending was ok, I would have prefered it if Button got over his love/crush for Cherilee and as a more mature boy will go his own way in life and get Sweetie or Dinkie as fillyfriend but eh, this was okay too. Thanks for the fic, it was a great read.

Loved it! Would definitely be interested in a sequel surrounding the relationship.

You should make an epilogue, in where Button gets confronted by his mom.

nice last chapter

"The author's note: Keep calm and brony on." The irony was that I was wearing a shirt that says "Keep Calm and Carry On" on the front at the time. Anyways this was a great story, if not the best one I have read. You should definitely write another one like this or continue the story. A great writer like you should be able to do it.

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I hope theres a sequel

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I was hoping he would suggest to put Cheerilee on hold and start courting Vinyl, and have the sequel be about their relationship to be honest. He knows he loves Cheerilee, but he doesn't know anything about Vinyl. Sure, it's mostly a clopfic, but I think it'd be really heartwarming to read a story about Button and Vinyl falling in love with the help of Cheerilee, and the 3 of them having a true polyamorous relationship.

Vinyl says she's a lesbian, but she had a positive experience with penetrative sex. Lesbian sex is nothing like what you see in porn, and the vast majority of women who grow up as lesbians rarely have penetrative sex, if ever. Vinyl's positive experience with Button, even while in heat, means she can at the very least tolerate Button while not in heat.

truly awesome story. I require a sequel

Fuck my brain for not being able to comprehend enough adjectives to describe me feelings... I feel a poem coming on!

This story quite divine,
A diamond in the rough.
It had plot and its own time,
And other sexy stuff.

It made my heart aflutter,
And not just simply that.
It melted my brain into butter,
And I had a cool hat!

I had so much fun reading this,
I'm not lying right now.
But I might see something amiss,
Somewhere in the port bow.

This story made my day,
A slight spice to a moment of rest.
And to you I will say,
"You are always at your best!"

Ah some poetic release,
Been quite some time.
Since I made one of these,
And the urge to rhyme.

I find this clopfic appealing,
In every sense of the word.
From the scenes so revealing.
And story being not absurd.

Well I could talk for a while,
Give the rhyming jaws a whirl.
But I have to leave with a smile,
But I won't do it without a twirl.

The best for last......ATTA BOY BUTTON!!!!

I feel Derpy got the best of it.

i like to imagine he goes after Dinky, and Derpy cock blocks him every chance she gets because she knows what a horndog he is in bed.

'Twas a good ride, reading this story. Came for the sex, stayed for the plot. (No, not plot like ass...) Thank you, Kalash93, for writing this amazing work of a story.

I hate you in the best of ways. Now I have been shipping button with these three, mostly separately. Bathroom scenes, and even school scenes... (college for those.) But now my brain is shipped with so many things that I can't focus straight.

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Button gets all the mares.

Will there be a sequel?

Or does he?
Honestly, I don't know about about a sequel. Slice Of Life and I get tend to get along like an M4 in a sandstorm. It always grinds to a halt before too long. However, I've got an epilogue in production.

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im writing from nofap november, day eight, operation failed

Sorry. I wanted to get this done during September.

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What a ! I thought that you were gonna drop a drama bomb on us, like some hentais do to try and sound more mature than they are, but in the process you showed that this story does have heart beyond sex, while still retaining what it is meant to be.

This is probably one of the best clopfics I've ever read.

It just wouldn't be a Kalash93 story if it didn't in some way try to reach beyond its premise. That whole relationship subplot, particularly the ending, was a tough call to make. I had no idea how it was going to turn out, until I stopped just prior to Button's decision, pitched some ideas to my friends on Skype, reread all four chapters and what I had of the current draft, consulted my friends some more, and then tried various approaches to the outcome until I found one that fit just right.
I couldn't pander too much and be too idealistic by just unproblematically letting Button have a harem, nor could I be too cruel by either having Cheerilee and Vinyl outright tell Button that it was just a one time deal, nor could I offer false hope by having him be completely rejected after accepting their offer. The reason why I made not only his choice, but his rationale, vital to the outcome, was because it was the best way to facilitate whichever ending fit best, but also because it gave the chance needed to showcase the depth of character needed to make the story work properly.Truthfully, I just wanted to do something different and intelligent, which would hopefully also go over well with readers.
You flatter me, but I'm glad that you think so highly of my work.

