Enter Blize, a striped Pegasus with strange wings, a strange aura, and a strange past. Follow him and his friends Fluttershy and Lyra on a journey to discover the land outside of Equestria that he descended from as he escapes the clutches of the wicked king Auburn who killed his mother and father.
I don't want to sound rude but..
A strange/dark past?, come on.. seriously? Why not just think up of something else.
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Because I'm not use to writing fan fictions or fantasy.
I tend to stick to poetry and realistic fiction/dark humor as that is what I'm in college for is writing.
I'm sorry it dissapoints you but I can't really change any thing without any advice.
Some people like the story so far. I understand there will be people out there who don't.
I would just appreciate it if you could give some kind of constructive criticism.