I murdered a Prince of Equestria. Murdered a boyfriend. Numerous times. Killed several ex-boyfriends. Killed an innocent pony. Killed scumbags. Killed the kidnapper of my Rarity. My sweet, lovely angel. And I killed my peace of mind. Why did I do it all? I wasn't too sure. I think I wanted to protect Rarity, but after nearly kissing Rarity, and hearing her confession, I just wanted that kiss. I wanted to feel it's sweet embrace, washing away my pains and troubles. Her confession made me forget my pain, so I sought out the love she felt for me. I thought that it would wash away my pain, so I chased her. I chased her to the Carousel Boutique, and ran into the doors. I saw Rarity's shadow upstairs, so I ran up there, tracking blood everywhere. I saw her run into a room to the left, so I ran into that room also.
A guest room for Sweetie Belle; it was empty. Window wasn't open. I looked around, feeling oddly calm. I am protecting Rarity, I had no reason to feel guilty. The murders before? Necessary. Golden Shutter? Trial and error; you learn from your mistakes, and I did. I wasn't doing anything wrong, I was protecting many in the name of love. Many; the many faces of Rarity. All of them. Generous, beautiful, charming, seductive, dramatic; all of her faces.
“Rarity? Dear, I don't want you to be scared! Come out dear,” I said, standing on my backlegs.
I belched out the Death Note, and used the blood practically oozing off my arm. I opened it up and the blood slowly dripped onto the notebook. I grew another inch, and my spines sharpened into blades.
“I won't hide it anymore. I want to have an honest relationship. Please? I killed them. I don't like it, and I don't want to, but I have to. Tonight was proof! You need protection, and this tool lets me!” I checked the closet of the room, finding nothing. I poked my head in. “Ra~rity! I love you! I need you to love me! I need you to understand why! Twilight will protect me, so I must protect you! It is a circle of love, and it will always return to you!”
I stopped speaking, and turned around. I looked around frantically, starting to hyperventilate.
“Ra-Rarity? Come o-on out, my l-love. Please, you love me!” I walked to the door, noticing it closed after I swung it open. I growled. “OUT OF MY WAY!” I shouted, kicking the wooden door in.
I ran down the stairs and took a corner into the kitchen. I looked around before flicking on the light. I felt tears stinging my eyes, and I felt the panic returning. I started breathing eratically, and I opened the cupboards.
“Rarity? Did you lie to me? You couldn't lie! I...” I stopped, remembering her face earlier. “You were in tears? You cried? Who made you cry? Was it Blue Star? I killed him already! The bad pony is gone!”
I flipped through the pages of the Death Note, looking at all the names I killed.
“It's easy, you just gotta say what the ladies wanna hear, and they'll be giving you access to their beds in no time at all.”
“Did it hurt? Your face screamed pain, right? I'm sorry! I had to kill you! You were going to hurt her. Ha! She doesn't deserve pain!” I shouted, closing the Death Note.
“GET OUT YOU LYING, MISERABLE EXCUSE FOR A BOYFRIEND!” a voice rang through my head.
“Yes, you told that bastard your thoughts! He hurt you, and you decided his fate!” I shouted again, holding the Death Note on the new page once more, regardless of the blood drips.
I ran out of the boutique, stumbling as I did. My head felt dizzy and my mind was numb. I looked around the area, seeing the streets almost barren. A trail of blood followed me into the boutique as the blood dripped off me on my way there. I followed it back to the forest with my gaze, and saw a lavender mare running towards me. She had tears on her face, and she slowed down upon seeing me. She almost cowered immediately, and the silence only made it worse. Crickets chirping in the background, and clopping in the distance. I saw her, and smiled. I dropped the Death Note and ran up to Twilight. She took several steps back, shaking her head. I reached my arms out and knelt down, lifted Twilight off the ground, and hugged her.
“Mommy! I am so glad you're here! The bad pony kidnapped Rarity, but I got him! I can't find Rarity, though! I need to find my love, Twilight!” I shouted, setting Twilight down gently.
I turned and ran back to where I dropped the Death Note. I looked at it and turned around, seeing Twilight's shock at the note' cover.
“Twilight, I'm a flippin' hero! I protected Rarity with this!” I said, walking forward and flipping the pages open. I wasn't sure what page she saw, but it made her shriek.
“NO! SPIKE! TELL ME THIS IS A SICK JOKE!” she shouted.
I lowered the notebook and my expression of urgency faltered. I looked at her with confusion. Twilight continued shaking her head. I turned the page to see the names of the three ex-boyfriends. I sighed, and closed the notebook.
“Mother, I am so sorry. I never wanted this. I never wanted to kill. I accidentally killed Blueblood. After that, I couldn't stop. I was too far in, and I couldn't stop. I wasn't able to. I knew after I heard Blackhoof badmouthing Rarity, that she would hurt herself,” I said, looking down.
I glanced up to see Twilight's face with tears flowing freely, and she didn't shake her head. Her mouth moved, but no words came out. I resisted the urge to cry myself.
“I had to protect her, mother. I love her. I can't stand seeing her get hurt, and the other ponies...” I shook my head again. “I couldn't let that happen, mother! You told me that everything would work out, but I couldn't wait for that. I had to make sure she was safe,” I said, shaking the Death Note.
“No, Spike. You weren't protecting her. You were hurting her, and us. You hurt me, Spike. I love you so, so much, and I'm willing to die if it meant protecting you, but this? I would never take another pony's life to save you. The only chance of me taking a life would be to extract revenge for you, and that's just out of hot-blooded passion.” She stepped forward, closer to me. I felt my entire composure crack, and I looked down at the Death Note. “I worked so hard to catch the one responsible, Spike. Helping Rarity sleep a good night was a nice goal, cracking open this case and ending these deaths... these murders-”
Murder. This was murder. I murdered Blackhoof in cold blood, and watched his agonized face as he died.
“-no matter the reason, Spike, murder is always wrong. I love you more than anything in the world. I would fight Princess Celestia herself if it would protect you, but,” she said, looking away.
I felt my heart crack and shatter as she spoke. She looked at her hooves, before looking back up at me. Her brow was furrowed, and she sniffled.
“I can't accept this. This is murder, Spike. You've murdered many ponies, and I can't accept that,” she said, stepping closer.
I shook my head, hyperventilating even more. My eyes widened as I looked down at the lavender mare. I coarsely groaned, and my shoulders went tense. I clenched my eyes shut, and felt my body violently shaking. Her voice rang in my head.
“When you’re sick in bed, I’ll be making you soup.”
