Spike has lived his whole life beside Twilight, but has had his true emotions shrouded by his shame. Will the universe bring these two souls closer, or are they to be forever damned to the despair of solitude?
I have no words at the moment. Glamour Shot... what in the Sorrell Hells is wrong with you?
What a cliffhanger... I hope the next chapter doesn't take too long.
Alternate Universe tag? Perhaps... we don't have a canon childhood for Twilight besides Cadence taking care of her. So this would fit since you did place it in the future.
Thank you dear reader, but a select few of my viewers think that Granny Smith is being a little too OOC, but I personally think her personality fits her due to the fact that they never expanded on it in the show.
We have not seen much of Granny Smith's personality and I can completely see a crazy bigoted religious fanatic hiding behind that innocent old lady routine. Because it happens all the time in real life.
Still... you could put it on just to be safe. My personal opinion, doesn't need it.
Yeah, I don't think I should put it or else the potential readers would think that the ENTIRE world is different, and they may just overlook the actual story because of it.
Press. Get the hell out of dodge. You're now an accessory to a terrorist. You are well aware that Twilight has friends in high places, and have enough sense to realize that GS overplayed her hoof here, and that this scheme will now very likely fall apart in a month.
a scrunched up angry expression." Rarity took of with a speed that was no much for Applejack's Ah vary much plant to 'deal with it' Miss Sparkle was full of dread that made Applejack shudder. but what happened with tears poring from their faces
1. Extra closing quotation mark. 2. Match. 3. Plan. 4. Extra fullstop. 5. Pouring.
SHIT! Wait....Spike is fire proof, so it should not damge gm but Twi.....damn. That....taht WHORE, WHAT THE BUCK IS WRONG WITH EVERYPONY?! WHY THE BUCK CAN'T THEY JUST ALLOW SUCH PASSION AND LOVE TO LIVE ON?!!!! I WANT TO BEAT THE LVIING SHIT OUT OF SOMETHING RIGHT NOW!!! DAMN IT!!!!! The other five came to late.....shit. This has to be the most emotional story I ever read.....buck.
I'm going to go cry in a corner now then beat up a pillow....poor pillow.
"We are going to get rid of a love we find 'dark' and 'horrible', by blowing them up in a dark and horrific manner! That will show them that we are 'good' and 'light'!" See it religous idiots like that give the rest of us a bad name.
... I'm waiting and once celestia figures out about the fire ruby and even tracks the maker 'Glammer shot' well all i have to say about that is when celestia is finished with her she'll be begging for death.dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Vinyl2.png
*LE GASP* How is Shining Armor and Cadence gonna act? Or worse...HOW ARE PRINCESS CELESTIA AND LUNA GONNA ACT!!!?? TO THE MOON! OR EVEN THE SUN!! OR MAYBE EVEN IN STONE!!
hope twi and spike make it safe and I hope now the mob has the good sense to abandon their insane leader I wonder if ismith will have the sense knocke dback to her once her grandaughter deserts her
... Ezio altair Conner we have work do to. You get the nuts I got the bitch and together everyone will die. May an update be released soon. And may they rest in peace. Also this seems to be drawing to a close. is... Is... Is the story gonna end?
Hehehe, I did say a chapter back that the story isn't ending anytime soon, Bennet my friend, I will work to release the next chapter as quickly as possible, and thanksgiving break will give me that chance.
1643155 Here's a question that's been bothering me. What is up with Twilight's body pains most are guessing she's pregnant but that idea has many hole in they said, that's not my question. Was it already explained why Twilight has her pains or am I imagining things?
(sigh)This reminds me too munch of the real world.
1642668Well technically Glamour Shot doesn't give a damn about them being together just revenge. But everypony else in that mob pretty much spot on. 1642896(Pulls out his ninjato and father's .45springfield)Room for one more.
Seriously, Glamour Shot, Press, Granny Smith, and all of her followers better burn in Tartarus by the end of this story. And Twilight and Spike better live through this. Also shouldn't this story technically have a "Dark" tag?
1642368 Remember, her problems began when Spike burnt every hair from her body. She is using fire, as a final "no, you!" to the ones she considers responsible for her misery.
In my opinion, she needs a visit from the nice men in white suits.
Well, that escalated quickly. Wasn't Glamour just planning on ruining their life? Where the hay did that incendiary thing come from? 'goes back and reads previous chapters'
Spike wouldn't of charred boiled her if she and her jerkass friends hadn't bullied Twilight, so Glamour Shot's baldness is her own fault. Unfortunately her head is too far up her own flank to realize that. She's gonna be in for a universe of hurt once she gets found out though, same for Granny Smith and her hoard of religious nuts
No, no. No Alternate Universe Tag. As others have said, we know little enough about Granny Smith to the point where we can extrapolate almost any sort of personality from her right now. And it is still early enough into the story that you can explain her actions and possibly redeem her from her arguable behavior later on, which I recommend you consider. But if you want to be sure that you get the facts that we do know about her correct, I strongly suggest you watch Episode 12 of Season 2, "Family Appreciation Day".
