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Fiona Starwind a young girl who was the helpfull creator of a machine capable of opening a rift to other dimensions was kidnapped shortly after discovering how to make a stable rift. But a power hungry man took her hostage and took the plans and had her Dial home device she deveoloped for a robot they were going to send through the rift the next day. But for having defended her self she accidentally was sent through the random rift co-ordinates that the evil man had set for himself to the world of Equestria and what made matters worse the Abstract plain changed her from her human for that that of a pony. Now Fiona is stuck in the Dimension of ponies with no way to get back and no know how about the dimension she currently resides in. Its a whole new adventure for her. Will she ever get back home or will she be stuck in the Dimension for the rest of her life.

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I will go ahead and point out that there are a few minor grammatical errors.

...Whaaatt? The first half was good, but the second half was.. alright :rainbowhuh:

I already know of the Grammar Errors I only just finished making the Prelude as of last night to get what needed done done. I have lots of room for improvement. Thanks for your Comments.

1687349 Have you seen the pony version of that pic? :rainbowkiss:

1687442 also note that "grammar errors" isn't a proper noun. (What's with all the weird capitalization?)

The fic summary isn't supposed to say what happens in the fic. What's the fun in reading something when you know whats going to happen? (Look up some articles on what to put in a summary, that should help)

To me this fic looks like you tried to re-write Project Sunflower. But then again, I can't make heads or tails of your story summary. (Multiple subjects bundled up into single sentences)

Sorry to hear that but i never heard of Project Sunflower.

Actually to make that picture for this Story I did. Its located on Facebook the Hasbro's My Little Pony Maker

well mate i cant wait to start reading it, happy holidays

Do you hate commas or something?

"Fiona Starwind, a young girl who was the helpfull creator of a machine capable of opening a rift to other dimensions, was kidnapped shortly after discovering how to make a stable rift. But a power-hungry man took her hostage, and took the plans, and had her Dial home device she deveoloped for a robot they were going to send through the rift the next day. But for having defended her self she accidentally in the process of defending herself, she was sent through the random rift co-ordinates that the evil man had set for himself to the world of Equestria. and what made Making matters worse, the Abstract plain plane changed her from her human for that form to that of a pony. Now Fiona is stuck in the Dimension dimension of ponies with no way to get back and no know-how about the dimension she currently resides in. It's a whole new adventure for her. Will she ever get back home, or will she be stuck in the Dimension dimension for the rest of her life.?"

Key: red for deletions, green for insertions, and cornflowerblue for WTF.

COMPLIMENT: A tried and true plot. (Truly painful to read, that is.)

Listen I understand my description is not in the least the best. And I know that I need to seriously update the crap out of it. And fix my errors. But I have been busy writing the story up and working a job on the side to keep my bills paid. It has obviously been 5 years since I last wrote a story so cut some slack. The rust is still falling off here. And I also am aware of any future Errors that maybe found as I have been planing on fixing them all in due time.

Thankyou but beyond this Have a wonder Holiday and a Happy New Year.

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