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The good news is the pair of idiots got fired and there last pay checks went to me for my troubles.

Pretty sure that's illegal.
Unless an employee does something that would make them owe the company money, like property damage or something, they would still be owed for the work they put in. And even if there was some kind of property damage they company would only take the money needed, and the fired employee would take the remainder. Unless of course all or more of the pay check would be taken.

But he would probably get some type of overtime pay.

I love this all so far and can't wait to see what happens.

Well, hope he has a good life in this world...

"Zack Ronin," are you serious? That's so blatantly not a name any real person has ever had that it drags suspension of disbelief behind a shed and Old Yeller's it in one fell swoop. I wouldn't harp on it except that this throws up red flags to a lot of people who have enough experience with sh*tty fanfiction, and quite a few of them are going to just "Nope" right out with a name like that.

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Dude, its called Fanfiction for a reason with the key word being fiction.

You need to run this through microsoft word or something because there are a ton of misused words and misspellings. This is probably one of the reasons the ratings on this story are the way they are.

For writing your first story this seems alright so far a few spelling errors but probably due to you using a phone but overall not bad just need to slow down a bit on the story because it felt slightly rushed at the end there

Pretty good start to the story so far Day. The only thing I'd suggest is to not make the words such large capitals unless for really intense situations. You can use the normal capital to indicate that the'yre shouting or yelling, and mabye put emphasis on them too.

Excuse me but, what!? The ferrets are intelligent? They pick silverware in their hands at the prospect of eating and they fucking SWEAT DROP in annoyance at things!? You've been watching too much anime, dude.

Also, using emoticons in a fanfic is dumb. And explicitly indicating when a point of view changes is a sign of bad writing.

Remind me again how old Zack is again man. Cause i forgot.

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