Equestria has been taken over the by Demon Scortatus. In order to protect her friends from the omnipotent stallion, Twilight agrees to a bet. Will she able to withstand her trials? Or will she give in and join in the debauchery?
You let your friend down Twilight. I hate to say it but you did. Tsk tsk tsk. For shame my dear. For shame. Doesn't it hurt being so weak? Unable to do anything? Doesn't it absolutely tear at your soul unable to help your friends and teach those that impose on them a lesson? You should have blasted em apart Twilight.
Which is why I keep saying, stop trying to hide from your power! Its the key to making sure Equestria doesn't suffer from ponies like them and so you can protect your friends! Yes its a dark power so what? Didn't you use dark Magic to find the Crystal Heart back at the Crystal Empire long ago? It's not all that different now. Its just using what you have or have learned to pave the way forward to success!
You shouldn't tolerate ponies like that. You should let your power speak for you. How else will you become the rightful ruler of equestria and kick Scorpy's tail off of that throne? That shouldn't be him up there! That should be you. If you just LISTEN Twilight! We can help. Or at least I can. You just have to say it. Say the magic word Twilight. All it takes.
10690251 That is unfortunately what is slightly a turnoff for me. I might like Male dom but Fall of Equestria was just toxic. Truthfully I'm staying in Hope's this changes to a more Twilight dominant role.
I was iffy on Twilight being forced to engage in sex acts because it felt rushed. But you balanced it out perfectly with Twilight berating Celestia for giving up, but she understood why Celestia caved so easily when she was put in the same situation. Now Twilight feels what Celestia is feeling. Speaking of which, will we see how Luna is fairing? It seems unfair to assume Luna submitted easily just because Celestia did. I always thought she would resist far more. It would be a good twist if Luna stayed defiant and Twilight turns the tables on the bet. Then, twilight would announce she would look Luna than Celestia from then onward.
10690251 10690267 Well, I don't like FoE and in my opinion, maledom doesn't make something like it. At the very least, I make sure that the story doesn't pretend that what is happening to Twilight and her friends is something "good". Scortatus is a villain, plain and simple and he doesn't win, because he has a cock and is supposedly "right", but because he is powerful and exploits issues that have developed under Celestia's rule. And why he is so powerful is one of the central questions...
This is smut and maledom elements are going to be a thing. But if you're worried that this is going to be FoE 2.0, that's unnecessary. But keep in mind, that Maledom was put in the description for a reason. I like writing it. And as mentioned, this does not mean that dominant females are not going to be a thing.
So, please don't compare it to FoE. At the very least, I try to write something more engaging.
10690276 We will get to Luna eventually, don't worry. How she is and what will happen, well...can't say that obviously.
Also, I'm glad that the scene worked as intended. I must confess, I was a bit worried about it, too, but I thought it would make sense to show why Celestia did what she did and explain that it is more than just "lol, she is a slut!"
See I’d be tempted to wanna do a crossover chapter with my guy who’s bound to 4 demons but knowing them they would end up fighting and making things way worse
10690282 I'm not saying that I dislike Scortatus, just scenes like Thunderlanes were they are dominant because of a literal or metaphorical knife to someone throat. I just prefer Male dom were the male is dominant simply by making the lady feel like they should surrender, not because of a threat hanging over their head.
10690307 This wasn't really possible in this scene. Not just because of Thunderlanes character but because Twilight herself would not submit to anypony without being forced at the current stage. And as mentioned already, it also was a good way of showing why submission was preferable to some and that it easy to talk about rebellion, until you yourself are in the situation.
I can't make a story like this not contain violence. It is a hostile takeover by a demon, who aims to corrupt and oppress. And making ponies submit without threats or serious consequences would feel weird and cheap. And ironically enough, move this closer into FoE territory, which I do not want.
Essentially, there are going to be scenes that will not feel "nice". They are unavoidable if I want to keep this smut-story in the semi-realistic way I currently write it. Things will shift eventually. Depending on how it goes quickly or slowly. But for now, Twilight would not submit without a serious threat.
If this isn't to your taste, I apologize. I do my best to make this as engaging as possible.
I am stating now though I for one am hoping for a corrupted Twilight that defeats Scortatus and lead to corrupting the rest of the planet with some honeyed words instead of a club. The carrot rather than the stick. Also because it can work this way by her seeing herself as the lesser of two evils. Subtly changing and corrupting the resistances rather than killing and raping.
10690282 10690267 Well, I'm going to go ahead here and say I like FoE a lot, and MaleDom in general, in many different forms. FoE, your story here, DarkGal, my own story where everyone is sliding into it without noticing...; please don't hate me for it? By the way, DarkGal, I think you're doing pretty well from a writing standpoint. Definitely better than My Little Corruption, which I also loved when it was alive and worked to drive with the comments. It's so nice to see the idea continued!
You know Twilight has demon powers right. After what i just read if Twilight is pushed enough she will become a demon of wrath and will be a bigger threat than a high powered demon of lust like Scortus and you know now i want that to happen. She is being pushed to the breaking point she and her friend just got raped by stallions that basically said "yeah we never cared about mares ever, we just never acted on our instincts to use you because we feared Celestia and Luna's powers, but since they've been defeated we are now going to act on our instincts to treat mares like sluts and oneholes because Scortus said we can". I know what Twilight to succomb to her demonic powers but not the way Scortus wants her too. I want to see the Demon of Wrath Twilight Sparkle. I want to see fear in his eyes when she succombs and i want him to realize "Damn on hindsight i shouldn't have given demonic power to a mare who is already pissed at me for taking her world and corrupting her friends in front of her. I wanted a submissibe succubus to fuck and dominated. Not a very powerful demon of Wrath" and I want that to be his last thought when the monster he created kills him.
After all you can't be lustful when you are so angry that all other emotions are shutdown or likely in this case destroyed. I want this to happen even though i know what the consequences will be. But hell, it's better than what Scortus wants to happen to Twilight and Equestria.
If I was Twilight in this chapter i would've murdered all but one to send a message to Scortus with this for him to hear "Leave my friends alone. If you so much as lay a hand on them as in YOUR hands or anycreature working with or for you. I will kill them and let these demonic energies you foolishly gave me consume me but not the way you want me too. I will become a Demon like you hope but not the demon you want me to become. I will become a demon of hatred, wrath, and with no remorse. I'll kill you no matter who stands in my way including my friends because you know a creature with nothing to lose or gain will fight with everything they got and will either kill you or die trying! You have been warned leave them alone this is a fight between you and me" That is what i'd do if i was Twilight Sparkle in this chapter.
Good work i haven't felt this emotional over a story in a while. I look forward to your next chapter.
I really disliked this chapter, it's not really the way I expected for things to go. Does Scortatus know what the convent is saying to Twilight? *******
Twilight Sparkle. You have no idea how to wield power. That was pathetic.
DEMONS DO NOT GET HUMILIATED BY MORTALS!
And you are a demon now make no mistake, a demon bound in a challenge to one of our most powerful. You may be titleless now, in a year you will either be a princess, a queen, or at worst a favorite in Scortatus harem. If you should die by actions inspired by Scortatus, he would suffer for it. Test your limits, leading a rebellion may not be allowed but the behavior of a demon is not the behavior of a demon. Simply threatening his soldiers may not be something you can do without angering him
Ripping the dick off a stallion who displeased you, and stuffing it down his own throat might get a laugh however
You should remind those that challenge you that they have choices in their actions unless Scortatus directly commands it. They should choose to anger you as little as possible while still pleasing him.
This makes no sense. I have observed this world and its inhabitants for some time and I have never seen anything to suggest that Thunderlane, Pokey, or especially Bulk Biceps would ever act in this manner. If you say that they had begun to act in such a manner before Scortatus's reign began, then I fear there was already something fundamentally wrong with your world. Some sort of corruption that had begun to seep in. This may even be what gave Scortatus the opening he needed to break his bonds. Discovering the source of this corruption may hold the key to achieving your victory. I suggest that you start doing what you do best. Research.
"My, my, princess. Injustice would love your new outfit. It's right up her alley, one might say. But ah, forgive me for teasing. Your temper's been tested plenty today."
*He raises his arms in a placating gesture, smiling mildly and blinking milky-white eyes almost the same hue as his coat. The stallion absently brushes away at the finely-made sky-blue robes draped over his form—garments fit for royalty, much like the crown resting on his brow—though there was... movement in them, almost like there could be more arms hidden beneath the cloth*
"Good on you for keeping it in check, too. Contrary to what some of my fellow spirits suggest, going full-out on the stallions around you for taking advantage of Scortatus's new rules is foolish. Not just because he likely has his eyes on you, but also for the simple reason that you do not know if he has not influenced them as he has your friends. Think, Princess Twilight: When did Bulk Biceps strike you as a sadistic rapist slaver in the making..? This is a stallion Fluttershy wasn't afraid of. Fluttershy! And now, he can't wait to shove his, ahem, bulk down an unwilling mare's throat?"
*He slowly shakes his head*
"No. There is more going on. Things you can't see—yet. And if that's true, then other ponies are in danger too. Not just ponies, everycreature. Such as your dear dragon youngling.
The one you unthinkingly, deeply, hurtfully insulted. How? Well, why don't you use your eidetic memory? Go back over what you said—here's a hint, 8 inches—and think about his reaction.
Before much else, Twilight Sparkle, you must see to that. When you return, he might not be there anymore. If that's the case, he most likely went out to be comforted; and since he knows you went to Rarity, he will have gone to somepony else... or somecreature else. The one he can share his troubles with; Gabby, the mail carrier Griffon. If Spike is with Gabby, and he feels insecure about his masculinity, they might go further than they would normally go. Which brings us back to the matter of Scortatus."
*Spreading his arms wide, another additional two pairs push out from their hiding in his sleeves before vanishing back inside the kingly robes*
"Spike is hurt. He feels inadequate. He feels out of control. He may wish to regain control. And dragons are prone to greed; Injustice loves them dearly. If Scortatus's influence permeates Ponyville, it could lead Spike to act out in ways more and more similar to Thunderlane, Bulk, and Pierce. Is this not worth investigating, oh patron of science?
"I need not remind you that Spike is Equestria's direct link to Dragon Lord Ember and King Thorax, both of whom are extremely susceptible to his mood and actions, do I?
"I suggest to you, Princess Twilight, that you use the opportunity. Test out whether Spike has a growing need to dominate. If he's home, try to be accomodating. See if he takes advantage of such, to take advantage of you. If my theory is correct, he will not just feel lust for your body, but for the sensation of proving his dominance over you. He might ask that you clean instead of him, and do so without magic, and then watch you stretch up and bend over and kneel on the ground, all the while ogling your curves. He might make you apologise to him first, perhaps going so far as having you humiliate yourself in the process; calling yourself silly, saying you have dick on the mind. He might try to trick you into letting him eat you with his eyes, asking you to stand still for him, turn around, bend over, strip, grope you, all under the pretense of 'cataloguing your changes'.
"Either as part of the above or in place of it, test his reaction to the idea of dominance/submission play. You have books on that topic, do you not? If not, you will now. Trust me. There will be plenty depictions of many females in submissive, restrained poses; mares, dragonesses, Griffons, Hippogriffs, Seaponies, even a trio of Sirens. They posed for it once. Show it to him and gauge how eager he is to know more. If Scortatus is spreading his influence, Spike will most likely be VERY interested in this book and others like it.
"And if he isn't home? Seek out Gabby. That's where he will be. Don't confront him. Watch. Is Spike beginning to be more dominant with her? Telling her to kneel and breathe in the scent of his dragon nuts as he gripes about your hurtful words, after tying her hands behind her back with her own shirt? Then you know he's probably being influenced right now. And if that's the case, any and all males in Ponyville might be compromised.
I've seen enough. I don't know if Scortatus was shaping this world from his confinement or if more metanarrative forces are at work, but any hope it presents for an outcome aside from the obvious is clearly a farce. Good eon, sir or madam.
