Follow-up story to "Sweat". You and Rarity have been seeing each other for a little while, and life's pretty good. But when Pinkie Pie mentions one day that something is bothering her, Rarity gets an idea that just may help.
2790518>>2792476 Well, to paint the town red more or less means a hot date and not so much...well, y'know. But considering the headcanon for me regarding Pinkie (let's face it, that sultry face she gives Cranky in the show, ie "All of my friiiiiiiends do! *flutters eyes*'...yeah, I simply can't see her NOT being that way after that, haha. Either way, glad you're liking things so far!
Come on Pinkie, what guy doesn't like it pink in the middle? Really like how this story is going, anything that involves a date with Pinkie has to be entertaining. Let's just hope the girls aren't too grossed out with meat being eaten in front of them, should make for a very interesting chapter. Also, MiB reference: awesome.
You grab onto the jacket's long collar and give it a dramatic, movie-style tug. "You know what the main difference is between the stallions in town and me?"
2794382 Actually I was referring to the fact that if I was in the play watching with Rarity and Pinkie, I would go to sleep due to my huge fatigue. ^^;
How do you get bored watching Othello, I mean the guy smothers his wife at one point, that's entertainment I do wonder how the play worked with ponies, was Othello a single earth pony surrounded by unicorns?
2794832 I have yet to read that fic, but I've always been curious. I think the huge length has scared me away, but it is on my read later list. Maybe once I've caught up with all the stuff in my head that I want to put into text I can check it out, which according to my calculations....ummm...should be able to look at it in 2017. Ergh.
You grab onto the jacket's long collar and give it a dramatic, movie-style tug. "You know what the main difference is between the stallions in town and me?"
The third chapter, and there’ll be dinner as well as… a PLAY? Huh, okay, we’ll have to see how this goes.
… “upper class restaurant” – When it’s describing a noun, place a hyphen between ‘upper’ and ‘class’. … “a twirl of her neck” – This doesn’t sound right, given a ‘twirl’ loosely means ‘spin’, and that sounds a bit… eerie. … “pink mare blurts,” – Place ‘ out’ between ‘blurts’ and the comma. … “behind on a important” – ‘a’ should be ‘an’. … “the full body mirror” – Place a hyphen between ‘full’ and ‘body’. … “"Hubba hubba!" – Officially, the term actually requires a hyphen between the two words. … “"Hubba hubba indeed!" – See above. Also, place a comma after the second ‘hubba’. … “way to grandstand area” – Place ‘the’ between ‘to’ and ‘grandstand’. … “setting up the umbrellas” – They’re not ‘umbrellas’, they’re ‘parasols’!
Okay, personal-gripe moment: … “Nirvana, in particular” – Oh lord, not THEM… please don’t be Teen Spirit, PLEASE don’t be Teen Spirit… … “you hum 'Smells Like Teen Spirit'” iambrony.steeph.tp-radio.de/mlp/gif/ULTIMATERAGE_zps63c5b168.gif NOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!! I never got into Nirvana, and whenever I see it mentioned it’s always the same damn tune! NO! NO! NO! Dammit, I’m completely distracted, now. Ugh…
… “bowing on stage” – ‘on stage’ should either be ‘onstage’, or ‘on the stage’. … “a fancy schmancy play” – Since schmancy isn’t a word by itself, place a hyphen between it, and ‘fancy’. … “vicious tongue lashing” – Place a hyphen between ‘tongue’ and ‘lashing’. … “the upper crust restaurant” – Place a hyphen between ‘upper’ and ‘crust’, since it’s directly describing the restaurant. … “such a high class place” – Place a hyphen between ‘high’ and ‘class’. … “you know this wasn't” – ‘know’ should be ‘knew’. … “way to wine list.” – Place ‘the’ between ‘to’ and ‘wine’. … “everyone's order” – ‘order’ should be ‘orders’.
Okay, puns? Not too bad. And the same goes with the MiB reference. But Nirvana… yeah, you already saw my reaction to that.
Looking PAST that, I was expecting Pinkie to at least be smiling a bit at the performance in the park, given how she said that she was enjoying it. I was ESPECIALLY hoping she would have commented more on how different it was to perform, as opposed to seeing the performance. It could’ve allowed for a great bit of foreshadowing, given how she’s spent a while “watching relationships” (Protagonist and Rarity, The Cakes), as opposed to truly “being in one”.
