"A solar marine?" I don't know whether to be thrilled at the direction this story is taking or to be face-palming. I will still like to read more though.
Err... gosh. That was different, not really what I was expecting out of this. It was a bit of an abrupt change. I think I'll try to stick with this since I can't help but wonder where this could possibly go. Maybe he was dreaming after watching a cheesy action flick?
I will say that you've got the right idea, write what you want how you want. The best stories are always good because the author wanted to spend time writing and didn't feel forced.
3178206 Daughter is Dinky, Ditzy is Derpy. Two different names, either works. Friend likes Ditzy Better and did before they "fixed" it, so that's what I used.
so, can we expect more? I like where this is going.
Edit: I really hope you haven't abandoned this, this is the best 2nd person I've ever read. I'd continue it (with permission, of course.) If I wasn't such a bad writer.
It might be just me, but this ruined the story. I mean, it was nice, having Ditzy find someone who loves her, then all of a sudden, a Changeling attack? This is just random at its finest and ruins the main plot of the story.
I liked this story when it was just about something romantic, not when it suddenly changes to something completely random in literally 5 seconds.
I still like the story, but in my honest opinion, you should not continue with where this story is going.
well that was an interesting turn of events. also the last line made me laugh.
2970271 But do I continue with this turn of events or do I I fix it with something else?
2970304 well I would like to see where this goes.
"A solar marine?"
I don't know whether to be thrilled at the direction this story is taking or to be face-palming. I will still like to read more though.
2970705 Yeah. See, this is why I stopped while I was ahead. Because dayum.
Nice please continue
Seems pretty interesting, those changelings are screwed.
I like where this is heading and plus "solar marine" that sounds awesome. Changelings are so screwed
I like where this is heading and plus "solar marine" that sounds awesome. Changelings are so screwed
MORE WITH THE SOLAR MARINE DIRECTION!
2970777>>2972234>>2972193
Well okay then. gimme a few days and I'll have this up to around 6k. Maybe. Probably not. But I'll make it bigger.
Ok, I'll bite. Lets see what goes down.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Marines hell yeah also continue.
I am liking this.......I approve, and wish for more.
Solar marine !! That sounds awesome !!!
One does not simply...
Well placed use of a meme. Continue.
3126280
I shall
OMG write more please!!!!!
Err... gosh. That was different, not really what I was expecting out of this. It was a bit of an abrupt change. I think I'll try to stick with this since I can't help but wonder where this could possibly go.
Maybe he was dreaming after watching a cheesy action flick?I will say that you've got the right idea, write what you want how you want. The best stories are always good because the author wanted to spend time writing and didn't feel forced.
I must has more
3147449 There will be more sooner or later.
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I like this, this is awesome
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Good to hear friend
Semper fi . . .
Reminds me strongly of Warhammer 40k
I played Soulstorm way too long it seems For the Empress of the Sun! Death the
hereticschangelings!Your story feels autentic and displays the emotions very well. I´ll be looking forward for more chapters.
Does this refer to that annoying cleaned up name for derpy, or is this referring to her daughter Ditzy.
3178206 Daughter is Dinky, Ditzy is Derpy. Two different names, either works. Friend likes Ditzy Better and did before they "fixed" it, so that's what I used.
3245863 I don't know. Ponies are magic bro.
Things.... Just.... Got.... Awesome!!!!!! More!!!
That's a Warhammer 40K reference is it not? Space marine?
3335491 Tots is.
so, can we expect more? I like where this is going.
Edit: I really hope you haven't abandoned this, this is the best 2nd person I've ever read. I'd continue it (with permission, of course.) If I wasn't such a bad writer.
It might be just me, but this ruined the story. I mean, it was nice, having Ditzy find someone who loves her, then all of a sudden, a Changeling attack? This is just random at its finest and ruins the main plot of the story.
I liked this story when it was just about something romantic, not when it suddenly changes to something completely random in literally 5 seconds.
I still like the story, but in my honest opinion, you should not continue with where this story is going.
3545705
No, it is not just you. Why go the route of W40k anyway?
I can't help but feel I just got slapped with 40K of Gary Stu.
4760111 Good thing it was all a dream.