Octavia's daughter is dead. Murdered by her boyfriend, a member of the most powerful mafia in Manehattan. After burying her, Octavia is resolute in her next decision. She has decided that she will join the mafia that was responsible with one goal in mind: find the stallion that murdered her daughter, and kill him. But if she is to join the mafia, she is to become a criminal herself, participating in smuggling, bribery, intimidation, torture, and even murder. All to answer one question.: How far would you go to avenge someone you love?
Chapters (1)
Excellent. Little to no grammar errors, Deep and engaging plot. Simple, Excellent.
Well that escalated quickly.
Favoriting, but only because I wanna see where this goes. Still not sure how I feel about it just yet...
well written, engaging, and overall enjoyable.
Ooooo I can't wait to see what happens next!! Will she be like batman and realize killing wont help?
You clawed me into this story like a cat playing with its ball. I'm favouriting this
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It's one of those stories that starts at the end, and then tells what leads up to that moment.
Sorry if that wasn't clear.
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No, I got that much. Just... Again, not sure how I feel about this just yet.
I'll let you know by the next chapter or... Four.
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Oh. Okay then. Hope you like it.
Two mistakes, for atleast what I found.
1. Also, funny enough, that was the street where I stood. I stood there in my best suit, waiting for someone. And that someone was late. Just due to the fact that you said somepony before this, it would make sence to continue it through the story. Keep it thorough, ya' know?
2. A Thompson submachine gun, and a beautiful one at that. I think the correct way would be to remove the extra "and" in there.
Other then that, I really liked it. I've always thought Octavia was the best pony. Nonetheless, cant wait to see how it got to this point
-Thatonerandompony
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Thanks. I'll fix those.
On hiatus? Noooooooo
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Sorry. I did a blog post about this. You might wanna check that out for the reasoning.