I deepened the claws on the Death Note's cover, and felt a pang of guilt rising in my chest. That nagging feeling, tugging at my heartstrings. It suffocated me, and I couldn't take it.
“When you’re carrying your bride onto your chariot, I’ll be there to congratulate you.”
I threw my arms, opened my mouth, and prepared to roar, feeling my dry throat bugging me. I felt my anger swirling around like an intense flame.
“Even if Equestria hates you as an adult, I will be there to protect you... at any cost.”
I didn't roar. I swung my arm around blindly, opening my claw and grabbing at what I thought was an appropriate time. I heard the sound of magic, halted instantly as my claws grasped a horn. My head snapped into position, and I saw Twilight's pained, scared expression.
“YOU SAID YOU WOULD PROTECT ME YOU LIAR!” I shouted, lifting Twilight off the ground.
She let out a pained scream as she slapped at my arms with her forelegs. I roared coarsely. I didn't loosen my grip, and I didn't feel remorse. I felt my claws disturbing the skin on her back, and I could see the pain on her face. But I didn't care.
“YOU LET ME USE THE DEATH NOTE! YOU DIDN'T STOP ME! AND NOW YOU BLAME IT ON ME!” I shouted, tossing Twilight away.
She flew pretty far; across the street, and was heading for a corner of a house. A purple glow surrounded her, and she gently touched down on the ground. I looked away to see Shining Armour staring me down, unable to believe what he was seeing. Rarity, Rainbow Dash, Fluttershy, Applejack, and Pinkie Pie arrived next to Shining Armour, and each of them bore horrified expressions. Rarity didn't look like she was looking at a friend dying, or a friend in pain. She looked at me like a monster, and quickly, Shining Armour stepped forward.
“STAY BACK, GIRLS!” Shining Armour shouted, his horn lighting up and his Royal Guard armour appearing on his body.
“Wait!” Rarity exclaimed, voice cracking.
Shining Armour ignored her, and immediately ran forward, his horn lighting up. I growled, falling on all fours and taking a deep breath. I unleashed an intense green flame that spread in different directions. Shining Armour generated a shield around him, and he jumped into the air. I saw him up, and stopped breathing flames. I leaned back, crossing my arms preparing for Shining Armour's hit. Nothing happened, and I instead felt the ground below me slam into my gut, knocking me up.
Shining Armour landed on the around, and he let out a grunt as his horn lit up once more. I quickly recovered, and realized that even on all fours, I was taller than Shining Armour. I glared at him, feeling the tears evaporating on my hot cheeks. I quickly spat out a gob of fire which impacted the ground right at the base of Shining Armour's legs, and he shouted from the pain. He looked down and quickly extinguished the flames. His leg armour was still steaming, but he ignored it. His horn glowed once more, and I decided no more. I lunged forward, immediately closing the distance. Shining Armour attempted to jump back, but I swung my arm forward, wrapping my claws around his forelegs. The cold metal clashed with my fiery hot body.
He yelped in pain as my grip tightened, cracking his leg armour. He still managed to focus his magic enough to create a flash bang in front of my eyes. I released my grip, instead swing my arm again to throw Shining Armour across the street. He rolled into a set of flower pots, and I felt my eyes struggling to adjust to the darkness after the flash. It was like I wore a pair of sunglasses at nighttime.
“STOP IT!” Rainbow shouted, dashing forward.
I turned my head just as Rainbow tackled me in the neck, wrapping her legs around me and using the momentum to push me over. I stumbled to the left before falling on my side. I felt Rainbow Dash pounding on my neck, but it was more like a constant pinching. It annoyed me, and I stood up effortlessly. I reached my arm up, tearing up again.
“You're loyal to your friends! Why are you attacking me? YOU LIED WITH TWILIGHT,” I shouted, grabbing her with my right claw.
Applejack let out a shout, galloping and bucking me in the wrist. Without even grabbing Rainbow, I retracted my hand, and swatted at Applejack. Applejack was quickly yanked back by a magical presence along with Rainbow Dash. Shining and Twilight yanked the two athletic ponies back. Another pony stepped forward, this recognized as Rarity. She had a pleading look in her eyes that expressed her sadness.
“Spike, please stop!” Rarity exclaimed.
I ignored her, shutting my eyes to try and forget the pain in her eyes. I killed many for her, and now, she's scared of me... no, she's not. She approached me. She wanted me to stop, but I can't. I couldn't. I had gone too far... and Twilight lied to me.
“RAH!” I shouted, swinging my head through the air while blasting fire into the skies.
I aimed at Shining Armour, and he couldn't react as he dropped Rainbow Dash. Instead, another shield appeared in front of him, and my eyes steered to the right to spot Twilight lifting Applejack and shielding Shining Armour at the same time. I stopped blasting fire and faced Twilight fully. Shining Armour's horn lit up again, but Twilight waved her hoof.
“Do not do a darn thing, Shining Armour!” Twilight exclaimed.
Rarity stepped next to Twilight, and before Twilight could object, Rarity raised a hoof. She approached me, taking slow, cautious steps. I would have attempted to roast Twilight again, just to ignore her angered, disappointed glare. Rarity's expression only seemed to have sadness and regret.
“Spike, please stop. This isn't who you are! You're not a murderous, mean dragon,” she said calmly, regardless of the commotion.
I looked to the left of her, seeing Twilight's sad look, then the right to see Shining Armour with a curious expression. The others were scared, unnaturally so. I felt my stomach tying into a knot. My chest felt a huge pressure in it, my heart beating miles a minute. I looked back to Rarity, feeling my anger starting to disappear.
“Murder. It was murder, Rarity. I...” I heard my voice cracking, and I felt the tears steaming on my face. “I... Blueblood... accident. Blackhoof was... he was using you. He was using you for your looks. He was hurting you. And the others were going to as well.” I looked around frantically, realizing that I dropped the Death Note a while back. I reached around and grabbed the Death Note, noticing how I only held it by the tips of my claws or else I'd shred it. I held it in front of Rarity.
“I didn't want to! It was an accident, but I couldn't stop after Blueblood. It was too far, and I couldn't get rid of it! I'd never live with myself! I protected you. I just wanted...” I stopped looking to Twilight. I started choking as I attempted to breathe normally. My arms shook, and the Death Note slipped out of my claws. It dropped to the ground in front of me, open, revealing the pages for the rules. “And now I hurt Twilight. And I hurt you. And I killed Blue Star. And I liked it. I can't stop. I've gone too far. I-” My legs and arms trembled. I opened my mouth to speak, but couldn't. I stumbled forward, ducking down so I was below Twilight and Rarity's heads.