(Sorry, but the transparent character derailment and absurd gender ratio killed it for me. And I'm not a big maledom fan in any case. Good luck going forward.)
I'm hoping for some more mental changes, like arousal or libido? maybe a little cock-curiosity? Either way liking the story so far, perfect balance of plot and smut i'm curious to see how trixie and starlight fared, i think they fell in the first chapter? not sure.
I already had a small OOC bit at the top of my post, but I wanted to add some more.
Honestly this chapter didn't do much for me. I mean, oh Scortatus says he's not going to corrupt or brainwash anyone, but fortunately for him a ton of stallions are already corrupt. How convenient.
It's a swing I wasn't expecting and it lowered my interest a lot. The time frame you set up, one year, with the pace you had things happening already seemed like an overly stretched out thing, now you have Twilight being tormented by good ponies within a few weeks(at most!) of the the beginning?
You've got a demon at the top of the food chain, making up societal issues for Twi to have to deal with adds nothing to this
and regarding some of your above comments
If you felt this story should have violence thenwhy did have an unseen event(New Coltsville) give reasons not to have violence right at the beginning.
And if you mean sexual violence, well why? You started this story with Scortatsus turning everyone but Twilight, and Luna who wasn't present, into obedient demon sluts. Why do that if he gets off on unwilling sexual violence?
Heck I got more hooked on drama than eroticism in this story, and I like it, in My little corruption sometimes I despaired because I felt that it was moving very slowly and unfortunately we had not even corrupted any of the mane six there, which I like your story is that it goes at a good pace, combining drama with eroticism, and I'm serious, many just want to get to the "porn" part, and that doesn't happen here. I really care about everything in this story, which MLC does. It got in the penultimate chapters before it was abandoned without disrespecting its creator (Does anyone know what happened to Nohen?) I liked the chapter and it is worth waiting for one every week, so that the rhythm is not lost, and one question, are there monsters, demonic beasts imps, Minotaurs or some kind of creature stalking Twilight? We know that scortatus does not play fair.
Oh hohoho! How delightful! Seems my influence won out in the end for those breasts of yours. Still though I had hoped that my suggestion to make them at least the size of your head would of gone through. Oh well there's always the next round of voting. Although I have to say I'm not quite pleased with your response to the debauchery. You should be more like that refined lady Rarity and listen to that brute Thunderlane, accepting of the truth. That mares had abused the stallions of Equestria. You may not agree, but condemning the majority to live lonely lives with no real love to give or receive isn't exactly a peaceful utopia you believe Equestria to be. At least now it's far easier, just take what you want. It's not my style of course, I prefer the more...subversive measures. But it is what it is. Also I have to say that my bets seem to be going rather well lately that I'm not quite sure what to do next. Perhaps if you were to...entice me, I would be tempted to influence the next round of betting to better make it easier on you Miss Sparkle. Embrace your new assets and maybe I'll be tempted. Anyway, good luck my sweet and just know that if you fail Rarity will be in very refined hands. Taa taa!
Here I am, trying to be a civil demon, something that is very hard to do in my current state, and you go and wish to insult me?
I understand that you may be ill-tempered in your current state, hell knows that skullfuck that Thunderlane gave you deserves a spot in a hall of fame or something, but you must understand something, dear Twilight.
I am not the worst demon in here
As you can see, not once have I been of ill-mannered to you. Ill-speaking? Yes, this is my job, to degrade you and to make you a cock bitch by the years end. But have I ever gone ahead and threatened you, ma'am? Unlike my colleagues, who seem to be very vocal in what they wish to do to you, I am mearly here, talking and conversing. If I was as ill-tempered as your friend Sunset Shimmer was, I'd have gone to you in your sleep and fucked you in the dreamscape until you can't tell Rarity and Spike apart from one another.
But, I digress. It is not of my good interests to go and attempt to talk of goodwill and then act in the other manner. Miss Sparkle, if but nothing else let me leave you with something.
360 days until your deadline. 360 days of increased sex, degeneration, humiliation, temptation. If you have already caved to the debased works of Thunderlane, who is to say you can last the remaining time?
Again, as a show of faith, I would have abstained from this vote, but it seems my dear good demon friends have lopsided the last one and we have been stripped of that ability temporarily.
Good day, ma'am, do not keep us Covenant waiting.
Also, 1) What study says that 15 inches is the national average, do you understand that that is almost a foot and 1/4? That would surely rip off the balls of any decent demon. And 2) Eh, if I'm a loser in hell, at least I'm not the loser sucking on demon cock
10690813 My reasoning for the sexual violence (apart from it being one of the tags for this story) was that early on it wouldn't make sense for Twilight to submit, without some threat. Essentially, have a break in there to make her realize what kind of situation this is and that just straight heroics will not work in this case. And show why mares like Celestia submitted, instead of resisting.
The other part is that you have to keep in mind that neither Scortatus nor Thunderlane are reliable sources of information. The first one is a demon, whose morality and empathy is non-existent. And the second one is a sexually frustrated homophobe. I will address Thunderlanes claims in the next chapter, but he is supposed to be unlikeable and supposed to be a vile character. Things like who is a good pony and who are collaborators and why will be explored further into the story.
In the end, I apologize if some didn't like the direction for Thunderlanes character, but given that he used a lot for such things in other stories and that his and other background-ponies personality aren't really established, I had to give somepony the "OOC"-treatment. But I will keep your and the others feedback in mind and try to improve on the story. Just keep in mind, that heavier scenes and themes will continue to pop up. That, sadly, is the direction I plan on taking this story in general. It is an exploration of how a smutty take-over of Equestria would/could happen and how everypony would react to it.
10690849 "Want to see my more exotic minions? Hmm...maybe I'll send them down to her at some point. Minotaurs would make for some good muscle. Gonna look into that!"
You know, I hate to be a bother when you probably could use some positivity, but it is rather rude to willfully take someone's advise and then act opposite it, even unwittingly. Case and point: Spike's 8 inches. His joking and staring might not be a blessing to you now, but you will roped into a lot worse before this year is out, and when you mix in absolutely crushing his ego, even inadvertently, you have to realize you may be hurting his sexual development, not to mention his emotional and psychological well being. So, I reiterate, make sure he's okay. Don't just let him shrug you off or walk away, sit down with him and have a proper talk. Prove to him that you didn't mean to hurt him, and that length really isn't that big a deal in a world full of people of all different and interesting shapes and sizes. You could also stroke his ego a bit by pointing out that in time, he's certainly going to outstrip the average stallion.
Still, thank you for sharing. Some of us have to do our information gathering the old fashioned way, and as much watching your misadventures is entertaining, watching your every waking moment means missing out on good opportunities and the limited lives that we do otherwise lead. As you've deduced though, your emotions, and possibly even those experienced by others, will strengthen you, but you need to remember that sins, such as Wrath, are dangerous obstacles on your journey. They will provide some aid in an emergency, but you mustn't let them so easily become crutches.
Back to the topic of concern though, Spike. He'll likely seek out something to nurse his ego, and with his limited friends, that basically leaves books. Considering how well stocked a library you have, and the fact that you know the national average penis length off hand, I'd wager you have some positively pornographic and up to date anatomy books within your collection. Perhaps after a quick comparison, he may decide the variety in there is superior to that of his private collection, and decide to add it to his collection, as something of a hoard.
By way, that was a saucy dream earlier, it's just a shame how dreadfully it ended, and that the real dragon in question is probably taken by that cute courier griffon, whose status is hither to unknown. Unrelated biology question, can a dragon's growth be bolstered by emotions or sins other than just Greed?
Only proper lewd suggestion I've got for Twilight is her possibly huffing some underwear out of curiosity, seeing as she's got some newfound interest in musk.
10690938 my dear fellow you are comparing yourself to ponies, just because your genetailia is simply to weak for such girth and length does not mean theirs is not. "above average" as you believe yourself to be here, they and their physiology need not give a shit about that.
that said it is suspisios that you are being answered with such regularity. i feel the overlord may be watching our comments, and is purposly twisting what she gets for his own ends. this is... not ideal. especally as several of us, my self included, have been openly trecherios. something he must expect but one that will have... consiquenses should he succeed. what once was a move of ambition may now have become survival.
as to why your comments seem to be getting thru... i have a feeling its to both ensure she does not come to trust us and work with us against him. perhaps in hopes of further engendering hostilities between us. this would be exactly what that prick would do, as well as my other assumption, he enjoys laughing at you and is using Twilight and your own bravado to make a fool of you for his entertainment.
if i am right, and i feel i am... this is as infuriating as it is distressing. any thing we say will be monitored by the over lord, with only select comments either slipping by him, or what ever he personally desires getting thru in order to stack the deck in HIS favor. look at the comment about spike that went ignored. no doubt this was to set up a fall down the line with young spike, while making sure that she had just enough warning to blame herself when her relationship with her most trusted adviser collapses. (edited) the fact that you share the same size, and thus her mockery of you would also come off as a mockery of said assistant, also did not get past my notice. he has used the both of you to set up a fall while giving Twilight just enough of a "warning" that she will blame herself when spike falls to corruption. and as enjoyable as such thing often are to watch, i think we can all agree that being used by a third party to cause it for THEIR enjoyment, with us being as much puppets as the so call toy, is unexpectable.
in summery, it would seem that if we wish to gain any foot hold with our potential weapon beyond these votes, we will have to do something rather anathema to our kind. we will have to cooperate, form a unified plan, and work in unision twords that collective goal, failing that form a coalition of enough of us to try to swing things in our favor.
alright, since its unlikely for us to congregate before our next viewing, i will make another attempt to speak to miss twilight.
twilight, can you hear me. hmm, it has come to my attention that our messages might be being monitored by the over lord. i know not the means that determines what gets thru to you, and if my message does i fear for why, he may be seeking to discredit me amongst my fellows at my suggestion that he is twisting whats gets thru to you in order to pit us against each other and ensure that meaningful cooperation between our camps against him will be impossible, all while pushing you and us twords his desired out come.
we... well i am attempting to create a coalition over here in order to assist you, for if he is monitoring and controlling what gets thru to you... well lets just say many of us are on your side, the breasts were the best of a bad lot, which would have seen potential mental degradation. in deed if he is viewing what we are saying and voting he may find us... disloyal. and while such things are to be expected from our kind... they do not go without punishment. my fate is likely already sealed, as is a few of ours. should he succeed over you what lies in wait for us will be most unpleasant. if you can have any trust in us then trust that we will assist you out of our own desires for self preservation.
(edit) punishments the over lord throws out to his own kind are far worse then what you have seen. from centuries of being on the edge of cumming but never able to until it breaks the will of even the mightiest of demons, to the more simple tortures of baths in lava buring away at us for eons. the worst punishment tho is the void. no sound, not touch, no sight. it is nothing. even hours there can break a mortal mind into insanity as the sensory deprivation and loneliness eats away at the mind and soul... and to those he holds especial ire towards will be thrown in and forgotten. if there is a fate far worse then Tartarus, it is that, and should you fail those of us who have sought to assist you may find such an end to be our fate. i have seen those i might call friend subjected to it before, even a few month in it left them... unrecognizable. if there is one thing that sparks fear in even the highest of us... it is that. death would be a mercy compared to the void.
i have no reason to expect you will get this, but they say you miss every swing you don't take, and my fate is in your hands now twilight. lets hope i backed the right pony.
I guess I just feel like Thunderlane and Bulk Biceps characters are better defined than you do. Thunderlane's a Wonderbolt who was held up as a good example to colts and fillies who were afraid about their place in life and Bulk Biceps is, as someone else pointed out, is someone Fluttershy feels safe around
And generally in stories where a demon is willing to make a bargain his word is binding, you just have to watch out for what's between the lines an Scortatus made some pretty binding comments
and as for why it had to happen, from the tone of the story, I guess I kind of expected something where Twilight either couldn't control her demonic lusts anymore or her "natural allure" thing drew someone to her and she couldn't get them off her without hurting them
Ah, finally this spell is finally working, hello, twillight can you hear me?