And as you've already noted, I think this is too small an issue for an AU Tag to be necessary. And I'm pretty sure you'd be correct about the tag repelling some readers later on as well; they might think the reason for an AU Tag here is much greater than it actually is, and skip it over because they may have a preference for fics that stick closer to canon. I know I certainly do.
But please don't hurt/kill Granny Smith. She may be a torch-bearing, pony-lynching bigot, but she's still Granny Smith, for God's sake, and she is an important member of the community and a highly-respected elder of Ponyville. And she makes some badass Zapapple Jam.
P.S. Not sure I can really picture Rainbow Dash saying "douches". Perhaps consider "Featherbrains", or something of the like instead?
IT'S GOOD TO BE ABLE TO POST MY STUFF AGAIN, AND HERE, HAVE THE LONGEST CHAPTER UP TO NOW AS A REWARD FOR YOUR PATIENCE.
PS: Does this deserve the alternate universe tag?
....
I have no words at the moment. Glamour Shot... what in the Sorrell Hells is wrong with you?
What a cliffhanger... I hope the next chapter doesn't take too long.
Alternate Universe tag? Perhaps... we don't have a canon childhood for Twilight besides Cadence taking care of her. So this would fit since you did place it in the future.
damn good so far keep of the good work
also have the moustache
I got so excited when I saw this chapter I woke up my dog screaming YES!!!! .............. I lonely good chapter hope they're alright.
1642368
Thank you dear reader, but a select few of my viewers think that Granny Smith is being a little too OOC, but I personally think her personality fits her due to the fact that they never expanded on it in the show.
I've been waiting so long that my heart was about to pop
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We have not seen much of Granny Smith's personality and I can completely see a crazy bigoted religious fanatic hiding behind that innocent old lady routine. Because it happens all the time in real life.
Still... you could put it on just to be safe. My personal opinion, doesn't need it.
1642468
Yeah, I don't think I should put it or else the potential readers would think that the ENTIRE world is different, and they may just overlook the actual story because of it.
Hey look its it's Chekov's FIre Ruby!
(Also: isn't spike fire proof? I mean, he swam in lava!)
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Yup, but can he survive being hurled at 100/mph at a solid oak wall?
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words alone can't express my rage
1642596
DAMN IT AVATAR, WHY U ALWAYS MAKE ME LAUGH WITH YOUR PICS
Press. Get the hell out of dodge. You're now an accessory to a terrorist. You are well aware that Twilight has friends in high places, and have enough sense to realize that GS overplayed her hoof here, and that this scheme will now very likely fall apart in a month.
Of all the worst possible things this is the worst possible thing
1642490 he's a dragon... YES
a scrunched up angry expression."
Rarity took of with a speed that was no much for Applejack's
Ah vary much plant to 'deal with it' Miss Sparkle
was full of dread that made Applejack shudder. but what happened
with tears poring from their faces
1. Extra closing quotation mark.
2. Match.
3. Plan.
4. Extra fullstop.
5. Pouring.
Ahem... Buck you to the high heavens good sir
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Hmm, YOU'LL HAVE TO WAIT UNTIL THE NEXT CHAPTER TO FIND OUT. TUNE IN NEXT TIME TO SEE THE NEXT CHAPTER OOOOOOFFFFF FAMILIAR EMBRACE!
1642659 FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU
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SHIT! Wait....Spike is fire proof, so it should not damge gm but Twi.....damn. That....taht WHORE, WHAT THE BUCK IS WRONG WITH EVERYPONY?! WHY THE BUCK CAN'T THEY JUST ALLOW SUCH PASSION AND LOVE TO LIVE ON?!!!! I WANT TO BEAT THE LVIING SHIT OUT OF SOMETHING RIGHT NOW!!! DAMN IT!!!!! The other five came to late.....shit. This has to be the most emotional story I ever read.....buck.
I'm going to go cry in a corner now then beat up a pillow....poor pillow.
1642655
i DON'T WANNA GO TO THE HIGH HEAVENS YET
I'VE STILL GOT PONIES TO TORTURE
PS:THANKS AGAIN FOR THE CHECK-UP
1642676
No problem
"We are going to get rid of a love we find 'dark' and 'horrible', by blowing them up in a dark and horrific manner! That will show them that we are 'good' and 'light'!"
See it religous idiots like that give the rest of us a bad name.
... I'm waiting and once celestia figures out about the fire ruby and even tracks the maker 'Glammer shot' well all i have to say about that is when celestia is finished with her she'll be begging for death.dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Vinyl2.png
Oh it's on now! Where's my shotgun?! And my darts! Ooh...my butcher's knife!! Yes...yes these will do nicely...
