Our world is just one of many. The story of a man exploring a new world, into which he fell through the conceived idea of the royal sisters. And also the stories of other characters in this world, combined into one plot.
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I'm happy that cats keep their night vision in this story too! However do they keep their fear of water even if they are pirates? Asking to know, if throwing one over board is a viable way to fight them!?!?
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I don't think these cats have a fear of water. In general, in my story, it is the Abyssinians who are experienced sailors. Although this does not apply to everyone. Capper did not have such a vocation to become a sailor, although his father served in the navy, and from this this character has a little experience.
The best sailors, of course, are Hippogriffs.
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Awe I taught I figured out a way to fight them, if they try to board a ship. I guess these are the swimming cats. xD
Also I do agree Hippogriffs are the best swimmers in the show. They are basically a flying fish horse! :) Sadly there are none in this store. At least not yet.
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Finally, you have finished your long work on this wonderful story! And I honestly admit that you are one of those authors who were able to inspire me to write my world. In its history... "The world I'm building. The destinies that I intertwine." I remember when I went deep into reading your story, I read 140 thousand words a day... And I read this story for 18 hours a day! Can you imagine that? But it's true!
But my story requires a lot of deep thought. The style of writing (in the first person) prevails in 80% of this story. The characters also change, as well as the location of the described plot. The spirit of romance, adventure, playfulness and humor, the disclosure of unexpected secrets - that's what awaits the reader.
I also put up a mature rating for a reason. It almost always matches.
The plot itself almost every time presents some kind of unpredictability, and the main character will always pay for his "paradise"...
Poor Amira. Stuck on a boat and still manages to get hounded for her title.
Daring Do...don't know why. but she always manages to irritate me in stories, not sure why though.
Alright, here's my take on some things in this chapter:
Love the connection you've got going with Capper and Amira, it really feels genuine and sets the mood perfectly (especially that ending.)
The same can't be said for Daring.
Don't get me wrong, you wrote a really good Daring Do, and managed to make her NOT annoying in my eyes. But, she never comes off as a pony who'd want romance, and the the scenes where she's actually being romantic and not flirting almost seem...stale because of how her character is portrayed. Though maybe that's just personal basis against the character speaking, I'm not sure.
All in all, great chapter! Long, but fulfilling. Though it may be a bit before I can comment on the next chapter.
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Oh my God! You finally managed to do it! Thank you for your comment, my friend. I agree that this chapter is more demanding of attention and perseverance to fully understand its intent.
But the most important idea was to help Amira get to this island. The Phoenix medallion.
But now, Daring Do is also included in this story and she will still be able to show herself in the future. This is certainly something that should surprise the reader.
But Capper and Amira... this will probably remain an intrigue until the next chapters.
Фух, осилил.
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