Tonight, in Twilight's crystal castle, Fluttershy and Rarity sleepover to hear about a very odd, obscure, and cryptic story written on a single piece of parchment that follows a bird who serves as the main character.
No pony knows where the eerie story originated from as all names and locations or any references are either mysteriously scratched out or simply vacant from the page, but one thing is for sure: Whatever had happened to the bird is alien and frightening.
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This was an interesting story with a promising premise, although the execution was not very impressive. My biggest complaint is that the story feels too fast and too explicit. There is too much information dumped too quickly, both in terms of atmosphere and plot, and with regards to the story-within-a-story that is the centerpiece of the plot. It would have been very impactful if their reactions to it had not been so explicit. Leaving the true meaning of the story up to the reader's interpretation would have made it much more haunting. The Star in Yellow is a good example of doing this sort of thing well.
Beyond that, I also wanted to mention that the way the Blackbird story is written makes you think it's supposed to be a poem, and yet it is clearly prose. I know it would have been a lot more work to do so, but at least making that story rhyme would have added a lot to the atmosphere. I also wanted to nitpick about Twilight's comments that the story "predates ponies". If the story is that old, then why is it in a language that she can read? Surely if she can read it, then she must at least be familiar with the culture that produced it?
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Haha, good on ya for pointing out that stuff. I guess I did drop the ball on this story after reading what you had to say, and you are right. The story would have benefited as a poem and it would be very mysterious If I hadn't made Twilight and her friends figure it out so quickly. It does feel rushed, doesn't it?