While Twilight was enjoying a well-deserved vacation from her duties as a princess in the Crystal Empire and perhaps using her time to investigate an enigmatic flower, she never imagined that the discovery of something shocking would end up returning her to where it all began, literally.
Now, she intends to stop the threat posed by that being, even if it must be necessary to do it alone.
But regardless, she just wasn't ready for it.
Nopony was prepared to end up in an unknown place, no one was prepared to deal with the King of the Shadows himself, let alone none were ready to face the consequences that would bring.
After all, who would be ready to start having feelings for whom they shouldn't?
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Here's the link to the story on Wattpad:
https://www.wattpad.com/story/328881716?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=share_writing&wp_page=create&wp_uname=darigf03
Alot of grammar mistakes, also you labeled the flower as a her and sometimes referred Twilight as a he and sometimes used "he" or "she" when it should be "it" or "they".
I will be waiting for future chapters, this story is interesting and I like it.
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Thank you for pointing out my mistake.
Ya... An idiot.
Twilight was the most powerful unicorn, now she is an Allicorn with more power than any unicorn can dream of, not to mention she also has earth pony magic and Pegasus magic meaning she's stronger and faster mentally and physically in every way possible.
It's always Shining Armor that pisses me off the most in almost every story because of his stupidity, I mean seriously, Twilight saved Equestria and the Crystal Empire, let alone the entire planet multiple times! What did Shining Armor do that could possibly top that? NOTHING!
It annoys me that Shining Armor just thinks that as the older brother it's his duty to look out for his sister, she is a frickin Alicorn! A powerful one at that, more powerful than Cadance and possibly more powerful than Luna. She is the element of frickin magic! AGH! It's like everything Twilight have ever done doesn't matter and that Shining Armor is the boss of everything, it was him who nearly doomed all of Equestria when it came to his own wedding because he didn't listen to her sister! Who does that!?
I really needed to get that out of my system.
Anyways I'll be waiting for the next chapter, I can already tell were getting to the interesting bits now.
The story starts off great, let's see how it goes. I'm keeping my fingers crossed.
I have a question, is there a chance that a link to the original on Wattpad could be included ?
Can you blame her? How does Twilight not have PTSD or any sort of trauma or nightmares whatsoever with everything she has been through in just a couple years? Honestly I find this impossible, with Equestria being all sunshine and rainbows until Nightmare Moon showed up, you would think that the possibility of having trauma would be higher than it is in real life.
Seriously, how does Twilight sleep!?
Ok so multiple things.
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I'll see if I can do it.
Do you also have an account on Ficwad.com?
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Not really.
Kinda funny how this could have been avoided if Shining Armor simply just let his sister travel with him.
Dumbass...
Honestly I'm glad it came around and bought him in the flank. Twilight isn't a filly anymore who needs protection, if anything she's now the one doing the protection.
The reason why I hate an overprotective Shining Armor so much is simply because Twilight is now immortal, if Shining Armor continuesly tries protecting Twilight so much then she won't be able to protect herself when Twilight is over 100 years old.
Atleast it would be an outcome if Twilight was as dumb, naive, stubborn, and arrogant as her brother. Luckily she isn't.
I always questioned how in the world are they siblings? Twilight really doesn't fit into her family at all, she looks like Twilight Velvet but her personality is completely different.
Ugh, I really need to get Shining Armor out of my head, Author's makes almost every story featuring Shining Armor to be annoying and overprotective as possible.
I don't really have anything to say about the chapter itself, not much to comment on. Still curious about the flowers though and where Twilight and Spike are.
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Two things:
I agree with you about Shining, at least in part. And as to where they are, it will be seen in the next chapters.
For now I hope you enjoy it.
I think that's a valid quastion and reasoning. It's always good to know what dangers you are going to face and how to avoid them, don't know why Sombra is so upset.
He should have warned her of the dangers beforehand then, maybe say "don't use magic or you will potentially die"?
Do I need to clarify why and how much this angers me? Uuugh. Nevermind.
Already know who those are.
I am so glad I do not have any siblings, especially one that would be older than me.
The more and more I read stories featuring Shining Armor and Twilight, the more I'm glad I don't have a sibling.
Excited about next chapter, that is if it focuses back on Twilight. I'm more curious where the Romance tag kicks in, that will be exciting.
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I have a younger brother and even though I love him, sometimes he's a total pain in the ass.
We won't see our protagonists until chapter nine, but I plan to publish it along with chapter eight.
And as for the Romance tag... We'll see how it goes, I don't want to give spoilers.
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Guessing chapter 8 will be focused on the main 6?
Having a younger sibling is probably not as bad as having an older sibling, that would probably suck.
Although in the MLP universe everything is all sunshine and rainbows (mostly until Twilight decided to come along and bring all the chaos with her) so siblings are probably 1000x more overprotective there then here. Especially when that sibling was the captain of the royal guard, although Shining Armor is only prince because of Cadance and Twilight became Princess because she accended, I think that technically means she outranks him, plus he is a unicorn only good at shields when Twilight is an Alicorn and is litterly good at everything involving magic, including shields.
Actually now that I think about it, Shining Armor's cutie mark is probably his destiny for being overprotective as hell.
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Yep, it will focus on them.
I guess they wanted to act out the typical stereotype of the overprotective big brother with Shining Armor. Well, at least he cares about her.
Oh so they get to join you, why?
Do I have to mention that Twilight is an Alicorn? Immortal, more powerful than any Unicorn, more powerful and supposedly faster then most if not all Pegasus, and Stronger than any Earth Pony? I really hope that at some point in this story, Shining Armor and Twilight has a long talk about why Twilight is more than capable of making her own decisions. And if Shining disagrees than I would love to see Shining Armor and Twilight engaging in a duel with Shining Armor losing in 10 seconds.
Not even Sombra? That's new, not much information to go off with, it could either be dangerous or it could surprise them in either a bad way or a good way, or a more surprising way such as if they are in the past. I'm wondering if they traveled back in time, earlier they said ponies so if it's 1 specific type of pony instead of all 3 types of ponies living in 1 village than that would confirm they are in the past probably before Celestia and Luna was born and when all 3 pony tribes all lived separately.
Also I was not expecting 2 chapters in 1 day, that's interesting.
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Hahaha, that would be fun to see.
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I said I'd post it together, for more pleasure.
And we'll see a lot more about that later, of course.
Volcano? Oh you got to be kidding me.
How did they not know they were on a volcano? And why is it now deciding to become active?
It's not a volcano really.
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But that will be seen later in the next chapter.
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Well if it's not a volcano than I don't know what it is, unless it's a dragon.
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Remember, they're not in Equestria so it can be anything.
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Is it somepony, something, or someone?
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It's probably a something caused by something else, after all the noise of their fight couldn't go unnoticed.