When young teen inventor Micro Chip is trying to create a realistic gaming experience, he gets a bit more than he bargained for when he developed an ability known as the Gamer. Now his life is a game and the world is lot stranger than he thought
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Okay now felling a little bad for Tiara since her mother is literally forcing her to do or die.
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Told you I had things planned.
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May I suggest the fruit bottom version?
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Of the fruit on the bottom was Applejack I’d say hell yeah
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You know thaat's not what I meant.
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Might not be what you meant but it’s the truth
At least the humanized version
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Fair enough. Hope you enjoy whatever else you decide to read. Sorry you didn’t enjoy that part of the story
Hmmm... you know micro doesn't have to be the only one to get a harem. I think tiara would do pretty good in sugars group. Hes the heir to a business and appleblooms family is allready associated with the rich family as a buisness partner. Itd be a mirror image of her current family. Rich is a buisness owner like sugar will be. Who would have a succubus spouse who could feed off of applebloom and him when she gets hungry.
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Hmmm...I have to think about that. I was already thinking of the possibility of more harems but I had a certain plan in motion. I do think that would make sense though...
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Can I just say your comments are some of my favorite
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Um...what?
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Oh wow...with you breaking it down like that, I see how it can be viewed as tasteless. Despite me saying about how some comments changed my approach to this chapter, it is actually something along the lines of my origins plan. I was not trying to come across as tasteless or insensitive. I am not a professional and as such I don’t know all the details of how to approach everything.
While Some of your points I could argue (Luna wasn’t about to atomize anyone, just restrain those generally considered dangerous) I fully recognize a lot of your points and am happy that you broke them down. Obviously, I have written a lot more since this chapter and while I stand by the overall direction, I do recognize I may have made mistakes in how to approach certain topics.
Thank you for breaking down the reasons why you disliked the chapter. I will keep things like that in mind should I ever touch a topic like that again
Edit: though making a character worse than in cannon is not something I consider a bad thing to a degree. It’s fanfiction for a reason. If someone wants to reimagine, say, Twilight (one of the main heroes) as a heartless abusive witch toward spike, then that’s their choice in their story. If I stuck to only cannon based characteristics, than I would basically be shoehorned into using the characters exactly as in the show
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It depends on the story. If you're writing a story where Twilight is required to act in such a way then it's fine. However, she would still need to be recognizable as Twilight otherwise you're just writing an OC who just happens to be named Twilight.
If it's just some one-off moment that will never come up again why use a pre-existing character who doesn't actually fit the role you need? In this case, some random OC would have served your purposes just as well as Iron Will, better even since you wouldn't have to worry about how Iron Will would normally act. Just because you can use a pre-existing character to fill a one-off role doesn't mean you should since the novelty that comes from using that character is lost if they are just gonna act drastically out of character to the point of being unrecognizable.
And if you really needed it to be Iron Will then you could have written a situation that actually fits his characters instead of just making him a rapist so that you could victimize Fluttershy.
Wow, Spoiled, crazy and manipulative. It's not like she'll die in a day if she doesn't get any.
Looks like Silver isn't the only one who needs rescuing...
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Also... Fluttershy has mind-erasing powers, right? What was stopping her from erasing his memories to the point that he remembers trying to assault her, but can't remember that she was the vampire who almost killed him? Then she could've run to Celestia/Luna, said that a vampire almost killed him while he was trying to assault her, and boom; Iron Will gets punished for his crimes, Fluttershy isn't suspected as a vampire, and the Mane 7 doesn't have their friendship broken over trust issues.
I'm only saying that if you need a character to sexually assault someone (and this is a universe where characters are mostly in-character), use a character who probably would sexually assault someone. For example, you needed a villain to blackmail Sugar's grandma over his heir-ship, so you used Flim and Flam's money-grubbing as a basis for that. Contrariwise, there isn't quite a parallel you could make between "has an assertiveness class that can be taken the wrong way" and "willing to sexually assault minors". Like, if there's any character who would probably do something like that, it'd be a Changeling pre-redemption. Heck, if Rainbow Dash were the vampire, then Zephyr Breeze would've been a better option that Iron Will... Oh God, that's a fucking image...
Anyways, to your point about changing things in general. I agree that an author has the right to interpret their characters however they want. But the important thing here is context. Using your Twilight example, if it were an alt universe scenario where Celestia's an authoritarian Sun Tyrant and Twilight's "a heartless abusive witch toward spike", leading to him eventually forming a rebellion that takes an active approach at dismantling their empire bit by bit while keeping the character interaction on point, then I'd say go for it. BUT... if Twilight being "a heartless abusive witch toward spike" involves her asking him to clean his room and he decides to run to the Everfree while recruiting 5 Dragonling OCs that replace his former friends as they seek their destiny of being overpowered uber dragons that could rule Equestria, then the story kinda falls apart because you've recreated Rise of Spike the Dragon and the endtimes are upon us all.
That's my take on it, at least.
I've read 59 chapters in one day
Celestia.
This seems like a very good opportunity to cash in some of that goodwill he must've scored for the whole Fluttershy incident.
Apple Bloom and Sugar suddenly seem to be together. At least I read the world girlfriend or boyfriend with these two. Pity it wasn't shown how that happened.
suddenly reminded of this
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