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I noticed Cadence hadn't cum yet from Twilight. Hopefully there will be another chapter? Also, Twilight on a mission is super hot.
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Team work counts?
Bace is not a word I'm familiar with. Pretty sure you meant pace, with a 'p'.
Otherwise, fun and kinky, like most chapters. And I like how Slutlight is getting more comfortable with incest, even if it's just in the moment.
Plot hole
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Ooops.
I'm liking this fic so far, it has just the right level of depravity for me. Unfortunately, it kind of feels like the story has run into a bit of a wall/ceiling.
The early taboos and boundaries being crossed were treated with a bit less weight than they could have (switching from shy nerd to wanton slut happened a bit too quickly and effortlessly for my tastes). And at this point Twilight has been at it so long that an escalation in taboo feels rather trivial.
Similarly, her level of experience at this point means that suddenly getting a bunch of punishment points would feel extremely contrived.
There is a bit of room to explore in trying to chase the achievements. But without a concrete goal to work towards, that feels a bit like busywork rather than an actual achievement.
The only real area of interest left to explore would seem to be her eventual return and re-integration into normal Equestria. But at the moment, that road is blocked by her return being restricted to some nebulous distant future.
The best approach might be to have some kind of early interaction between her and normal Equestria. This could happen by having loved ones coming over to visit her, temporarily at least (permanently dragging them into the show feels like it would undermine their whole friendship/love). Alternative, she could be awarded a bit of (periodic) downtime/vacation in normal Equestria. Either way it would confront Twilight with how much she's changed a put a bit of tension back into the story.
Cadance does complain, but she doesn't deny the truth.