Chapter 2 - The Longest Morning
The storm was still blowing strong the next morning when Twilight woke up. She looked at the rattling window as she slipped out of bed, making a mental note to check for storm damage once the weather improved.
"Come on Spike." She nudged the baby dragon, "we've got plans to make." Spike murmured something and pulled his blanket over his head, trying to ignore Twilight.
"Up, up Spike. I need my number one assistant on top form this morning. Lots to do, lots to do." He reluctantly let Twilight pull his covers away and rolled out of his basket.
"What time is it?" he asked, blinking sleep from the corners of his eyes.
"Seven AM." The unicorn chirruped. Could be worse. Spike thought as he yawned. At least it's not five in the morning. Following Twilight down the stairs, Spike proceeded to gather parchment, quills, ink and everything else Twilight usually needed for planning. He sat himself at Twilight's desk while she trotted around the library. She maintained that her best ideas occurred “when her brain was adequately supplied with highly oxygenated blood”. In layman's terms, she thought best on her hooves.
"OK. Top priority, modify shopping list. Double the number of eggs and add tofu to the list," Twilight instructed, passing by Spike on her first circuit of the library. Spike pulled the appropriate parchment onto the desk and added said items.
"Rainbow is going to be bored so find all the Daring Do books in the library. Find anything similar to Daring Do books in chase she finishes them." Twilight was thankful that Spike was still too sleepy to remember what he was writing down. It would save her explaining Rainbow's problem to more ponies than she had to. Twilight paused, remembering how bored Rainbow was when she was in the hospital with an injured wing.
"Change that to 'very bored' and 'anything' to 'everything'.” The scratching sound of Spike's quill stopped as he yawned again.
"Urgent but pending: I need to see Fluttershy. Rainbow will probably want to move to Fluttershy's cottage once she's back." Twilight stopped and looked over Spike's shoulder at her plan. It wasn't as detailed or thorough as she would have liked it to be, but it would have to do. She rolled the scroll up with magic and floated it into her saddlebag before putting the bags onto her back.
"Thanks Spike, you can go back to bed now."
"Don't see why you needed me..." sighed the baby dragon before he slid off the seat and headed back towards his basket.
"Take care of Rainbow Dash while I'm out," Twilight called to him as he went. Spike waved a reply as Twilight crossed to the front door. She lifted her rain hat from its peg and secured it tightly to her head before lifting a matching coat from the same peg. I must thank Rarity for these next time I see her. Twilight thought as she buttoned the coat. Confident that she was ready and able to survive the storm outside, Twilight opened the door.
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Rainbow Dash was feeling far less awesome than her normal self. She had none of the energy or enthusiasm for life that she usually displayed. Even her mane and tail seemed less vibrant. She couldn’t even bring herself to push the covers away from her face.
Curled up under the covers of Twilight's spare bed, she tried to ignore the itching and throbbing that was coming from both of her wings. None of her old feathers were ready to drop yet despite all of her efforts, gentle or vigorous, to convince them otherwise. The only thing that her preening attempts had caused was sore wings.
On any regular day, Rainbow Dash would have woken up late, eaten breakfast, preened her feathers before taking off and going on weather patrol. It wasn't a pattern she followed every day. Sometimes she woke early, finished her work before lunchtime then spent the rest of the day dozing on a cloud.
The pegasus wanted to be zooming around Ponyville, pulling off awesome stunts and dazzling her numerous admirers. But the way she was feeling now, Rainbow doubted she could find the energy to roll over in bed. Sighing dejectedly, Rainbow closed her eyes and tried to fall asleep again.
"You alright Rainbow Dash? Need anything?" Spike's voice brought her back to reality and she looked up to see his silhouette though the sheets. She grunted a response, neither positive or negative, before curling into a tighter ball. She ignored the itchiness her wings and tried go back to sleep. She drifted off within a few minutes.
Spike watched the lump under the covers that was Rainbow shuffle around, unsure whether she wanted anything or not. The sound of gentle breathing soon filled the library and Spike went back to tidying the library.
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Struggling against the fierce wind, Twilight struggled down the main street of Ponyville. Seeing only shops with their shutters drawn and empty stalls, she let out an exasperated sigh. In the process of making plans and lists of how to deal with Rainbow's condition, the thought that the market wouldn't be open hadn't occurred to her. She was about to turn and canter back to her warm and dry library when a sign hammered into the ground caught her eye.
Market moved to town hall due to weather.
