10149046 Oh yeah. Maximum edge, brother.

(Jesus, I was being playful and I get dislikes for that?)

Can the caribou say "they fucked up"?

I like the story is going and keep up the good work

Great work keep it up

I see someone really dislikes the story, based on the dislikes on all the comments praising it. Please, tell me why you disliked it. It will help me to understand how to do better in the future.

10149127 A'ight. Whatever you say.

English - Zenogre, Japanese - JINOUGA

Also
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10149136 Apologies. However, the wording could have been less antagonistic, don't you think? Immature is a bit far. Also, could you explain more on what you mean by edgy? Just saying edgy makes me think you're just being biased (no offense). I need hard details here. Constructive criticism.

10149148 A'ight. But how is it immature? How is the story immature? Go more in depth, if you please. I'm still only seeing bias at this point. I need details here. Facts. Stuff like that.

10149162 And you're simply proving to me that you're working on bias and not actual facts. Now, if it was something to do with my descriptions, then I would accept it and change it accordingly. If it was an overuse of a word or something, I would accept it and change it accordingly. But all you are doing is repeating 'it's edgy' without any hard examples or facts.

10149165 Yup. There we go. Bias with a capital 'B'.

See ya.

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Wow, that's a shit ton of deleted messages.

10149174 Eh. People were giving me 'it's edgy' in lieu of actually pointing out any tangible problems, so I got rid of the nuisances. Though I'm sure they'll return soon.

Seventeen likes, six dislikes, twenty comments, and zero views at the time of me writing this.
Fimfiction, everybody.

10149191 Yup. Post one dark thing on here, and you're suddenly immature. I honestly tried to be diplomatic. Believe me, I did. However, after doing so, they simply gave me one response to my last question, "It's edgy." Tell me that isn't biased.

Before that, they also trash talked the FoE verse and all it's stories on baseless accusations. Were the creators horny? Yes, at times. But that does not mean the stories are inherently bad. That's only if there's no structure.

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Actually, I was poking fun at the bugs that still plague this site after several years. I know there are supposed to be more than zero views because I viewed it.

As for the story itself, there are indeed very few technical errors. Your spelling, grammar, and punctuation are all very good. The one issue I did notice is with the pacing. The first chapter seemed to move a little too fast (not ultra whiplash break every bone in your body fast like I've seen with some stories, but still), and the descriptions were relatively minimal. Personally, I'd recommend padding things out a bit so the story flows at a more natural pace.
All that being said, I don't think I'm going to follow this story, as the content and subject matters therin don't really appeal to me.

BLOOD FOR THE BLOOD GOD!

10149228 Well, at least you gave constructive criticism and a polite and good reason. Thank you. I'll work on padding it more.

Nice, a good slaughter-fest to set the tone on how this will play out. Hopefully the Caribou will put up a challenge, something big, that has huge guts, for him to Rip and Tear into.

10149237

Hope to see more.

This is actually very good, little fast paced I guess, but still very good and I expect this to be a good doom FoE displaced story, loved it and I look forward to next chapter bud

10151474 Thank you!

I thought this was going to be a regular Zinogre not an anthro one so I'm not going to continue reading but it's not bad enough to downvote so hope you get plenty of likes

10151847 Apologies for accidentally misleading you, my friend, and thank you for the well wishes.

Have a like.

10152153 Thank you!

Zinogre is hands down, one of the coolest looking monster in all of Monster Hunter, along with being a MAJOR badass, in my opinion at least. So I’ll definitely continue reading this, and hope to see more from you soon.

10162381 Thank you, I hope to meet, if not exceed, your expectations.

more please, i want to see caribous get rekt

Me,Discord and Alucard:KILL THEM,BREAK THEM,SPEAR THEM AND BATHED IN THEIR BLOOD!!!!!!!
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAA
DOOMGUY:RIP AND TEAR TIL IT DONE!!!!!!

10165126 Soon as I can manage.

10165193 MC: KILL, MAIM, MURDER, DESTROY, EXTERMINATE! EXTERMINATE! EXTERMINATE!!!

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Alucard:Houston.......we have no problems 😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈😈

Ah Stygian Zinogre... damned dragon blight always got me when I didn’t need it. I greatly want to see where this goes and I wish you luck in it

Well, looks like the Caribou are going to get fked right up the a55.

The youtube link leads to a deleted video.

10450257 Ah dammit. Hate it when they do that. Let me fix it.

10450257 Fixed. Thank you!

"..." It stood up, claws and body covered in and dripping Caribou blood. Slowly, it walked over to her, and she tried to press up against the rail, to escape, to get away. To her surprise, it leaned down and offered her a hand. "...An enemy of the Caribou."

I think something more menacing could've been written for the last line.

10612352 True, but I wasn't going for ultimate menacing, because that's not what Horus would say to someone who wasn't his enemy.

0 to a million in 2 seconds. Nice.

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