Now then twillight ,How does it now feel to be used as a cheap prostitute, Not good right?
Well seemingly as you now know that your friends are abandoning your cause one by one so they can have a semblance of safety or protection and your new reputation is now the slut of the town
You should really start listening to our advice first before dismissing it. Like the one I gave a while ago like letting go of your pride and use your feminine skills and enjoy the pleasure and finding allies outside of the inner circle of friends and family sooner or later they will leave you for safety,power or pleasure, so it's better you start finding allies outside now than later, so for starters find the past villains you have faced like tirek or chrysalis one is basically a sponge of absorbing power he will work well on demons as they are magic saturated weakening them and the other is a tyrant with espionage skills after all if she can fool Celestia and your brother and the rest of canterlot she can fool scortatus as well and if they won't help you, find the few friends who you still have either have a big army or as ruthless as scortarus with the will to help you like thorax and ember.
And one more thing you are now a demon a succubus, use the new magic you now have, use seduction,demon or dark magic and use it to your advantage, it might be wrong but you were treated as a slut and if you are going to be treated as one, be one with a brain because, if scortatus won't play fair so why should you not do the same?
Well, Madame Sparkle, I can't say these...developments, such as they are, were at all unexpected. I would have warned you, but all things considered, I doubt you would have listened - especially after how you treated Spike the other day, mere minutes after being reminded of his own feelings at the moment. Regardless, I do believe you could learn from this experience - call it a...Fiendship Lesson. Yes, I like the ring of that. It may be difficult for the moment, but try to think of the stallions who forced themselves on you. Think of the impressions you got of them, and from their demeanor. Was weakness one of them?
It should have been. They're insecure, and always have been - caving in to social pressure until Scortatus came about, grumbling about how unfair it all is while doing nothing to make themselves appealing, and relying on someone else to make the change for them. And now? Now they're still submitting to someone else's rule. They're Scortatus' pawns, and they know it. You know it, too. Everyone knows it.
They are weak. But you, Twilight Sparkle? You're strong - more so than you realize. You were correct in your assessment - the five of them would have been no match for your sheer power, even without the sort of fine control over it you can gain through practice. Take pride in that - perhaps then you'll find yourself stronger still.
Oh, and...do take care to never lower yourself like that again. It's rather unbecoming of one such as yourself.
A crystal ball sits in a mysterious room, with two men, one dressed in an all-red kamishimo, with a red-handled wakizashi and katana on his right hip, his right hand covering his left, and a one dressed in an all-blue kamishimo, with a blue-handled wakizashi on his left hip, his left hand covering his right. Both watch into the crystal ball intently, seemingly peering at Twilight's current predicament.
"SHE MUST BE SAVED!" The red-dressed man speaks with a thirst for blood.
" I do agree with that sentiment, my friend," the blue-dressed man replies, but with patience in his tone, "But now is not the time. Picking the correct time is critical here. Too late, and she'll be corrupted beyond saving. Too early, and we'll end up killed. We must watch to see what happens. We CANNOT play our hand early!"
The red-dressed man growls, "I suppose you're correct," he speaks, but with regret and anger in his tone, "But if she ends up corrupted beyond saving, that it's YOUR fault, Masamune!"
The blue-dressed man, identified as Masamune sighs and turns to the other voice. He grabs the red-dressed man by the throat, unsheathing his wakizashi, "I will accept the punishment the Gods give me if we act too late. But your heart is not in the correct place currently, Muramasa. It is still red hot, and needs to be cooled." Masamune drops to his knees as Masamune lets go of his throat, sheathing his wakizashi. He picks Muramasa off of the floor, and the two begin to walk away from the crystal ball, "We will WATCH for now. Haste leads to defeat, and you must remember that."
There are allies who support her and said something like that to Spike who are still in the initial phase of relationship and growth, but the average of 7-15 inches is normal for ponies and one with 20 inches and the change occurred with the ponies inserted in the boutique. Rarity, if Spike knows what happened to her, Spike will kill Thunderlane, if Spike has a relationship with her.
Spike is about 20 inches in the dragon pattern and can be the average of them or Spike is stunted in growth (men only care about the size of the one that women also care about and have a kind of egocentricity among men), I I wouldn't be surprised if Scortatus uses Spike to get a good result against Twiligth. And Twiligth get better with Spike and help because he might be able to get out of this hell knowing how he controls those powers. I also believe that Spike likes her more than just a sister, and that misinformation he gave may be making Spike angry if she likes big ones.
A small klack resounds in the daemon’s chamber as a rook moves up the board, daintily held in the daemon’s ebony claws.
“My my, little sparkle, your new overlord has already inadvertently boxed in the king.”
The avian daemon scooped up his ebony and gold laced staff as he rose from the table that faded to nothing.
“I am an agent of change so naturally your inactivity is quite bothersome to me. You claim to be intelligent, you believe it to be so. So why are you sitting on your generous rear? Do you truly wish to just roll over and submit? If that is the case then perhaps you should save yourself and your friends the effort and take a cab to Canterlot itself, strip and offer yourself to your overlord and the princesses you once held so dear.”
Malice flexes his wings the deep blue channeling down to an eye catching lavender as he jabs a crooked finger forward.
“But if you don’t desire to submit do something about it.”
His six yellow eyes narrow and the faintest of frowns passes over his serrated beak.
“The way I see it you have two options. The forceful way, or the sly way. Either gather your friends and fight back with your innate elements, risking them in a full confrontation either via your own corruption or the daemon lord on the throne. Or you play the game as underhanded as he. Your subjects are already starting to fracture as he taps into their baser wants. You need to ensure that they remain loyal to you no matter what you or they become. Only then can you set things right and marginalize the damage.”
The daemon sighs and straightens himself while dusting the white and gold trimmed robes he wears.
“Forgive me for my temper there Twilight. Inactivity is the bane of my nature. The point still stands. You need to think fast. My brethren chatter away in your head, some truly wish to help and others to harm and taunt, I only wish to feed you information and watch what you do with it, but neither you nor myself gain anything from you hoping things will go back to the way they where if the insurgency somehow by some miracle wins. You’re supposedly smarter than this, you’ve seen what this has done to Celestia and that the fear of it is doing to your friends. Despair and rampant fear is the mind killer. You are a leader are you not? Then lead your subjects. Lead your friends. Hatch a scheme to overthrow from the inside or out.”
The daemon smirks.
“Or get an orgy going with your friends and teach spike how to be a bottom, who knows? This is a storm that can’t beRidden out, and if you try, you will most certainly lose. Let your ambitions or hope guide you, struggle, and show us all what you’re made of.”
Malice’s cackle echoes about as his form fades into a blue mist, swirling harmlessly away.
10691921 My My is that a child of Tzeetch? i haven't seen one of your kind in these parts for... has to be 2 maybe even 3 millennia. come for the festivities, or has one of your kinds famous plans come into play?
if you aren't then you bear a remarkable similarity to one.
Ah yes is this thing on...Wonderful now that you can hear me Twilight, I hate to say it but it looks like you might lose this but don't quit just yet I have a Idea on how you can win Beat him at his own Game by finding a bigger and more powerful Daemon to defeat him maybe someone of the Wrath variety or simple Greed too, Well good luck Twilight you're gonna need it. Cackling is heard and beings to fade
Unff its getting better and better~ I'm really enjoying Sparkle's ''progress'' into a more.. fitting body~ what i'm seeing right now is very interesting how things are going and i hope to see more as soon as possible~
The creatures form begins to bloat and rot, before becoming toned and red losing feathers, then transitioning to a serpent like creature before settling on a toned ashen grey body.
“I am a child of the four powers, an experiment between then. I merely heavily favor the changer of ways more so than my other parents. As for plans... well I was being remarkably honest for once. Sometimes my plans aren’t much more than giving someone a nudge and watching everything veer wildly off course. I suppose I get that from my mother.. father...? Slaanesh.”
10691461 Perhaps they're altered by Twilight's lust aura and other magic from Scortatus; there's ways to write around this... I suppose more world building and detail about motivation for character's behavior can be good if used properly. There's a balance though because it can dilute the rest of the story if overdone.
Anyways Darkgal keep it up! I think I'll sit this round of RP comments out because I've got other stuff going on this week.
"Yes, again." Rarity glared at her like she was a misbehaving student. "Over fifty thousand ponies killed in a day. And the rest carted off to Tartarus knows where. I can't even imagine, what they are doing to them! And most of them hadn't even rebelled. It was the mayor and the militia who took up arms. The rest were just...collateral."
Did they just had nuclear war? No wonder the princesses gave up.
"So, yeah...Scortatus gives us the chance to put you bitches in your proper place. You would be surprised how many take him up on that offer. All those stallions you and your friends wouldn't even give a second thought or bother to acknowledge...they sure don't mind the regime-change, you know?" Thunderlane grabbed her head and trusted forward. Twilight screams were muffled and she tried pulling away, but the stallion was stronger than her.
The males sure went rapey fast. I wonder how society be like in the future for those growing up in this new era?
50,000 gone in the blink of an eye and they all just fucking watched. What about you Twilight? Are you going to sit in self loathing and watch as you're forced into slavery in all but name?
Forgive me for my anger, but I have a personal connection to Equestria. I used to be like anybody else until 1000 years ago I was forced to watch the same fate fall upon my soldiers. Let me tell you Tirek caused catastrophic damage it took everything we had to let the princesses have a chance at him. You have studied the battles of old recall the Battle of Horseshoe Pass? I was that commander who sacrificed everything when no one else would. The princesses saw me as the only survivor and assumed the worst about me and how I survived, calling me a traitor and now I'm here made into a demon by the people I once served.
Thus is my story, but understand it is not told without purpose, I tell you this to let you know the kind of person I am and to let you know that more than juvenile delinquency exists here. I'm a friend and as such I can help you. There is a little secret about your new body that you should know. As you know with normal magic all spells leave a trace, demonic magic leaves a bit more than that. Every spell placed on your body contains a part of a being or a small sacrifice made for the spell. Your problem with your current spells is that you don't know how or what to sacrifice. You are starting to figure out how to use basics with emotions, ever notice your current emotion wane when you used demonic magic? That's what you have sacrificed, lust happens to be the most effective due to your body's current form, but any emotion can be offered up. But I digress currently most of the demons involved here are offering up bits of soul to make their magic much harder to get rid of or subside. You can use this to your advantage, find the pieces of soul within your body and use them to bend the demons here to your will, force them to tell you the truth and helpful info.
Know that doing this will connect you with the demon whose soul you find and it will be a battle of will to gain control over them so be careful or else you transition to a sexual plaything will be a absolute. I will keep helping you Twilight, but you must be ready to give up everything as I did in order to win, or you will only find yourself at the end of some bastard's dick.
10693103 a chaos undivided... well now this is interesting, your kind have always been... rare. i suppose it makes sense given how contradictory the chaos gods are with each other.
still, that does raise quite a bit of questions about what your doing here, forgive me but rarely do your kind wander any where without the permission and gaze of your parents, are the chaos gods taking an interest in our section of the multi verse, or has a parodical son strike out on their own?
if its the latter then perhaps you may be interested in what i wish to set up here. i believe our messages to twilight are being monitored by the overlord. how ever i suspect he can't keep us completely out, not if enough of use work together, what's more by forming a collective we can discuss and pool votes to swing things in a more desirable out come. it will be difficult to gain allies myself but with a second my ideas may not be as shunned, especially if backed by a powerful individual such as yourself.
my desire is to craft a replacement for the overlord, one that will align to more... acceptable methods of thought, and strong enough to strike down the current one. of course as much as i can see your messages to twilight you no doubt can see mine, and thus know about the predicament i now find myself in. if the current overlord is able to see our messages to her then he no doubt is aware of my... misgivings in his leadership... and punishments for such tend to be steep.
i find myself in quite a bind at the moment, so i hope you will not take to much advantage of me for your own gain, but i will be quite indebted to you for your aid, tho im certain gaining a large foot hold here would benefit you greatly as well, and should we succeed in ingratiating ourselves to the new overlord quite the position would be waiting for us at the end.
of course if you are working for your parents still then i still gain something from an alliance with you, a way out if things go south... it certainly won't be fun starting again some where else, but i would infinitely preferer any of the chaos gods over an eternity in the void. *shudders*
Malice puts a clawed hand to his chin and scratches the underside of his beak.
