As Earth and Equestria are drawn closer together, Gatekeepers connecting to their other-world counterpart start to appear. This is the story of Rex, bound to Chrysalis as a Gatekeeper, and his quest for survival as a changeling on Earth.
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He's turning into a Loki-level maniac and he doesn't even care.
Damn he became something like a psychopath LOL
Look out! Hide your women and children for a psychopony is on the loose... so random [:-)
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At least he didn't kill that woman.
But yes, he's on a slippery slope of EVIL
i find the way he just cut about 40 years of someones lifespan and not even caring disturbing, i hope he realize what he's done later on and regret it. that seemed like the easy way out
2599781 He just stole forty years of her life put her in a coma and left her in an ally at during the night giving that woman little chance of being found by someone!!!!! Will to me is very reckless and very very very stupid!!!!! last time I checked if your not in a hospital with in the time your put in a coma your chances of survival are NULL!!!! and if she did get found and received medical treatment she still could wind up with sever brain damage and end up in a vegetated state for the rest of her life so Will pretty much killed her. Well I guess forty years stolen doesn't mean much when your in a bed being nothing more that a piece of meat on a respirator while your family makes the decision to let you go.
I hope Will finds out what he has done and that realization eats him up inside...
Now for the story..... The conversation between Chryaslias and Will seems robotic and uninteresting as hell. And Will has no moral stance on anything what so ever makes you wander if he had mental problems before he even linking up with Chryasilas. And the hijacking scene on the air plane (you think going through all that fucking TSA security someone would have spotted a person concealing a Knife and a Gun!!!!!!!) and nobody seem to care that said hijackers just magically diapered and then all of a sudden Three strangers reaper out of thin air to help and will and that everyone is okay with that and goes about their business you would think the FFA, TSA, NSA, CIA and Homeland security would be up everyones ass after what happened
I don't think your story need some work IT NEEDS A LOT OF WORK!!!!!!
This story just took a very stupid and (magic aside) implausible turn. I can't follow it anymore.
Where's Van Helsing when you need him?
Okay, so I stopped reading this fic after this chapter but I noticed that it made the featured box a few times after so I have to ask...
Does he ever end up feeling remorse, trying to fix/make amends, and/or get his comeuppance for crossing the Moral Event Horizon here?
Or would continued reading just result in me hating him more and more while hoping in vain for something horrible to happen to him?
EDIT: I am aware that he is supposed to be a villain protagonist. That doesn't really help matters in my eyes. He seems like a completely unsympathetic sociopath and unless that changes somewhere down the line I'd probably be rooting for his opponents at every turn and hoping for him to die horribly... Not exactly something I look for in a story's protagonist.
So, what I'm asking is: Does he ever get any better? Ever show any remorse? Or is the rest of the story a downward spiral as he becomes more and more awful and unlikeable as time goes on?
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Before I start, Yes I know this is old. Well TSA does have it faults. And there is ways to get guns on the plane (Very risky)
Well, that escalated quickly. Nomming on the emotions of people around him is a line he won't cross, but straight-up sucking away their years is no problem?
How does he know of earth ponies? technically he's seen my little kitten not pony in this possible future.
Feeding on emotion is fine but sucking the life out of something gives me the creeps.
We shall read on!