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How'd you come up with this story's name?
9511403 Mainly based on the climbing aspect, but I’ll be expanding on it. loose threads start to unravel, Much like the story and the plot.
While I was initially excited by the prospect of more FiE, this was too painful to read. First, nearly every sentence is a run-on. Seriously, it's almost every one. Furthermore, you occasionally make the error that many amateur authors writing in present tense do: peppering in past tense. There are a handful of other minor issues that a good pre-reader/editor could help with, but the things that will improve your writing quality the most are purging the comma splices and paying careful attention to tense.
The tags on this story really piqued my interest, and I've never seen a story on FIMFiction with a focus on climbing, so I'm excited to see where this goes, if the writing gets cleaned up.
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Thank you for the constructive criticism, I understand that my writing could do with some work and I plan on improving the quality as I go on. I’m glad you’re still exited to see the story go further at least and I’ll endeavour to improve.