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Before I get down to actually reading this, just to let you know, you're on a website that has permissions (or lack thereof and Hasbro is just awesome and doesn't care (pretty sure the latter)) to use MLP: FiM related things and, therefore, you don't need the disclaimer.
This isn't YouTube after all.
Post-Read Edit: Well, post-1/5-read edit...
RariDash is far from one of my OTPs, so... meh.
The premise is decent, though and the story shows potential but you should, undoubtedly, invest your time in getting an editor. I'd offer but I'm already editing for four other stories on top of my own writing, so I simply don't have the time.
Basically, good story but the writing is on the bad side. There are many errors (mostly grammatical) and a lot of things that could be reworded to flow a lot better
but you definitely show potential.
I'm not faving or thumbing this, again, it's not one of my ships, but since you watched me, I figured I'd give your story a try.
Good work, just try to find an editor.
950591 Thanks for letting me know about that. And thank you so much for giving the story a shot, anyway. Even though it isn't something you ship (which I can understand completely, it's not really one of my ships either) you still took the time to read it and that means a lot to me... I'll take your advice to heart. There are many things I need to improve on, and believe me, I'm always working on it.
950839 Just a side-note; if you are going to get an editor, get someone who you'll actually talk to. That way, they don't just edit it, they'll actually tell you what was wrong and then you can learn from that and make a lot less mistakes afterwards.
Why the hell doesn't this have more views??? A couple of errors like somepony instead of someone or everypony instead of everypony. Other than that, this is pretty good. Can't wait for the next chapter
959489 Oh my gosh, thank you so much!
So glad you like it. Knowing that someone at least likes my story is enough to make my day! 
It might not have a lot of views because it's posted under the M rated section (since it will be even more M once I add the optional 2nd chapter) I'm not sure what the usual number of views is for this site, since I'm new. That might also be why it doesn't have lots of views. *shrugs* But anyway thank you SO much for the compliment!
970025 your welcome. As pinkie would say, I like to make other people "smile, smile, smile"
13000 words jesus christ, good story though liking it alot and I can sympahise with not getting more views than you deserve.
-Mr. Carnage
New chapter???APDPCJWHRODH{@;02$1!;@,!.?/=2047
981209 Thank you so much! I'm glad you like the story. :3 13,000 words really isn't that much for me. xD
982147 Teehee, glad you like it.
Thanks! <3
1037431 your welcome, please upload some more chapters!!! I've finished all my raridash stories and I want MORE!!! Um, if it's alright with you.
Cute! and marvelous! good story! well done!
1241183 Thank you so much!
Definitely one of my favorites.
