After coming to terms with being a "Forever Foal", Spike has come to the conclusion that this is a secret he must carry to his grave. Will Spike be successful or will he be caught?
The show comes closest to 'Big Sister', in my opinion. I believe they should have made her more of a mother figure but much of what is shown doesn't go in that direction. Perhaps it is because she was too young when she hatched Spike to associate herself as being a mom? Maybe Celestia preferred it to be a 'friendship' / 'partnership' to make it easier in the event Twilight would ever have foals of her own?
You did well in showing how each character would take the discovery of Spike being a 'Forever Foal'. The show would naturally seek resolution through the understanding of what the matter of conflict was. Now it will just be a matter of Spike either deciding to come down and apologize or, more likely, one of the ponies going to try and apologize to him through the benefit of their new found understanding. It's not going to be easy as Spike is still raw from the emotional experience he went through. However it will all work out.
I think you did best with Fluttershy. She would wish to not have ever barged in on the baby dragon. She would also be the one who'd happily want to help soothe him given his current situation. Pinkie may be too much as his desires would become a bit too public with how she has no filter to anything.
What Twilight does next will be very important. Will she decide that she needs to change her role from employer / friend to mother / caretaker? How can she approach him without triggering more hurt? She's the one who was closest to Spike and definitely what she does will have a great impact on how his mental state holds up.
I definitely feel like Twilight's role is more of sister than mother, although there are aspects of both. (Keep in mind I haven't watched this show for a few seasons.)
On one hand, Twilight is watching out for Spike and talks to him in a motherly fashion in some ways, even going to lengths of reassuring him as a parent might do. On the other hand, Twilight was only a filly when Spike was hatched and so there had to have been some time where they grew up parallel, so there's some brother/sister dynamic that occurs. Twilights dependence on Spike strikes me as more of a brother/sister thing (beyond the whole employer/employee thing).
In any case, I'm enjoying this story and I hope you feel better soon
8805715 I'm happy to know you enjoyed the chapter. I felt this was my worst chapter to this story so far but I'm not upset or disappointed. This just means I have a chance to make a comeback next chapter.
Fluttershy is one of, if not my favorite pony. I do admire her character as a whole and hope to write more with her soon. Pinkie Pie is a tricky character to write (in my opinion). She is unpredictable and very open about everything. While Spike would appreciate Pinkie trying to support him, he'd probably feel pretty nervous since she is so chaotic and difficult to tame.
While I'd really like to make Twilight a mother to Spike, I feel as though your right. However, I do have a few ideas in mind. I won't be saying anything but I have plans...
8806127 It's alright if you haven't seen the show for a few seasons. I myself stopped watching sometime after the whole battle with Tirek. I do enjoy the show but for some reason this site is much more "approachable" then the show.
As I said earlier, I do believe it could go either way but I feel your correct. While there have been some moments where Twilight had seen motherly, she does seem more like a big sister.
I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter and thank you for your concern. I also hope I get better quickly. If I do, I'll be a much more focused writer who will be much more enthusiastic about writing the next chapter (not to say I'm not enthusiastic at all).
"I can't believe he said all that to us! The worst part is, is that we did nothing to punish him. If he wanted to act like a bratty foal then we shoulda spanked him like one till he couldn't sit down properly for a week! He'd have to wear his precious diapers in front of us whether he liked it or not just to avoid the full pain.
Yeah! There you go! That's the spirit, RD! What's funny is I normally don't approve of corporal punishment, but I'll gladly make an exception in this case.
"Yeah that's a great idea Rainbow. If we'd done that then we would be proving his abuse allegations to be true.
While it is true that many countries consider spanking to be child abuse, many countries, like the US, don't.
I've gotta ask though, in your opinions, is Twilight closer to a mother figure or a big sister? Twilight hatched Spike and technically "birthed" him but their current relationship points towards a brother sister relationship. I know it could work either way but I wanna hear everyone's thoughts on the matter.
Honestly, in a story like this, this question is bound to get brought up sooner or later. Personally, I have always seen Twilight as being something of a surrogate mother to Spike. The ending of act two and the third act of "Owl's Well That Ends Well", as well as issue #40 of the IDW comic book series, seems to support this theory, but the beginning of "Winter Wrap-Up" wherein Spike grumpily says, "You're not Mommy" to Twilight, as well as their interactions at the beginning of "Power Ponies" seems to paint their relationship as brother and sister. In any case, a strong argument could be made for either, but I personally will always prefer these two as having a mother-son relationship.
9052954 While I don’t believe spanking is abuse either, I do know the effects of spanking in sensitive situations such as these can be detrimental to an individuals mental health. Basically, it wasn’t about spanking being “right or wrong”, instead, it would’ve been more on how spike would’ve viewed the situation from his own mental perspective.
As for Twilight being a sister or a mother, I personally believe Twilight is more of a mother mainly because she hatched him and she’s been around him, taking care of him for as long as he can probably remember.
9072031 I’m really happy to hear that this chapter “swayed you”. As for flutter shy, well, I can’t be too mean to her. She’s basically one of, if not my favorite pony.
I definitely see twilight as spike’s mother. No doubt about that at all.