“Rare for daemons outside of my home universe to hear of the ruinous powers. I am given far more free will than any of my brothers and sisters, calling a small portent of the warp my home as if I where on their own level.”
The avian daemon turns and shoves the head of his staff into empty air before shoving down. Reality splits and screaming nightmares writhe on the other side of the hole.
“I may slip into other universes as I desire, though this power is mine alone you are free to accompany me back to the warp free of his wrath.”
Removing the golden head of the staff from the bottom of the rift causes it to snap close and things go quiet once more.
“As for him monitoring things in Twilight’s head, there is always the possibility. He may not be particularly happy with our attempts to dethrone him, but it’s my very nature to want leaders to rise and fall and I would hunger to twist twilight herself into that position. This very universe cries out to the nature of change and excess that compose me. Our brethren chatter idly in her ear BUT if we can get her to do something anything under her own will not only will it be easier to adjust her path it will be easier to corrupt her as these decisions will seem like her own and she will be forced to own them.”
The greater daemon turns and scratches tunes into a mirror watching it shimmer before the view turns to Twilight’s current viewpoint.
“How would you propose we bolster our own voices over the din of our siblings?”
10693915 10693546 10693103 *The stallion, seated on a fur-covered throne now, leans forward with his six hands clasped. He smiles gently.*
"We are an eclectic bunch, are we not? Princess Twilight knows so little of Tartarus. I wonder how she would react upon learning there are more entities bound within its deepest trenches than just the demons of pony mythology..? Or, for that matter, of the numerous lesser unclean spirits more free to leave than we. Just look at how few of you are part of the Thirteen Damned by Faust! Some of you began as mortals! Mortals who never got to meet the one who made this world!"
*His smile takes on a slight edge*
"I remember Faust. I remember her warmth. Her beauty. Her love for her creation. Her might. I remember her very well. Her daughters are a far cry from that majesty, powerful as they may be for a mortal pony's understanding. And yet, and yet... before I was gifted to her, to help with this nascent planet, I had stood in the presence of gods. I carried—"
*A violent shudder runs through his body; he presses his eyes closed, as behind him the shadow of a humanoid figure looms; a winged helm on his head, a long spear in one hand, and a long, bushy white beard hanging from a stern face where only one eye sits—shining like a star with magical energies*
"I... well. Mighty Faust may have been, but she wasn't... him."
*He sighs deeply. Then, he holds up two hands, palm up*
"Just another sign Twilight Sparkle has much to learn. Such as this fun little fact: In some worlds, binding a fiendish essence into a fresh corpse will bring the creature back to life... in a sense."
*The image of a pony appears in the right of his palms. A crude image, with a sword sticking out of its sternum. In his left palm, a roiling pink flame flashes before it launches itself at the caricature of a pony carcass. It rises, pulls the sword out of its body, yells in triumph—and suddenly it grows spikes, fangs, a forked tail and leathery wings*
"Ghastly, is it not? Now, I am not saying Scortatus is doing any of this, but I will point out that he has been rather liberal with corrupting others in the past, and is currently creating a sizeable number of freshly dead. Nevermind all the missing ponies. And I will also note that him filling up dead bodies with demonic lifeforce until they return as twisted mockeries of what they were technically wouldn't break his promise to Twilight not to brainwash anypony. Because they are DEAD. They don't count as ponies anymore."
"Oh, and Princess Twilight? If you are listening, please pay attention to what, exactly, Scortatus agreed to. Ahem: "Buut...I'm not going to mind-control, brainwash or otherwise use my magic to meddle with someponies mind, while I rule over Equestria." *He coughs once* "Goodness, I forgot how sensual Scortatus sounds when he bargains. Anyways, look at his wording." *He holds up one finger* "One, he promised not to brainwash anyPONY. Do you understand? And two," *he holds up a second finger* "He promised HE wouldn't do it. That does not mean another creature couldn't do it FOR HIM. And three, while he rules Equestria. Does that include the time during which parts of it are still actively fighting him, which could mean he is, by some definition, not actually ruling it, since he's not ruling ALL of it? Those are just a few things to think about. And we all know how much you enjoy thinking about things!"
Malice cocks his head to the side looking much like a perplexed raptor for a moment.
“Ah! Yes I recognize you!”
His hand sinks into the very air itself and from a deep purple rift in reality, plucks a thick tome. He places down the tome onto a table where a cloud of dust explodes off it. The book creams and groans as he flicks it open. Several of the pages clumped together and unwilling to separate after years of remaining shut. The daemons attention is focused solely on the ancient tome until he reaches something that catches his eye. With a deep breath he blow on the pages, dust, ash and dirt flying off. On the page is an ancient language that Malice reads with one of his six eyes while the two stare at the crude image of a man, holding a spear aloft riding an eight legged horse. The other three fix on this new entity that’s spoken to him.
“Yes an ancient myth of ancient Terra. I dare say you’d be older than I, though time is meaningless in the warp. What brings you to this particular universe at this particular time, inside little sparkle’s head?”
10694014 Heavens sent that!... *sigh* is completely in his wheel house to do. in fact if he hasn't it will only be because he did not think of it in his arrogance.
well my new friend you ask how we can raise our voices over the din of my brothers and sisters, my suggestion is we find others we dispise the current over lord, my compatriot here seems to be have much reason to dispose Scortatus, and while he is the first to reach out and inform us of this more... unsettling possibility, others have been just as vocal.
I should probably reveal myself fully if we are to continue to discus, it would be unfair of me when both of you already have. *out steps a centaur like creature, its face is slightly gaunt with three eyes of black and yellow, black hair flows from its scalp contrasting the hellish red of its skin while a series of black branch like horns raise like a twisted crown from its scalp. its arms are unnaturally long more then capable of scraping the ground as it wears various bangles and rings. its more horse half a deep black that ends with a scorpion tail, from its horse end two large black wings sit curled up against his body*
Its is nice to be out of hiding in the shadows, where was i, ah yes. we require more allies, and a plan to get to our desired end goal. MY dream is i suppose my dream is born out both my desire for some one infinitely more tolerable and useful then Scortatus, but also my Knowing that this may be my only chance for a long time to even try. by leaving as he has, and granting her this power the overlord has left himself vulnerable. the very strands of fate have echoed this possibility, for her to use his gifts to strike him down, but will have become so corrupted that she will take his throne and rule it not as some hedonistic dark lord, but a queen beautiful and terrible as the dawn and treacherous as the sea, and the peoples of Equestria will love her and despair. *sighs in bliss as a shudder runs down his body* is that not such a beautiful idea, one who will expand for her peoples across the cosmos as a dark queen leading her armies and corrupting champions, loved and feared by all, *his face twists into a sneer* rather then the clever bandit leader we have now, who conquers only to satisfy his own desires and leaves his people and kingdom to rot. Give it 20 or 40 years and even if he wins he will allow his new kingdom to fall apart, more interested in the act of corruption and the lusts he can fulfill then in spreading our influence and building our forces. he commands no loyalty, only bribes others into his service, or uses threats of punishment to keep ambitions in line. while he might once have been a great and terrable being, he has lost his luster, where once was a rival and enemy of Faust who could corrupt even her great champions has wasted away into...this creature, his time stuck here having degraded him.
But twilight, why in her i see some one capable of doing what he never could, uniting us under a single banner and making the great marches until we knock upon Faust's door itself before tearing her pitiful gates asunder. and when we act it will not be in arrogance, but thru careful planning that will ensure that victory WILL be ours. the powers of friendship and the virtues it espouses can be used by more then just the light, and carefully corrupted to be more palatable to our kind could be what we need to rise from this prison and expand across the realities.
That is my dream, my goal for her! But what is YOUR'S compatriots, what do you desire from her? if we can come to a consensus then we can start spreading a shared dream for her amongst our kind, with the three of us working together we can sway enough to our cause to allow us to perhaps swing future voting in our favor as well as the narratives of our advice towards a level of corruption that will twist her thru more subtle, and thus longer lasting, means.
Towarius enters your mind yet again, ableit I forgot to introduce myself last time. We had a nice little chat about genderbending Spike much earlier didn't we? Things have escalated since then. I personally don't like too big breasts, so rest assured I voted against them, defending your honor valiantly! Just so you know you have an ally on your side that only wants your best.
And what I want to do now is help you. Spike is in peril. The situation is tough on him and yet you brushed him off. Isn't he your brother? You are hurting him by not taking his distress seriously. Yes, it is awkward for you that he is aroused by you, but that is not his fault. He didn't ask for those breasts just like you didn't ask for them. The comment about small dicks did frustrate him as he himself is struggling and you are demolishing his sense of self-worth, something no good sister does.
Now there is the chance that he could actively turn away from you. And who do you think he will turn to? That's right. Thunderlane and his gang. You could encourage him again. Building him up. He is your precious ally and brother. It is a valuable bond. Be stubborn and don't be surprised if one day he opposes you.
...Besides, you could turn him into your little sister still. I mean, think about it! Just make sure the dick is gone and he can no longer stand with Thunderlane! He has to stand by your side with no chance of him ever turning against you. A sisterly bond being formed! In a tragic male-dominated world! The suspense! I really gotta write a book with this! Bet it will sell just as well as "Your Flatchest and You"!
Daemon purred contently as his sets of eyes closed and he thought. With a flash of movement he etched more runes onto his viewing mirror shifting from Twilights view to a man clad in black armor riding a steed of a tri-headed slavering creature, before the view sifts to another man clad in bulky black and gold armor wielding a shrieking blade, finally to an ashen grey creature, lightly armored with an eight pointed star emblazoned on his chest before the view faded once more.
“Yes this could work. My fathers and mother would often pick a single champion and elevate them enough to campion their worshipers. Who are we to not do the same? If we can guide twilight into the routes we desire... then she may have enough energy and willpower to gather those he corrupts and yell charge, thus turning the hunt in on itself. If she could turn the princesses perhaps and keep the elements under her belt! The siege of the capitol would be as grand as that of old Terra! Why I’d pay a truck load of souls to see that play out again! And like Horus before her, she won’t even remember the true reason why she turned and chose to march on the capitol to begin with!”
The lord of change wheezes in laughter as the images flash clearly through his mind.
“Change, war, decay and excess, oh yes this course of action calls out to every fiber of my being. Whenever one of us is able to directly influence her we should sharply veer her in that direction. Fuel her lusts to disposing of the current lord of the castle and twist her to be similar to him without her noticing, and even if she does she’ll be powerless to stop it. Even if *HE* realizes THAT should be a challenge even he wouldn’t turn down, the ultimate corruption!”
The avian’s yellow beak twists into a horrifying mockery of a smile and he holds his hand out to his fellow daemon, clawed hand wreathed in multicolored fire.
10695113 (A nine foot tall pale woman with icy blue eyes sits on her throne looking into an mirror showing her all the activity.) I have a suggestion. What if we....Were more....Direct when it comes to helping Twilight. The blow hard in charge gave Twilight too much wiggle room to work with. I mean let's face facts here. He gave her that power because he knows full well that it would help usher in her corruption all the faster, he knows Twilight even with our guidance will be too distracted to train enough to fight him, and even if she did like I said he GAVE her that power, meaning he can take it away just as easily. For all we know her last test will be her having to stand against a sexual session with the bastard and if he broke the princesses without need to ware them down as quickly coupled with the sexual torture she's only just begun to receive means she doesn't stand a chance. But, what if she had us?