“I'm sorry! I'm so sorry, mom! I didn't mean to, I didn't want to! I couldn't, and I thought you would protect me! I thought you could keep me safe! I'm sorry mom! D-don't hate me!” I shouted, crying. I closed my eyes, and laid flat against the ground. I covered my face, and trembled furiously. “I'm sorry Rarity! I love you so much! I thought I was protecting you. I just... I didn't want you to be hurt by others! I just, and you with the boyfriend, and the pain of...”
I felt two sets of hooves wrapping around my head, and I opened my eyes to see Twilight and Rarity wrapping their forelegs around my head, and I couldn't speak anymore. I sobbed into their arms, and I let out all of the pain I felt up to then. The guilt, the sadness, the regret, and the knowledge that I would be finally paying for what I've done. I felt the emotions reduce me to a weeping foal, and it only served to intensify when Pinkie, Fluttershy, Applejack, and Rainbow Dash all wrapped their forelegs around me. Even with the numerous ponies blocking the path, I felt myself looking at the Death Note.
“You're welcome, Spike. I love you.”
“I fell in love, mom. I fell in love, and I've had to watch the one I love grow sadder each and every day.”
“Well, yeah. Nothing major... I just love her, is all.”
I knew love the entire time. I felt it, I received it, and I gave it. My body shrunk, and it continued to shrink. I felt their forelegs wrap around me easier as I continued to shrink until I got to a point where I was eye level with the ponies. It seems this was my true height after months of ageing. I opened my eyes, looking at Twilight. My eyes shot open, and I shoved the others away, and ran backwards towards the boutique. The smaller body reminded me of the Death Note sheets hidden in my scales. I pulled it out, and quickly attempted to start writing name into it. I heard clopping behind me, just as I turned to see Twilight creating a small firework on my hands, launching my Death Note sheet away from me. I fell onto the ground, and Twilight stopped, looking at the sheet.
“What is... 'Spiek teh Doragn?' Spike, you tried writing your name down? You tried to kill yourself?” she asked.
I rolled over, looking at Twilight from behind my bloodied arm. I saw her saddened expression, and she walked over to me. I attempted to scurry backwards, shaking my head. Twilight's horn lit up, and engulfed me entirely. I was lifted off the ground, regardless of my shaking. Twilight's forelegs engulfed me, and I felt even more regret. She was hugging me, holding onto me and nursing me like a foal in pain. I wrapped my arms around her, holding her as tight as I could without choking her. Her cradle provided comfort I couldn't comprehend.
“I l-love you, m-mom. I am so, so sorry!” I choked out.
“I don't care what it is, I will protect you, Spike. Even if it's from you,” Twilight replied, suppressing her sobs. “You're my son, and I would do anything to protect you.
“And now, here we are,” I say as I look at the Death Note.
I avert my gaze and stare at the group. Twilight, Rarity, Fluttershy, Pinkie Pie, Rainbow Dash, Applejack, Shining Armour... even Princess Celestia and Cadence are here. I sigh while some of them cry at my story. Princess Celestia and Cadence have expressions I can't decipher. Twilight and Rarity both carry saddened expressions.
“Well, Spike, taking the law of Equestria into account, we have every right to execute you,” Princess Celestia says, to which I close my eyes. I sigh instead of argue with Princess Celestia.
Twilight shoots up to her hooves and stares at Celestia. “I will not let you, Princess Celestia. There is no way in Tartarus that I would let that happen,” she says, expressing no fear.
Princess Celestia smiles, while Cadence frowns. I look back and forth between them, wondering what Twilight could possibly do.
“I knew you would say that. It's why I looked at all the rules of the Death Note that you asked me too, and I understand what you want to do,” the Princess replies as she sips her tea.
I raise an eyebrow, looking back to the princess, then back to Twilight. “What could possibly happen? I've done so much,” I say, shaking my head.
I hear hoofsteps, and spot white legs sitting down next to me. I look up and see Rarity's warm smile directing itself straight into my mind. I smile back and lean into her side, closing my eyes to nuzzle her without the room distracting me.
“Twilight, if this is correct, destroying the Death Note will erase all of Spike's memories of the Death Note,” I hear Princess Celestia say.
My eyes open wide, and I look over to her, just as the other ponies present stare at me.
“That will happen?” I ask, wrapping my arms around Rarity.
“Yes, it's true, Princess,” Twilight says, looking at me with her attempt at a warm smile.
“But, if I forget, I wouldn't have learned everything! I...” I look around frantically, checking my body. “I still need to write a Friendship Report! I want to tell you guys what I learned! I don't want to forget this!” I shout, shivering at the same time.
Twilight shakes her head, sadly. Once more, tears fall down my face. I shake my head. “So, all of this I'll just forget?”
I look over to the Death Note, lying on a table in the centre of the room. I didn't feel the guilt I had before... just sadness that I'd forget everything. I look around the room to the others, seeing them all giving me a solemn look. I look back to Twilight as she approaches me.
“Is there really no other way?” I finally ask. “Won't I forget everything else that's happened?”
Twilight shakes her head. “It states only your memory of the Death Note. Everything else will be untouched,” she says.
I looked to the others, seeing reassuring smiles. I look back to Rarity, seeing a tearful smile of her own. She reaches a hoof out, touching my cheek tenderly. I reach my hand up, caressing her hoof. Looking back to Twilight, I smile.
Twilight levitates the Death Note as well as a metal bin. She sets the metal bin on the table, and levitates the Death Note in front of me. I look at her, confused.
“Would you like to do it, Spike?” she asks.
I look through the open window, staring at the setting sun. The gentle breeze blew through my face, and I closed my eyes. This sensation is very calming, and reminds me of the fact that I have a life. A life my friends are giving back to me. A second chance, and I couldn't be happier. I turn back to Twilight, grabbing the Death Note. I stare back down at the cover, spotting the words.
DEATH NOTE
My three claw marks are on the left side of the cover, reminding me of my rage.
“YOU SAID YOU WOULD PROTECT ME YOU LIAR!”
I smirk, shaking my head. “You didn't lie to me, mom. I was being stupid,” I say, looking directly at her. She opens her mouth, but I raise a claw. “Thanks, mom.” I say, looking to the others. “Rainbow Dash, Applejack, I'm sorry I grabbed you. I don't know what would have happened if you two didn't jump in.” They both smile, no malice visible at all. I look over to Pinkie Pie and Fluttershy. “I'm sorry I stole your yearbook, and scared you, Fluttershy.” Like the others, they smiled, even if Fluttershy still expresses fear. I nod, and look to Princess Celestia and Cadence. “Princesses, I am so sorry for what I did. I am so sorry I took Blueblood away from you.”
