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I sense a hefty amount of foreshadowing in these lines.
Anyways, purely dialogue-based, this prologue is rather spot-on on Scootaloo's characterization in the original story. I love a pacifist protagonist in a combat-adjusted world, but Scootaloo's comment about the harmlessness of healing spells just leaves me with high expectations of this pacifist's potential!
Besides a few misspellings here and there, this is solid. Now, the main adventure...
If there dead than your preeeety much just killing them sooo yeah
Borsuq, I just got around to poking at your story since you and I were chatting about it over PMs. HOLY HEAVY INTRO BLACKJACK! That said, wow does that really set the tone well for the story!
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Didn't expect my crazy ramblings to make you interested in this story enough to poke at it; poke away, I hope you enjoy it^^ And thanks, I'm usually not good with prologues and stuff like that, that's why this is the first time I started a story here with it
Training healing spells never hurt anyone right... Nothing like cutting someone up to heal them again. I mean war doctors are giving an animal to care for, then does the animal get shot or walked over a mine so they can save their life, and hey if they succeed over and over again it goes until they can do it on humans!
Beside, Scootaloo saying that unicorns are better than pegasi, and a pony showing race favorism/racism, is the only thing that I can point out to not be perfect about this prologue, love the way that the Stables goal is shown already. The road to hell is paved with good intentions as they say
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Actually, Scootaloo didn't say that the unicorns were better, she just said that they have an advantage over two races; I mean, heck, for starters they can hold things with their magic instead of mouths, that alone should be considered an advantage, especially if it would come to stuff like changing diapers
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Funny thing is that the basis of most healing spells is that they speed up a body's natural healing rate. So, theoretically, if one were to cast it on healthy tissue, depending on how strong the spell is or how specialized, it could either heal their DNA and in effect extend their lifespan, or cause their cells to grow to "heal damage" when there is none and effectively force their body to develop cancer.
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oh, "changing diapers" reminded me of this story:
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/437354/diaper-pale
Has* been enacted, and have* been safely sealed inside
Sweetie Belle*
'we* here in Stable-Tec' or 'here in Stable-Tec we* know'
a* bunch of other things
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Holy hell, I was expecting fewer errors after seeing how many editors and proofreaders have helped with this story, but it seems like they didn't actually do much for this chapter, somehow.