A story of a childhood at sea

The girls are going on a camping trip and take a break. Everything is fine until it's not. It all starts with a seemingly harmless cave. What will they do once they discover the world is not what it seems? It may have to do with the dead bunny... and maybe when Spike goes missing.

Fluttershy knew that she should have stayed in her room,that she shouldn't go up into that nasty storm to help rainbow dash.Now,she has to face the consequences...

An encounter with a spiky haired, brown coated stallion brings in a dark creature from another world, leaving Twilight to figure out the mystery of the tall, suited pony.

Big mac is apple bucking the zapapples when he sees the mare of his dreams fluttershy will he have the guts to ask her out or will his shyness get the best of him

This is my first fanfic so be gentle i approve constructive critizism
Shout out to my prereader elder uribe

Please comment and tell me what you think

Thoughtful Gaze has been working in the town long enough to be knew, but no one really know him. Will the complicated life of some the main girls in town.
(I'm not sure how many chapters I should make this. Tell me how you feel about the picture im not sure myself and it would be cool to have some input about it.)

The whole idea of this story stemmed from me looking for a quality fanfic in the topic of ponies and the use of marijuana.
I want to handle the topic with tact and in a mature way. all fics that i found were either poor quality or seemed way too out of character. this is my first pony fic but i feel good about it.

And now for the actual description.

Stonewall Squares is the new pony in town. he expected to be moved into his new home when he arrives. unfortunately that plan falls through his luck is pretty crappy until a friendly stranger allows him to stay in her cottage. emotions get worked up as they grow close too quickly.

please tell me if there is anything wrong with the story.

Worried about a wailing in the forest that she heard, Fluttershy comes upon an unconscious unicorn. Taking her into her home she notices that he is without a horn. Grey Cloud, the hornless unicorn, now must see if he restore his shattered horn, or live without the one part that made him a magical pony.

This is about the world ending in 2012, but not how it happens in the movie 2012. When the living dead attack, who will live? Who will die? Who will die, then come back to life after dieing? Also ponies normaly wear clothes in this.