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this really really really needs a multichapter sequel too

so good

Thanks.
I'm unsure about any sequels right now. Besides, I've got other ideas on my mind, not that I wouldn't use one of those to make the sequel, but if I do, expect something vastly different from this. But, you will be pleased to know that I'll soon be posting a short epilogue.

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I liked it. Kinda wish the spell had failed though...

Yay to the first and nope to the second.

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...And I wanted to see his mother's reaction when he told her about what happened.

You'll see soon enough. Just you wait.

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You have done quite well man.

Thanks, dude.

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[quoteHm....A sequel?]I don't know. So many of you really liked this fic and want a sequel, but I'm not personally eager to try following this up with some slice of life romance fic. There's no reason why I can't do both things with one story, though.

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Now it needs a sequel of them a few years down the track.

I guess. Why not one where Button and Vinyl are in something like S.T.A.K.E.R.?

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Alright! Alright Darnnit! You forced me into it ! ***Favored***

I'm honoured.

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That ended happily didn't it? He'll have to hold off for Cheerilee but you got Derpy on tap buddy!

It ended far better than I was fearing it might have. No guarantees about the threesome, but you are right about Derpy.

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I wanna see a ButtonXDerpy fic.

That's not a bad idea.

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SEQUEL PLEASE!!!!!

No comment, but look forward to an epilogue.

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Very nicely done.

Thanks a ton.

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Loved it! Would definitely be interested in a sequel surrounding the relationship.

That's great!

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I think there's a "r" too much and a space missing.

The ending was ok, I would have prefered it if Button got over his love/crush for Cherilee and as a more mature boy will go his own way in life and get Sweetie or Dinkie as fillyfriend but eh, this was okay too. Thanks for the fic, it was a great read.

Thanks for spotting the error -- noted and corrected.
I considered the possibility of having him get over Cheerilee, but it just didn't feel right to have Button suddenly drop all his affection and feelings for her. When I tried to write it like that, it either came out as being extremely contrived, going against everything that I had already established about the character -- he forges deep bonds with his friends and is very serious with his feelings, but he also has enough self-awareness to know and understand how he truly feels; he wouldn't confuse having a crush for being in love. Alternately, the execution felt disingenuous, as if all he needed to grow up was a spot of pussy. Plus, I felt that it was overall happier, healthier, and more realistic, to have him cope with his feelings rather than to have them suddenly disappear. I think it better fit the tone of the story.
Another thing is that I'm not really a fan of the Button Mash x Sweetie Belle ship. I feel like she shows up in so much foal shipping simply because she's expedient; she wouldn't fit properly with him. And as for Dinky, well, that would be vaguely creepy, not only because he's already banged her mom, but also because it reeks of him using her as a substitute for somepony he couldn't have.

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nice last chapter

Glad you like it. Thanks for reading and commenting.

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"The author's note: Keep calm and brony on." The irony was that I was wearing a shirt that says "Keep Calm and Carry On" on the front at the time. Anyways this was a great story, if not the best one I have read. You should definitely write another one like this or continue the story. A great writer like you should be able to do it.

Lulz. Thanks, man, although I'd hardly dare call this a great story.
I admit that the first chapter was noticeably below my usual level of quality. You should have seen the original rough draft. It was about 2300 words long and didn't even feel like one of my pieces.
After this runaway success of an experiment, I'm feeling adventurous. Of course, there's nothing stopping me from writing about what I want, while continuing the arcs, to make the sequel you want, in the same story.

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You should make an epilogue, in where Button gets confronted by his mom.

I'm working on an epilogue.

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I was hoping he would suggest to put Cheerilee on hold and start courting Vinyl, and have the sequel be about their relationship to be honest. He knows he loves Cheerilee, but he doesn't know anything about Vinyl. Sure, it's mostly a clopfic, but I think it'd be really heartwarming to read a story about Button and Vinyl falling in love with the help of Cheerilee, and the 3 of them having a true polyamorous relationship.