Twilight turned, thankful that the wind was now behind her, and headed off at full speed towards the town hall. It was only a short dash to the hall, but Twilight was eager to get out of the wind and rain. As she approached the town hall, she saw the front doors were propped open but the inner ones were shut. Reaching the steps of the hall, the wind caught Twilight and threw her up the stairs and into the hall. She landed hard on her flank and quickly scrambled back to her hooves, pretending that hadn't happened. Nopony seemed to have noticed her unceremonious entry, so Twilight put it behind her and entered the hall.
Makeshift stalls were clustered around the inside of the hall and ponies of all colours and types were milling around them. Twilight shook off the worst of the rain as she spotted Applejack's stall and crossed to her.
"Mornin' Twilight." Applejack called to her, "Wind’s blowin' something fierce out there."
"You can say that again." Twilight levitated her list from her saddlebags under her raincoat, shedding even more water onto the floor.
"Yer usual?" Applejack asked.
"And again please." Applejack raised an inquiring eyebrow as she pushed a dozen apples towards Twilight.
"Want to fill me in Sugarcube?"
"Rainbow Dash is crashing at my place for a while. She's... um... not feeling well." It was a lame excuse, but it was all Twilight was able to improvise. Applejack nodded, "Guess that explains why this rain came out of nowhere." Twilight managed to hide a sigh of relief as Applejack tidied away the money she had dropped on the counter. Twilight swept the apples into her saddlebag
"Anyway, you're busy so I'll see you later." Twilight waved her hoof at the other pony who had just approached the stall.
"See ya later then, Twi," Applejack said as she turned to the new pony. Crossing apples off her list, Twilight started drifting from stall to stall and picking up the other items on her list. She bumped into a few ponies she knew in passing, all of whom were dressed in their own raingear. Twilight realized that they were all Rarity's.
Must be doing a roaring trade in this weather. Twilight thought as a familiar squeak met her ears. She looked around and, as she'd expected, Fluttershy had just appeared next to her. Fluttershy placed a basket on the floor by her hooves.
"Hello Fluttershy," Twilight returned the greeting.
"This rain took us by surprise," Fluttershy said, "I had to bring my animals into the house. Did Rainbow Dash forget the weather schedule?"
"Rainbow Dash wasn't on duty last night." Twilight said absently, looking over her list again, "she was looking for you though." Fluttershy raised an eyebrow, puzzled for a moment before going white.
"Oh no... it's her time, isn't it? And I was away last night too. Do you know where she went? She can't be have gotten home last night, not in this storm and with her wings like that.”
Twilight raised her hoof, stopping Fluttershy mid panic.
"Relax Fluttershy. Rainbow Dash is occupying my spare bed."
"But I... She... feathers... pegasus..." Twilight couldn't make out anything more Fluttershy said as her voice devolved into squeaks and mutters.
"Calm down Fluttershy. I know about Dash's problem, that's why I left her in the library. Speaking of which, have your chickens laid any spare eggs?" Fluttershy was caught off guard by Twilight's sudden question.
"Eggs? Why?"
"Protein. Feathers are almost all protein so Rainbow will need extra to replace them."
"I have a few spare that I was going to sell," Fluttershy tapped a basket at her hooves, "but you can have a box if you need it.
"Thanks." Twilight lifted one of the egg boxes from Fluttershy's basket with magic before tucking it into her saddlebag. Fluttershy waited for Twilight to finish before resuming their conversation.
"Did Rainbow tell you that I normally look after Rainbow Dash while she's... not well?"
Twilight nodded, "If you want to look after her, we can swing by the library and you can pick her up."
"Well...em..." Twilight waited patiently for Fluttershy to untangle her tongue, "Rainbow Dash will probably have made... a nest. She's not going to want to go outside or even leave her bed until she's finished."
"I was expecting that." Twilight replied. Fluttershy blinked in surprise.
"The book I found in the library said that it's best for moulting pegasi to find somewhere they can relax and just let their body get on with the process, so I assumed Rainbow wouldn't want to go anywhere."
"You mean you don't mind looking after Rainbow?"
"Let me worry about Dash, you've got enough to deal with having all those animals to look after."
"Thank you Twilight. I really don't mind looking after her during her moult but I do have a lot of animals who will have colds after being caught in the rain. I can make time to help you look after Rainbow if you..."
"Don't worry about it Fluttershy," Twilight interrupted, "I can look after Rainbow. You just worry about your animals." Fluttershy seemed to take Twilight's statement literally as her expression became a concerned one.
"I told Angel I'd only be an hour, but it took me that long to get here. Sorry Twilight, I've got to get back to them. Tell Dash I'll come by and see her later. If...that's alright with you..."
"I'll see you later then, Fluttershy," Twilight called as Fluttershy grabbed her basket and dashed off towards the Hall's main doors.