Oh Glamour Shot....come out to play.... WITH DEATH!!
Sparkle and the Dragon burned away your Cutie Mark?
puu.sh/1rSJL
Epic "Oh Shit" Moment!! Awww snap!! Here we go!!
*LE GASP* How is Shining Armor and Cadence gonna act? Or worse...HOW ARE PRINCESS CELESTIA AND LUNA GONNA ACT!!!?? TO THE MOON! OR EVEN THE SUN!! OR MAYBE EVEN IN STONE!!
~Raxel~
hope twi and spike make it safe and I hope now the mob has the good sense to abandon their insane leader
I wonder if ismith will have the sense knocke dback to her once her grandaughter deserts her
... Ezio altair Conner we have work do to. You get the nuts I got the bitch and together everyone will die.
May an update be released soon. And may they rest in peace. Also this seems to be drawing to a close. is... Is... Is the story gonna end?
1643146
Hehehe, I did say a chapter back that the story isn't ending anytime soon, Bennet my friend, I will work to release the next chapter as quickly as possible, and thanksgiving break will give me that chance.
1643155
Here's a question that's been bothering me. What is up with Twilight's body pains most are guessing she's pregnant but that idea has many hole in they said, that's not my question. Was it already explained why Twilight has her pains or am I imagining things?
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Nope, and a definite answer is coming up in the next story arc.
Really Glamor Shot, denver.mylittlefacewhen.com/media/f/img/mlfw691_EkrbV.png
You're a fucking dick
1642676 Please don't kill them, I like this ship... I don't want them dead It will be to much for my feels
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1642596
So true!
wait how is everyone we care about okay with the relationship when they all consider spike to still be a baby
This shit just got real.
(sigh)This reminds me too munch of the real world.
1642668Well technically Glamour Shot doesn't give a damn about them being together just revenge.
But everypony else in that mob pretty much spot on.
1642896(Pulls out his ninjato and father's .45springfield)Room for one more.
at dawn we ride to the wall and topple it
AND WE SHALL HAVE OUR VENGEANCE
1643865 Oh there's always room for more when somepony messes with any of the Mane 6 plus Spike. IT. IS. ON!!
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GLLLLAAAAAAAMMMMMMOOOOOOOOUUUUURRRRRR SHHHHHHHOOOOOOOOOOOTTTTTTTTT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Seriously, Glamour Shot, Press, Granny Smith, and all of her followers better burn in Tartarus by the end of this story. And Twilight and Spike better live through this. Also shouldn't this story technically have a "Dark" tag?
1642368
Remember, her problems began when Spike burnt every hair from her body.
She is using fire, as a final "no, you!" to the ones she considers responsible for her misery.
In my opinion, she needs a visit from the nice men in white suits.
1643865 You makea valid point, have a Rarity wink because your awesome and got my second favorite Pokemon, Mudkip:
Well, that escalated quickly. Wasn't Glamour just planning on ruining their life? Where the hay did that incendiary thing come from? 'goes back and reads previous chapters'
Also, Granny is a
1644406
Spike wouldn't of charred boiled her if she and her jerkass friends hadn't bullied Twilight, so Glamour Shot's baldness is her own fault. Unfortunately her head is too far up her own flank to realize that. She's gonna be in for a universe of hurt once she gets found out though, same for Granny Smith and her hoard of religious nuts
1642272
No, no. No Alternate Universe Tag. As others have said, we know little enough about Granny Smith to the point where we can extrapolate almost any sort of personality from her right now. And it is still early enough into the story that you can explain her actions and possibly redeem her from her arguable behavior later on, which I recommend you consider. But if you want to be sure that you get the facts that we do know about her correct, I strongly suggest you watch Episode 12 of Season 2, "Family Appreciation Day".
And as you've already noted, I think this is too small an issue for an AU Tag to be necessary. And I'm pretty sure you'd be correct about the tag repelling some readers later on as well; they might think the reason for an AU Tag here is much greater than it actually is, and skip it over because they may have a preference for fics that stick closer to canon. I know I certainly do.
But please don't hurt/kill Granny Smith. She may be a torch-bearing, pony-lynching bigot, but she's still Granny Smith, for God's sake, and she is an important member of the community and a highly-respected elder of Ponyville. And she makes some badass Zapapple Jam.
P.S. Not sure I can really picture Rainbow Dash saying "douches".
Perhaps consider "Featherbrains", or something of the like instead?
1644668>>1644174Thanks!(starts making bombs out of pbc pipe and canon fuse).
1645588
Great idea, I'll put it to use at the end, but for now, I won't stop the chapter flow, especially now on thanksgiving break.
1646020 Never a problem, *Gives you a mobile canon* use it wisely....it only got three shots.
I think this deserves a "DARK" tag more than an "ALT UNI" tag