“Spike, it was an accident. This entire ordeal was an accident, and I want you to know, I don't hold any resentment towards you,” Celestia replies.
“Nor do I, Spike,” Cadence follows up.
I smile, looking back to Rarity. I feel some regret once more, and sigh.
“Rarity, I never wanted to hurt you. Even if I forget everything that has happened, I want you to know...” I start choking, feeling my tears flow once more. “I will always love you. Even if I don't act like it all the time, or if I don't...” I paused.
The tingly feeling. I quickly massaged my belly, feeling a tingle begin to intensify. Finally, I belch out a small box with a small dent on the top.
“Rarity, I got this for you several months ago. You were talking about Blackhoof, and I felt betrayed. I didn't give it to you, and I ran home like a sobbing filly.” I look up to see Rarity's bottom lip trembling, reminding me of the situation. “I threw it at a trash bin, before pulling myself together. I picked it up, and right there is when I found the Death Note. I ran home, thought it was a crude Rainbow Dash prank. I thought about who I would kill, not knowing it was a supernatural notebook.”
I opened up the box, revealing the flame-shaped ruby inside. I held it out towards Rarity, and looked over to the Death Note in my hand.
“This ruby, I looked and got specifically for you.” I tightened my grip on the notebook, and felt heat intensify. The Death Note started to burn, and I tossed it into the metal bin. “I love you, and I jus-”
She cuts me off with a kiss, completely surprising me. Rarity is kissing me. I closed my eyes, relax, and lean in myself, feeling her soft lips on my own. I'm feeling joy unlike any I've ever had before, and I don't feel guilty. Rarity pulls back a small distance, and whispers.
“I love you, Spike the Dragon.”
I smile, looking at her teary face. “Smile for me, Rarity. I don't want to see you sad ever again.” I lean back in, kissing her once more. I wrap my arms around her, and enjoy it as much as possible. I'm oblivious to the obvious looks of happiness, sadness, and such behind me, and I feel my head growing heavy. My eyes close on me, regardless of what I want. Behind me, the Death Note burns into a crisp, and finally, I fall unconscious, held onto by the arms of my love.
“So, that's how you end this? I figured you mortals would have learned after the last pony abused the notebook thousands of years ago. It took one lynching to solidify it's place as a legend. You mortals are certainly interesting... your free will, and power to change the world is incredible... and I'm sure these ponies know this lesson well; you alone, cannot change the world. Goodbye, Equestria.”
“Spike, are you done yet?” I hear my mothers voice call out.
“One sec, mom!” I shout.
I quickly stash my clothes and various books into the suitcase and attempt to close it, struggling against the tight fit. I grunt as I lean onto it, using my weight to press it closed.
“Need some help?” Twilight asks, obviously watching me struggle.
Sighing, I slide off my suitcase and turn to her. “Yeah, yeah.”
She smirks, and her horn lights up. The suitcase opens up, the items inside fly out and fold up quickly before being placed into the suitcase, and then it closes normally with no hassle. I shake my head, sighing.
“You're great, mother,” I say, shaking my head at her display.
“I am pretty great, yeah,” she replies, giggling.
I walk over to it, picking it up before looking up at the bedroom. It has a mystifying atmosphere that suddenly made it hard to leave. The tree was so familiar and reminiscent of something that's eluding my mind, but I couldn't put my finger on it.
“Shame Final Flash died. Rarity really needed a break,” I say, saluting as the sunrise peaks through the window. It gave the room a golden brilliance unmatched by anything I've ever seen. Mornings were great.
“... at least she's getting one now. I'm so excited that the others agreed to come with us on the Zebra homeland vacation!” Twilight exclaims, clopping her hooves.
I smirk. “Yeah, I just can't believe that I'm going to be with Rarity on a twenty-four/seven basis.”
I feel a weird sensation in my head, to which I quickly respond by rubbing my temple. Twilight looks at me as I stare at my bed.
“Something wrong, Spike?” she asks.
I don't catch her nervous glance, focusing on the pain. I sigh after I realize it wasn't leaving, and turn to her.
“I just feel like I forgot something important, mom. Like there's a gap in my memory,” I say, chuckling sheepishly.
She chuckles as well, waving a hoof. “C'mon, we're already keeping the others waiting.”
She walks down the stairs, and I sigh. I look back at the room, specifically at my bed. I have this weird, nagging feeling in my chest. I shake it off, etching in the memory of the last time I'll see the room for the next month. I nod, smiling at the warm scenery.
“I'll need a bigger bed, soon. Old one's too small,” I say before turning and walking into the stair case. I give the room one more look, shaking off the weird feeling in my head, locked the door, and closed it.
The nightmare was over.
THE END
I would like to thank every person who read this story from beginning to end, who wrote a comment/review, offered opinions, and such. This story is my most popular to date, either because it's a Death Note crossover, my followers have escalated, or because I was just that damn good. This wouldn't have been possible without you guys. I would also love to thank my editor, Static Shock.
Thanks for everything you guys,
Arby Works.
... Beautifully done man. I would put it as 'You are just that damn good.'
Yes. Good. Very, very good. NOW EQD IT.
And you've provoked my pool of thoughts yet again.
At the end of the day, murder is a sin just like any wrongdoing.
True forgiveness requires one to forget about another's sin.
They've inadvertently allowed everyone, including Spike, to forgive himself.
Gah! Now I feel like a hypocrite.
this ending really sucks , it makes the entire story pointless . spike didint learnt anything or did something to earn his redemption he is still a sociopath . it is unsettling that everyone forgives him so easily of all the murders he commited . how could the mane characters interact with him knowing capable of murdering innocents ? celestia also showed so much disrespect for the law.
in conclusion thumbs down .
I liked the ending... I was expecting A really really sad one myself. And I don't know about you but it seems he will always have that nagging in the back of his mind for the rest of his life. The princesses were right, the entire incident was a mistake, And spike (even aged up a little) is still a child unable to grasp what was really happening.. Heck I don't think full on Adults would have figured out as much as he did.
This ending I like
*claps* got to say I didn't see this ending coming, and I guess my final prediction was partially true (I'm that good). Seems great minds do think alike.
I was expecting Spike to die.
I was expecting him to die just like Kira did.
Then I realized... it's not Death Note. It's My Little Pony.
