Our world is just one of many. The story of a man exploring a new world, into which he fell through the conceived idea of the royal sisters. And also the stories of other characters in this world, combined into one plot.
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Как всегда приношу извинения. Глава нуждается в правках, а на них у меня уже нет времени. Постепенно буду лечить все главы.
Но вот у меня есть вопрос. Хоть кому то нравится, то что я написал? Пожалуйста дайте мне ответ в комментариях. Мне очень важно знать мнение.
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It's pretty good. (I used google translate to understand your comment)
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Thanks for your feedback.
Прекрасное произведение) повторяющиеся строки только убрать) продолжай в том же духе ну и комментарии лучше писать все же по Английски
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Yes, thank you. I already realized my mistake and now I am writing comments in English.
The scene of the battle between the Night Fog robot and the pegasus reminded me of one of my favorite movies that I watched 18 years ago. I am from that generation who saw the first attempts to use computer graphics in films. Below is a video from an episode of the movie Mortal Kombat 2. Lyu Keng fight with the cyber robot Smoke.
The major's name was corrected, otherwise Google did not nicely fuck me. Quick Strike. His permanent name.
Heh, went from making out with luna to making out with Trixie...
I SMELL A HERD!
А у Трикси красивый ориджин, прям сказка.
Эх, Готика. Аж олдскулы свело.
Найт Фог работает на Skynet OS? М-да уж, теперь его шутка про рабов выглядит куда серьёзнее.
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Да, мне друг тоже сказал, что интересная концепция, а главное ново.
Найт Фог это один из персонажей, который проявит себя достойно!
Да треки Готики 3 еще будут встречаться. Мне они тоже ОЛДскулы сводят, хотя сама игра уже... не ну ради олд интереса я в прошлом году скачивал ее и играл.
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Yes, a friend also told me that the concept of Trixie's origin is interesting, and most importantly new.
Night Fog is one of the characters that will prove themselves worthy!
I assume you are still editing. I am confused by this sentence. I think I have the idea for the chapter. It is just a bit confusing to me why he suddenly and seemingly out of nowhere kissed Luna. Is he just sexually promiscuous? And why in God's name did Celestia order the arrest of those she knows are already on their way. That part makes no sense at all. I cannot discern the reasoning for it in any way. (I'll try to remember to check back tomorrow so I can see if you responded)
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The answers to your questions come in the following chapters. In the name of Equestria, the beginning of this story looks like madness, but then everything is explained and becomes clear. Why did the main character end up in this world at all.
Google translation at its worst. I say 8/10 can be understanded enough, but context is very often unclear if not out right missing...
Still well done. I am sure once the story is complet there will be time for grammatic overhauls
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Гугл-перевод в худшем своем проявлении. Я говорю, что 8/10 можно понять достаточно, но контекст очень часто неясен, если вообще отсутствует... Все равно молодец. Я уверен, что когда история будет завершена, будет время для грамматических изменений
The pacing seems inconsistent and makes reading difficult to focus upon; however, I do appreciate the dialogue more as a result as it is much quicker and moves the plot smoother than the descriptions. I also appreciate the depth of detail used which makes the story feel quite real.
Wow, the ponies of this Equestria are really horny. Not complaining, but I am intrigued to know how the author depicts how this affects their culture.