Anon befriends the apple family while working on their farm. Applejack gets a little more than she bargained for.
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Great chapter.
11843969
Indeed, jolly good show.
Hello.
Loving the story so far. I always appreciate a good romance, and this is one I'll be looking forward for updates.
The couple is adorable and it's building up greatly. You write the little moments and interactions really well, so it doesn't feel like the relationship is being forced and/or rushed just for the sake of the plot. It all feels natural.
Putting the couple aside, not a moment of the story is boring. All interactions with other characters help to get immersed even more, be them sad, funny or just casual. (If Apple Bloom calls him dad, I'm gonna squeal).
Really glad that they are going to the town, I feel that the story has been centered to much around the farm and the Apples. I know it's just seven chapters long at the moment, but the appearance of Twilight and Rarity kinda shone because they helped to develop even more interactions between the couple, so more characters would be welcome. Maybe some POV changes if you feel like it, you're doing a great job, so you can just ignore this.
Thanks for not jumping straight to the clop (if there is going to be any), that ruins a lot of stories. The pace of the plot in that aspect is okay.
Haven't really read your other stories, but I'm gonna give them a try. Hope to read you soon.
Best wishes!
:D
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Thanks for the longer review, and I'm really glad you're liking it! I'm especially happy to hear you're liking the "little moments" so much.
There won't be any POV changes in this story, it's all centered around Anon, but there are definitely more characters coming later.
> Thanks for not jumping straight to the clop
Some would say I waited too long to get to the clop lmao. We'll see what y'all think when we finally get there. But there definitely is some--that's why the tag is there. Figured I'd set expectations early instead of changing the tags once we finally got there.
As for my other stories, I'm really happy with Supper with the Sun, even if it is short. If you get around to reading A Dubious Welcome, do let me know what you think of it as you go along, I love hearing people's thoughts and reactions on my stories. Equestrian Railroad is on hiatus until I finish this story.
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Gotta agree a lot with you.
About the adjustment period, I have to say that a lot of stories begin with that (not all equal, but pretty similar), making reading those introductions feel like a chore, since not everyone can make it work well (even in good stories, I have had to force me to read them).
I repeat: 'Just introductions'. The adjustment is really important in HiE stories. There are great ways to play with it, be it flashbacks, little mentions or full conversations.
I feel that in this story, a full conversation would play really well. The autor seems to know how to hook readers with 'go with the moment' interactions.
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LMAO i said almost the exact same thing a few comments down
Why does this feel like some self insert? The whole family thing just feels a little cliché.
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That's because it is.
The "abused Anon" has appeared in a number of stories.
Does that stop me from reading them? Nope.