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The rain was easing by the time Twilight returned to the library but it was still heavy enough to warrant her raincoat. She hung it up to drip dry next to the door, sending her saddlebags floating across the library into the kitchen.
"I'm back Spike," Twilight called, following her bag into the kitchen. Spike appeared in the kitchen doorway, following Twilight inside.
"Did Rainbow Dash needed anything while I was out?"
"Nope, she's been asleep most of the time." Twilight nodded, unloading her bags onto the counter. Spike watched her unload the carton of eggs she'd bought from Fluttershy, along with apples, seeds and bread across the counter. Twilight shook her saddlebag and with a wet slap, two Tofu slabs dropped onto the counter. Spike looked at the tofu with a mixed expression, clearly unsure about it, and prodded one with a claw.
"What in Equestria made you buy these things?"
"Good source of protein," Twilight muttered, her nose in a cookbook, "here we go, scrambled eggs." The eggs sprang out of their carton and started to orbit around Twilight's head as she summoned a bowl and milk from the other side of the kitchen. The eggs cracked themselves against the edge of the bowl before their shells were deposited on the counter again. The milk bottle upended itself, dumping most of its contents into the bowl with the eggs. Spike had to duck to avoid a whisk that jumped out it's drawer and zoomed across the room. With eggshells and cooking utensils flying around the kitchen, Spike decided to get out of the firing line. He grabbed Twilight's saddlebag before ducking out through the doorway.
"I'll put this away," he called to Twilight
"Thanks Spike," Twilight replied, magically animating the whisk. Twilight continued reading the cookbook as she beat the eggs and milk together before pouring the mixture into a pan. She put the pan on the stove, lit the burner and fetched a wooden spatula all while her nose was still buried in her book. She put the book down as Spike came back into the kitchen and she turned to look at him.
"Keep an eye on this for me Spike." Twilight told him, levitating the spatula into his claw, "It shouldn't need a more than five minutes but make sure it doesn't burn. I'll go wake up Rainbow."
"Got it." Spike replied.
Trotting out of the kitchen and up the stairs, Twilight was greeted by the sight of a bundle of covers curled up on the guest bed. Twilight heard the sound of gentle breathing, and the occasional snore, coming from under the covers as walked along the edge of the bed. Twilight gently shook the pile of covers.
"Rainbow, breakfast is nearly ready," the Unicorn called, using the same voice she used to wake Spike. Rainbow gave a groan from under the sheets, making it clear she didn't want to get out of bed.
"What time is it?" Dash's voice asked. Twilight glanced at the clock. "Half past eight." Another groan and the bundle closed into a tighter ball. "Another three hours. Please." Twilight realized that sterner measures would be needed; she grabbed the exposed corner of the duvet in her mouth and hauled with all her might.
Rainbow Dash felt her world spin as her cocoon was wrenched away from her and she was dumped on the floor. Landing on her back with her hooves in the air, Dash tried to find the duvet and cover herself again but it was far out of her reach. Standing over her, Twilight fixed Rainbow with an authoritative stare.
"Come on Dash, back on the bed and let me check your wings." Rainbow sputtered as she tried to get back to her hooves, "They... they're fine. I don't know what you're talking about."
Twilight tapped the bed with her hoof, "Let me see them."
Realizing that Twilight wasn't going to take no for an answer, Rainbow reluctantly got back onto the bed again, lay down and spread her wings. If Rainbow Dash had been her normal self, she would have fought back or bolted, but she had little of her usual energy today.
Stupid moulting. She thought, why does it always feel like I've just done three Rainbooms in a row? I need all my strength to be awesome.
"Let me know if I'm being too rough," Twilight told her friend. Rainbow grunted, looking far from happy. Twilight lifted Rainbow's left wing and Rainbow flinched at the contact but didn't make a sound as she let her wing relax again. After checking Rainbow's wing all over, Twilight shifted position and repeated the process on Rainbow's other wing, checking for loose feathers but finding none.
"All done," Twilight chirruped. "Let's see how Spike is doing with breakfast." As Twilight headed back down the stairs Rainbow grabbed the duvet again, wrapping it around herself like a cloak before following Twilight. The two ponies returned to the kitchen in time to see Spike putting three plates of scrambled eggs onto the table. Dash sat opposite Twilight, still keeping the duvet wrapped around herself, and gave the plateful a cautious poke with the tip of her hoof.
"What's this?" she asked.
"Scrambled eggs."
The cyan pegasus pulled a face but Twilight couldn't tell if it was in disgust or confusion.
"It's high in protein," Twilight explained, "It's the perfect food for you right now."
