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I've had SAPR (which I just realized after reading one of the comments might be pronounced "sapphire") in my Read Later since it came out, and just read the first chapter. It's definitely better than I expected it to be, and as such will be reading these two concurrently lol

As for the Anon-A-Miss part, I guess I just have something against disliking potentially good stories just because it's Anon-A-Miss. I'm currently following one (Why? A Tale of Anon-A-Miss by wiccanminnesota) that reads like a soap opera that adds so much to the narrative that makes the Anon-A-Miss scenario much darker. It's a bit choppy at first that may discourage some readers, but eventually gets so good it's worth it.

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Good. Ruby is my favorite character in the show. Ruby is best girl.

I like the addition of Tukson in this chapter. Wasn't expecting it, but I guess Twilight would need someone to feed her insatiable love of books.

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Another RWBY-crossover that I really like, but wish would get an update soon, is The Tale of Team SASA, pronounced "salsa". It is a post-Anon-a-miss story where Sunset and the Sirens somehow were transported to Remnant after seeing a video. It's really good, and before SAPR, was tthe RWBY fic to beat.

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Yeah, but unfortunately, we know what happens to him in cannon. May he Rest In Peace.

Despite herself, however, Twilight couldn’t help but feel a little jealous of Yang. She had a loving father and an adorable little sister, while Twilight couldn’t even remember the faces of anyone she might be related to. All she could remember was that man’s voice and her first name. She couldn’t even remember her last name, so that has just make it harder for Tai to find her family.

No reason for that to be here.

Aside from that, looking good so far.

Good update can't wait for more

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*adds to read later*

‘I think I wanna….touch them.’ Looking to the girls face again, Ruby carefully brings her hands up and rubs the girl's ears. They felt almost like velvet, despite the purple fur on them. She pulls back and looks to the girls face again. She gasps slightly as she sees the girl's eyes fluttering a bit and realizes something. Ruby runs to the doorframe.

Ha! Inuyasha reference!

Loved this chapter. It was adorable!

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Yay, someone caught that

Okay, I'm getting more and more leery of this story already. First off, the English still needs work. I might recommend asking for help around this site. I know there's a few groups out there that help with editing/grammar/spelling and whatnot for people who either aren't very good at English or don't have the time to comb through for mistakes.

Second, there was a lot of... rather unnecessary details throughout the chapter, such as Twilight feeling jealous of Yang or of her somehow remembering that rather long "sentence" that one of the gods told her. I get the amnesia bit. It's rather plausible for the situation, and otherwise I would have been fine leaving it as just a story detail for the sake of the plot. But that line... something seems wrong about it, like it was made needlessly excessive. Maybe that's just me. It just feels off somehow.

And after that, we get to the rushed campy family scene. Before and after discovering Twilight. All the "Okay daddy" and "Yes sweethearts" just seem over the top and out of place for the setting. Sure, Taiyang would dote the living hell out of his daughters, but the excess amount of it just seems... well, it's a terrible word to use for it, but the best word I can use in this case is tryhard. Like you're trying extra hard to get us to fall for this "sappy family moment" that just feels out of place for a RWBY fic.

I'll be honest, I ended up skipping the entire second half of the chapter. Once I saw it going down the predictable path of "I don't want to be a bother to you, sir" followed shortly by "you're no trouble at all. Besides, my daughters could use a friend (Even though they do socialize normally with other kids their age already, but we'll pretend you're special like that)" and finally a quick and completely skipped adoption into the family, I quickly lost interest in what happened next. I'm a big fan of character interaction, and when said interaction (In chapters where most of the content is going to be just that rather than action scenes or emotional reveals) is... well, garbage, I have no real reason to stick around.

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you really should if you want more details on what's going on

9354050
Indeed but that’s just one voice easy to ignore.

Really enjoying this so far! Can't wait for the next bit!

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The thing is, I'm not entirely sure if I want to know at this point. Story details are good and all, but if the underlying foundation for the story isn't good, it becomes a chore to read rather than an enjoyable experience. Take the Twilight book for example. On the surface, I bet people would really love the concept of it. A supernatural war between vampires and werewolves? Sounds like something a lot of people would find enjoyable. But because the author wrote it in such a way that it's basically a self insert romance with a main character that's as dry/bland as cardboard, it kills a lot of enthusiasm anybody could really find for it. Sure, some people do enjoy it (And some of those just for the sheer cringe of it), but there's a reason it's become a meme.

Bear in mind, I'm not saying your story is the Twilight of RWBY fics. That was just an example. But I still feel like it could be done better; polished up, if you will.

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So because I want to enjoy the story and am pointing out what I see as flaws that could be fixed, I should be ignored? Rather naive of you. I'm not asking them to change the entire story to fit my preferences. I'm simply stating where I found things could have been done better, in my own opinion. And based on some of the other comments, I'm not the only one feeling this way.

Honestly, really liking the story so far. Not a big fan of the Canterlot Wedding part, but I can understand why you did it. I didn't really notice any errors that were glaring to me, keep it up.

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Not my point. You are one voice. You are easy to drown out. It’s crap but it’s true. And where you saw flaws I saw none, I came off as cold and I apologize for that.

Despite herself, however, Twilight couldn’t help but feel a little jealous of Yang. She had a loving father and an adorable little sister, while Twilight couldn’t even remember the faces of anyone she might be related to.

I take it Twilight doesn't know about Raven? She and Yang have more in common than you might think.

I'm a little worried about the amnesia and de-aging, to be honest; I don't know what you're planning but it has the potential to reboot Twilight's character until she isn't really Twilight any more (unless you go for extreme Nature over Nurture and argue that her personality was determined from birth).

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the plan is not a complete reboot but not a total shift in personality either

Okay so this was turned into a mature fic...
i can only guess we have some fun coming our way.

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maybe

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You do know that isn't the only meaning of a mature rating, right?

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I meant fighting and possible gore not that. Get your head out of the gutter.

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Fair enough

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i think it's pronounced 'mature rating'