A ship named necropolis

In a world of magic, it's bound that things will happen that shouldn't, or magic gets into places it was never meant to be. this is one of those times.
Princess Celestia, ruler, mentor, mother figure, and when the need arises war leader although that last one hasn't been needed for thousands of years at least. someone as long-lived as her is about to find out that sometimes the skeletons in your closet arent as dead as we think they are as an ancient enemy comes back to haunt her and make her and her ponies pay for her crimes.

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Pete100

Pete100 #1 · Nov 5th, 2020 · · ·

Her ears swiveled around as she heard the snow crunch behind her, she spun around to come face to face with the leader of their enemy, a tall pale creature that stood on two legs, devoid of hair except on its head, he wore a suit of armor unlike any ever seen before, made of black metal that seemed to suck in light, she knew this man well, she knew them better than anyone, after all, he was her ex-lover.

Wait, did she fight an army of humans?

She rolled to the left and struck diagonally at him, nicking his armor as she knew the blindspot of his helmet, he growled at that and sent a wave of dark energy at her by slamming his sword into the ground causing her to teleport further away to dodge it.

And that’s why I would probably never wear a helmet in battle.

She was getting desperate, this battle had only started but she was already tired from the battlefield below, she knew that his people had superior stamina and unlike her ponies fought dirty if need be, she had to find a way to end this quickly if she stood any real chance of winning.

Was she expecting a fair fight? Also, what does she mean by “need be”?

Celestia blasted him further away and then drew on her reserves of magic and her unfortunately large pool of hate for this war and channeled it into her horn and let it out in a burst, the windigo's felt this and for just a moment fallowed this hate, supercharged by it they froze solid everything they passed, including the very magic in the air sapping it and rendering the area devoid of magic as they passed, the leader saw this and screamed in rage and charged her once more to stop her but it was too late, the wall of hate and ice passed him, instantly freezing him and the entire battlefield in a giant glacier.

Wait, what did she do?

bones_of_a_brony

bones_of_a_brony #2 · Nov 5th, 2020 · · ·

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thanks for your comment, now to answer your questions, it is implied that they are humans but as it is only the first chapter it is meant to be vague in certain spots to sow intrigue and want people to keep reading to piece together more. As for the "need be" that was written as a way of saying basically when they fight that they won't fight dirty from the get-go but if it looks like they are losing or in a tight spot they will resort to fighting dirty. And your last question what did Celestia do? well, my friend, you'll just have to wait for the rest of the story to find out. thanks for voicing your questions, I love feedback from my readers.

Pete100

Pete100 #3 · Nov 5th, 2020 · · ·

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What I meant by “what did she do?” I meant, what did she do that resulted in him being frozen?

bones_of_a_brony

bones_of_a_brony #4 · Nov 5th, 2020 · · ·

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oh well windigo's feed on hatred to grow stronger, so what he did was send out a massive wave of magic mixed with her hatred for the death and war, the windigos got supercharged by it making everything colder and they fallowed the hate freezing everything they passed, I missed that off that I saw in the hearts warming episode when they did the play about the founding of Equestria

Pete100

Pete100 #5 · Nov 5th, 2020 · · ·

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Fallowed? You mean Followed?

The_GWR_Pannier_Tank

The_GWR_Pannier_Tank #6 · Jan 2nd, 2021 · · ·

A wonderful first chapter, a few spelling mistakes and punctuation errors here and there, but those are to be expected.
My only real criticism is that the pacing felt a bit rushed, especially towards the end, but for a first chapter it is quite impressive.
Cheers, and keep up the good work.
The_GWR_Pannier_Tank

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