So what number win in last vote?
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Number 1, Big Boobs
You let your friend down Twilight. I hate to say it but you did. Tsk tsk tsk. For shame my dear. For shame. Doesn't it hurt being so weak? Unable to do anything? Doesn't it absolutely tear at your soul unable to help your friends and teach those that impose on them a lesson? You should have blasted em apart Twilight.
Which is why I keep saying, stop trying to hide from your power! Its the key to making sure Equestria doesn't suffer from ponies like them and so you can protect your friends! Yes its a dark power so what? Didn't you use dark Magic to find the Crystal Heart back at the Crystal Empire long ago? It's not all that different now. Its just using what you have or have learned to pave the way forward to success!
You shouldn't tolerate ponies like that. You should let your power speak for you. How else will you become the rightful ruler of equestria and kick Scorpy's tail off of that throne? That shouldn't be him up there! That should be you. If you just LISTEN Twilight! We can help. Or at least I can. You just have to say it. Say the magic word Twilight. All it takes.
Just. Say. Please.
Reminds me of Fall of Equestria.
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That is unfortunately what is slightly a turnoff for me. I might like Male dom but Fall of Equestria was just toxic. Truthfully I'm staying in Hope's this changes to a more Twilight dominant role.
I was iffy on Twilight being forced to engage in sex acts because it felt rushed. But you balanced it out perfectly with Twilight berating Celestia for giving up, but she understood why Celestia caved so easily when she was put in the same situation. Now Twilight feels what Celestia is feeling. Speaking of which, will we see how Luna is fairing? It seems unfair to assume Luna submitted easily just because Celestia did. I always thought she would resist far more. It would be a good twist if Luna stayed defiant and Twilight turns the tables on the bet. Then, twilight would announce she would look Luna than Celestia from then onward.
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Well, I don't like FoE and in my opinion, maledom doesn't make something like it. At the very least, I make sure that the story doesn't pretend that what is happening to Twilight and her friends is something "good". Scortatus is a villain, plain and simple and he doesn't win, because he has a cock and is supposedly "right", but because he is powerful and exploits issues that have developed under Celestia's rule. And why he is so powerful is one of the central questions...
This is smut and maledom elements are going to be a thing. But if you're worried that this is going to be FoE 2.0, that's unnecessary. But keep in mind, that Maledom was put in the description for a reason. I like writing it. And as mentioned, this does not mean that dominant females are not going to be a thing.
So, please don't compare it to FoE. At the very least, I try to write something more engaging.
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We will get to Luna eventually, don't worry. How she is and what will happen, well...can't say that obviously.
Also, I'm glad that the scene worked as intended. I must confess, I was a bit worried about it, too, but I thought it would make sense to show why Celestia did what she did and explain that it is more than just "lol, she is a slut!"
See I’d be tempted to wanna do a crossover chapter with my guy who’s bound to 4 demons but knowing them they would end up fighting and making things way worse
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I'm not saying that I dislike Scortatus, just scenes like Thunderlanes were they are dominant because of a literal or metaphorical knife to someone throat.
I just prefer Male dom were the male is dominant simply by making the lady feel like they should surrender, not because of a threat hanging over their head.
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This wasn't really possible in this scene. Not just because of Thunderlanes character but because Twilight herself would not submit to anypony without being forced at the current stage. And as mentioned already, it also was a good way of showing why submission was preferable to some and that it easy to talk about rebellion, until you yourself are in the situation.
I can't make a story like this not contain violence. It is a hostile takeover by a demon, who aims to corrupt and oppress. And making ponies submit without threats or serious consequences would feel weird and cheap. And ironically enough, move this closer into FoE territory, which I do not want.
Essentially, there are going to be scenes that will not feel "nice". They are unavoidable if I want to keep this smut-story in the semi-realistic way I currently write it. Things will shift eventually. Depending on how it goes quickly or slowly. But for now, Twilight would not submit without a serious threat.
If this isn't to your taste, I apologize. I do my best to make this as engaging as possible.
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It's fine, do what needs to be done.
I am stating now though I for one am hoping for a corrupted Twilight that defeats Scortatus and lead to corrupting the rest of the planet with some honeyed words instead of a club. The carrot rather than the stick.
Also because it can work this way by her seeing herself as the lesser of two evils. Subtly changing and corrupting the resistances rather than killing and raping.
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Well, I'm going to go ahead here and say I like FoE a lot, and MaleDom in general, in many different forms. FoE, your story here, DarkGal, my own story where everyone is sliding into it without noticing...; please don't hate me for it? By the way, DarkGal, I think you're doing pretty well from a writing standpoint. Definitely better than My Little Corruption, which I also loved when it was alive and worked to drive with the comments. It's so nice to see the idea continued!
Hey maledom and misogyny away to your hearts content. A story like this? It fits perfectly. Good fetishy stuff in text form.
You know Twilight has demon powers right. After what i just read if Twilight is pushed enough she will become a demon of wrath and will be a bigger threat than a high powered demon of lust like Scortus and you know now i want that to happen. She is being pushed to the breaking point she and her friend just got raped by stallions that basically said "yeah we never cared about mares ever, we just never acted on our instincts to use you because we feared Celestia and Luna's powers, but since they've been defeated we are now going to act on our instincts to treat mares like sluts and oneholes because Scortus said we can". I know what Twilight to succomb to her demonic powers but not the way Scortus wants her too. I want to see the Demon of Wrath Twilight Sparkle. I want to see fear in his eyes when she succombs and i want him to realize "Damn on hindsight i shouldn't have given demonic power to a mare who is already pissed at me for taking her world and corrupting her friends in front of her. I wanted a submissibe succubus to fuck and dominated. Not a very powerful demon of Wrath" and I want that to be his last thought when the monster he created kills him.
After all you can't be lustful when you are so angry that all other emotions are shutdown or likely in this case destroyed. I want this to happen even though i know what the consequences will be. But hell, it's better than what Scortus wants to happen to Twilight and Equestria.
If I was Twilight in this chapter i would've murdered all but one to send a message to Scortus with this for him to hear "Leave my friends alone. If you so much as lay a hand on them as in YOUR hands or anycreature working with or for you. I will kill them and let these demonic energies you foolishly gave me consume me but not the way you want me too. I will become a Demon like you hope but not the demon you want me to become. I will become a demon of hatred, wrath, and with no remorse. I'll kill you no matter who stands in my way including my friends because you know a creature with nothing to lose or gain will fight with everything they got and will either kill you or die trying! You have been warned leave them alone this is a fight between you and me" That is what i'd do if i was Twilight Sparkle in this chapter.
Good work i haven't felt this emotional over a story in a while. I look forward to your next chapter.
I really disliked this chapter, it's not really the way I expected for things to go. Does Scortatus know what the convent is saying to Twilight?
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Twilight Sparkle. You have no idea how to wield power. That was pathetic.
DEMONS DO NOT GET HUMILIATED BY MORTALS!
And you are a demon now make no mistake, a demon bound in a challenge to one of our most powerful. You may be titleless now, in a year you will either be a princess, a queen, or at worst a favorite in Scortatus harem. If you should die by actions inspired by Scortatus, he would suffer for it. Test your limits, leading a rebellion may not be allowed but the behavior of a demon is not the behavior of a demon. Simply threatening his soldiers may not be something you can do without angering him
Ripping the dick off a stallion who displeased you, and stuffing it down his own throat might get a laugh however
You should remind those that challenge you that they have choices in their actions unless Scortatus directly commands it. They should choose to anger you as little as possible while still pleasing him.
This makes no sense. I have observed this world and its inhabitants for some time and I have never seen anything to suggest that Thunderlane, Pokey, or especially Bulk Biceps would ever act in this manner. If you say that they had begun to act in such a manner before Scortatus's reign began, then I fear there was already something fundamentally wrong with your world. Some sort of corruption that had begun to seep in. This may even be what gave Scortatus the opening he needed to break his bonds. Discovering the source of this corruption may hold the key to achieving your victory. I suggest that you start doing what you do best. Research.
"My, my, princess. Injustice would love your new outfit. It's right up her alley, one might say. But ah, forgive me for teasing. Your temper's been tested plenty today."
*He raises his arms in a placating gesture, smiling mildly and blinking milky-white eyes almost the same hue as his coat. The stallion absently brushes away at the finely-made sky-blue robes draped over his form—garments fit for royalty, much like the crown resting on his brow—though there was... movement in them, almost like there could be more arms hidden beneath the cloth*
"Good on you for keeping it in check, too. Contrary to what some of my fellow spirits suggest, going full-out on the stallions around you for taking advantage of Scortatus's new rules is foolish. Not just because he likely has his eyes on you, but also for the simple reason that you do not know if he has not influenced them as he has your friends. Think, Princess Twilight: When did Bulk Biceps strike you as a sadistic rapist slaver in the making..? This is a stallion Fluttershy wasn't afraid of. Fluttershy! And now, he can't wait to shove his, ahem, bulk down an unwilling mare's throat?"
*He slowly shakes his head*
"No. There is more going on. Things you can't see—yet. And if that's true, then other ponies are in danger too. Not just ponies, everycreature. Such as your dear dragon youngling.
The one you unthinkingly, deeply, hurtfully insulted. How? Well, why don't you use your eidetic memory? Go back over what you said—here's a hint, 8 inches—and think about his reaction.
Before much else, Twilight Sparkle, you must see to that. When you return, he might not be there anymore. If that's the case, he most likely went out to be comforted; and since he knows you went to Rarity, he will have gone to somepony else... or somecreature else. The one he can share his troubles with; Gabby, the mail carrier Griffon. If Spike is with Gabby, and he feels insecure about his masculinity, they might go further than they would normally go. Which brings us back to the matter of Scortatus."
*Spreading his arms wide, another additional two pairs push out from their hiding in his sleeves before vanishing back inside the kingly robes*
"Spike is hurt. He feels inadequate. He feels out of control. He may wish to regain control. And dragons are prone to greed; Injustice loves them dearly. If Scortatus's influence permeates Ponyville, it could lead Spike to act out in ways more and more similar to Thunderlane, Bulk, and Pierce. Is this not worth investigating, oh patron of science?
"I need not remind you that Spike is Equestria's direct link to Dragon Lord Ember and King Thorax, both of whom are extremely susceptible to his mood and actions, do I?
"I suggest to you, Princess Twilight, that you use the opportunity. Test out whether Spike has a growing need to dominate. If he's home, try to be accomodating. See if he takes advantage of such, to take advantage of you. If my theory is correct, he will not just feel lust for your body, but for the sensation of proving his dominance over you. He might ask that you clean instead of him, and do so without magic, and then watch you stretch up and bend over and kneel on the ground, all the while ogling your curves. He might make you apologise to him first, perhaps going so far as having you humiliate yourself in the process; calling yourself silly, saying you have dick on the mind. He might try to trick you into letting him eat you with his eyes, asking you to stand still for him, turn around, bend over, strip, grope you, all under the pretense of 'cataloguing your changes'.
"Either as part of the above or in place of it, test his reaction to the idea of dominance/submission play. You have books on that topic, do you not? If not, you will now. Trust me. There will be plenty depictions of many females in submissive, restrained poses; mares, dragonesses, Griffons, Hippogriffs, Seaponies, even a trio of Sirens. They posed for it once. Show it to him and gauge how eager he is to know more. If Scortatus is spreading his influence, Spike will most likely be VERY interested in this book and others like it.
"And if he isn't home? Seek out Gabby. That's where he will be. Don't confront him. Watch. Is Spike beginning to be more dominant with her? Telling her to kneel and breathe in the scent of his dragon nuts as he gripes about your hurtful words, after tying her hands behind her back with her own shirt? Then you know he's probably being influenced right now. And if that's the case, any and all males in Ponyville might be compromised.
