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Welp!
God damn it Daybreaker.....
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Well it was bound to happen at some point.
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So since you said the Epilogue is the last chapter of this arc, are you going to make a separate story from this one or continue it?
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As of right now, I plan to make a separate story. It will still be the same story, just in its own book so to speak.
I'll leave a link to the new arc in the old arc and vice versa.
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Huh not a bad ideađ
What was this last part about
Velvet couldnât even scream.
God damn things got a little heated pun intended
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I was implying the pain was so bad she couldn't even scream audibly
Oooh. Now that's an interesting twist.
O shit!
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That's Backwater's first name. Not to be confused with Twilight Velvet, Twilight Sparkle's mother.
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Okay đ
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I hope you got more jokes coming
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Me too....
It gotta be said Orion ain't the brightest pony, he could've easily disappeared by ditching the armour for casual clothing and renting a room in a remote motel and during the night using other tenants to aquire new disguise rinse and repeat for a week or two with various motels till gates are open and walk out.
But what really bothers me is the tracking spell that Twilight used because you're telling us that no one else in the whole military can use the perfect criminal teaching spell than Shining and apparently Twilight and thought of using it?
It's like if the entire nation had only 1 search dog available, you try to make the military look incompetent but this is just ridiculous.
Edit
Why didn't Shining used that spell back in Griffon?
Calling it, he turned himself into a rock! Totally turned himself into a rock and saw the whole fucking thing! I'm waiting right next to the phone to post the Freezer meme of him calling it.
Even more convinced she was a changeling, using the Church for Chrysalis´own goals. In fact, the bugs may as well being the source of the records of Orion´s activities in Griffonia.
Hello crazy fire lady!
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Your first point is based on the assumption that Orion would want to go through that level of pain constantly. A twenty minute time limit is not long, despite how I stretched it. That much pain, that usually renders one comatose, would not make anyone want to use more than absolutely necessary.
Secondly, in my au, certain spells can only be used by certain ponies. Call it an affinity for lack of a better term. While yes, I'm sure there are others that can learn and know the spell. It's like enchantments. Unless one tries, no one is gonna know if they can do so or not.
Many ponies in this universe are happy with the simple spells they know. Then there is knowledge hidden away. And finally there are spells one is capable of doing.
Twilight being able to learn these spells is a testament to her being the element of magic itself. Thus capable of learning a vast array of spells if not all of them. A nod toward her own future.
And to top it all off, ponies have gotten comfortable, not many seek more for their own power. But rather comfort alone. Thus that laziness is not just in their society, but in their military.
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Okay THIS is where I draw the line, there was NO POINT to this killing! If she can self modify memories then she can do it to other as well! Hell she could have just knocked the guard out and claimed that Blackwater did it! She could have even sent her back with the rest and claimed that Blackwater attacked her because she started lieing under spell!
No this was utterly pointless and shouldnât have even happened! There were so many other ways to do this without killing off ANOTHER character (even IF they were a throwaway one) that it is a complete turnoff to the story!
Daybreaker would NOT have killed randomly like this, she is to vain and knows that loyalty through disinformation is far better than killing a Resource thatâs he DOESN'T have enough of in the first place!
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Fair enough, but as the saying goes short lived pain long lived gain, also you're telling us that Orion used that spell to turn himself into a mare which as you said would be painful enough to comatose him he managed to get back to the orphanage to get his shit get to the main gate then into the servers all under 20 minutes?
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I would reread the last couple of chapters. I explained it in there.
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But can he do that to an entire nation? Not likely, and not maintain control of Celestia long enough. She is limited in what she can do. And while I actually agree that she could have altered the guards mind, its not about the guard, but the public's opinion, she has to give reasonable evidence to not only the common pony, but the nobles as well.
And if you stay tuned next week, I hope, I will be giving a story driven way to explain the results.
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She doesnât have too, all she would have had to do is alter Celestias memories to show Blackwater attacking her, Blast a whole though Blackwater and rig the crime scene to how she wanted.
From there itâs just a matter of manipulating the investigation to how she wants from the shadows and providing the âevidenceâ to the public as facts.
There was no NEED to kill the guard in this scenario with the right manipulation. There is little to nothing that she gains from killing the guard like she did that she couldnât have gotten in another way.
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However, the constant delay of plans she had in motion would be unacceptable. Not to mention her own build up of power would be reduced with her constant need to assume control. That is a waste of energy.
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And? SHE JUST wasted more energy in killing the Guard and mind raping Blackwater then she really had too.
She could have just had Her arrested for Treason and THEN mind rape her later, this would have accomplished the SAME DAMN GOAL in a way that would have left the guard alive, got the information AND wasted far less energy!
Awesome! That bitch of a whorse Backwater definitely got what she deserved. And now that Daybreaker has ripped all the secrets Backwater knew about the church from her mind. I foresee a few more positions in said church's leadership suddenly becoming vacant.
Also, I was actually kinda hoping that Twilight would be joining Orion during his escape from Canterlot. I know she wouldn't have followed him outside of Equestria's border. But it would've been nice if they had gotten the chance to spend a little more time together. Since I'm guessing they won't be seeing each other again until Nightmare Moon's return.
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Day Breaker is also psychopathic demon bent on burning the world to a crisp along being a noncanon character. The author can do whatever they want with her and give them whatever intelligence they want. There has been no evidence towards what Daybreaker would do in the context in this story aside from brief glimpses and slight blackouts.
To be honest, the author can do whatever they want with whatever character they want, especially if they can justify it through the plot and events of the story thus far. It's one of the main reasons the "Alt Universe" tag exists. So take your baseless complaints to a different story where they're actually applicable.