Very well done. My Sparity sensor went off the scales with this one. I really loved how you portrayed Spike's feelings about this whole ordeal, and the whole him turning into a raging monster was also awesome.
Oh, and don't bother about that greenwar1991 person. It's just...
Trolls
Trolls everywhere
Anyhow, great job, and a fantastic ending.
1195956 Aha, thank you.
1196063 National Pony Writing Month. Totally am. :3
1196107 Ah, well, Friendship is Magic.
1196517 The point I tried to get across was that we are still in the Friendship is Magic universe, and it's easier to forgive than hold a grudge. They just realized their friend went insane over the past few months, the first instinct is to help, while Shining had the actual killing intent. Celestia knew that killing Spike would have done more harm than good, and decided to take the more tame method. I also didn't want to get lynched, buuuut...
Either way, thanks for reading the story and providing feedback.
1196827 And he totally will for a while. Until he gets that new bed, he'll be 'out of it'.
1197500 Not all reception is positive, though...
1197531 Ah, thanks you. :3
1197918 I had wanted to depict him as an oblivious child who couldn't understand what he was doing, so I took this route instead where he could get a clean slate.
... but for people who aren't satisfied, I can write the non-canon ending that I originally intended. It ends on a sadder note.
*ahem* Thanks for all of your comments!
1198385 it better get a huge rating...
1197918 first i am not a troll it is an honest rewiev about the faults in the ending. look at my other posts or my profile if you want a confirmation.
1198385 if he was really insane they should have send to an Psychiatric hospital , they must follow him 24/7 to make sure he dosent do anything bad . .having him forget everything is the worst mistake you did . it makes his redemption and posible cure imposible , spike still maintains his obsesion with rarity and he was insane long before he found the notebook .
what good spike did ? the only dragon raised by ponies in history and goes on a killing rampage , everyone belives that dragons are monsters and they are confirmed by him . celestia denied justice to a lot of her subjects. how can she look in the faces of the victims family and say that the culpit got what he deserved ?
the m6 really cant really interact normally with him anymore .he killed a lot of people rarity knew didint deserve to die .how can she see him and not remember them ? how can twilight not be devasted for being a mother so bad that her son became a serial killer ? they are seriously out of character.
i belive you left the Friendship is Magic universe behind when you killed blueblood.
So, let me get this straight. He becomes a serial killer, ripping apart somepony in the end. He fights and deceives his own friends. Twilight becomes devastated, as well as Rarity. And no punishment is done?
I'm sorry, but this ending is not right. At all.
Yes, I've read what you said some replies earlier, about forgiving and so. We're still at FiM universe... with murders, sick jealousy, inner turmoil and other dark features. I agree that killing him wouldn't be a solution, though: anyone who says that a Death Note wouldn't turn him/her mad after (or even before) using it lies. You have a divine power on your hands, the power of killing anyone the way you wants (well, not entirely, but still); it will mess up with your mind. I liked Spike's ultimate breakdown, right before he shrinks, because of that. It's a totally logical reaction.
However, forgiving him and erasing his memories isn't a good solution. I agree with greenwar1991 about locking him in a mental institution, for a while at least. Then, when he is sane, free him and Celestia does a speech to Equestria about the Death Note and how it turned its user (not talking about Spike, of course) utterly insane because of its sheer power, then destroys it. I can't portrait Celestia calmy sipping tea at this ordeal, or Rarity still loving him when she should be wrecked (and don't make me talk about Twilight). What about victim's families? What about the commoners who are terrified after the wave of crimes?
Don't get me wrong, this is still an incredible work, and doesn't deserves a thumbs down (mostly for how well you portrayed Spike's descent into madness). Its ending was wrong, that's all. Also, getting more words about Twilight's depression after finding his son is a murderer would have been interesting. I'd like to see this alternate ending you're talking about. I'll prepare some boxes of tissues, just in case
Can I tell you a secret? I was expecting Sweetie Belle to be the Misa Amane of this story. I don't know why, but in the first chapters I thought she'd fall in love with him. Then, somehow, Spike would convince her to aid him and both of them would "protect" Rarity. Him being in a relationship with SB should have been ok; after all, he stated that don't getting Rarity's love didn't bother him. But I guess this wasn't a copypaste from the series, so it's ok
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See I can understand both accounts. I don't like sad endings, but I understand that Spike was robbed of learning something about what he did.
Also the fact that only Spike forgot what he did, I find that it doesn't rub me right. Though ignorance is bliss, does the rest of the ponies deserve to carry that guilt? I was actually hoping that the destruction of the Deathnote would be a "reset" button, and but still allow them to remember the actions. So the problem with Spike still needs to be resolved. But the fact they no longer apply means the crushing guilt becomes more bearable.
Anyway that's just my two cents. Best wishes!
1198477... I'm going to answer this as best as I can. If you find that I come across as mean or cold, don't worry, it's meant to. (jk)
Anyway, first, this:
So, having a crush on someone, who is admittedly beautiful, has a wonderful personality once you get to know her, which he has before all this, and is overall, very generous, is to be considered an obsession and would render one insane? Explain this please. Because I found Spike to be quite tame before Death Note came to his life.
Then there's this:
All I have to say for this is, well, this. She is a 1000+ year old goddess ruler of a country that holds court, in which ponies can come and present their ideas, complaints, and praise and such. In the 1000+ years she has been alive, I'm almost 100% positive she has had to do something that would benefit ONE pony, but screw over many others, if only because she was fooled by silver tongues and such. So how does she face the families that she's screwed over? Because I'm she has to every now and then.
Now for this:
Ok, I can see your point here. All of them except for Twilight wouldn't be able to really act normally around him. But, we haven't really seen the m6 interact around him. Only Twilight. And you know how the saying goes, "A face only a mother could love" I'm sure Rarity DOES remember them. In fact, I'm sure she cries for them every now and then. Besides, these are questions to be answered in possible epilouges/sequels (looks at Arby hopefully) Now then, let me explain this one. 'how can twilight now be devasted for being a mother so bad that her son became a serial killer ?' Ok first, it's devastated. Now then, you really can't answer that question until you've held your own son/daughter in your hands and asked yourself, " Would I risk life and limb for this child of mine?" This is a question that can only be answered by a mother. And you have to remember that no matter how much of a serial killer Spike turned into, he was still her son. And no matter what you think you know about the world, (nowadays, it doesn't really count as much. What with humans turning into literal scum and such.), there is always one thing that will *almost* always remain true: A mother will give her right and left arms and legs for her child. No matter the cost, no matter the reason, they just know that if their son's life is on the line, they would gladly risk their life a hundred times over.