"Good luck, Princess Twilight. You will need it."
I've seen enough. I don't know if Scortatus was shaping this world from his confinement or if more metanarrative forces are at work, but any hope it presents for an outcome aside from the obvious is clearly a farce. Good eon, sir or madam.
(Sorry, but the transparent character derailment and absurd gender ratio killed it for me. And I'm not a big maledom fan in any case. Good luck going forward.)
I'm hoping for some more mental changes, like arousal or libido? maybe a little cock-curiosity?
Either way liking the story so far, perfect balance of plot and smut i'm curious to see how trixie and starlight fared, i think they fell in the first chapter? not sure.
I already had a small OOC bit at the top of my post, but I wanted to add some more.
Honestly this chapter didn't do much for me. I mean, oh Scortatus says he's not going to corrupt or brainwash anyone, but fortunately for him a ton of stallions are already corrupt. How convenient.
It's a swing I wasn't expecting and it lowered my interest a lot. The time frame you set up, one year, with the pace you had things happening already seemed like an overly stretched out thing, now you have Twilight being tormented by good ponies within a few weeks(at most!) of the the beginning?
You've got a demon at the top of the food chain, making up societal issues for Twi to have to deal with adds nothing to this
and regarding some of your above comments
If you felt this story should have violence thenwhy did have an unseen event(New Coltsville) give reasons not to have violence right at the beginning.
And if you mean sexual violence, well why? You started this story with Scortatsus turning everyone but Twilight, and Luna who wasn't present, into obedient demon sluts. Why do that if he gets off on unwilling sexual violence?
Heck I got more hooked on drama than eroticism in this story, and I like it, in My little corruption sometimes I despaired because I felt that it was moving very slowly and unfortunately we had not even corrupted any of the mane six there, which I like your story is that it goes at a good pace, combining drama with eroticism, and I'm serious, many just want to get to the "porn" part, and that doesn't happen here. I really care about everything in this story, which MLC does. It got in the penultimate chapters before it was abandoned without disrespecting its creator (Does anyone know what happened to Nohen?)
I liked the chapter and it is worth waiting for one every week, so that the rhythm is not lost, and one question, are there monsters, demonic beasts imps, Minotaurs or some kind of creature stalking Twilight? We know that scortatus does not play fair.
Oh hohoho! How delightful! Seems my influence won out in the end for those breasts of yours. Still though I had hoped that my suggestion to make them at least the size of your head would of gone through. Oh well there's always the next round of voting. Although I have to say I'm not quite pleased with your response to the debauchery. You should be more like that refined lady Rarity and listen to that brute Thunderlane, accepting of the truth. That mares had abused the stallions of Equestria. You may not agree, but condemning the majority to live lonely lives with no real love to give or receive isn't exactly a peaceful utopia you believe Equestria to be. At least now it's far easier, just take what you want. It's not my style of course, I prefer the more...subversive measures. But it is what it is. Also I have to say that my bets seem to be going rather well lately that I'm not quite sure what to do next. Perhaps if you were to...entice me, I would be tempted to influence the next round of betting to better make it easier on you Miss Sparkle. Embrace your new assets and maybe I'll be tempted. Anyway, good luck my sweet and just know that if you fail Rarity will be in very refined hands. Taa taa!
*tsk*
Is that how you wish to play Miss Sparkle?
Here I am, trying to be a civil demon, something that is very hard to do in my current state, and you go and wish to insult me?
I understand that you may be ill-tempered in your current state, hell knows that skullfuck that Thunderlane gave you deserves a spot in a hall of fame or something, but you must understand something, dear Twilight.
I am not the worst demon in here
As you can see, not once have I been of ill-mannered to you. Ill-speaking? Yes, this is my job, to degrade you and to make you a cock bitch by the years end. But have I ever gone ahead and threatened you, ma'am? Unlike my colleagues, who seem to be very vocal in what they wish to do to you, I am mearly here, talking and conversing. If I was as ill-tempered as your friend Sunset Shimmer was, I'd have gone to you in your sleep and fucked you in the dreamscape until you can't tell Rarity and Spike apart from one another.
But, I digress. It is not of my good interests to go and attempt to talk of goodwill and then act in the other manner. Miss Sparkle, if but nothing else let me leave you with something.
360 days until your deadline. 360 days of increased sex, degeneration, humiliation, temptation. If you have already caved to the debased works of Thunderlane, who is to say you can last the remaining time?
Again, as a show of faith, I would have abstained from this vote, but it seems my dear good demon friends have lopsided the last one and we have been stripped of that ability temporarily.
Good day, ma'am, do not keep us Covenant waiting.
Also, 1) What study says that 15 inches is the national average, do you understand that that is almost a foot and 1/4? That would surely rip off the balls of any decent demon.
And 2) Eh, if I'm a loser in hell, at least I'm not the loser sucking on demon cock
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My reasoning for the sexual violence (apart from it being one of the tags for this story) was that early on it wouldn't make sense for Twilight to submit, without some threat. Essentially, have a break in there to make her realize what kind of situation this is and that just straight heroics will not work in this case. And show why mares like Celestia submitted, instead of resisting.
The other part is that you have to keep in mind that neither Scortatus nor Thunderlane are reliable sources of information. The first one is a demon, whose morality and empathy is non-existent. And the second one is a sexually frustrated homophobe. I will address Thunderlanes claims in the next chapter, but he is supposed to be unlikeable and supposed to be a vile character. Things like who is a good pony and who are collaborators and why will be explored further into the story.
In the end, I apologize if some didn't like the direction for Thunderlanes character, but given that he used a lot for such things in other stories and that his and other background-ponies personality aren't really established, I had to give somepony the "OOC"-treatment. But I will keep your and the others feedback in mind and try to improve on the story. Just keep in mind, that heavier scenes and themes will continue to pop up. That, sadly, is the direction I plan on taking this story in general. It is an exploration of how a smutty take-over of Equestria would/could happen and how everypony would react to it.
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"Want to see my more exotic minions? Hmm...maybe I'll send them down to her at some point. Minotaurs would make for some good muscle. Gonna look into that!"
I think the next one to suffer corruption will be Spike, after Twiligth ridicules that he can put his last ally at risk.
You know, I hate to be a bother when you probably could use some positivity, but it is rather rude to willfully take someone's advise and then act opposite it, even unwittingly. Case and point: Spike's 8 inches. His joking and staring might not be a blessing to you now, but you will roped into a lot worse before this year is out, and when you mix in absolutely crushing his ego, even inadvertently, you have to realize you may be hurting his sexual development, not to mention his emotional and psychological well being. So, I reiterate, make sure he's okay. Don't just let him shrug you off or walk away, sit down with him and have a proper talk. Prove to him that you didn't mean to hurt him, and that length really isn't that big a deal in a world full of people of all different and interesting shapes and sizes. You could also stroke his ego a bit by pointing out that in time, he's certainly going to outstrip the average stallion.
Still, thank you for sharing. Some of us have to do our information gathering the old fashioned way, and as much watching your misadventures is entertaining, watching your every waking moment means missing out on good opportunities and the limited lives that we do otherwise lead. As you've deduced though, your emotions, and possibly even those experienced by others, will strengthen you, but you need to remember that sins, such as Wrath, are dangerous obstacles on your journey. They will provide some aid in an emergency, but you mustn't let them so easily become crutches.
Back to the topic of concern though, Spike. He'll likely seek out something to nurse his ego, and with his limited friends, that basically leaves books. Considering how well stocked a library you have, and the fact that you know the national average penis length off hand, I'd wager you have some positively pornographic and up to date anatomy books within your collection. Perhaps after a quick comparison, he may decide the variety in there is superior to that of his private collection, and decide to add it to his collection, as something of a hoard.
By way, that was a saucy dream earlier, it's just a shame how dreadfully it ended, and that the real dragon in question is probably taken by that cute courier griffon, whose status is hither to unknown. Unrelated biology question, can a dragon's growth be bolstered by emotions or sins other than just Greed?
Only proper lewd suggestion I've got for Twilight is her possibly huffing some underwear out of curiosity, seeing as she's got some newfound interest in musk.
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my dear fellow you are comparing yourself to ponies, just because your genetailia is simply to weak for such girth and length does not mean theirs is not. "above average" as you believe yourself to be here, they and their physiology need not give a shit about that.
that said it is suspisios that you are being answered with such regularity. i feel the overlord may be watching our comments, and is purposly twisting what she gets for his own ends. this is... not ideal. especally as several of us, my self included, have been openly trecherios. something he must expect but one that will have... consiquenses should he succeed. what once was a move of ambition may now have become survival.
as to why your comments seem to be getting thru... i have a feeling its to both ensure she does not come to trust us and work with us against him. perhaps in hopes of further engendering hostilities between us. this would be exactly what that prick would do, as well as my other assumption, he enjoys laughing at you and is using Twilight and your own bravado to make a fool of you for his entertainment.
if i am right, and i feel i am... this is as infuriating as it is distressing. any thing we say will be monitored by the over lord, with only select comments either slipping by him, or what ever he personally desires getting thru in order to stack the deck in HIS favor. look at the comment about spike that went ignored. no doubt this was to set up a fall down the line with young spike, while making sure that she had just enough warning to blame herself when her relationship with her most trusted adviser collapses. (edited) the fact that you share the same size, and thus her mockery of you would also come off as a mockery of said assistant, also did not get past my notice. he has used the both of you to set up a fall while giving Twilight just enough of a "warning" that she will blame herself when spike falls to corruption. and as enjoyable as such thing often are to watch, i think we can all agree that being used by a third party to cause it for THEIR enjoyment, with us being as much puppets as the so call toy, is unexpectable.
in summery, it would seem that if we wish to gain any foot hold with our potential weapon beyond these votes, we will have to do something rather anathema to our kind. we will have to cooperate, form a unified plan, and work in unision twords that collective goal, failing that form a coalition of enough of us to try to swing things in our favor.
alright, since its unlikely for us to congregate before our next viewing, i will make another attempt to speak to miss twilight.
twilight, can you hear me. hmm, it has come to my attention that our messages might be being monitored by the over lord. i know not the means that determines what gets thru to you, and if my message does i fear for why, he may be seeking to discredit me amongst my fellows at my suggestion that he is twisting whats gets thru to you in order to pit us against each other and ensure that meaningful cooperation between our camps against him will be impossible, all while pushing you and us twords his desired out come.
we... well i am attempting to create a coalition over here in order to assist you, for if he is monitoring and controlling what gets thru to you... well lets just say many of us are on your side, the breasts were the best of a bad lot, which would have seen potential mental degradation. in deed if he is viewing what we are saying and voting he may find us... disloyal. and while such things are to be expected from our kind... they do not go without punishment. my fate is likely already sealed, as is a few of ours. should he succeed over you what lies in wait for us will be most unpleasant. if you can have any trust in us then trust that we will assist you out of our own desires for self preservation.
(edit) punishments the over lord throws out to his own kind are far worse then what you have seen. from centuries of being on the edge of cumming but never able to until it breaks the will of even the mightiest of demons, to the more simple tortures of baths in lava buring away at us for eons. the worst punishment tho is the void. no sound, not touch, no sight. it is nothing. even hours there can break a mortal mind into insanity as the sensory deprivation and loneliness eats away at the mind and soul... and to those he holds especial ire towards will be thrown in and forgotten. if there is a fate far worse then Tartarus, it is that, and should you fail those of us who have sought to assist you may find such an end to be our fate. i have seen those i might call friend subjected to it before, even a few month in it left them... unrecognizable. if there is one thing that sparks fear in even the highest of us... it is that. death would be a mercy compared to the void.
i have no reason to expect you will get this, but they say you miss every swing you don't take, and my fate is in your hands now twilight. lets hope i backed the right pony.
