A bunch of High Schoolers suddenly find themselves getting exposed to Equestrian magic. Though practically anyone would be delighted, its a bit inconvenient when you keep turning into a pony in the middle of third period.
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Need a question asked? Here's one- how deep into the government does this truly go? Who's in charge here? Who's going to take the fall, win or lose?
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Could always use more questions! Part of that could be a spoiler, who would you ask that question to?
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I'll have to look up the name, but there was this one government agent who got a new assistant who is very magic-aware. I would put the question to both of them. (I'm never very good with names- forgive this old fellow)
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Ah Kizakstan and “Nova.” I’m terrible with names myself too (
shamefully admits I forgot Kizak’s name too).This whole thing seems to have been a disaster for everyone involved. I do wonder if Antoine was actually meaning to shoot the soldier, or if he simply made the wrong move and caused the soldier to panic. Whatever he meant, the soldier died for it, and possibly their father, too.
Man so much idiot ball
Dang, I knew we were in for trouble, but it ended up even bloodier than I feared..! And beside the ongoing tragedy of these poor kids seeing their whole life crumble around them, the overarching plot's still going on: now that Twi's entering the fray, all our main players are on Earth, and it's only a matter of time before they all meet – or clash.
I love how your story keeps dealing with shades of gray and characters doing sometimes very questionable, if not outright evil things, yet still thinking they are in the right and even trying to come up with excuses to justify what they've done. Chryssie, our 'big bad', still so hell-bent on revenge for the ponies 'stealing' her family from her, is also obviously trying (and failing) to come up with a rational, pragmatic reason to explain why she couldn't bear to kill one of her own foals. Private Rucker kills people because he thought he was the good guy, but at least he's rightfully horrified once he realizes how wrong he was – even though he keeps making life-threatening mistakes all the same. And James, in the end, acted at least in part to secure his family's future.
The protagonists aren't spared from the horror either, showing more of who they really are – Mike acted with rage and violence, quite understandably, but of course he ends up in shock and disgusted by what he's done. And even Angie, the cocky, devil-may-care hothead who doesn't back down from a potential scuffle, is aghast at the sight of the very people who were threatening her being gunned down... something indirectly caused by her own reckless actions.
It's so pleasing to see all this nuance, how 'messy' and complicated things can be in real life (or at least in a realistic/naturalistic setting), how people aren't just completely good or completely bad, and how violence and revenge most often than not comes with a heavy price, for oneself and/or others...
(Oh, and interesting to see that magic seems to actually turn more people into Equestrians – other exiles being revealed, or is it something else specific to Equestrian magic? Can't wait to see how this turns out!)
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Those silly characters. Maybe they'll learn one day.
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It's meant to be fairly ambiguous from the point of view from the soldier. Combat is a mess and rarely as straight forward as the movies tend to pretend it is. But...if you must know Antoine was just going to help his friend and *then* maybe grab a gun if he had to
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This chapter was definitely a pivotal moment of the fic. Blood has hit the floor and they ain't playin' anymore. Things will definitely be different from this point on.
I really hope to explore those shades of grey in this fic. Morality is a tricky thing, most so than most of us realize. I hope more of my readers will enjoy some of the mind games in the story. So many perspectives certainly can make it a challenge sometimes, but even the 'villains' shouldn't just be enigma's that lurk throughout an entire story only to reveal a traumatic back story when the hero faces them later on. The road to hell is paved with good intentions, but is not judging one on their outcomes just as dangerous?
I'm certainly no word-smith as you are with your story, but I do try my best to make sure our characters are realistic. We fail all the time, and our heroes should to. Like us they aren't always who they want to be, or able to be all they should be. I hope the chapters to come will give all my readers something to think about, or at least enjoy ;P
Thank you for being such a great help writing and for all your support.
Yess one last update this year, thanks for that :)
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Yush! I try to at least update monthly. The break between semesters certainly made it easier. Thanks for your continued support!
Finally all caught up and looking forward to more! Since you’re looking for questions, I would have a question for Aaron:
How does he feel about these people that he has just met and their recently acquired powers? What makes him stick with them? Is any part of him jealous of their powers, or perhaps worried that he could somehow get infected?
Also, a question for Arty (although perhaps it’s something that you’re wanting to wait to address later on)
How does he feel about being turned into a mare in relation to the fact that he is attracted to men? Thus far he has tried to avoid thinking about it, and he can’t really get much help from Jake (the changeling). It would be interesting to know his thoughts on that.
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chuckles and rubs the back of my head. Well uh...neither of those references were on purpose, but still! Glad you enjoyed them!
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I've had the next chapter in draft form since January (yes, literally.) My schoolwork just pushed it all backwards with a bunch of projects and sadly writing can't come first. I hope to get that one out soon. Your second question about Arty will definitely be addressed in upcoming chapters. To be honest, both of those should be answered in coming chapters. One of those questions definitely causes a lot of trouble.
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That's what I figured but I was a bit thrown off by what Tempest described as two armed guards, but I suppose that is just her point of view distorting things. The shock I was referring to was when she first tried to escape from the cage with her magic it said that it gave her an electrical shock. Perhaps because it was metal and nothing actually nefarious.
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Oops! I thought for sure that I was onto something! I'll just have to investigate closer when I eventually reread the story!
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I feel that I've had a story that I've been formulating for about a year now, and there just never is enough time to actually sit down and write it with school and everything. If you're looking / interested in another pre-reader / proofreader, then I would be more than happy to help! Great stories like this deserve to be continued!
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Good foreshadowing can either make or break a story, and thus far you have done an excellent job at giving subtle foreshadowing both for what is to happen down the line, and also what will even happen within a given chapter. Certainly excited to see what you do with how there pony-selves seem to influence them more and more, and why Arty seems to be the main one that is affected by this.
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She got a shock when she tried to blast it with her horn, the electricity arced back and hit her. The armed guards were cops that they had called to help handle the situation
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I’d be happy to add you to my pre-reader list. I’m Aremna#7250 on Discord and once I complete my second pass on the chapter I’d be happy to share it with you for a preread.
Finally caught up and wow.
I'm really starting to admire what you've done with telling this story now. This chapter really shows how all the pieces are moving together.
So many times you see stories with multiple perspectives do it just to show more scenes to a story but usually there's one main character and the rest are just supplementary to their plot.
But unlike those lazier stories you've utilized this way better. At its core the story is about the kids but there's actually enough going on that I'm interested in just about all of these characters. I actually do feel like there's lots of parallel stories running together because the motivations and arcs are understandable.
Angela is best human-pony-child (not that I don't want to hug all these kids) but Sheriff Redmond is best human!
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Multiple scenes can be a nightmare, but it really is nice. I can show all these complicated views and actions of these moving parts instead of being limited by just the people the main character happens to see. Gives room and time for each character to actually be a character. (Of course this has an insane amount of problems with a convoluted plot and way too much going at once that is easy to lose people on…but it gives re-reading potential!). I’m just so lucky to have awesome friends and readers to engage in my rambling horse fics.