Vinyl says she's a lesbian, but she had a positive experience with penetrative sex. Lesbian sex is nothing like what you see in porn, and the vast majority of women who grow up as lesbians rarely have penetrative sex, if ever. Vinyl's positive experience with Button, even while in heat, means she can at the very least tolerate Button while not in heat.

Making a sequel about Vinyl and Button isn't a bad idea. I just don't know if I have it in me to grind through a slice of life romance.
Vinyl has had plenty of positive experience with penetrative sex, she is still firmly a lesbian. Many real life people enjoy sexual activities with others not of their preferred gender, and not all sexual acts have to involve penetration, nor are all intimate acts sexual. Remember, that there are many kinds of love, and that not all of them are romantic or sexual.

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Fuck my brain for not being able to comprehend enough adjectives to describe me feelings... I feel a poem coming on!

Wow, I don't know what to say, other than that I'm touched.

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i like to imagine he goes after Dinky, and Derpy cock blocks him every chance she gets because she knows what a horndog he is in bed.

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'Twas a good ride, reading this story. Came for the sex, stayed for the plot. (No, not plot like ass...) Thank you, Kalash93, for writing this amazing work of a story.

You're very welcome. I tried hard to write the best story I could. I listened to what the critics told me back in the first chapter, and make an honest effort to come up with something notably better, more intelligent, and more emotionally developed than an ordinary clopfic.
I decided to focus on the characters, because they were the weakest element in the story, but also my best chance to distinguish myself, because, really, once I got to characterization, I wanted to do more than write just another generic clopfic, complete with all the tropes I personally groan at, such as sex magically causing characters to fall in love, relationships requiring nothing more than partners finding each other attractive and willing to screw, lesbians magically converting just because a male showed them a good time,and being physically mature enough to have sex means that one is emotionally mature enough for an adult relationship.

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I hate you in the best of ways. Now I have been shipping button with these three, mostly separately. Bathroom scenes, and even school scenes... (college for those.) But now my brain is shipped with so many things that I can't focus straight.

You should try writing out those ideas. I'd read them.

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Nice ending! All in all, very well done.

Thank you.

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Honestly, as it went on I got more interested in the relationship dynamic than the clop. You're pretty good at making the characters feel alive with their interactions.

Not to say that the clop wasn't amazing, oh no.

Success! For something that started out as an idea for a fun oneshot to write, it sure has grown exponentially beyond the initial concept. At first, I just wanted to do something sexy and lighthearted. The characterization came up, half of it spontaneously during writing, and half of it considered and discussed outside of writing, as a nice addition to make the sex seem less contrived and forced. It sorta snowballed from there.

Did you give it an open ending on purpose?

who looked almost like he’d been told that he’d won hundreds of millions from the lottery, but that he had to pay sixty percent of his winnings in taxes, loan thirty percent of it to the government of Afghneighnistan at practically zero interest, roll a pair of dice to determine how much of the remaining ten percent he would be unable to touch for how many decades, spend half of the remainder on the fees levied on all the things being done to his winnings, and then only get to actually keep whatever was left after all that was done.

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>> kalash93 it has done more then that...wow...I really see you making it big on this site maybe even on others just cause you got the skills in your fingertips. Bravo sir bravo

W00T!!

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That joke is played out. I appreciate you pointing that out. Well done, I noticed quite a few grammatical and spelling errors, but nothing major. Great story, can't wait 'til Chapter 5...

Thanks. I've gone back and tried to fix as much as I can. Chapter 5 is now up, so would you care to give it a look and tell me what you think, please?

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Did you give it an open ending on purpose?

Yes. Also, epilogue on the way.

epilogue huh ill have to check that out. but when button was explaining why he couldn't be with them, I was like that's the way she goes man that's the way she goes

3473213 Dude I love your cover pic so much SAO AND I WANNA SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Great ending to a great story.

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The story will still be here when you wake up. I am flattered that you like it enough to fight sleep in order to continue reading.

squeeze her cock

Is Cheerilee a shemale now? Also, You should write a sequel where Button and Cheerilee are married!

