I have written two versions of this story: One is a humanized version (the original) and the other is a ponified version. (The story works even better in the setting of Equestria) I'm not going to describe much of it because it is a short story and anything more than the short description may spoil it, however I would like to explain why the two different versions have different endings. I find Equestria an idealized world, where everything is tied up in neat little bows, (like many imaginary) whereas the human world is a lot more twisted and not as neat and tidy, so I have made the endings different to suit each setting.
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That's not really a description... Might want to change that up a little.
But, nevertheless, I will be reading this.
Short... Very short... But, General Dash, and Private the rest? Is that all you know? There's Commander. Sargent, Corporal, Colonel, etc. But just General and Private? Little imagination in my opinion. However, the base of the story, or the plot, is something I haven't seen before. However, being that quick is kind of a disappointment. I know you said 'Short Story' but, this is a bit too short. Also, Secretary isn't in the base. Base of Operations, sure, but base of warfare? Pretty sure not. I'll give this a 7/10, you got my like, but I would hope this isn't it.
(Oh look at me trying to be a critic.)
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I apologize for the inaccuracy.
It wasn't supposed to be accurate :P It was just an amusing idea I came up with one morning.
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Ahh, alright. Just saying.