And then theres this :
No matter how much you want to believe otherwise, and by the way, that's how you spell believe. Not belive. Anyway, no matter how much you wanna believe otherwise, this is still in the Friendship is Magic universe. In fact, EVERY SINGLE STORY OUT THERE (including the shit stories like 'Cupcakes' and such) is in the Friendship is Magic universe. It's just their own little version of it.
Hope this answered questions and such! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png
Holy shit, Arby, you've started a shitstorm!
1198477 The point of the ending was there was an option to be able to forget about it without the one at the centre constantly breaking down... not to mention the rules of the Death Note state that destroying it causes the owner to forget everything. Celestia wouldn't keep the Death Note in existence, and addressing the public about it would only confuse Spike. I was going to have him die, but then I realized that it'd be too similar to Death Note... and yet, this ending is similar to the Death Note movies. Misa Amane in the movies keeps living her life after the Death Note's were burned because she lost her memory while the ones hunting down Kira decided to cover it up.
tl;dr: ignorance is mandatory if I destroy the Death Note which will happen regardless of the ending.
1198527 Chapter 9 was when he snapped entirely. He completely lost it when Rarity, the one he was supposed to protect, admitted her love for him and then was immediately kidnapped. The pressure of the last few months just got to him that night, and he felt the urge to have revenge against the kidnapper; writing his name so that the kidnapper was killed by a rampaging beast simply ensured that Spike would succeed, and the rest is history. Or something.
1198561 I'm only following the rules of Death Note here. There was two possible endings; Spike lives, and he forgets everything, making punishment impossible, or Spike dies, and Spike dies. Yeah, either way, somebody will be unsatisfied with the ending. Death Note destruction = owner forgetting the Death Note. This ending has Spike seeing the murders regarding Rarity as tragic coincidences.
And I reiterate for all; either Spike lives and gets off scot-free, or Spike dies. There is no way Celestia would keep the Death Note in either ending.
1198587 Same issue as the others, I see. The thing is, I didn't like the fact that Spike would be forgetting. I even had Spike address that he would forget his lesson, and the others were okay with that. Not to mention he's a dragon, and would live with that knowledge for a few thousand years... *ahem*
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I would also like to note that Celestia never truly confirmed it as murder, but brought it up as a question in the newspapers on Twilight's request. Like what L Lawliet did in Death Note, it was a psyche-out technique to have the killer slip-up, and that's the thing I didn't like.
I didn't want to copy-paste that much from Death Note, but I already gave Twilight a Soichiro Yagami/L Lawliet role by having him as Spike's parent and the detective. Killing Spike, introducing a Misa Amane/Sweetie Belle, and several other factors would definitely limit my originality, not to mention I wouldn't be able to write it properly since it's not the ending I actually wanted. I had always intended for Spike to live, since Light Yagami probably would have lived on with his life when the Death Notes were destroyed (Remember, the Kira Investigation Unit in DN didn't know that destroying a notebook would wipe the memories at the time).
Again, I can make a non-canon Alternate ending to please the ones who don't like a tragically depressing ending, where Spike would get his sorry ass killed, and then I can go "Blah blah blah justice has been served."
Note: If anybody wants to do an alternate ending, feel free. I'm planning a few myself.
1199104 Okay, forget revealing the DN to the public. Still, I think he should be imprisoned for a bit, then freed and make him destroy the notebook. That way, he's properly punished, learns his lesson and makes justice getting rid of that terrible weapon.
Don't worry, the Misa Amane thing was only a personal suspicion. I understand that would be almost a copy-paste of the series. I can only congratulate you for making such an amazing story while keeping a good balance on the crossover thing
PS: get another editor soon, since you said your formal one has little time. I see some grammar (and other kind of) issues that should be revised. Nothing major, but EqD prereaders can be strongly strict.
1199555 if he's imprisoned and then the DN is destroyed, that makes his imprisonment entirely pointless since his memories will be gone. The others will have just prevented Spike from living his normal life for a while when he does forget. If they didn't destroy the Death Note, then Spike would have to live with himself, and as I said, it wouldn't happen. The rules of the Death Note as stated by the author of the manga, and has been used in all media adaptions, is that losing ownership of the Death Note be it by destruction or giving up ownership, results in the owner forgetting. Spike will forget whatever lesson he learns when he destroys it.
I may wind up making a sequel, since I've had plans and I've been setting it up since the beginning.
Also: My editor is slow as hell. He edited one line from Chapter 4, and hasn't done anything since. o_e
1199602 Pointless? I don't think so. Being in jail would be a terrible experience and give him time to think about his actions. He'll forget later, yeah, but until then, he's paying for his crimes. Sorry if my point is not clear Think about this case: if someone commits murder one month after dying of a deadly disease, should we let him/her live free or is some kind of punishment worth? I think yes, it is, even if a little further on the future the murderer will die.
About his memories, he'll not lose them as long as he doesn't give up his ownership. While being in jail, somepony can lock up it. That doesn't involve ownership at all.
OMC, a sequel. I'll eagerly wait for it And about your editor, I think I'll pass
PS: I thumb'd up your story, since I stated multiple times its excellency.
1199717 Wait, after they die, they commit murder? o_o You mean after being diagnosed? If so, lock them up, and when they can't support themselves, put them in the hospital. This is a different thing entirely. He won't remember a THING about it, and they're just raising questions among the populace as to why a battle occurred in Ponyville the same night of a murder several days after there was contemplated murder in Equestria just as Spike the Dragon disappeared. It's easier on everyone and everything to just have Spike forget.
Again, Celestia wouldn't let the Death Note exist, especially if it involved psychological torture for someone under her rule, and especially not because of the fact it's a murder weapon.
Aww... I can never keep an editor...
1199750 Oops, silly mistake about my hipothetical case. Yeah, I see your point, and understand your decision. Although Spike's disappearance could be explained as a long trip to dragons' homeland or so. Aggh, curse you Death Note and your rules, you make everything harder
You know, one time I thought you'd create a happy ending stating that the whole story was a terrible nightmare suffered by Spike after hearing about Blackhoof, or even bringing up the Death Eraser
1199784 The timing would have been too perfect, and they would have solidified the disappearance of a large Spike and deaths of several others as well as a battle in his hometown, and Spike's life would be ruined. Killing him, or having him forget is truly the only way this story can end without pulling a bullshit.
I was actually plotting to kill Spike early on. "This isn't the darkest chapter, guys. That's the last one." While Chapter 10 certainly was dark, it didn't kill Spike like I planned, since I was pondering a sequel.