Chapter five was amazing! The only disappointing part was when I realized that I was already following you. This story made me want to follow you a second time.

That ending was awesome and heartfelt.

finally! yay! i wonder if the adventures of buttons will continue! X3

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Well, damn, dude. Congrats on finishing a great story. Definitely following you now.

Thanks! I'm honored.

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>> The Watcher 509 Dude I love your cover pic so much SAO AND I WANNA SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Thanks. An epilogue will be up shortly.

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Well, I haven't completed the chapter yet (and my puppy isn't finished tormenting me by breaking me out of 'the zone' whenever it can), but I DID find something I wanted to address immediately, before my proofreading session and review are posted, because of how out of place it feels.
… ““And speaking of Derpy, where is she? She should be back any second now.”” – Who says this? If it was Vinyl, it should’ve been in the previous line. If it was Cheerilee, the “said nothing” in the aforementioned previous line no longer makes sense. Yet, if it’s Button, how would he know when Derpy would be coming back? None of the options currently make sense given the structuring.
One more thing: When responding to a comment on FIMfiction, make sure you respond to the comment on the chapter it's posted on via its timestamp. Otherwise, the commenter won't receive the notification of your reply.

Thanks for pointing that out. I'll go fix that. Don't worry about taking a long time. I never knew that about commenting. I prefer to post 'outside' of chapters so that the comments will still be there, even if something happens to the chapters.

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Is Cheerilee a shemale now? Also, You should write a sequel where Button and Cheerilee are married!

Derp. Fixed.

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Chapter five was amazing! The only disappointing part was when I realized that I was already following you. This story made me want to follow you a second time.

I'm flattered. I'll keep producing more fics, hopefully to an even higher standard.

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Only word to describe this: HOT!

Did you, perchance, suffer burns on account of this?

3562866

That ending was awesome and heartfelt.

Thank you I tried my best to write something better than a typical weak clopfiction ending.

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finally! yay! i wonder if the adventures of buttons will continue! X3

Perhaps they will. Perhaps they won't. Get ready for the epilogue.

Smiling ear to ear at the ending.

As long as he ends up marrying Sweetie Belle, I can rest peacefully in this world.

Alright, Chapter Five… Button’s time with Cheerilee. I’m hoping for plenty of sensual moments during this chapter, especially given the length of the chapter from the story’s main page.

… “Vinyl and Derpy watched silently” – I thought Derpy had passed out…
… “with him balls deep” – Place a hyphen between ‘balls’ and ‘deep’.
… ““Nevermind, Cheerilee. I’ll” – ‘Nevermind’ should be ‘Never mind’.
… ““Hag,” teased he,” – Swap ‘teased’ and ‘he’.
… “Cheerille shook” – ‘Cheerille’ should be ‘Cheerilee’.
… “‘You’re tight.”” – The apostrophe before ‘You’re’, should be a quotation mark.
… “figure. His gaze” – There are two spaces between the period and ‘His’. Remove one of the spaces.
… “fuschia cheek” – ‘fuschia’ should be ‘fuchsia’.
… “a sharp circular jerk” – Place a comma between ‘sharp’ and ‘circular’.
… “me detention?” – Place an end-quotation mark after the question mark.
… “Wriggled her hips just” – ‘Wriggled’ should be ‘Wriggling’.
… “But, instead, he” – Remove the first comma.
… “She ran her fingers through her mane and fur, digging in” – Are you sure she’s doing this to herself? In a couple of sentences, it describes how she can feel his muscles… I think the second ‘her’ should be ‘his’.
… “She felt his heartbeat going tha-thump tha-thump” – … Okay, if this wasn’t near the end of the story, this would’ve made me just give up and not give the other chapters a chance: The narrator should never directly make sounds. It happened earlier, and I called you out on it then, but this is absolutely horrid in comparison to those earlier times… It should simply be “heartbeat thumping”.
… “she help for him” – ‘help’ should be ‘held’.
… “her attentions” – ‘attentions’ should be ‘attention’.
… ““M-Muscles?” ” – I’m fairly certain there’s spaces after that end-quotation mark. Remove them. (This is the only time I’ll mention this. Just something I noticed randomly, after all.)
… “Cheshire cat grin.” – Place a hyphen between ‘cat’ and ‘grin’.
… “each other their frenzy” – Place a comma between ‘other’ and ‘their’.
… “continued attention ravished” – I’m not sure, but you might’ve meant “ravaged” instead of “ravished”.
… “She made little peeps and noises.” – ‘noises’ should be something like ‘squeaks’, since a peep IS a noise.
… “she urged Buttton,” - … ‘Button’.
… “faint, happy, moans” – Remove the second comma.
… “an ever faster pace” – You either mean ‘even faster’, or ‘ever-fastening’.
… “tease button gave” – ‘button’ should be capitalized.
… “insider her” – ‘insider’ should be ‘inside’.
… “A bit more, yes,” – Remove ‘yes’; the narrator has no need to clarify itself.
… “squeeze her cock” – ‘her’ should be ‘his’.
… “Almost there. Almost there!” – Again, the narrator shouldn’t use exclamation marks. Either make this inner monologue via quotes and italics, or change the second one to ‘So close.”
… “broke the damn” – ‘damn’ should be ‘dam’.

