When Ditzy Hooves meets a terrified young mare in the heart of Ponyville, she cannot begin to comprehend the nightmare that is about to unfold. Soon, the demonic Nightmare Moon will overshadow the land in an eternal night, and a broken knight must lead five mares up from the bottom of society to overcome the greatest threat her world has seen in a thousand years. Each of them carries terrible failures and a lifetime of regret, but it is only by overcoming the weight of the past that the sun can shine in the future.
This is the story of the Twilit Night, and the children who would dare to bring an end to it.
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A very well done hook for the story. You do really good job a painting a picture for the reader with your descriptions. Keep going and I'm sure you will attract more readers. I really look forward to seeing where you are taking this story.
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Thank you! Truth be told, my nerves were a jangle. I wasn't sure if I'd pass the submission criteria and while this isn't my first rodeo, it's been years since I last tried writing fanfiction. I was just about to force myself to stop fretting and get off the site for a while, so your kind comment has put my mind at ease. I'll do my best with the next chapter to make sure it lives up to expectations!