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Stuck in an empire ruled by a nightmare 5 ponies try to stop the moon. Without Twilights magic Celestia is killed. Pony ville becomes the city of night. Cloudsdale is overcome with thunder pegasi. All unicorns are imprisoned. Supporters of Nightmare are given authority. Apple acres becomes a rock farm. Color is forgotten. A blue streak flies through the sky. A mysterious pony that laughs at all things pony like he isn't one himself arrives. He claims he is a time traveler and that reality is about to fall apart. He says it all roots from a warrior who shouldn't have died. A warrior incrusted with 3 diamonds.

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 3 )

Thumbs down for two things.

The first is, it's a freaking "Dalek" not a "Darlek".
And secondly he's just "the Doctor". Never "Doctor Who" or "Whooves". Read the title of chapter 2 then get back to me.

thanks for the helpful criticism this is my first time

to be honest it's okay but i've seen better but still pretty good for a first time fic so i give you 2 yay's:yay::yay:

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