Spike episodes can sometimes be a bit underwhelming but they aren’t always like that. I do hope future spike episodes are good enough for me to consider them as my favorite(s)
I would have liked to see the girls sulk a little bit more so what they did fully sink in the laughing at death thing didn't even hit them that hard they immediately went back to saying how cute he was and Spike leave or something and the girls find the book on their own
10176888 Ah that’s fair, I understand why you feel that way. To be honest, I had planned on making a sequel to this which would go over the girls’ lingering guilt along with adding the princesses and additional cute moments but I haven’t written in awhile and I don’t know if I will be doing that in the future. I’m always around and reading stuff on this site but that doesn’t mean I’m working on any stories anytime soon.
The show comes closest to 'Big Sister', in my opinion. I believe they should have made her more of a mother figure but much of what is shown doesn't go in that direction. Perhaps it is because she was too young when she hatched Spike to associate herself as being a mom? Maybe Celestia preferred it to be a 'friendship' / 'partnership' to make it easier in the event Twilight would ever have foals of her own?
You did well in showing how each character would take the discovery of Spike being a 'Forever Foal'. The show would naturally seek resolution through the understanding of what the matter of conflict was. Now it will just be a matter of Spike either deciding to come down and apologize or, more likely, one of the ponies going to try and apologize to him through the benefit of their new found understanding. It's not going to be easy as Spike is still raw from the emotional experience he went through. However it will all work out.
I think you did best with Fluttershy. She would wish to not have ever barged in on the baby dragon. She would also be the one who'd happily want to help soothe him given his current situation. Pinkie may be too much as his desires would become a bit too public with how she has no filter to anything.
What Twilight does next will be very important. Will she decide that she needs to change her role from employer / friend to mother / caretaker? How can she approach him without triggering more hurt? She's the one who was closest to Spike and definitely what she does will have a great impact on how his mental state holds up.
I definitely feel like Twilight's role is more of sister than mother, although there are aspects of both. (Keep in mind I haven't watched this show for a few seasons.)
On one hand, Twilight is watching out for Spike and talks to him in a motherly fashion in some ways, even going to lengths of reassuring him as a parent might do. On the other hand, Twilight was only a filly when Spike was hatched and so there had to have been some time where they grew up parallel, so there's some brother/sister dynamic that occurs. Twilights dependence on Spike strikes me as more of a brother/sister thing (beyond the whole employer/employee thing).
In any case, I'm enjoying this story and I hope you feel better soon
8805715
I'm happy to know you enjoyed the chapter. I felt this was my worst chapter to this story so far but I'm not upset or disappointed. This just means I have a chance to make a comeback next chapter.
Fluttershy is one of, if not my favorite pony. I do admire her character as a whole and hope to write more with her soon. Pinkie Pie is a tricky character to write (in my opinion). She is unpredictable and very open about everything. While Spike would appreciate Pinkie trying to support him, he'd probably feel pretty nervous since she is so chaotic and difficult to tame.
While I'd really like to make Twilight a mother to Spike, I feel as though your right. However, I do have a few ideas in mind. I won't be saying anything but I have plans...
8806127
It's alright if you haven't seen the show for a few seasons. I myself stopped watching sometime after the whole battle with Tirek. I do enjoy the show but for some reason this site is much more "approachable" then the show.
As I said earlier, I do believe it could go either way but I feel your correct. While there have been some moments where Twilight had seen motherly, she does seem more like a big sister.
I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter and thank you for your concern. I also hope I get better quickly. If I do, I'll be a much more focused writer who will be much more enthusiastic about writing the next chapter (not to say I'm not enthusiastic at all).
Yeah! There you go! That's the spirit, RD! What's funny is I normally don't approve of corporal punishment, but I'll gladly make an exception in this case.
While it is true that many countries consider spanking to be child abuse, many countries, like the US, don't.
Honestly, in a story like this, this question is bound to get brought up sooner or later. Personally, I have always seen Twilight as being something of a surrogate mother to Spike. The ending of act two and the third act of "Owl's Well That Ends Well", as well as issue #40 of the IDW comic book series, seems to support this theory, but the beginning of "Winter Wrap-Up" wherein Spike grumpily says, "You're not Mommy" to Twilight, as well as their interactions at the beginning of "Power Ponies" seems to paint their relationship as brother and sister. In any case, a strong argument could be made for either, but I personally will always prefer these two as having a mother-son relationship.
9052954
While I don’t believe spanking is abuse either, I do know the effects of spanking in sensitive situations such as these can be detrimental to an individuals mental health.
Basically, it wasn’t about spanking being “right or wrong”, instead, it would’ve been more on how spike would’ve viewed the situation from his own mental perspective.
As for Twilight being a sister or a mother, I personally believe Twilight is more of a mother mainly because she hatched him and she’s been around him, taking care of him for as long as he can probably remember.
9072031
I’m really happy to hear that this chapter “swayed you”. As for flutter shy, well, I can’t be too mean to her. She’s basically one of, if not my favorite pony.
I definitely see twilight as spike’s mother. No doubt about that at all.
Spike episodes can sometimes be a bit underwhelming but they aren’t always like that. I do hope future spike episodes are good enough for me to consider them as my favorite(s)
I would have liked to see the girls sulk a little bit more so what they did fully sink in the laughing at death thing didn't even hit them that hard they immediately went back to saying how cute he
was and Spike leave or something and the girls find the book on their own
10176888
Ah that’s fair, I understand why you feel that way. To be honest, I had planned on making a sequel to this which would go over the girls’ lingering guilt along with adding the princesses and additional cute moments but I haven’t written in awhile and I don’t know if I will be doing that in the future. I’m always around and reading stuff on this site but that doesn’t mean I’m working on any stories anytime soon.
Anyways, thank you very much for your comment!