What lengths will Twilight go to, when she finds out Celestia's true nature?
A short one-shot, inspired by the above picture.
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Good chapter old chap
That was so antclimatically wrong. Twilight hadn't truly wanted Celestia to die. not like that.
I read it and I certainly liked it. Are there more chapters planned?
It was very well written. I'm just wondering why did Twilight react this way without trying to talk to Celestia about it first?
well written and it sure was over fast.
Hmm...so fast that I need to check if you have something else written for me to look at
Thanks to all who liked it! Thus far, I don't have any more chapters specifically planned, but I do have a couple ideas floating around for other stories in this universe, so, we'll see what might gel into something more!
2517393 Well, in my backstory, she did. But, that was right at the start of Twilight's rebellion(just after Celestia altered the state of the plans Twilight found), and was so fleeting a moment to Celestia, that she doesn't even recall the event, and it therefore doesn't appear in the narrative.
2517162 Exactly right. To be honest, Twi never "wanted" to go to this extreme rebellion, but she was forced to. She also would never want to purposefully harm another pony, let alone her old mentor, but in this way, the matter is taken out of her hands. So, now she has either to become riddled with guilt, or to accept that what happened, happened, and move on.
As for anticlimactic, I'll grant you, that part's true. But, personally, I prefer a story where the ending is something you don't see coming, even if you don't like it, as opposed to one you can see coming a long way off, so that's the story I wrote.
To be honest, as I wrote this, I felt more like a sculptor than a writer, in that I was more chronicling what I was seeing in my head, than actually planning it out and writing it down. Actually, because of this, the actaul "battle" turned out to be a fair bit shorter than even I thought it would be...
Well I guess this is OK
But it's kinda weird how Twilight would hate her mentor, Princess Celestia. 
Well ummmmmm It was nice but some spelling error: You spelled came as cam. Anyways it was good overall so yeah 
cool need more info
there is something you may have overlooked. I am starting a review blog after all (no advertisement intended. I review fanfics I want to review. But please read it) so I should get some practice.
look between "about" and "state". See what's missing? Other than that, great story.