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Mad Scientist basement is still creepy. And apparently has a second basement.
This chapter served as a good reminder of the less moral aspects of Angel. After rooting for her that entire trip out of Appleoosa I could have forgotten she was experimenting on living creatures in her basement. Jack calling her insane feels like it's underselling it.
This is not the first time I've seen a character swear to cure death - honestly not even the first pony - but this is the most... Intimately an attempt has been explored. I suspect she's not going to suceed on a large scale, but maybe she'll manage something for herself?
Jack is giving her a lot more leg room that I think I could have managed.
Aite is a new and shiny thestral. Those are always fun, though it is a bit early to make a judgement on her as a character.
Pillory is a Goddess damned idiot. 'I just got raped for raping a slave. But the medic will SURELY be fair game!' Rule number 1 of literally any living situation: you don't screw with the healer!
Yo dawg, I heard you like basements, so I put a basement in yo basement.
If the main OCs in this story were voiced, what would they sound like?
Happy to see Doc Angel again. May I have your permission to marry her đ. Great update, keep up the good work.
"an annoyed sight as he walked"
"an annoyed sigh as he walked"?
I'm confused; why is Angel so resistant to talking about her patients, then quite willing to talk about Frank Fellow and his ailment? Is it related to whatever she implied that Jack, Pinkie, and Fluttershy caught? I'm not entirely sure what that was, myself; it seemed like maybe it would be a distinction between talking about them as patients and talking about them as test subjects, but then she still didn't talk about the test subjects in her Stable and did talk about a patient who at best she's just considering making a test subject. So I really don't know what's going on here. Though fortunately I'm so confused that, rather than having a reading-stopping problem with it, it seems I'm able to currently skate over the issue by assuming it makes sense in some way I'm missing; the story's certainly built up a lot of credit with me.
"uttering a heavy sight. I narrowed"
"uttering a heavy sigh. I narrowed"?
"gotten that massage, as he"
"gotten that message, as he"?
"death. Thought granted, that"
"death. Though granted, that"?
"but her relaxed as he"
"but he relaxed as he"?
"she had removed her hoof as she so unceremoniously"
"she had removed her hood as she so unceremoniously"?
"âLeathery wings?!â I explained, grabbing"
"âLeathery wings?!â I exclaimed, grabbing"?
Also, in a few places I think you used "Menecles" instead of "Manacles"?
Well, that's an interesting development. :)
"as I presented Speak's canon regarding estrus and menstrous cycles"
Ahh, I did notice similarity there and wondered if there was a relation.
"Hope you had fun reading this newest chapter^^"
Aye, thanks. :)
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Oh yes, after having the story stuck for years in New Appleloosa and around, the last two chapters were super fun to write
Well, since alicorns are a thing in this universe, mere immortality is relatively easy to achieve.
In Pillory's very weak defense (dunno why I'm doing this but whatever), almost all the slavers see Angel as weak, pampered little medic who hadn't been slapped in the face by the Wasteland enought times. Also, he's currently not in the best state of mind.
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Jack and (mostly) Aite are going to have a field day next chapter with that.
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Not sure, I never can quite "come up" with voices for my characters. Seriously, sometime ago I noticed that in my head a dragon from Warcraft and cat from Warriors have the same voice when I read their lines in books
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You have a permission to ask her, though I doubt she would say yes to a stranger Glad that you enjoyed the chapter^^
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Angel considers Frank to be a potential test subject (she would have probably make him her test subject regardless of the benefits she has thanks to him being free if Fluttershy hadn't talked her out of it), which is why she is less inclined to keep his ailment a secret. She hadn't spoke a word about it to any other slaver, even Apple Core, who would be down for such gossip, but Jack is a special case. Angel wanted him to join her, for them to work together, to be friends. She felt that she needed to be a bit more open with Jack, especially with something "business related"; Jack would wonder how she got all the supplies from Frank Fellow, and she didn't want to lie or hide truth from him. Plus, she is basically blackmailing the pony already. Aaand she can be a little hipocritical, especially when it comes to her friends (or people she hopes would become her friends).
I realize now thought that this matter should have been better addressed, so this will come back in the next chapter.
As for her test subjects in Stable Eight and what Jack, Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie had noticed... well, that would be a tiny bit spoilery, wouldn't it?
Thanks for finding all of those misspellings and such, apparently the letter "t" hates me or something
Iiiiii very much might have, yes
Thanks, glad that you enjoyed it^^
Yeah, like I said, with Angel being a doctor from a Stable this had to be addressed sooner or later if I wanted to continue having Speak as canon in my story. Plus it makes sense and stuff.
You're welcome^^
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Ah, thanks. :)
"As for her test subjects in Stable Eight and what Jack, Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie had noticed... well, that would be a tiny bit spoilery, wouldn't it?"
Ah, and thanks! I thought it was something the reader was supposed to pick up on, too. :)
"Thanks for finding all of those misspellings and such, apparently the letter "t" hates me or something "
You're welcome, though I'm afraid that that probably wasn't exhaustive.
"Thanks, glad that you enjoyed it^^"
Aye, thanks for writing!
"Yeah, like I said, with Angel being a doctor from a Stable this had to be addressed sooner or later if I wanted to continue having Speak as canon in my story. Plus it makes sense and stuff."
Aye.
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Well, not supposed to, but you could speculate. Jack, Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie also have only suspicion about it because Angel is being so criptic, but they did catch on to something
This is a nice chapter as always. Thank you very much. And this monologue about Angel plans very nice. Her methods are too extreme but she believes in what she s doing. And have morality codex about everyone she met. This character are reason why i want to thank you Borsuq. This is nice as always. Love this fic because of main hero.