… “calling each other’s names” – Hello, Dennis, Hello, Catherine...

… Sorry.

… “hot, potent, cum” – Remove the second comma.
… “needy, fertile, vagina” – See above.
… “to collapsed onto” – ‘collapsed’ should be ‘collapse’.
… “Button sighed, contented.” – ‘contented’ should just be ‘content’.
… “still half hard inside” – Place a hyphen between ‘half’ and ‘hard’.
… “smaller, infrequent, doses” – Remove the second comma.
… “How much had he spilled inside her? It had been a lot.” – The narrator shouldn’t ask questions… regardless, he shouldn’t answer his own asked questions, either. Replace as the following: “She wondered how much he’d spilled inside of her, only knowing for sure that it had been a lot.”
… “The slurped up the” – The first ‘The’ should be ‘She’.
… “Cherilee kiss-fought” – ‘Cherilee’ should be ‘Cheerilee’.
… “slucked” – Did you mean ‘suckled’ or ‘sucked’?
… “looking up at his with” – Looking up at his… what?
… “She leaned her” – Remove one of the two spaces between ‘She’ and ‘leaned’.
… “Oh, Silly, it” – Why is ‘Silly’ capitalized? Make it lowercase.
… ““Me too,” chirped she.” – Swap ‘chirped’ and ‘she’.
… “Well, seeya around” – ‘seeya’ should be ‘see ‘ya’.
… ““Seeya,”” – See above.
… “trying to not stare” – Perhaps this would feel more natural if ‘to’ and ‘not’ were swapped.
… “Button gaped,” – Remove one of the two spaces between the two words.
… “How’s that the bad news.” – Replace the period with a question mark.
… “you and Cheerile’ve” – ‘Cheerile’ve’ should be ‘Cheerilee’ve’.
… “here. You are a” – Shorten ‘You are’ into ‘You’re’.
… “stallion who is trying” – Shorten ‘who is’ into ‘who’s’.
… “committed, lesbian, relationship” – Remove BOTH commas.
… “government of Afghneighnistan” – I still think ‘Afghaneighstan’ works better, but this is more your choice, and must work with what you used earlier.
… “the rest late” – ‘late’ should be ‘later’.
… “I did tell me” – ‘me’ should be ‘you’.
… “crestfallen. So he” – Remove one of the two spaces between the period and ‘So’.
… “So he really was barely even begun.” – …What!? I think you meant, instead of ‘was’, ‘had’.
… “demanding relationship?” – Replace the question mark with a period.
… “for adult relationships?” – See above.
… “you’ll never unsatisfied” – Place ‘be’ between ‘never’ and ‘unsatisfied’.
… “She soon finished undressing.” – Don’t you mean ‘redressing’… or just ‘dressing’?
… “small o. He looked” – Remove one of the two spaces between the period and ‘He’.
… “he had had while” – Shorten ‘he had’ into ‘he’d’.
… ““No,” admitted he, sagging” – Swap ‘admitted’ and ‘he’.
… ““I… I – I-I’ve” – I don’t understand the spaces before and after the first hyphen.
… “stuff. A love” – Remove one of the spaces between the period and ‘A’.
… “bewildered, bashful, boy” – Remove the second comma.
… “while you seeing” – Place ‘were’ between ‘you’ and ‘seeing’.
… ““C’mon, lets go,” as” – ‘lets’ should be ‘let’s’.
… “their way though” – ‘though’ should be ‘through’.