The play seemed to go on for quite a while, but at least you went over a decent means of ignoring it quietly: Mental discography with “pulling at grass” as an assisting means of ignoring the stage-performance. The same compliment of proper use of surroundings, applies to the logic behind Pinkie attracting attention (despite there being a band there).
Rarity was in-character, Pinkie was herself, and the protagonist was a bit smug, but a bit… I dunno, I’m unable to see them as “me”. After all, I’m straight-edge.
Almost instantly, you regret saying those words. Phrases like that always seemed to be cursed or something in the movies or on TV.
You know... you can either allow yourself to be bound by this - and then consider such "inevitable" events as "fate"... or, you could realize that the Universe doesn't give a fuck either way, and instead see those failures as what they are - failures, that can and should be corrected, or at the very least learned from.
It makes little sense to attribute events to a force you cannot influence. The only factor you can ever truly change is yourself, so it makes the most sense to allocate blame/responsibility there, instead.
Calling it "fate" or "bad luck" just makes it easier to ignore your own responsibility for it, and also makes it easier to fail to act. :-)
Just my two cents for the character.
"(...) as quiet as a mouse, as silenced as a lamb, as–"
Now that paints quite the disturbing picture, doesn't it? I mean, all things considered...
Wines are supposed to be savored and tasted , not chugged like cheap beer. You're supposed to swirl it in the glass to let it 'breathe,' and then you savor the aromatic 'bouquet' of the wine and then you sip it and taste the wine. I'm surprised Rarity didn't inform him about the correct method of drinking wine and ask to cease downing it like a barbarian in a tavern.
2790518 Wow I didn't even consider the title before, but it makes sense now.
2790518>>2792476
Well, to paint the town red more or less means a hot date and not so much...well, y'know. But considering the headcanon for me regarding Pinkie (let's face it, that sultry face she gives Cranky in the show, ie "All of my friiiiiiiends do! *flutters eyes*'...yeah, I simply can't see her NOT being that way after that, haha. Either way, glad you're liking things so far!
OH I CAN'T WAIT TO SEE WHERE THIS GOES!
Come on Pinkie, what guy doesn't like it pink in the middle?
Really like how this story is going, anything that involves a date with Pinkie has to be entertaining. Let's just hope the girls aren't too grossed out with meat being eaten in front of them, should make for a very interesting chapter. Also, MiB reference: awesome.
I suspect something pink will be in the middle later on in the night.
2792630 What? I've seen all 3 MiB movies, and I didn't catch the reference. Care to elaborate? Is it from the comics or something?
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That should help.
2792911 That's the one, I noticed it as well and I've had to do my best to not use it (in favor of other references later)
2792911 Oh yeah! That one. That was in the first movie. Heh heh. I remember that scene.
That was a fun date, I'm sure I'll be sleeping due to staying up all night all the time and everything. ^^;
2794348
Who says it's over?
2794382
Actually I was referring to the fact that if I was in the play watching with Rarity and Pinkie, I would go to sleep due to my huge fatigue. ^^;
How do you get bored watching Othello, I mean the guy smothers his wife at one point, that's entertainment I do wonder how the play worked with ponies, was Othello a single earth pony surrounded by unicorns?
You know what, as I read this fic it kind of reminds me of Sophistication and Betrayal at some aspects. love it!
2794832
I have yet to read that fic, but I've always been curious. I think the huge length has scared me away, but it is on my read later list. Maybe once I've caught up with all the stuff in my head that I want to put into text I can check it out, which according to my calculations....ummm...should be able to look at it in 2017. Ergh.
bahahaha pinkie is so dirty
Oh dear, Pinkie! That was priceless!
so im only guessing that pinkie and rarity are going to have a manwich?
Man, I wish that guy would stop bitching about the theater.
I see what you did there...
I'd like to see how this plays out.
2792617
A little wine goes a long way
2794832 don't think I finished that fic but I see what you're saying and you're right
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...don't look at me like that, somebody had to do it!
You make it look good huh?
Well
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So does he.
Moar Please?
Pink in the middle. That a good one.
The third chapter, and there’ll be dinner as well as… a PLAY? Huh, okay, we’ll have to see how this goes.
… “upper class restaurant” – When it’s describing a noun, place a hyphen between ‘upper’ and ‘class’.
… “a twirl of her neck” – This doesn’t sound right, given a ‘twirl’ loosely means ‘spin’, and that sounds a bit… eerie.
… “pink mare blurts,” – Place ‘ out’ between ‘blurts’ and the comma.
… “behind on a important” – ‘a’ should be ‘an’.
… “the full body mirror” – Place a hyphen between ‘full’ and ‘body’.