I also pondered using the Death Eraser before realizing that it'd be an INSANE cop-out, not to mention Blueblood's skeleton running around would have been fucking creepy.
1199900 Ruined? Why? Wouldn't he forget his imprisonent after destroying the Death Note, since it was caused by the murders?
Killing Spike early, huh. Another pony finding the DN later, or what?
Well, the Death Eraser supposedly has the power of erasing any trace of death from the victims: mending bones, reactivating organs, creating new flesh and blood, you know. Not plainly resurrecting the dead. Although your thoughts would have lead to a very funny "Army of Darkness" ponyfied sequel Seriously, what the fuck was Oba thinking with that Deus ex Machina?
1199979 Goes to jail, loses memory, comes back to society to discover he's been gone, Equestria blames him for a bunch of murders and chaos...
No no, I planned to have Spike die at the very end, but I held off due to a sequel.
IT didn't specify. In the pilot, Ryuk only said it removes death... but I suppose that would come along with reviving. I mean, three boys have been dead for days, they would have been braindead by then and bloated.
1200006 Reading this last message of yours and the convenient good timing of his disappearance (and taking into account that this event would have lead to a lack of murders, then suspicion from the locals)... Yeah, changing the ending to a "punishment" one would have been complicated, to say the least. It's just I can't avoid being bugged about the total forgiveness, I hope you understand it. Anyway, my best wishes to you and your stories
oh shit, didnt think people would be bitchin this much. while i might partially agree with some people that how spike got away scot free (its like yeah i killed ponies but im sorry (gets slapped on the wrist)) but the point of locking him up after the death note is destroyed what would be the point, spike is gonna ask why is he being imprisoned and of course nopony is gonna answer him because they dont want him to know what he did otherwise what was the point of destroying the death note in the first place if your gonna tell him of crimes he cant remember. I'll admit that when I first read this story I thought the ending was gonna be sad cause after all its death note. There aren't any happy endings in death note celestia knows I wanted to stop reading cause i didnt want to get sad/depress when the sad ending came but I kept on reading cause the way it was written was exciting and I had to continue. so yes I was happy when this got a better ending then the one in my head and I say thank your arby for this fascinating and emotional story and you should feel proud of your work. Also you dont have to make alternate ending if people didnt like your ending well tough shit. Your the author you decide what goes on, who lives, who dies, and how it ends. If they dont like then they can make there own MLP Death Note story and give it the sad ending they want, you did part and now its time to move on. If you do make a sequel know this, when it comes out I will be there to read it, to comment it, and of course make my predictions about it. So there
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Love it and wish for more
you have writen a very awesome story I have enjoyed the whole thing and the ending could not have gone off better well done look forworsd to waht ever work comes next.
Uh...
No. Sorry, but that ending was a complete and utter cop-out that very nearly manages to ruin the very insightful and thrilling story that precedes it. It doesn't work. You honestly expect us to believe that Spike getting unmasked would not lead anyone to turn away from him? Even in a sugar bowl like MLP, I don't buy that. Rarity in particular should be absolutely horrified at the fact that Spike became a mass murderer out of misguided love, and her reaction goes beyond generosity into willful ignorance. I wouldn't feel honoured or touched by the fact that someone is willing to kill for me; I would try to put as much distance between them and myself as humanly possible. I can sort of understand Twilight, since she regards Spike as family, but the others?
This story was leading up to a tragic ending from the word go, and I say that as someone who usually hates tragic endings with a passion. But here, it was the only reasonable way to end it, and by not giving us that, it basically tries to have its cake and eat it. In the end, what really happened to the characters? Everyone except Spike now knows that he's got it in him to kill people standing in his way, and supposedly nothing in his relationship towards the others changes due to that, or only for the better?
You were writing a tragedy here, and a tragedy with a tacked-on cop-out happy ending simply collapses in on itself and becomes utterly pointless. I feel reminded of this review of the Star Trek episode "The Conscience of the King", which makes pretty much the same mistake (at least according to the reviewer). In the case of "The Dragon's Notebook", it's not even ambiguous - you do exactly what Jammer accuses "The Conscience of the King" of doing. You cheat, even if the amnesia effect is inherent in the Death Note (I haven't watched the series or read the manga). This story was barreling towards a tragic ending from the word go, and you didn't deliver.
The story apart from its final chapter holds up very well indeed, which is why I'm not thumbing it down. This train derailed shortly before its final destination, and the ride up until then was fun and thrilling, so here's hoping that you find it in you to give your next story a more appropriate ending.
1204875 The ending I wrote simply because killing Spike or anything else similar would have been too similar to Death Note itself since the main character in all adaptions is killed; not to mention that I just can't see any of the characters turning to full hatred for Spike. The ending itself may have been rushed based on the fact that I started and finished chapter 10 in under three hours for National Pony Writing Month, which is why I'm looking at alternate endings. That does not mean I am not satisfied with my ending; i like it a lot, because it shows that even love and forgiveness is better than demanding the ax on somebody...
... but I still totally plan on an alternate ending or two; one where I'm able to show their horrified reactions, and how long it takes to adjust to Spike before burning the Notebook, and an ending where Spike dies anyways. This ending I'm able to live with, mostly because of the fact that it is tragic. Spike forgot everything he learned, meaning he could wind up doing this again, his friends have to live with the fact that somebody close to them murdered a lot in the name of love, and his mother had to live with the fact that her son went insane under her nose, and was the one she vowed to kill if anything bad happened. It's not as tragic as it could be, but it was the ending I feel wouldn't be too similar to the ending of Death Note.
I still completely understand, and it's my own fault for not starting the fic earlier so I could write Chapter 10 in time. I kinda did the whole thing in a rush because I waited until August 17th like a dumbass to start, so I practically spat out 50,000 words with no planning or reference other than the Death Note rules and my own experience. Thanks for the read and review.
1206402 (Spoilers ahoy!)
From what I know about the death of Light Yagami, the way I saw this going couldn't have been more different. Light was begging for his miserable little life and would have done anything to not die (even press X ). Spike here was fully aware what he'd become, and sacrificing his own life to prevent a further downward slide would likely have been the most poignant ending, because that way, he would have learned something, and the fridge logic as to why no one wanted to see him punished for what he did wouldn't have come up. I don't believe hatred for Spike would have made much sense either, but the forgiveness is too easy, especially on Rarity's part (seriously, kissing the guy who just admitted to killing a dozen innocents because he wanted to protect you? There's romantic, and then there's willfully blind).