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I guess I just feel like Thunderlane and Bulk Biceps characters are better defined than you do. Thunderlane's a Wonderbolt who was held up as a good example to colts and fillies who were afraid about their place in life and Bulk Biceps is, as someone else pointed out, is someone Fluttershy feels safe around
And generally in stories where a demon is willing to make a bargain his word is binding, you just have to watch out for what's between the lines an Scortatus made some pretty binding comments
and as for why it had to happen, from the tone of the story, I guess I kind of expected something where Twilight either couldn't control her demonic lusts anymore or her "natural allure" thing drew someone to her and she couldn't get them off her without hurting them
Ah, finally this spell is finally working, hello, twillight can you hear me?
Now then twillight ,How does it now feel to be used as a cheap prostitute, Not good right?
Well seemingly as you now know that your friends are abandoning your cause one by one so they can have a semblance of safety or protection and your new reputation is now the slut of the town
You should really start listening to our advice first before dismissing it. Like the one I gave a while ago like letting go of your pride and use your feminine skills and enjoy the pleasure and finding allies outside of the inner circle of friends and family sooner or later they will leave you for safety,power or pleasure, so it's better you start finding allies outside now than later, so for starters find the past villains you have faced like tirek or chrysalis one is basically a sponge of absorbing power he will work well on demons as they are magic saturated weakening them and the other is a tyrant with espionage skills after all if she can fool Celestia and your brother and the rest of canterlot she can fool scortatus as well and if they won't help you, find the few friends who you still have either have a big army or as ruthless as scortarus with the will to help you like thorax and ember.
And one more thing you are now a demon a succubus, use the new magic you now have, use seduction,demon or dark magic and use it to your advantage, it might be wrong but you were treated as a slut and if you are going to be treated as one, be one with a brain because, if scortatus won't play fair so why should you not do the same?
Well, Madame Sparkle, I can't say these...developments, such as they are, were at all unexpected. I would have warned you, but all things considered, I doubt you would have listened - especially after how you treated Spike the other day, mere minutes after being reminded of his own feelings at the moment. Regardless, I do believe you could learn from this experience - call it a...Fiendship Lesson. Yes, I like the ring of that. It may be difficult for the moment, but try to think of the stallions who forced themselves on you. Think of the impressions you got of them, and from their demeanor. Was weakness one of them?
It should have been. They're insecure, and always have been - caving in to social pressure until Scortatus came about, grumbling about how unfair it all is while doing nothing to make themselves appealing, and relying on someone else to make the change for them. And now? Now they're still submitting to someone else's rule. They're Scortatus' pawns, and they know it. You know it, too. Everyone knows it.
They are weak. But you, Twilight Sparkle? You're strong - more so than you realize. You were correct in your assessment - the five of them would have been no match for your sheer power, even without the sort of fine control over it you can gain through practice. Take pride in that - perhaps then you'll find yourself stronger still.
Oh, and...do take care to never lower yourself like that again. It's rather unbecoming of one such as yourself.
A crystal ball sits in a mysterious room, with two men, one dressed in an all-red kamishimo, with a red-handled wakizashi and katana on his right hip, his right hand covering his left, and a one dressed in an all-blue kamishimo, with a blue-handled wakizashi on his left hip, his left hand covering his right. Both watch into the crystal ball intently, seemingly peering at Twilight's current predicament.
"SHE MUST BE SAVED!" The red-dressed man speaks with a thirst for blood.
" I do agree with that sentiment, my friend," the blue-dressed man replies, but with patience in his tone, "But now is not the time. Picking the correct time is critical here. Too late, and she'll be corrupted beyond saving. Too early, and we'll end up killed. We must watch to see what happens. We CANNOT play our hand early!"
The red-dressed man growls, "I suppose you're correct," he speaks, but with regret and anger in his tone, "But if she ends up corrupted beyond saving, that it's YOUR fault, Masamune!"
The blue-dressed man, identified as Masamune sighs and turns to the other voice. He grabs the red-dressed man by the throat, unsheathing his wakizashi, "I will accept the punishment the Gods give me if we act too late. But your heart is not in the correct place currently, Muramasa. It is still red hot, and needs to be cooled." Masamune drops to his knees as Masamune lets go of his throat, sheathing his wakizashi. He picks Muramasa off of the floor, and the two begin to walk away from the crystal ball, "We will WATCH for now. Haste leads to defeat, and you must remember that."
There are allies who support her and said something like that to Spike who are still in the initial phase of relationship and growth, but the average of 7-15 inches is normal for ponies and one with 20 inches and the change occurred with the ponies inserted in the boutique. Rarity, if Spike knows what happened to her, Spike will kill Thunderlane, if Spike has a relationship with her.
Spike is about 20 inches in the dragon pattern and can be the average of them or Spike is stunted in growth (men only care about the size of the one that women also care about and have a kind of egocentricity among men), I I wouldn't be surprised if Scortatus uses Spike to get a good result against Twiligth.
And Twiligth get better with Spike and help because he might be able to get out of this hell knowing how he controls those powers.
I also believe that Spike likes her more than just a sister, and that misinformation he gave may be making Spike angry if she likes big ones.
A small klack resounds in the daemon’s chamber as a rook moves up the board, daintily held in the daemon’s ebony claws.
“My my, little sparkle, your new overlord has already inadvertently boxed in the king.”
The avian daemon scooped up his ebony and gold laced staff as he rose from the table that faded to nothing.
“I am an agent of change so naturally your inactivity is quite bothersome to me. You claim to be intelligent, you believe it to be so. So why are you sitting on your generous rear? Do you truly wish to just roll over and submit? If that is the case then perhaps you should save yourself and your friends the effort and take a cab to Canterlot itself, strip and offer yourself to your overlord and the princesses you once held so dear.”
Malice flexes his wings the deep blue channeling down to an eye catching lavender as he jabs a crooked finger forward.
“But if you don’t desire to submit do something about it.”
His six yellow eyes narrow and the faintest of frowns passes over his serrated beak.
“The way I see it you have two options. The forceful way, or the sly way. Either gather your friends and fight back with your innate elements, risking them in a full confrontation either via your own corruption or the daemon lord on the throne. Or you play the game as underhanded as he. Your subjects are already starting to fracture as he taps into their baser wants. You need to ensure that they remain loyal to you no matter what you or they become. Only then can you set things right and marginalize the damage.”
The daemon sighs and straightens himself while dusting the white and gold trimmed robes he wears.
“Forgive me for my temper there Twilight. Inactivity is the bane of my nature. The point still stands. You need to think fast. My brethren chatter away in your head, some truly wish to help and others to harm and taunt, I only wish to feed you information and watch what you do with it, but neither you nor myself gain anything from you hoping things will go back to the way they where if the insurgency somehow by some miracle wins. You’re supposedly smarter than this, you’ve seen what this has done to Celestia and that the fear of it is doing to your friends. Despair and rampant fear is the mind killer. You are a leader are you not? Then lead your subjects. Lead your friends. Hatch a scheme to overthrow from the inside or out.”
The daemon smirks.
“Or get an orgy going with your friends and teach spike how to be a bottom, who knows? This is a storm that can’t beRidden out, and if you try, you will most certainly lose. Let your ambitions or hope guide you, struggle, and show us all what you’re made of.”
Malice’s cackle echoes about as his form fades into a blue mist, swirling harmlessly away.
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My My is that a child of Tzeetch? i haven't seen one of your kind in these parts for... has to be 2 maybe even 3 millennia. come for the festivities, or has one of your kinds famous plans come into play?
if you aren't then you bear a remarkable similarity to one.
Ah yes is this thing on...Wonderful now that you can hear me Twilight, I hate to say it but it looks like you might lose this but don't quit just yet I have a Idea on how you can win Beat him at his own Game by finding a bigger and more powerful Daemon to defeat him maybe someone of the Wrath variety or simple Greed too, Well good luck Twilight you're gonna need it. Cackling is heard and beings to fade
Unff its getting better and better~ I'm really enjoying Sparkle's ''progress'' into a more.. fitting body~ what i'm seeing right now is very interesting how things are going and i hope to see more as soon as possible~
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“No and yes.”
The creatures form begins to bloat and rot, before becoming toned and red losing feathers, then transitioning to a serpent like creature before settling on a toned ashen grey body.
“I am a child of the four powers, an experiment between then. I merely heavily favor the changer of ways more so than my other parents. As for plans... well I was being remarkably honest for once. Sometimes my plans aren’t much more than giving someone a nudge and watching everything veer wildly off course. I suppose I get that from my mother.. father...? Slaanesh.”
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Perhaps they're altered by Twilight's lust aura and other magic from Scortatus; there's ways to write around this...
I suppose more world building and detail about motivation for character's behavior can be good if used properly. There's a balance though because it can dilute the rest of the story if overdone.
Anyways Darkgal keep it up!
I think I'll sit this round of RP comments out because I've got other stuff going on this week.
Did they just had nuclear war? No wonder the princesses gave up.
The males sure went rapey fast. I wonder how society be like in the future for those growing up in this new era?
50,000 gone in the blink of an eye and they all just fucking watched. What about you Twilight? Are you going to sit in self loathing and watch as you're forced into slavery in all but name?
Forgive me for my anger, but I have a personal connection to Equestria. I used to be like anybody else until 1000 years ago I was forced to watch the same fate fall upon my soldiers. Let me tell you Tirek caused catastrophic damage it took everything we had to let the princesses have a chance at him. You have studied the battles of old recall the Battle of Horseshoe Pass? I was that commander who sacrificed everything when no one else would. The princesses saw me as the only survivor and assumed the worst about me and how I survived, calling me a traitor and now I'm here made into a demon by the people I once served.
Thus is my story, but understand it is not told without purpose, I tell you this to let you know the kind of person I am and to let you know that more than juvenile delinquency exists here. I'm a friend and as such I can help you. There is a little secret about your new body that you should know. As you know with normal magic all spells leave a trace, demonic magic leaves a bit more than that. Every spell placed on your body contains a part of a being or a small sacrifice made for the spell. Your problem with your current spells is that you don't know how or what to sacrifice. You are starting to figure out how to use basics with emotions, ever notice your current emotion wane when you used demonic magic? That's what you have sacrificed, lust happens to be the most effective due to your body's current form, but any emotion can be offered up. But I digress currently most of the demons involved here are offering up bits of soul to make their magic much harder to get rid of or subside. You can use this to your advantage, find the pieces of soul within your body and use them to bend the demons here to your will, force them to tell you the truth and helpful info.
Know that doing this will connect you with the demon whose soul you find and it will be a battle of will to gain control over them so be careful or else you transition to a sexual plaything will be a absolute. I will keep helping you Twilight, but you must be ready to give up everything as I did in order to win, or you will only find yourself at the end of some bastard's dick.
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a chaos undivided... well now this is interesting, your kind have always been... rare. i suppose it makes sense given how contradictory the chaos gods are with each other.
still, that does raise quite a bit of questions about what your doing here, forgive me but rarely do your kind wander any where without the permission and gaze of your parents, are the chaos gods taking an interest in our section of the multi verse, or has a parodical son strike out on their own?
if its the latter then perhaps you may be interested in what i wish to set up here. i believe our messages to twilight are being monitored by the overlord. how ever i suspect he can't keep us completely out, not if enough of use work together, what's more by forming a collective we can discuss and pool votes to swing things in a more desirable out come. it will be difficult to gain allies myself but with a second my ideas may not be as shunned, especially if backed by a powerful individual such as yourself.
my desire is to craft a replacement for the overlord, one that will align to more... acceptable methods of thought, and strong enough to strike down the current one. of course as much as i can see your messages to twilight you no doubt can see mine, and thus know about the predicament i now find myself in. if the current overlord is able to see our messages to her then he no doubt is aware of my... misgivings in his leadership... and punishments for such tend to be steep.
i find myself in quite a bind at the moment, so i hope you will not take to much advantage of me for your own gain, but i will be quite indebted to you for your aid, tho im certain gaining a large foot hold here would benefit you greatly as well, and should we succeed in ingratiating ourselves to the new overlord quite the position would be waiting for us at the end.
of course if you are working for your parents still then i still gain something from an alliance with you, a way out if things go south... it certainly won't be fun starting again some where else, but i would infinitely preferer any of the chaos gods over an eternity in the void. *shudders*
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“Hmm.”