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Thanks. :)
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That she differentiates between her patients and her test subjects? i.e., Angel considers each label to be mutually exclusive.
Nitpicks
" I said as I finished examining an cleaning Pillory with my magic." This rectal exam lacks some d
" watching him how he still stared at the floor" delete
"did he wanted to sound as if he wasnât making excuses?" Sounds clunky to me.
"shocked by her words" missing a space in the start of this sentence
"carrot flavored beverage at once began to stimulate my body" I am pretty sure that the words should be the other way around.
"I was met with disapproval on griffinâs face, " missing a the
"in Stable Eight library" missing a s
"but at least it looked that he considered my words carefully." like
oh yeah! that hits the spotjust right
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Thank^^
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Maaaaaybe? And what would that in turn could mean, hm?
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I'm not exactly sure what you mean there
Hm, well, now that I look at it, it should be "did he want", yeah.
Thanks for pointing those out^^
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Happy to... provide excellent service, I guess?
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Been a while without reading any fic, but made an exception with this one and really enjoyed. Tha is what I meant xD
Btw do you know the song "infinite power" by TheFatRat? it always comes to my mind when I see this story xD
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I had to chance computers mid reading since I read the first half of the chapter at work, and the second half at home when I had time.
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Ah, I see.
Amusing, considering I got the idea for the title while listening a music video
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OOooh, I see. Wow, it took me a long time to figure out what you meant here
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good to know i had the proper OST in my head when reading you XD
That was a good read, now time to wait under my rock for the next chapter.
this chapter reminded me of one of my favorite stories: "triptych" by Estee. it's a complicated story, but one of the main characters tried to become an alicorn, but failed, with a really weird result...
I finally got around to reading the latest chapter. I'd probably have to agree with Jack that Angel is totally insane. Her family died and she refused to accept it. Instead she is on a quest to end death. Its like something a child would commit to. The only difference is that Angel is dangerously smart. Too smart or too confident to realize you can't cheat death or resolve suffering without giving up a part of yourself.
Angel doesn't think she is insane but her goals, her drive, and her morality are misaligned. Don't get me wrong I think she is a "good" pony, but these three parts of her will conflict eventually. She doesn't seem to hold much of a conscience for whatever she did in stable 8. That certainly doesn't speak well for her morals. She always wants to protect "sapient" beings who are "good" but how long until this conflicts with her goal of creating everlasting paradise/eternal life? Right now I imagine she'd argue that she would never comprise her morals to achieve her goals, yet I remain skeptical of that. How can and end to suffering and free people coexist? Also, when will her definitions of good v evil be challenged? She can't keep sorting ponies out into neat little categories of "good" vs "potential test subject." Might as well call her Goddess Angel if she decides she can pass judgement like that.
Personally I hope that when the time comes Angel breaks a little inside and veers into more of a grey zone. Most FoE OCs are either "good guys" or if they are "bad guy" protagonists they come off as unnecessarily edgy. Obviously, I can only guess at what the future holds for Angel, but now her goals and morals appear to be revealed. It would be unfortunate if Angel came down with old world blues and turned to the same Alicorn insanity Twilight did. Who knows? Can't wait to see what happens if she meets them firsthoof.
I've wrote up quite a wall of text but I also gotta ask one thing. Does the "raider plague" from PH fit into the cannon in your story? Apologies if anyone else already asked about it in the chapter with the raiders and I missed it. I don't want to step into the minefield that is PH discussion, but it could definitely affect how justified Angel is in using raider test subjects. All and all another good chapter with a lot to muse over.
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Well, in Angel's defense, she WAS a child when she decided to end death. And her up upbringing in a Stable with a saying "if something seems impossible, it's only because they hadn't invented a spell for it" probably didn't help either.
Angel's "goal vs morals" battle is something that will certainly be flashed out through the story, and both her goal and morals will be challanged on their own too. Her conscience too will be brought up, and of course, this "misalignment" that you pointed out (with various variations of "you're insane" jokes).
Regarding what exactly her future holds... well, let's just say that this will be a wild ride (which at this rate will take me about 20 years to finish ).
PH is as cannon to my story as the original FoE is; regarding the raider plague itself, as far as I understood it was something that was "endemic" to Hoofington area. I could be wrong, despite my utter love for that story it has been a few years since the last time I read it (got the Ministry of Image's printing of two first volumes, so gonna reread the beginning at least soon), but I always thought that those raiders from Hoofington (those "Fallout 3 raiders", not the more sane ones like the Reapers and all those gangs) were worse that the raiders Littlepip encounters in her part of the Wasteland in FoE (and that it was contaigous obviously, but that's beside the point); don't get me wrong, they were pretty awful too, especially those in Ponyville, but those always seemed to me like they were like that by choice/actions. The ones Angel had met so far were also pretty sane in comparison, I would say.
PS: I love a good wall of test^^
Back among the living, just checking in with you. Hope all is well, looking forward to the next chapter!
Oof, so she's one of those that believe Death can be stopped. Death can't be stopped, even Immortals eventually die. Even Gods eventually fade. It's unavoidable, even to those who are immortal, ageless, or otherwise unkillable. Everything has an end.
To quote Alucard from Hellsing Ultimate: âThere are no true immortals, anyone who thinks otherwise is a fool.â
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Angel: "How's that Shroddingher Cat's blood treating you? Honestly, sweetie, for somebody who both exists and doesn't exists at the same time your lack of imagination is both disturbing and disappointing."