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This is good. Keep it up!đź‘Ť
Another awesome chapter to satisfy the insatiable the endless growing mind!
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I so want to speculate here on what's to come, but I'll be good and refrain. I do enjoy the story though, especially the faults and imperfections of the characters on display.
Liking his attitude at the end. and it even sounds very believable in this AU setting.
Keep it up
Fantastic chapter as usual dude, and pace yourself with each chapter, live life first, sort things out. :)
I wonder what the reactions on the nobility and Twilight are going to be like when they hear the news.
Thx for the chapter, while this won't mean much I do hope everything goes well with your situation at home.
Thanks for another chapter! It really brightened the shitty day I had.
Is Celestia still going to try and place Orion with Twilight's herd or has she already abandoned that plan?
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Come on my dude, you know I'm not gonna give that away xD.
still going well nice work.
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I guess I'll just have to wait and see then.
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Just wanna say thank you so much for taking your time to write the chapters despite your situation. You are awesome!
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I don't see anything to suggest that changed. Orion's capability in evading her troops, innovation presented via demonstration of an improved spell, political savvy shown by how he stood up to her nobles, and massive entertainment value only increases his value in her eyes, and need to bind him to her. Twilight is still infatuated with him, and he's not helping dim that any. Twilight going to his school to be with him, with Celestia's blessing. I don't see why she wouldn't stop playing matchmaker.
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Awww sorry bud.
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Good chapter, thanks for the update! Also, I hope your situation pans out, both with regard to the injury and your job. (Though, If I were you I would look up to find out if what your boss did was illegal given disability law.)
A few questions if you have time to answer though, because I am really REALLY curious. I apologize in advance if you already answered these in the story and that I forgot or didn't pick up on them.
1) Given that Orion was long using spells to monitor who was around him (which is how he evaded Twilight a number of chapters ago) did he know Grace/Screaming was eaves dropping outside the door? If he did, did he just abandon trying to find a way to let her down gently?
2) How long was Orion on the street? I know he was caught bloodied and eating a rat, symbolizing that most (all) of his humanity had left him - but was that because he was starving on the street, or because he was a convict/terrorist with no humanity to begin with?
3) Is this a redemption story? CH3 says he was convicted of a bombing, and in CH7 he says that he "He didn't do it, he only made the G****** thing" Seems to imply he made a bomb that blew something, or someone, sky high. Was he a terrorist in his last life or something, and is he trying to make up for that?
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First and foremost, I will make time to answer questions. I enjoy hearing from you guys, so this is absolutely no problem.
Secondly, I can only answer a couple, not because I don't know but much of the story hasn't 'gotten to the point'. I am writing this story around the idea of giving a little bit of info about the main protagonist at a time, as the story moves on his history gets revealed bit by bit. So not everything can be explained so quickly due in this case to authors' intention.
1) He did not know it was Screaming that was eaves dropping. He is not a god or a brilliant strategist. Often his greatest creations can be his crutch simply because he doesn't think to employ the full range of abilities of his equipment. In this particular scene's case: He was simply drinking and not paying attention to what was going on around him. Also the spell in the bracelet is different from the one displayed in front of Celestia. It was created, or in this case an alteration of the original spell that he first used.
With him being strapped for resources and cash, he has not had the time to update the bracelet to the new spell. Thus he is working with a less perfected spell that doesn't give him specifics other than speed, direction and size.
2) This was an excellent question, one I half-assed answered in the story. I say half because I never really gave out the estimated age of how long he had been there in Stalliongrad before being picked up. I thank you for bringing this to my attention and will be including this in the rewrite later on down the road. (Dear god save me!)
I stated, that he was 8 for his arrival to White's Orphanarium in Canterlot. I even gave an indication of the two years he spent in Manehattan's Home for Wayward Foals. What I didn't indicate was how old he was estimated to be at when he arrived in the world, and when he got picked up. Orion had been on the street for roughly a year by the time the rescue organization got to him. He arrived in the world around 5 years old. As I said there was no detailed way for even him to measure his own age. Blood-work in that world was still a weak science and not very specific.
As to him eating the rat, his humanity was not necessarily gone, but desperation for food when you are on the street will make you consider and do things that otherwise well to do people never consider. I know that from personal experience. He was in a world he had no real understanding of. The rules were not placed into him at an early age by parents. That, and this is a man in a child's body, on top of that he was a prisoner. Fear is a powerful motivator to keep one away from authority.
I hoped that one helped.
3) This is a second chance story. And I cannot answer this question without revealing more of his previous character. I can promise you he was no terrorist. But his situation is complicated. I hope to answer this question for you in the story itself.
Thank you so much for reading my story. And the questions are a great reminder of the course I am taking with the story. (Not that I don't read my own work all the freakin' time.) Its a great reminder of what I don't see because I have insider knowledge on what is coming. Thus everything makes sense to me while my readers are going : "The fuck is this guy talking about?!" So I appreciate questions like these.
Again, thank you. I hope this answered some of the questions and not created new ones lmao.
Peace!
ok so we got nightmare moon and spike now. considering this, we're most likely gonna enter a more twilight focused arc and will most likely start to see cadance soon as well. I am surprised that the idea of a cutie mark hasn't been talked about till now, it makes sense but i totally forget since it hasnt been mentioned before and the different species he has interacted with.
I really want to see the celestia side of this
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I hadn't actually thought of her side of that. But it might be an interesting attempt at her confusion over it. I'll see if I can find a way to inject it into the next chapter, but I make no promises. Thank you for the idea though.
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now I'm really looking forward to the next one
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While he's been in the orphanage and school long enough for peers to gain their cutie marks, he's also been very reserved and anti-social. This anthro-universe also conceals such marks with clothing. That said, this does strike me as a failing in his schooling. An easy explanation for how this wasn't part of his curriculum, given that Orion is an A+ student, is to blame it on the transfer between Manehatten and Canterlot--the former would have taught it later, and the latter earlier. He could have also skipped it by skipping ahead a grade in school.
I kind of hope that he does get some mandated cutie-mark counseling. There are so many councilors to call upon with ulterior motives--matchmaking, imposing consequences for the church, foreign investigations, parties seeking revenge, etc.
Great job dude, I hope your living situation improves. You could start a patreon or Buymeacoffee to help you get a little coming in.
Probably late and your life probably is better now but regardless
You pump out decent shit that holds my attention at record paces
If you need to chill, deal with life stuff I will be more than supportive reader of such as you have already done more than enough that such breaks could ever let me down
Have a great day man