The ending might have made sense in a different kind of story, but we're talking fully-fledged murder here, and even the insanity defense doesn't really come into play until the very end. Blueblood can be let go, because Spike really couldn't have known the thing was actually going to work, but the instant Spike decided to continue using the Death Note after that first death, he was heading for a fall, and that last chapter shoved a trampoline under him seconds before impact. Forgiveness is not a bad theme, especially not in this universe, but did Spike actually do anything to earn it? He's been presented to us as doing, in his mind, the right thing, playing the black knight for Rarity, so his turnabout simply rings false, or feels rushed at the very least. Perhaps the first-person perspective adds to that problem, because a lot of readers nowadays are accustomed to unreliable narrators, especially when combined with obvious attempts on the narrator's part to justify what he did to himself and the reader. From the third chapter onward, anything Spike says about being in the right here rings about as true as Humbert Humbert's justifications to the "ladies and gentlemen of the jury" in Vladimir Nabokov's Lolita. Not a good place to be for the character if you're going for a redemption arc.
As for the ending being tragic, the points you raise might stand - if you did anything to actually present them to us in the fic. The way the chapter ends right now, though, none of these points seem to matter. They might be there, but they're not presented to the reader in any meaningful or visible way. Spike has his happy life back (a little headache notwithstanding), he's going on holiday, and oh yeah, a dozen ponies lie dead, and no one is getting punished for that in any way. That violates my sense of justice, and I can't imagine I'm the only one. The last fic I remember reading where a perpetrator got off this scot-free for her deeds was Cheerilee's Garden, and trust me, that's not good company in this or any other context. From the second you had him kill an innocent, you built up a need to see Spike take the consequences for what he did, yet that never happens.
1206505 Light Yagami was begging for his life because he was insignificant, murdered many willingly, and never once felt remorse; not to mention he sorta was responsible for the death of his father. Spike felt total remorse, and was going insane from the beginning.
The forgiveness is what drove Spike to stop flipping shit at the others when Twilight and Rarity only wanted him to stop. Spike was also never in a redemption arc. He just feels like an ass because the others were forgiving him, and he knew that he'd never be able to redeem himself, which is why he wanted to keep his memories, and didn't raise a fuss when Celestia mentioned execution. He was expecting it, and only when they mentioned him forgetting did he realize that they were forgiving hi, and felt like a bigger ass.
Don't worry, it violates my sense of justice as well. I've dealt with murder in my life, and I know how terrible it can be to want somebody dead. Even if it was going down like that, the ending wouldn't work unless I killed spike right there. Celestia wouldn't keep the Death Note, and destruction would erase Spike's memories making punishment entirely useless, and killing him was something I tried to avoid for the sake of not ripping off Death Note any further. I also don't think it helps that I saw American Psycho before I wrote it... but the point of this ending was that it's easier to forgive and help the person through something rather than condemn them and let them rot.
I still do think that I rushed it and couldn't get the message I wanted out, which is why I couldn't put all the points that would display a tragic ending.
This was great! I kept expecting Spike to die of a heart attack because of the Shinigami or just stressed induced heart attack. I was joyfully surprised at the dramatic change from the feeling at the end of Death Note. Here a mustache for you
I don't know why, but somehow this would have felt more fitting if Spike had succeeded in writing his name down. It just feels right like that.
I gotta say that I love the story and all, but...The ending was a real downer, Not what I was anticipating through the entire story at all. As someone said before Revenge does not begot resolve. An eye for an eye and a tooth for a tooth leaves everyone blind and toothless. Spike had no justification for what he did, His friends finding sympathy for his actions changes nothing. He's still just a murderer. A child given god's power, free to do as he pleases with it. Atonement wasn't done in my opinion, It makes reading the story in it's entirety redundant, as you kind of just pulled that "It never happened" trick.
4/5
My reaction: http://i479.photobucket.com/albums/rr157/antpogo/pony/11724020-20artist3Arlyoff20brilliant20letter20spike.jpg
1206703 A stress-induced heart attack never crossed my mind. All that adrenaline could have killed him, too.
1207260 I probably would have done that if I had the time and felt like murdering him.
1210187 I retort with the fact that Spike forgot his lesson meaning he's bound to repeat it and his friends have to live with it while never being allowed to mention it. I may address this if I make a sequel.
1210332 Thanks, and such.
1213449 Aha, thank you and such. I keep hearing the story was good while the ending gets a mixed reception.
1213512 To each his own, and all that. :3
1196107 Eh...I don't necessarily agree. This might sound odd, but I prefer to view crimes and whatnot in practicality. In a smaller population the crime of killing is indeed yes, a sin, but in a large society, (Like ours, where we're going to overpopulate the world) I mean yeah, it's a crime, but I wouldn't consider it evil. it is technically doing good in a roundabout way, and so long as it's painless, inflicted on those without close ties to anything mortal (family, friends) I don't see a major moral problem. On the other hand, if I actually saw a dead person I'd probably change my tune right quick, so you know, hypocrisy through innocence and all that.
FANTASTIC ENDING!
1237317 Twilight takes the role of Soichiro Yagami as well as L Lawliet in this story since she is both Spike's mother figure and his hunter. Rarity is more of a non-Kira Misa Amane similar to when she had no memory of the Death Note; oblivious to Spike's true activities as well as being in love.
This was amazing. I was scared that it would have a sad ending, but in the end, Spike was okay. I'm glad he didn't go out like Light did (I was scared he would for a second). This will go into my personal favorites.
BTW, I love Spike and Rarity stories, and I'm SOOOOOO happy he got the girl in the end.
1237791 To be honest, the ending was left unclear; Spike MAY have forgotten his experiences with Rarity. o_o
1237799 He may have, but somehow I doubt it. I'm sappy like that, I know. Either way she's probably going to pursue him now.
1240739 I'm still undecided. I may write a sequel because I've had ideas for a while and on the off chance that I do, I purposefully left the ending unclear. Spike forgot the memories of the Death Note, and we've only seen how Twilight reacts. She's uneasy, but still tries to see him as a son. We don't even know if the others are comfortable around him, but I guess we'll see when/if I write it.
1241381 I hope you do. I have a series of short stories planned that act as build ups to the sequel of my story Inner Demons. I'm building it up just like Square Enix is building up KH3.
I wish you luck with your next work, whatever it is.
1258496 >read 'em out
I could only imagine the hilarity. :3
*ahem* I have some? Whyzzat?
EDIT: Right, not all of them are bronies.
i wish it ended like death note did.
1346782 I am making several alternate endings to satisfy those who preferred a tragic ending. :3