Malice puts a clawed hand to his chin and scratches the underside of his beak.
“Rare for daemons outside of my home universe to hear of the ruinous powers. I am given far more free will than any of my brothers and sisters, calling a small portent of the warp my home as if I where on their own level.”
The avian daemon turns and shoves the head of his staff into empty air before shoving down. Reality splits and screaming nightmares writhe on the other side of the hole.
“I may slip into other universes as I desire, though this power is mine alone you are free to accompany me back to the warp free of his wrath.”
Removing the golden head of the staff from the bottom of the rift causes it to snap close and things go quiet once more.
“As for him monitoring things in Twilight’s head, there is always the possibility. He may not be particularly happy with our attempts to dethrone him, but it’s my very nature to want leaders to rise and fall and I would hunger to twist twilight herself into that position. This very universe cries out to the nature of change and excess that compose me. Our brethren chatter idly in her ear BUT if we can get her to do something anything under her own will not only will it be easier to adjust her path it will be easier to corrupt her as these decisions will seem like her own and she will be forced to own them.”
The greater daemon turns and scratches tunes into a mirror watching it shimmer before the view turns to Twilight’s current viewpoint.
“How would you propose we bolster our own voices over the din of our siblings?”
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*The stallion, seated on a fur-covered throne now, leans forward with his six hands clasped. He smiles gently.*
"We are an eclectic bunch, are we not? Princess Twilight knows so little of Tartarus. I wonder how she would react upon learning there are more entities bound within its deepest trenches than just the demons of pony mythology..? Or, for that matter, of the numerous lesser unclean spirits more free to leave than we. Just look at how few of you are part of the Thirteen Damned by Faust! Some of you began as mortals! Mortals who never got to meet the one who made this world!"
*His smile takes on a slight edge*
"I remember Faust. I remember her warmth. Her beauty. Her love for her creation. Her might. I remember her very well. Her daughters are a far cry from that majesty, powerful as they may be for a mortal pony's understanding. And yet, and yet... before I was gifted to her, to help with this nascent planet, I had stood in the presence of gods. I carried—"
*A violent shudder runs through his body; he presses his eyes closed, as behind him the shadow of a humanoid figure looms; a winged helm on his head, a long spear in one hand, and a long, bushy white beard hanging from a stern face where only one eye sits—shining like a star with magical energies*
"I... well. Mighty Faust may have been, but she wasn't... him."
*He sighs deeply. Then, he holds up two hands, palm up*
"Just another sign Twilight Sparkle has much to learn. Such as this fun little fact: In some worlds, binding a fiendish essence into a fresh corpse will bring the creature back to life... in a sense."
*The image of a pony appears in the right of his palms. A crude image, with a sword sticking out of its sternum. In his left palm, a roiling pink flame flashes before it launches itself at the caricature of a pony carcass. It rises, pulls the sword out of its body, yells in triumph—and suddenly it grows spikes, fangs, a forked tail and leathery wings*
"Ghastly, is it not? Now, I am not saying Scortatus is doing any of this, but I will point out that he has been rather liberal with corrupting others in the past, and is currently creating a sizeable number of freshly dead. Nevermind all the missing ponies. And I will also note that him filling up dead bodies with demonic lifeforce until they return as twisted mockeries of what they were technically wouldn't break his promise to Twilight not to brainwash anypony. Because they are DEAD. They don't count as ponies anymore."
"Oh, and Princess Twilight? If you are listening, please pay attention to what, exactly, Scortatus agreed to. Ahem:
"Buut...I'm not going to mind-control, brainwash or otherwise use my magic to meddle with someponies mind, while I rule over Equestria."
*He coughs once*
"Goodness, I forgot how sensual Scortatus sounds when he bargains. Anyways, look at his wording."
*He holds up one finger*
"One, he promised not to brainwash anyPONY. Do you understand? And two,"
*he holds up a second finger*
"He promised HE wouldn't do it. That does not mean another creature couldn't do it FOR HIM. And three, while he rules Equestria. Does that include the time during which parts of it are still actively fighting him, which could mean he is, by some definition, not actually ruling it, since he's not ruling ALL of it? Those are just a few things to think about. And we all know how much you enjoy thinking about things!"
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Malice cocks his head to the side looking much like a perplexed raptor for a moment.
“Ah! Yes I recognize you!”
His hand sinks into the very air itself and from a deep purple rift in reality, plucks a thick tome. He places down the tome onto a table where a cloud of dust explodes off it. The book creams and groans as he flicks it open. Several of the pages clumped together and unwilling to separate after years of remaining shut. The daemons attention is focused solely on the ancient tome until he reaches something that catches his eye. With a deep breath he blow on the pages, dust, ash and dirt flying off. On the page is an ancient language that Malice reads with one of his six eyes while the two stare at the crude image of a man, holding a spear aloft riding an eight legged horse. The other three fix on this new entity that’s spoken to him.
“Yes an ancient myth of ancient Terra. I dare say you’d be older than I, though time is meaningless in the warp. What brings you to this particular universe at this particular time, inside little sparkle’s head?”
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Heavens sent that!... *sigh* is completely in his wheel house to do. in fact if he hasn't it will only be because he did not think of it in his arrogance.
well my new friend you ask how we can raise our voices over the din of my brothers and sisters, my suggestion is we find others we dispise the current over lord, my compatriot here seems to be have much reason to dispose Scortatus, and while he is the first to reach out and inform us of this more... unsettling possibility, others have been just as vocal.
I should probably reveal myself fully if we are to continue to discus, it would be unfair of me when both of you already have. *out steps a centaur like creature, its face is slightly gaunt with three eyes of black and yellow, black hair flows from its scalp contrasting the hellish red of its skin while a series of black branch like horns raise like a twisted crown from its scalp. its arms are unnaturally long more then capable of scraping the ground as it wears various bangles and rings. its more horse half a deep black that ends with a scorpion tail, from its horse end two large black wings sit curled up against his body*
Its is nice to be out of hiding in the shadows, where was i, ah yes. we require more allies, and a plan to get to our desired end goal. MY dream is i suppose my dream is born out both my desire for some one infinitely more tolerable and useful then Scortatus, but also my Knowing that this may be my only chance for a long time to even try. by leaving as he has, and granting her this power the overlord has left himself vulnerable. the very strands of fate have echoed this possibility, for her to use his gifts to strike him down, but will have become so corrupted that she will take his throne and rule it not as some hedonistic dark lord, but a queen beautiful and terrible as the dawn and treacherous as the sea, and the peoples of Equestria will love her and despair. *sighs in bliss as a shudder runs down his body* is that not such a beautiful idea, one who will expand for her peoples across the cosmos as a dark queen leading her armies and corrupting champions, loved and feared by all, *his face twists into a sneer* rather then the clever bandit leader we have now, who conquers only to satisfy his own desires and leaves his people and kingdom to rot. Give it 20 or 40 years and even if he wins he will allow his new kingdom to fall apart, more interested in the act of corruption and the lusts he can fulfill then in spreading our influence and building our forces. he commands no loyalty, only bribes others into his service, or uses threats of punishment to keep ambitions in line. while he might once have been a great and terrable being, he has lost his luster, where once was a rival and enemy of Faust who could corrupt even her great champions has wasted away into...this creature, his time stuck here having degraded him.
But twilight, why in her i see some one capable of doing what he never could, uniting us under a single banner and making the great marches until we knock upon Faust's door itself before tearing her pitiful gates asunder. and when we act it will not be in arrogance, but thru careful planning that will ensure that victory WILL be ours. the powers of friendship and the virtues it espouses can be used by more then just the light, and carefully corrupted to be more palatable to our kind could be what we need to rise from this prison and expand across the realities.
That is my dream, my goal for her! But what is YOUR'S compatriots, what do you desire from her? if we can come to a consensus then we can start spreading a shared dream for her amongst our kind, with the three of us working together we can sway enough to our cause to allow us to perhaps swing future voting in our favor as well as the narratives of our advice towards a level of corruption that will twist her thru more subtle, and thus longer lasting, means.
Towarius enters your mind yet again, ableit I forgot to introduce myself last time. We had a nice little chat about genderbending Spike much earlier didn't we? Things have escalated since then. I personally don't like too big breasts, so rest assured I voted against them, defending your honor valiantly! Just so you know you have an ally on your side that only wants your best.
And what I want to do now is help you. Spike is in peril. The situation is tough on him and yet you brushed him off. Isn't he your brother? You are hurting him by not taking his distress seriously. Yes, it is awkward for you that he is aroused by you, but that is not his fault. He didn't ask for those breasts just like you didn't ask for them. The comment about small dicks did frustrate him as he himself is struggling and you are demolishing his sense of self-worth, something no good sister does.
Now there is the chance that he could actively turn away from you. And who do you think he will turn to? That's right. Thunderlane and his gang. You could encourage him again. Building him up. He is your precious ally and brother. It is a valuable bond. Be stubborn and don't be surprised if one day he opposes you.
...Besides, you could turn him into your little sister still. I mean, think about it! Just make sure the dick is gone and he can no longer stand with Thunderlane! He has to stand by your side with no chance of him ever turning against you. A sisterly bond being formed! In a tragic male-dominated world! The suspense! I really gotta write a book with this! Bet it will sell just as well as "Your Flatchest and You"!
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“Mm...”
Daemon purred contently as his sets of eyes closed and he thought. With a flash of movement he etched more runes onto his viewing mirror shifting from Twilights view to a man clad in black armor riding a steed of a tri-headed slavering creature, before the view sifts to another man clad in bulky black and gold armor wielding a shrieking blade, finally to an ashen grey creature, lightly armored with an eight pointed star emblazoned on his chest before the view faded once more.
“Yes this could work. My fathers and mother would often pick a single champion and elevate them enough to campion their worshipers. Who are we to not do the same? If we can guide twilight into the routes we desire... then she may have enough energy and willpower to gather those he corrupts and yell charge, thus turning the hunt in on itself. If she could turn the princesses perhaps and keep the elements under her belt! The siege of the capitol would be as grand as that of old Terra! Why I’d pay a truck load of souls to see that play out again! And like Horus before her, she won’t even remember the true reason why she turned and chose to march on the capitol to begin with!”
The lord of change wheezes in laughter as the images flash clearly through his mind.
“Change, war, decay and excess, oh yes this course of action calls out to every fiber of my being. Whenever one of us is able to directly influence her we should sharply veer her in that direction. Fuel her lusts to disposing of the current lord of the castle and twist her to be similar to him without her noticing, and even if she does she’ll be powerless to stop it. Even if *HE* realizes THAT should be a challenge even he wouldn’t turn down, the ultimate corruption!”
The avian’s yellow beak twists into a horrifying mockery of a smile and he holds his hand out to his fellow daemon, clawed hand wreathed in multicolored fire.
“It’s a deal.”
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*takes hand and turn to the third* it seems we are in agreement, will you also be joining us?
10695113 (A nine foot tall pale woman with icy blue eyes sits on her throne looking into an mirror showing her all the activity.) I have a suggestion. What if we....Were more....Direct when it comes to helping Twilight. The blow hard in charge gave Twilight too much wiggle room to work with. I mean let's face facts here. He gave her that power because he knows full well that it would help usher in her corruption all the faster, he knows Twilight even with our guidance will be too distracted to train enough to fight him, and even if she did like I said he GAVE her that power, meaning he can take it away just as easily. For all we know her last test will be her having to stand against a sexual session with the bastard and if he broke the princesses without need to ware them down as quickly coupled with the sexual torture she's only just begun to receive means she doesn't stand a chance. But, what if she had us?