There was a loud crunch that made both ponies look up. Rainbow Dash couldn't help but stare as she saw Spike's plateful had egg shells mixed in with his portion.
"I like crunchy food." was all Spike said as he took another mouthful. Rainbow looked back at her own food and pulled the same face again, still prodding her breakfast with her hoof.
"You can eat it hot or you can eat it cold, but either way you are going to eat it," Twilight said, slightly concerned that she was starting to sound like her own mother.
"Can I at least have ketchup?" Rainbow whined. Twilight rolled her eyes but the bottle of ketchup winked onto the table. Rainbow Dash applied a liberal coating of ketchup and Twilight rolled her eyes again.
Today is going to be a long day, the unicorn thought as she started eating her own breakfast.
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It's alive!
sweet, almost forgot about this fic. Glad to see it's still (somewhat) alive. Looks good, will be looking forward to your next chapter. The plot could be very interesting.
Twilight's really got her work cut out for her.
I like the detail about Dash making a 'nest'. I want to copy it into my stories whenever I have moulting Pegasai.
Scrambled eggs is delicious, Rainbow should be grateful
will you be able to update more commonly? it's like... *wishes I had a minor sense of time* uh... a bit more than a month I think... most stories wouldn't last this long for me after that long
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Style suggestion: Separate thoughts from descriptive prose in some fashion. Common methods are puctuating them exactly like dialogue, but surrounding thoughts in single quotations, 'Like this,' bats thought. Or leaving them as descriptive text but italicisizing them like this bats thought again. Or, even better, doing both, 'Do you mean like this?' bats asked himself. Helps legibility.
Edit: They're italicized now. Either I caught it before a useful edit, or my browser derped in a very strange way. Don't mind me; nothing to see here!
this is going to be good
this sounds like its going to be intersting
2199583 No. Italics for thoughts is good; it's the standard style for writing. Single quotes is...eh, passable, but very much discouraged. But you don't use both at once. That's like writing "$1.99¢".
Anyway, I'm actually enjoying this story quite a lot more than I thought I would. I'm entertained so far. I hope you update soon!
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Strunk and White's Elements of Style disagrees with you, but to each their own. Importance is clarity of intent and legibility first and foremost.
2199392 He's not the slow one on this one... (my bad).
Yeah, it took me forever to get to his chapter, but he's a great guy for being so freaking patient!
Gee, this looks rather familiar.
To everybody: This took forever partly because of me. I have college, two jobs, other projects, etc., but I told him I'd get to it.... eventually. I'll make sure to get my end done more quickly.
LOL nice work, this is going to be a good story,
But I think you need to space out better for someone new starts talkin
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I just looked up moulting bird behaviour and adapted it for a pegasus. Don't be afraid to do the same.
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I fully intended to post something in January but I work full time so I can't really write as much as I want to.
Still, I'm going to try and update more regularly.
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But when did you last see a pony eating eggs.
It's a little out of Rainbow's comfort zone.
I always did like the head-canon that Pegasi can eat fish, not as a preferred meal, mind you ("Both our diets, I should mention, are completely vegetarian."), but as a good source of protein, or in a survival situation, it's just been a sort of thing that made sense.
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then i want to see her, when they are eating the fish
2201263 Well...it seemed to be no big deal to acquire them, and ponies apparently have recipes for them. Besides, eggs are used all the time in baking. You can bet Sugarcube Corner has a supply of eggs for all those cakes and such. They're vegetarion, not vegan.
If Rainbow Dash has ever eaten a cake, she's eaten an egg.
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You make a good point. Let's just say she's hasn't eaten scrambled eggs before.
2202074 Heh, fair enough. She is about to be illustrated in their deliciousness.
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We'll see.
And there is still the fish to come.
That's my life right there in a nutshell.
Anyway, I want to see where this goes, I had to remind myself what was going on before reading this.
@Apollonius...
Glad to see your story continue, Apollonius.
1. Fairly good coverage of potential plot-hole(s) as pointed out with Chapter 1. The "nesting" angle was a good choice for having Rainbow Dash remain at the library for an extended period of time. A good writer must always mindful of plot-holes, no matter how small; because they deepen and multiply quick, and invariably come back to haunt you later (even sometimes after the story is finished).
2. Some additional vegetarian-diet suggestions for protein sources, for later chapters:
- a. Beans. The obvious and comedic angle being Twilight Sparkle & Rainbow Dash trying to enjoy a bowl of chilli. Me, I always enjoy a liberal addition of Tabasco hot-sauce to most general chilli I have (though with some of the really good chilli I have had across travels, adding anything would be sacrilege). A friend likes to add stone-ground mustard (not yellow mustard). Another friend likes to add grated horseradish (the real stuff, not the cream version for the weak-tongued). You can begin to imagine the many comedic angles possible.
