Use lie twilight wasn’t dreaming but sins the past weeks she gets strange dreams about a pony that was on the beach with here.
Walking and talking about clusters of stars and the books she like to read.
Going to a restaurant and have an nice dinner or walking in the park.
But she couldn’t remember his name or what he use to look like.
Twilight couldn’t set it out of here mind and didn’t know where she was looking for.
Its my first romance and pony fic a have written
There maybe a lot of type errors but a don’t now for Shure
I have dyslexion so for my its really hard to fix lines
Ty for reading my fic
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No, you don't have dyslexia. Dyslexia is where you mix up letters in the middle of words, like daimond for diamond or gaurd for guard or something. I know because I have a very mild case. You, on the other hand, are just a shitty speller. Also your story sucks.
From what I can tell you're saying at the beginning of the fic that it's your first pony-based piece in English. To be blunt, your English needs serious work right now. More practice and you can tune it up into a more readable format. There's probably potential in there, but it needs to be brought out.
1147330 win
You wrote this like a poem! Magnificent! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png
But really, there are a lot of things wrong with this . . .
So, you have Developmental Reading/Writing Disorder? I feel bad for you... really bad. I will classify what is wrong with your story though.
First of all, this is a story, not a poem. Yet you wrote it like a poem. Stories are always written in paragraphs. They are neccesary for the spacing of the story.
Here are a few paragraphs I just wrote on the fly to demonstrate. You don't have to read them, but they demonstrate paragraphs and other aspects of writing quite well.
Rainbow Dash was flying above the stadium center as a rainbow-colored wake trailed behind her. Wings were flapping hard. Front hooves pushed and stretched forward. This was the life. Having flat pieces of wood with pony-like faces drawn on them was nothing compared to ponies, though. But imagination was a powerful thing, and now she needed it to it's fullest possible extent.
She needed to learn how to perform the Triple-Filly Flashbang, her newest trick for the Wonderbolts performance, in public. Rainbow could perform it with her friends watching, but she just couldn't bear it with crowds and crowds of ponies judging her every wingflap.
Twilight Sparkle found out about Rainbow Dash's fear of performing in public, so with the help of Applebloom, she set off to find an unused cloud stadium and put thousands of wooden pony-like figures on the benches. Then she prompted Rainbow Dash to try to perform her trick in front of the emotionless wooden eyes of the figures.
Sighing to calm down and not screw up, Dash stretched every muscle in her body and started to go higher and higher into the atmosphere, while Twilight watched below with binoculars. Once going to a certain height, Rainbow Dash looked down and found that she had reached the height of the clouds. 'Good enough.' She smiled in determination.
Starting to fly downward at a fast rate, Rainbow Dash started to spin her body around, making her rainbow trail spin around in an array of colors. As she neared the stadium center, she began to move erratically in her flight, making little loops and twists with her body until she started to look like a rainbow ball of energy.
The ball appeared to crash into the ground at first, but that was merely an illusion, since Rainbow Dash was darting around the whole stadium, generating a white sphere of light around it. As the final part of her trick, Dash flew up up above the sphere and did a figure-eight formation, making it explode into millions of tiny pieces of rainbow glitter.
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That may not have been the best writing, but, as you may have noticed, everything is neat and in paragraphs. Not in a poem-like style.
Second thing, dialogue needs to be in quotation marks.
Quotation marks are these things below:
" "
If a character in your story says something, and you want to tell the reader what it said, you write what they said in quotation marks, like so:
"Hey Twilight! Haven't seen you in a while!" said Rainbow Dash. "Did you receive that Daring Do book I asked for?"
"Hello there, Rainbow Dash!" answered Twilight. "The book just came in earlier today! I haven't put it in the shelves yet, so it's on that small table right over there."
"Thanks!" Dash dashed to the book and out of the library to her home in a couple seconds, impressing Spike, who just walked into the room.
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All writing must be in quotation marks. Thought too, but you also need to have it italicized.
Third thing, proper spelling, grammar, punctuation, and capitalization. This speaks for itself.
Out of curiosity, which program do you write on? Pretty much every writing program or online app has a spellcheck feature. Use it and you will be happy, with much much less misspellings to deal with. If you have Microsoft Word, you get punctuation and capitalization check too, so that's also good.
Fourth thing.
An editor would be very useful in your current... well . . . condition. He/she will fix most problems you made for free, and all you have to do is just ask. A proofreader would also be useful. FIMfiction has a lot of happy and generous people, and any would be willing to help. I could also edit too, if you want!
I would say more, but it's very late now, so I'm being nagged to bed. Sorry if I may be asking a bit much, but if you read this (with some trouble, undoubtedly), then get an editor (like me) and get going with your writing!
YAY! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Colgate_beam.png
How can you guys hate this person?
I can tell that they have a lot of potential! My friend's dyslexic, but she's just fine! BTW, this is a good story. 
I was in an hurry when i was making this fic.
I had so much idea’s in one night that I made the fic to fast.
I may have somepony who is going to correct the story with me but it will take some time
Please enjoy the story for what it is now.
1148361 Agreed. I never dislike or hate or judge a person based on what they write. I try to help them with their writing, so they get better, and potentially develop a life skill.
Saying "yur story sux" should be a 24-hour-bannable offense. It probably won't happen, though, since pretty much everybody here says it.
Good comment, by the way. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Twilight_pea.png
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Thanks! I'm glad I'm not like the people you mentioned.
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Buddy, are you okay? Or do you not like dyslexic people who have to rush through the story, or can't help it. Come on!
This story makes me feel happy, yet sad. Twilight wakes to find out it was all a dream. I kinda felt.....warmth.
You, my friend, are good at romance. Not the best, but good nonetheless. This poked my heart, and I'm happy it did. I wish she can meet him in real life. I wouldn't think it'd be healthy to keep dreaming of "The One", yet he/she is far from your reach. It might cause insanity. But still, good story.
You earn Two Fluttershys:
One Scootaloo:
And a Coldplay song about love:
He'll always be there Twilight. Even if it's in your dreams, he'll always be there. Always.
1151317 dude, im minorly dyslexic myself but atleast i can word my sentances somewhat properly
1160899 Are you implying I don't? Because I hav an A+ in Vocabulary at my school
Because there are way too many spelling errors in the story, I will only edit your comment
This:
I was in an hurry when i was making this fic.
I had so much idea’s in one night that I made the fic to fast.
I may have somepony who is going to correct the story with me but it will take some time
Please enjoy the story for what it is now.
Should be this:
I was in a hurry when I was making this fic.
I had so many ideas in one night that I made the fic too fast.
I may have somepony who is going to correct the story with me but it will take some time
Please enjoy the story for what it is now.
I honestly did make an attempt to read this, but I coulden't make it. You really should get a pre-reader, (Try this site's chat to try to find someone if you need to) it will help your story immensely. it needs to be in paragraphs and when someone is speaking it needs to be in quotations. Here is an example from another story:
"Where in Equestria is Spike?" she said aloud to herself. As if on cue, Spike kicked the door open with his arms full of gems.
"Hey, Twilight! Is Shining Armor gone?"
"Yeah, he left just now. Where have you been? Oh, no, wait. Let me guess..."
This makes it so the reader can tell the difference between thoughts, the narrator and actual speach.
good news everyone
the story is nearly finish and will be posted soon without errors and proper line's
thank you for your time and keep reading
The story is been edit till part 3