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I think this is just matter of what's simpler killing a random guard nr 13 which Daybreak couldn't give two shits about and mind raping Blackwater then say she killed Blackwater in self defense it's not like anyone gonna question the Princess.
Than arrest Blackwater hope she won't get away using her connections, fabricate evidence of her treason then somehow get on with Blackwater 1 on 1 for some mind raping while hoping there won't be any witnesses.
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Oh yes get angry at me for pointing out a flaw that goes UTTERLY counter to all her shown actions, she is FAR from psychopathic.
She killed ONE PONY in Prance instead of killing the entirety of the Ruling Class as an Example!
If she had TRUE Psychopathy, then I highly doubt she would have let Orion live after that scolding in the throne room or the time he helped the Griffinâs (who would be her enemy in the future) with their government, people and military!
Th writing on the wall and the hints tells she has been planning this for AT LEAST 900 years so anything or anyone that FUCKS with her plans would be dealt with and killing the Guard makes that mindset utterly pointless.
So in your own words why donât you and I quote âSo take your baseless complaints to a different story where they're actually applicable.â unquote.
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Guys, please be nice to each other. One can voice their complaints without being rude to one another.
Necro is most certainly right that I can, and will, do whatever I wish with the character. At the same time I understand where Moonlight is coming from. My only advantage is I KNOW where I am going with the story. And I only hope you all will go on the ride with me.
Now I won't go into any more detail, as I don't want to give away too much. But I understand your grievances. And all I can say is, hand in there. Or don't. Just don't let a story ruin your day, nor others. I want you all to come and escape.
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Sigh yeah fine, I am still here after all!
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Necro, I want to apologize. I shouldnât have jumped down your throat like that.
Also Daybreaker IS canon, her first appearance in Season 7 canonized her and she had a further cameo in Season 9. To this date I donât think the G4 team has said otherwise anyway.
Yes it was a Dream/Nightmare, but so was the Tantabus.
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Just bare with me. And I had not realized that she was actually in the cannon universe. Still I have a plan! I promise xD
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True, there is always Necromacy right?
Well, now that we've got the Great Escape chapter down, I'll share a few ideas I had for how he would escape that weren't used.
I know there are many tools in the pursuer's toolbox to find Orion, but I can also imagine many counters based on his know-how and ability to enchant. I really wasn't sure how it would play out.
Great chapter by the way. I did like how Twilight single-mindedness came through.
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These were actually great ideas. One of which I actually thought of. (Won't say which one though. Mystery! Ooooooo)
One I couldn't see as feasible as to time constraints. The other because who could foresee this bs happening to him. And lastly the last bit, self preservation is a hell of a thing and doing the exact opposite and running the risk of someone catching his ass was just not in his deck of cards.
No, instead Orion went with option Delta, getting lucky like helen keller.
Good chapter
Though a part of my was really really hoping that Orion would make them all look like idiots, by waiting for the royal palace to be emptied of guards who departed to join the search in the sewers; only for him to break-in, smash the few guards that were left, and find a certain teleporter pad he fixed years earlier and that Twilight had let slip the info on where it was being kept...
After teleporting directly into the Everfree forest, It would have been a glorious final F-you to the princess if he just simply flicked a magical switch only an enchanter would know about to inactivate the teleportation pads. Celestia and a lot of angry guards (all moments away from catching him) would be stuck in Canterlot, while he had more than enough time to make an escape.
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Though, just make sure I understood correctly, was Daybreaker implying that Blackwater knew about her (Daybreaker)? If so, that would explain a lot; as Celestia was already planning to go through BlackWater's mind on her own, and thus would have been made aware of DayBreaker via Blackwater's mind. Is the Church of Sol DayBreaker's shadow government?
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Is DayBreaker Non-cannon? I thought she appeared within one of Celestia's dreams within an official episode.
Nooooo why did it have to be Errant
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Wait, Sunset Shimmer, is she going to be a good or bad person in this AU?
She would be Good if she betrayed DayBreaker.
She would be Good-ish if she betrayed Celestia.
She would be bad if she betrayed... ?
Need more info, why she play pin-the-dagger in rearside of sun-butt?
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You probably thought of the teleportation (not through the gate.)
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You shall not know! I can tell you that I will not be introducing alternate realities in this au. Only because we already crossed that threshold.
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That would explain a lot, like their viciousness or why they seem to consider Celestia more of an obstacle than a goddess worthy of devotion.
Still, Daybreaker herself talks about the Church almost like they were a pest, rather than minions.
Wait what,
She already daybreaker in first place? Since the episode one?
The fuck, i did not see that coming...
Hmmmm,
It seems that "against the sisters" will be the final Confrontation...
*Cuckles*
This dragon can see the ending...
I guess this is the end of book 1 since you say next chapter is epilogue. I feel like its a bit shitmixed but there are several plots going on here all colliding so that's kind of expected. I look forward to seeing where he is gonna go, hopefully somewhere he can get lots of resources and grow stronger. A foreign country out from under Celestia is the best bet.
Ohh shitfuck
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Well in the intro thing it mentioned minotaur bodies in the battle so maybe he will go there? You know since griffons are a" known freind of his"
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No Dawnbreaker is not implying anything of the sort. In later chapters your gonna found out how the Church of Sol came to be and to what is purpose is for. Backwater got in the way, and the current Church leadership pushed for it. So there will be some cleaning house so to speak. I will say the the Church is Dawnbreaker's insurance policy.