Author’s Notes Errors:

… “as much as i” – ‘i’ should be ‘I’.
… “go give'm” – ‘give’m’ isn’t a word… or contraction. It should likely be ‘give ‘em’.

If you have anything at all to say, then don't hold back. Any questions or comments? Lay em' on me!

Well when you put it THAT way…

What can really be SAID about this? It seems to dive straight in, completely making the previous chapter little more than just an awkward cut-off point. Okay, okay, I’m tackling this wrong. Section-by-section, right.

Okay, starting with characters. Derpy doesn’t seem to have much of a role, but her charm comes through fairly well where it’s utilized (even though she sorta mimics the same shtick you’ve been using for her all fic, where she just drops in… and that gets annoying by the third time, which is more or less “now”.) Vinyl Scratch shifts around very quickly, and that sort of pissed me off. Her depiction was very bipolar, considering she went from nonchalant/rude, and punkish with a bit of sass, to super-serious, which I accepted given the subject, to… totally normal and almost compassionate, which I found off-putting.

So that’s this chapter’s minors, let’s go with the major characters. Cheerilee had her own thing goin’ for her in this story, what with her feeling the need to remind Button of a past “lesson”, which served a generally interesting purpose as a means of providing some clop-filler in the story with the inclusion of pompoir (Which Word does not see as an official word… Pfft!). I was expecting Derpy’s POV, while eating out Cheerilee, to describe the taste of Button’s seed, but it seemed to honestly just focus on the mare x mare moment, which undermined the massive scene involving Cheerilee and Button. Speaking of Button, he pretty much acted the same as he had been throughout the previous chapters, which saves me a bit of comment-space. He’s very focused on his love of Cheerilee here, though, which is a shift from the norm, until he’s getting blown by Vinyl, anyways, which is a point where things just retract back to how they were… which is a shame.

… And then “The Talk” comes… so I’ll move to the Story section.

Most of this comes across, again, as soulless, and I think that’s the best word for most of this story. It attempts to be endearing and sensual, but it turns into fairly vanilla scenes that depend on banter to pan it out and give it personality. You described how he would cradle and cuddle her during sex, sensually and lovingly… yet provided absolutely no foreplay because this was pretty much as generic as most Estrus stories end up being… And then, we have “The Talk”. This impressed me SO… DAMN… MUCH! The harsh nature of Vinyl, the kind, motherly personality granted to Cheerilee, the two contrasted one another in a very “good cop/bad cop” manner, which was perfect for establishing the severity of the situation, especially since Vinyl had the perfect excuse to BE harsh, making it all the more believable. Button was who really shone through, during this section. He let his mind speak for him, rather than his dick, and let’s be honest: That’s pretty much all I’d even NEED to say. What followed were two honestly well-written paragraphs of insight and fear that coupled the maturity of acknowledging things as they are given his age, with the nervousness of rejecting an offer that sounded all-but-perfect, which for him, simply means “imperfect”.

K, you got ONE moment of truly impressing me… and there’s still an epilogue. The detail of the scenes is a section I’m skipping over, since I covered some of it in between the lines pertaining to the other sections… So now, we ride.

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Well, you got me with this one. Try as I might, this fic will never be amongst my finer writings. Well, that's probably what'll happen whenever somebody starts out a fic as just a thing they did for fun, and then later tried to turn what was pointless porn into something which tries to be deeper while not doing anything to move it past being porn.

Still, I am very much pleased that I finally managed to write just a little bit of what you would consider good content. I honestly thought long and hard over this part, debating between ending it with a harem and ending it with it just having been a fling. I am glad that my decision to take a third option and try for something more ambitious.