Our world is just one of many. The story of a man exploring a new world, into which he fell through the conceived idea of the royal sisters. And also the stories of other characters in this world, combined into one plot.
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I have read this and I am intrigued with the story. Spelling mistakes in the first chapter along with grammatical errors all about, though you can put this through Grammarly for some of the more obvious errors or just used word docs to fix the spelling errors.
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Thanks for your feedback. Yes, over time I will correct mistakes and promise that I will improve my writing. As you may have guessed, I am an aspiring writer from Russia. And the English language is far from me, so I work through google translator. But I really want to share this story with readers. And I try really hard. I put my heart and soul into working on the site for 6 hours a day. On weekends 16 hours. So I apologize for the fact that the product is not of very good quality!
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Its all good. The idea is good and although your english writing skill needs work, it still is a good read regardless. Keep it up.
HELL YEAH! Now thats how ya talk to a princess!
Thia chapter was amazingly funny to read, and you introduced me to a bopping theme as well. (daybreaker boogie)
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And this is just the beginning! Adventures and other hot scenes!
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Блин это потрясающая реакция! 😆
Ouch. Yeah editing and correcting would help. I like that Discord can admit his feelings to himself (and I absolutely LOVE this particular ship, thank you ). If I may suggest something that someone had to point out to me, try italicized words to indicate personal, internal thoughts. Another thing which helped me was remembering, 'show, don't tell'. In other words have the characters perform the actions instead of telling the reader what they are doing or thinking. Have the characters engage the reader more (not breaking the 4th wall... unless the character is Pinkie).
By contrast, THIS is beautiful. There is some significant potential for this story and these two sentences speak well of your mind as an author.
Why call Fluttershy 'Flatty'? I am confused sbout that one. She isn't flat. In fact there is little to nothing sbout her that is flat. I do not understand the source of this nickname. You want to stop with the character saying, 'faggot' so often, or even at all. Were you a different author I would stop reading the first time I saw that. I do not hate gays and it is common knowledge that calling a gay person a faggot is like calling a black person the 'N' word. It is considered extremely rude and derogatory, a direct and extreme insult.
Ah yes! The wisdom and power of the mighty Babushka! The REAL reason Russia has never been taken over by a foreign power. I remember the Babushka who killed a wolf with an axe and another who frightened off a bear just by yelling at it, and yet another who bought a submachine gun so she could practice with the local militia. To all people of the world: do not underestimate the mighty Babushka. For you are slow and weak and easy to spank.