… “"Hubba hubba!" – Officially, the term actually requires a hyphen between the two words.
… “"Hubba hubba indeed!" – See above. Also, place a comma after the second ‘hubba’.
… “way to grandstand area” – Place ‘the’ between ‘to’ and ‘grandstand’.
… “setting up the umbrellas” – They’re not ‘umbrellas’, they’re ‘parasols’!
Okay, personal-gripe moment:
… “Nirvana, in particular” – Oh lord, not THEM… please don’t be Teen Spirit, PLEASE don’t be Teen Spirit…
… “you hum 'Smells Like Teen Spirit'”
iambrony.steeph.tp-radio.de/mlp/gif/ULTIMATERAGE_zps63c5b168.gif
NOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!
I never got into Nirvana, and whenever I see it mentioned it’s always the same damn tune! NO! NO! NO! Dammit, I’m completely distracted, now. Ugh…
… “bowing on stage” – ‘on stage’ should either be ‘onstage’, or ‘on the stage’.
… “a fancy schmancy play” – Since schmancy isn’t a word by itself, place a hyphen between it, and ‘fancy’.
… “vicious tongue lashing” – Place a hyphen between ‘tongue’ and ‘lashing’.
… “the upper crust restaurant” – Place a hyphen between ‘upper’ and ‘crust’, since it’s directly describing the restaurant.
… “such a high class place” – Place a hyphen between ‘high’ and ‘class’.
… “you know this wasn't” – ‘know’ should be ‘knew’.
… “way to wine list.” – Place ‘the’ between ‘to’ and ‘wine’.
… “everyone's order” – ‘order’ should be ‘orders’.
Okay, puns? Not too bad. And the same goes with the MiB reference. But Nirvana… yeah, you already saw my reaction to that.
Looking PAST that, I was expecting Pinkie to at least be smiling a bit at the performance in the park, given how she said that she was enjoying it. I was ESPECIALLY hoping she would have commented more on how different it was to perform, as opposed to seeing the performance. It could’ve allowed for a great bit of foreshadowing, given how she’s spent a while “watching relationships” (Protagonist and Rarity, The Cakes), as opposed to truly “being in one”.
The play seemed to go on for quite a while, but at least you went over a decent means of ignoring it quietly: Mental discography with “pulling at grass” as an assisting means of ignoring the stage-performance. The same compliment of proper use of surroundings, applies to the logic behind Pinkie attracting attention (despite there being a band there).
Rarity was in-character, Pinkie was herself, and the protagonist was a bit smug, but a bit… I dunno, I’m unable to see them as “me”. After all, I’m straight-edge.
And that means I don’t drink.
Up until this point, I hadn't decided whether this was gonna get a like or not. The Men In Black reference sealed the deal.
so you like it pink in the middle huh?
Aaand I lost it.
Never thought I would hear this from pinky in a fanfic lol
Navy and black together, and Rarity didn't say anything?
Anyway, this is very well-written so far.
Pfft as if I would have such shit taste in how I want my steaks.
Rare. Always rare.
Can't say I've had Steak though I wouldn't want to eat one :P
Eh.
Nice chapter!
AHAHAHA!
6209030 Add another thing to the list of why Damien is well loved haha.
3100038 wait did I miss something?
"as silenced as a lamb"
The Book was Better.
140-145 F as measured by a meat thermometer is well-above "medium rare" and still has plenty of pink.
A lot of people say anything over 130 ruins the flavor. They are silly sods. Though red wine with steak is stupid. Go with a nice dry hard cider.
You know... you can either allow yourself to be bound by this - and then consider such "inevitable" events as "fate"... or, you could realize that the Universe doesn't give a fuck either way, and instead see those failures as what they are - failures, that can and should be corrected, or at the very least learned from.
It makes little sense to attribute events to a force you cannot influence. The only factor you can ever truly change is yourself, so it makes the most sense to allocate blame/responsibility there, instead.
Calling it "fate" or "bad luck" just makes it easier to ignore your own responsibility for it, and also makes it easier to fail to act. :-)
Just my two cents for the character.
Now that paints quite the disturbing picture, doesn't it? I mean, all things considered...
Wines are supposed to be savored and tasted , not chugged like cheap beer. You're supposed to swirl it in the glass to let it 'breathe,' and then you savor the aromatic 'bouquet' of the wine and then you sip it and taste the wine. I'm surprised Rarity didn't inform him about the correct method of drinking wine and ask to cease downing it like a barbarian in a tavern.