- b. Nuts & Grains. Peanut Butter & [insert complement food] sandwiches being the obvious angle. But there are myriad nut & grain possibilities.
- c. Seitan, Soybean, &/or Tofu. An excellent source of proteins and variable cooking angles, if not comedic angles, but unlikely to be found in a western-themed setting as Ponyville.
3. You probably will want to involve the rest of the Mane Six, besides just Fluttershy, for visiting Twilight Sparkle and Rainbow Dash, though obviously in supporting cast roles. Such close friends as the Mane Six are going to know something is up with Rainbow Dash being inactive for several weeks and staying at the Golden Oaks Public Library, just common (literary) sense there.
4. Overall, Chapter 2 is another good set-up chapter, it is likely the correct decision in taking things slow for any Romance build-up. I look forward to the next chapter.
ummmm, not to pick and I love the fic's idea and all, I don't believe horses fish digest all that well, although they can digest meat so.... Kinda just seems weird to make them eat meat.
Molestia wants them to eat it though
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Those are very good points.
1- In my mind there are no plot holes but that's because I know what's happening/going to happen. You as a reader don't have that advantage so I've grateful for you pointing them out.
2- There are other protein rich foods coming. Let's just say Rainbow is a picky eater.
3- The rest of the mane 6 are going to appear sooner rather than later. I was just planning on phasing them in gradually so I can get their character's right.
4- Thanks.
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They're anthropomorphic horses/pegasi/unicorns, I'm just taking a little artistic liberties with the source materials.
But your comment give me fuel for latter chapters.
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Glad to be of assistance? (ceiling cat Molestia post yields inspiration... didn't see that coming...)
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It was more your remarks on digesting fish that I was meaning. Molestia is not going to appear in this fic.
Maybe a project in the future...
2204044 I like this guy.
Agh, scrambled eggs and ketchup. I will never understand it.
2338240 Just like I will never understand Marmite with anything.
Other people have probably pointed this out, but they're herbivores. They don't eat meat. I can understand eggs, but not fish.
2455822 They're also anthropomorphic horses, I'm just taking a little liberty with the source material.
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You never wrote in the description that it was Anthro, the cover art says normal pony as well, not to mention that I don't recall you giving any indication in the story itself...
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It's not Anthro, the original show anthropomorphised them long before I wrote this. If I were to 'humanise' them further, I'd just make them people.
I was trying to say that its a cartoon and I'm writing a little story that takes a little creative licence with the source material in the aid of comedy.
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Anthro is when they're part human part pony, a sort of hybrid. Sonic the Hedgehog, for all intents and purposes, is anthro because he has human & animal characteristics.
I think what you're trying to say, is that you see eating fish as being anthromorphic?
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Anthropomorphism is defined something non-human being given human characteristics. Talking horses is a lesser example of this while sonic is more the middle ground.
No, I see Rainbow Dash eating fish as comedic material for later on.
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I know that, but Anthro is most often used when their physical appearance has humanoid traits, such as walking on two legs etc.
That is how Anthromorphic is usually viewed, not by talking or what not.
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I'm not familiar with the Anthro community (or how it's viewed by other people), I was talking from my perspective. My definition was obviously different from yours. Just chalk it up to me being pedantic.
When I meant Anthromorphic, all I meant was talking horses. But looking back at my reply now I can see I didn't make that too clear.
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Well... I'm not a member of the "Anthromorphic" culture, or furries. I just know that I think of this when someone says Anthro, though the "official Anthro" is just the ponies as they normally are.
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Neither am I but you make a valid point about 'official Anthros'.
I'll just have to choose better words next time.
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I'd say you can choose to do whatever the heck you want People may just misunderstand you like I did.
Ya sure ponies eat.... fish?
"OK. Top priority, modify shopping list. Double the number of eggs and add fish to the list WTF TWILIGHT YOU EAT MEAT NOW
This is pretty good, but I have to say, your formating is really weird. You seem to use indents at random, and you have some paragraph errors in the dialogue:
It's supposed to look like this:
move "Curled up under ...:" up a line. Then indent paragraphs, following the rest of the fics structure.
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Fix entire sections structure.
Can't read this chapter. You need to fix the indention and paragraph structure [read previous chapter's comment]. When you fix this stories structure please PM me. It's too jarring and too much of a distraction.
it is started to get really good, normally i would ask about a big story, but i think as long as this doesn´t end to soon, i really coul count this to my favourite favourites.