Where did you say the gems where

1. Were.

And now... plotdevelopment

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Thank you, dear reader, I shalleth fix it!!

YES THE PLOT THICKENS NOW!!!!

Slow dow a bit man, or else this is going to become a rushed story very soon. Either way, it was a good chapter. I was expecting Twilight to get mad or at least yell at Rarity for rejecting Spike or something, but it was better the way you carried it out.
I hope to read more.

i enjoy twi-spike fics
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because reasons

:3
and yes the plot thickens!! >:D

Indeed, as Rennes said, don't rush it. You have a nice setting, and I'm sure I speak for everyone that a longer story is a better read (as long as it isn't long for the sake of being long).
Either way, keep it up! You're doing good

Ohoho, don't worry, dear readers, I don't just plan on having Spike's internal debate as the only conflict in this story.

There will be drama, there will be external conflicts, and I'm debating getting things saucy at one point, but whatever, I'll leave that last one up to you.

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Yeah I can see why you thought I might make Twilight mad at Rarity, and I thought of doing that for a while, but no, I just don't see Twilight screaming at others just because things didn't play out like Spike wanted.

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Oh, great, now I'v got Rainbueno on my comments section

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I was thinking more about Twilight being mad at Rarity for being the cause of Spike's suffering. But never mind.

I can agree with things getting more...heated as time passes and I like the bit of swearing you add to this because it's Teen rated you know, please keep that up also those bully bastards are jack-ases I just want to puch them in the face...but I think a hoof would hurt a lot more then a hand huh?

Also one or two slight errors with grammer nothing major though, onto the next one!

And ze plot thicken oui, great story here but what do I know of critiques I just figured out there's this whole system to critique a book by... WTF!! People need to know this!! But whateves great job here I hope spike kicks there astral butts!!

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Ugh, just ugh; I hate that image so much.

calm the his dreams try removing the the, so it's calm his dreams

Oh... Shit about to go down!! Poor Spike, so conflicted by his own memory, betrayed by his own mind. It's such a shame when you can't even sleep peacefully.

in a whirlwind of objects being carried in a purple aurora

objects being carried in a purple aurora

purple aurora

aurora

It's aura.

Things I put myself through to actually read the story