Not bad, this was pretty good. And you even put in the warning of what its gonna contain, which im grateful for, not to be rude or anything but some of the things you have planned for this is just not my thing. I also like how the clop part is seperate from the story so you can skip it if you want to and not miss out on whats happening. So again,the two of you made a good job, we really needed more anthro lyra and bon bon action. (seriously theres like almost nothing of them)
8873288 KO awesome chapter, looks like Zack going to be okay in his world home as he got along with the Lyra and Bon Bon as the new adventure of his life has only just begun!
This chapter is was cute, hot, and funny as hay! Loved the scene you did with Rarity and the girls, along with adding that girl’s face for the ferrets, that was gold.
8873336 To answer your question, yes, I found this chapter really enjoyable. I give my thanks to both you and IsraelYabuki for making this.
I think what i like the most is Zack’s Alpha like personality. So many HiE harem stories have the human as act way to much as a doormat so it’s fun to see a story with a more dominant main character.
8873829 Oh yeah he's top dog in this story don't worry but he still and always will care about his girls. Also, what did you think about the scene with Zack and Fluttershy?
8873982 Totally worth the wait. Great build up as well as questions being asked so readers keep coming back for more and can't wait for more. You got yourself a great story here.
That was awesome and epic and beyond.Iloved it all and hope Lyra and Bon Bon are pregnant and start a herd with him ,and I hope all the Main six and barb join to and that the triplets and Angel m a mini herd .I can't wait to see what happens to and between them all next (no rush you two do you)
'Mrs' Hurricane? Unless Fluttershy has a husband hidden in her cottage somewhere, shouldn't that be 'Ms'?
Also, you need an editor to pick up all the incorrectly placed words. For instance, you described his balls as being filled with 'viral seed', when I'm positive you meant 'virile'.
8915137 I don't have a patreon, sorry and Zack won't be a super human but get does know many different martial art styles. I'm having a major case of writers block so I don't know when I'll get the next chapter posted.
Not bad, this was pretty good. And you even put in the warning of what its gonna contain, which im grateful for, not to be rude or anything but some of the things you have planned for this is just not my thing.
I also like how the clop part is seperate from the story so you can skip it if you want to and not miss out on whats happening.
So again,the two of you made a good job, we really needed more anthro lyra and bon bon action. (seriously theres like almost nothing of them)
8873284
Thanks man, expect to see those two in the next chapter as well.
And at last, the clop chapter is here.
8873333
Thank you. Did you like it? I didn't write it but I did write the script for it.
8873288
KO awesome chapter, looks like Zack going to be okay in his world home as he got along with the Lyra and Bon Bon as the new adventure of his life has only just begun!
8873391
Thanks glad you like it. And next chapter is gonna be even kinkier.
This chapter is was cute, hot, and funny as hay! Loved the scene you did with Rarity and the girls, along with adding that girl’s face for the ferrets, that was gold.
I am curious as to who that women is though....
8873465
Glad you like it. As for the woman, all will be reveled in the future.
Let me just say this..........IT was AMAZING!!!!!!!!! I loved eevery bit of it!!!!
Cant wait for more!!
8873468
I’ll be waitin’.
You came back that’s all that matters 😀
8873650
Thanks.
Your story is pretty damn awesome. I'm just glad I was able to help out. You did a good job
8873755
Thanks and I may need your help for the next few chapters if you're interested of course. And again, thank you for your help on the clop.
8873757
A few more chapters, huh? Sure, I can help out
8873777
Thank you. The next chapter will have a variety of mini clops which I can do and 2 full clops which I may need your help on.
8873785
I can do that
8873795
Sweet, when I get to those parts I'll send you the scripts. Also if you ever need help with anything let me know, I'm always ready to help.
8873801
Okay, thanks.
8873336
To answer your question, yes, I found this chapter really enjoyable. I give my thanks to both you and IsraelYabuki for making this.
I think what i like the most is Zack’s Alpha like personality. So many HiE harem stories have the human as act way to much as a doormat so it’s fun to see a story with a more dominant main character.
8873829
Oh yeah he's top dog in this story don't worry but he still and always will care about his girls. Also, what did you think about the scene with Zack and Fluttershy?
8873840
The scene with Fluttershy is pretty cute.
Really looking forward to the next chapter, untill then, hope you have a lovely day.
8873889
You to my friend.
Flutters is gonna wake up before him only to see him with morning wood isn't she?
8873974
Yes yes she is and you can guess what's gonna happen.
8873976
8873979
Hey, what did you think of the chapter overall?
8873982
Totally worth the wait. Great build up as well as questions being asked so readers keep coming back for more and can't wait for more. You got yourself a great story here.
8873992
Thank you for your kind words and I can only promise its gonna get better from here on out.
Good chapter.
CONG MY MAN! I hope you try make zack to get a job soon. also which event you will pick from the season and ep?
That was awesome and epic and beyond.Iloved it all and hope Lyra and Bon Bon are pregnant and start a herd with him ,and I hope all the Main six and barb join to and that the triplets and Angel m a mini herd .I can't wait to see what happens to and between them all next (no rush you two do you)
8874825
Thanks, man and also I'm making Angel a girl so she's gonna be known as Angela.
8874830
awesome.
i cant wait until zack has sex with rarity
8875224
That's happening next chapter dude.
'Mrs' Hurricane?
Unless Fluttershy has a husband hidden in her cottage somewhere, shouldn't that be 'Ms'?
Also, you need an editor to pick up all the incorrectly placed words.
For instance, you described his balls as being filled with 'viral seed', when I'm positive you meant 'virile'.
8876480
Okay thanks.
Wow... pats on the back for you my good man I'll be waiting for more to read and then some also is there any more fics like this you know or wrote...?
8883344
No there isen't but I plan on making another story like this but with the Equestria Girls world.
8883411
cool can't wait to read it you genius
8883477
Thank you and I'll tell you this now its inspired by the artwork of a artist called Annon-MLP, look him up and you'll see why.
8883509
cool thnx
8897270
Glad you enjoyed.
8897592
I love the art, who commissioned it?
8898544
CrimsonRose97.
8898582
It's pretty great.
8903904
Glad you like it.
8915137
I don't have a patreon, sorry and Zack won't be a super human but get does know many different martial art styles. I'm having a major case of writers block so I don't know when I'll get the next chapter posted.