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In another universe, far from the one we know (but not too far), a butterfly flapped its wings. A baby was born, as we well know. But rather than being white, with a mane formed from a prism of color, this filly was blue, close to pitch, with a softer blue mane. Her parents lovingly named her Luna. Not too long after, they had another baby. White, this time. I'm sure you know what to imagine. They named this filly Celestia; thus, our two royal sisters were born.
And, due to this one small change in what was now ancient history, we must begin anew; hear the story from the beginning. A familiar story, and yet so very, very different.

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Over a thousand years later, a young unicorn mare named Sunset Shimmer studies under the ruling princess of Equestria, Luna. With her sharp mind and spiky exterior, she's more than happy to spend her days alone, dedicated to her magical studies. She's made great strides with no one but her teacher and dutiful assistant, but when Equestria is faced with a forgotten villain of legend and she's the only one left who knows how to defeat her, "going it alone" may not be an option any longer.

CHANGED SOLAR FLARE TO DAYBREAKER FOR CLARITY'S SAKE

I've also posted this on Ao3!
Cover art is mine :)
For those of you who are as visual as me and want to see the references I drew up for myself, you can find them here!

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 7 )

Random note, not sure if you knew this and decided against using it, but the 'canon' evil version of Celestia is Daybreaker...

But eh, I can ignore that for the glorious plot. I definitely hope to see more of this.

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lmao i actually hadn't made it to that episode before i started writing this, so i didn't even KNOW celestia had a canon corrupted form until i sent an excerpt to my friend and they pointed it out. it just be like that sometimes :twilightsheepish:

I liked this one :)

A couple of notes though
These two should be one paragraph:

“I- Holy hay, how stupid-” Gilda barked out a startled laugh, which grew into a real one; one that had her rolling on the ground and gasping for breath. Satisfied with the outcome,

Derpy bounded over to Zecora, who was frozen stock-still, staring at her toneless reflection. She tackled her, because what else would she do? The zebra gave good hugs. Startled into autopilot, that was exactly what Zecora did – hold on to the small pegasus like her life depended on it.

“Oh, you’ve gotta be fucking kidding me.” Gilda said what Sunset was thinking.

You seem to mix "fucking" and "bucking" up a few time maybe?

I have a feeling having a Griffon in the Mane 6 is gonna fuck up a lot of general terms. Oh Well, at least we get Gilda being blunt, that's always great. Looking forward to more!

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its on purpose, actually! i imagine the whole "buck" thing is pony-exclusive (+ zebra) so like, gilda wouldn't censor herself like the ponies do. (kinda like heck is to hell you know what i mean?) sassy would never ACTUALLY say fuck because she is a LADY, thank you very much, and sunset doesnt actually care all that much, so she slips between the two. (in case youre curious: rara doesnt curse at all bc she believes theres always a better way to express what youre saying; zecora tries not to curse but when she actually does WHEW LAD; derpy doesnt curse when shes angry but MIGHT if shes excited)

also, thanks for pointing out the formatting issue, i completely missed that in my editing!

A good story, good characterization, but it's a little bit too similar to canon in some parts, especially with dialogue. Still really enjoyable, good work.

This one is a genuinely underappreciated story. It is similar, yet different enough, to the canon one to make it an enjoyable read. Downright delightful, even!

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