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Bass Canon


Greetings, fellow bronies! My alias for writing is Bass Canon, and she is my own creation. I tend to go from the family friendly slice-of-life stories to very fetishy adult stories.


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In attempt to earn their cutie marks, the Crusaders invade Twilight's library to find a spell that can help them. To their surprise, they find exactly what they ask for. But as magic usually does, things are not as they seem. Now Sweetie Belle has to try and juggle a singing career, and caring for her filly sister,Applebloom learns the good and bad side of apple based sales and Scootaloo tries to be more than a friend to small cyan filly. Twilight better find a cure for this spell, or the Elements may never shine in Equestria again!

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 42 )

Well looks like this is going to be a fun ride.

This seems pretty good!!!

Glad you seem interested! I need some whimsy so I can write a solid ending to The Beat, and this idea gives me a nice platform to do so. :twilightsmile:

i like it. Maybe pace it out a bit more but otherwise enjoyable. Can't wait to see what happens next.

I like the idea of the story, but jumping straight into the part where they cast the spell without any build up to it is a bit jarring. I do want to see where it goes from here though.

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I kind of want to just get to the point. No one will remember the build up anyway. Bring on the character development, conflicts and plot devices!

Would there be any point at all in regurgitating what the description already told us? I like what he did here.

Comment posted by kat ciller deleted Aug 3rd, 2013

Huh, not sure if I like this yet, gonna fav.

THAT look like a fun story to read! I sure hope that chapter was as fun for you to wright as it was for me to read.

Interesting... I'll watch this and see where it goes, good prologue!

Can't wait until next chapter

Intriguing start. I'll be curious to see where this goes. :raritywink::yay:

ok didn't this have three chaps last night? ether that or i was more tired than i thought

2994487 Just one for now, you were just that sleepy :twilightsmile:

2994650 well do continue then :rainbowkiss: this story has great potential for many dawws as well as some sad

When comes next chapter

3038675 Well I have sent it to be proofread, waiting for the finished chapter to be sent back so I can post.

Finally a new chapter

Cool chapter, but a bit OOC. The characters speak a little too formally. Here is just one example of many:

“Good to hear. But I fear if you don’t win that contest, the only pony we will need is the gravedigger pony.” Vinyl said with a grave tone.

Vinyl wouldn't talk like that. She'd probably say:

"Good to hear, dude. But if you don't win that contest, the only pony we'll need is the gravedigger." Vinyl said with a grave tone.

That's not the only one, though. I love the story, there are just some little things like that. Besides that, perfect :pinkiehappy:

Also, Sweetie Belle is the sexiest mare on the planet, and a fillyfooler shipped with Vinyl Scratch? I'm surprisingly okay with this. :moustache: Can't wait for future chapters :rainbowkiss:

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(Has nothing to do with the story.) It's okay having no talents!!
Anyway:
This story is shaping up to be epic!!!!! :pinkiehappy:

Ok how did role reversal turned this bad?!
:facehoof:

EDIT:
What I meant was the world in the fanfic. Not the fanfic itself.

3047926 Yell at dragons... I guess?

I literally have the picture on my computer labeled "no_talent.PNG" :rainbowlaugh:

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Don't ignore Pinkie, or she'll cut you!

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Let the expert do his work you chucklef:yay:ck!

We should probably stop this before it's considered spam :rainbowlaugh:

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Yeah. I've never actually did something people consider spam.
P.S. If you're being raped yelling will solve everything.

When comes next chapter

3108522 I am giving myself a break from writing so I can make a good chapter. I will continue on with writing in a few days, so a week might pass.

3598372 It's not dead! just updated!

it's a live and it's getting chaotic!

On the bright side, Rarity and Spike are in a better age range now.

This feels like a cheat. Having armed thugs and money debt feels . . . unnatural, forced. Sure, Sweetie is going to be facing a lot of things she isn't ready for, but this feels like it was inserted just cause. And there is a reason that spell isn't used.

These changes seem to stretch a lot more than just who was born first.

4454960 That is because Toto, you are not in Ponyville anymore... well not the one we usualy see. :derpytongue2:

You sir are an Awsome writer

4874474 Thank You for your kind words I am bit busy with some other writing endeavors that are not pony related, but I hope I can get more pony stuff done soon!

4889298 yay! Poni poni poni!

4889942 You can expect an update to one of my stories in the next few hours (little hint, it's my oldest story that get a new chapter)!:pinkiesmile:

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